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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Angelic_J



You thought I wouldn't comment?😲😲😲 How could you commit the crime of thinking such heinous thoughts?😳 I would never ever do that intentionally😳 I wasn't here on IF for a few days and I got back yesterday and as you know my dabba gets filled rather quickly😳 Plus I have exams and all that crap so usually I am not on I-F much🤔



I just THOUGHT that...you see. I am under the belief that the higher the status of the username is...the more is the user cold/indifferent to the attempts of normal citizens of I-F like me 😆 I dunno why but I just think that 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: kawaii hime



I just THOUGHT that...you see. I am under the belief that the higher the status of the username is...the more is the user cold/indifferent to the attempts of normal citizens of I-F like me 😆 I dunno why but I just think that 😆




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I have no higher status than you or anyone else😳 If anything I probably have lower because I do nothing to contribute to the forum or the discussions😆 I am not creative enough to write or technical enough to make siggies/avis/vms😆 Compared to you I am nothing😳 I simply don't come on much thus I don't get to everything right away😳😆



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Posted: 14 years ago
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He stood leaning against the wall with a reserved expression on his face. His eyes were clearly lost in the maze of the past. Sighing, he rested his head on the cold wall and closed his eyes in a desperate attempt to wipe away the contrast personalities the turn of events had brought in his life.

He looked painfully at the girl lying under the warm blankets in her huge four-poster bed. Her pale skin was shining under the streaks of moonlight coming through the window. His body moved on his own accord and he stood next to her.

"Why do you keep doing this to you?" He whispered softly but the longing in his voice had the power to make its way in her dreams. Gently, his fingers caressed her soft cheek. His body longed to do more than to just steal a few moments in secrecy to touch her as if committing a sin. He wanted to hold her, hide her away in his body when she was troubled, kiss her soft lips, run his fingers through her soft hair, hold her hand. He wanted to do so much more...but he never could. Whenever such wishes arose inside him, he remembered what she told him what felt like ages ago.

"Kabir, I trust you. That's why you are the only person I allow to watch my back. Don't ever do anything to break this trust."

"Its the promise which holds me back Princess...else I would've stolen that carefully guarded heart of yours a long time ago." He half smiled as his fingers left her skin. Tears shone in his eyes which broke the barriers of restrain and slid down his cheek.

"Why..." He asked the question to the sleeping body. But of course, he got no reply. He never did.

"I never will..."

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She sat in the comfortable chair of her room, humming a soft tune. It was an old song which her mother used to sing to her as a lullaby. She didn't remember any of its words, just the tune. But it always calmed her. And whenever she hummed it she became lost in another world and become strangely indifferent to her surroundings.

That was the reason she didn't notice someone entering the room and taking his place by the piano.

Her eyes flew open when the tune she was humming starting playing in the room in the sound of the music played by the piano. For a moment, she was confused whether it was a dream or a reality. But it wasn't a dream; her eyes moved to the spot in her room where the grand piano was kept. She blinked as she saw a young man staring at her while he played the piano.

He continued playing, undisturbed by her questioning gaze. His eyes were shining and a smile was gracing his lips which formed a dimple in his cheek. She raised her eyebrows as she returned the smile gracefully.

"Wow! Gotta admit that you have quite the control on your emotions. You didn't scream because you were shocked to see a handsome young strange man sitting in your room, playing your piano. I am impressed." He laughed as he finished the song and walked towards her.

"You are not an animal or a vicious beast. Even if you were, I doubt I would ever react like the way you mentioned." She smirked as he smiled appreciatively and gave his head a slight bow.

"Oooh! You are quite the lady, aren't you? Needless to say it'll be fun serving you Princess." He showed his dazzling smile once again. She stood there, analyzing him for a moment. Then, she offered him her hand which he gratefully accepted and planted a kiss on it.

"Aaah! You're fast, aren't you?" She commented at his action and he laughed.

"That is one of my well known traits. I am impressed that you noticed it so soon."

"You are a easy guy to impress."

"Don't be under that impression, I am generally very hard to please. But there's something about you that I can't help being impressed."

"You're using an age old trick of flattery, I won't fall for that Charmer."

"With due respect, this is anything but flattery. I was just voicing out my genuine opinion about you, alas, you termed it as flattery. I am hurt." He put a hand on his heart and sighed sadly. A musical laughter escaped her lips. Seeing her laughing, he smiled as if he had accomplished a mission.

"Very well Charmer. May I ask what business brings you here?"

"Princess, I have been appointed by Madame. From now on my duty is to serve you and be with you 24x7."

"Unnie appointed you?" She seemed confused by his statement and her eyebrows creased a little. But she recovered it quickly.

"Oh well, forget it. We'll see to the whole serving thing later. We shall start with simple introduction, what else should I call you other than Charmer?" She asked with a smile but he felt that it wasn't the genuine smile she was showing him a few moments ago.

"Kabir." He said simply, her expressions made his tone serious and formal.

"Very well Kabir, I am Piya. Hope...that you'll have...a good time...serving me." She completed the sentence in breaking, her mind being lost in the middle of the sentence. She didn't wait and walked out of the room.

Kabir stared at her retreating back. After this rather interesting first meeting, he had gathered at least this much.

"There's something deep about her...something dark. If I am not wrong...something bloody?"

Edited by kawaii hime - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#24

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Thats an amazing update Mais! Its so dark. I love the interactions between Kabir & Piya. I really do. The eerie atmosphere is amazing.
And I love the way you writing <3
Keep writing hun,
Nidheya :)
Edited by -Untamed- - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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res!

okay, kidding! 😆

lovely update, for starters! very well described. when i read the name 'kabir' .. i instantly remembered that thing you mentioned about different couples being together different times.. you know? his feelings, his longing was beautifully described. he clearly loved her - and he was holding back because of a promise. and he did sense something bad about her, is she a vampire? seems like it. the whole meeting part was amazingly written - as J said, it's so hard NOT to picture yourself as the protagonist when you can CLEARLY feel their mind - clearly picture yourself in the surrounding not only visualising, but 'feeling' the eerie-ness as well... continue soon! :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Untamed-

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Thats an amazing update Mais! Its so dark. I love the interactions between Kabir & Piya. I really do. The eerie atmosphere is amazing.
And I love the way you writing <3
Keep writing hun,
Nidheya :)



was shocked to see you 'res' 😛 but thank you! <3

Originally posted by: _Akanksha_

res!


okay, kidding! 😆

lovely update, for starters! very well described. when i read the name 'kabir' .. i instantly remembered that thing you mentioned about different couples being together different times.. you know? his feelings, his longing was beautifully described. he clearly loved her - and he was holding back because of a promise. and he did sense something bad about her, is she a vampire? seems like it. the whole meeting part was amazingly written - as J said, it's so hard NOT to picture yourself as the protagonist when you can CLEARLY feel their mind - clearly picture yourself in the surrounding not only visualising, but 'feeling' the eerie-ness as well... continue soon! :)



😲😲😲😲😲😲 You didn't reserve!?!??! Ye kya horaha hai Jaan? And no, she's not a vampire. Please! No supernatural stuff here! Just some rare facets of reality...thanks for the beautiful comment! 😳

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Posted: 14 years ago
#27
Your ff is awesome! Pls add me 2 ur pm list.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow That Was Awsome. Kabir and Pia. Aww. Conti Soon. Ok. (:
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Well mais...you know how much I love Jiya and Kapi...so you can imagine how thrilled my shipper heart was with this update! <3 It was so romantic and sweet and tragic and heartwarming and wonderful! 😍
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: I-love-Roses

Your ff is awesome! Pls add me 2 ur pm list.



oh! Well, I actually have no PM list...just like the story and I'll PM you (or make someone PM you) about it. Thanks! 😃

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