Samarpan (An FF) Part 11 (Thread 1/Page 139) - Page 57

Originally posted by: sheema_rajoo

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So far I've never met (thank goodness) anyone who thinks he/she is the bearer of bad luck/negativity and that's why upon reading this, I was beyond shocked and couldn't comprehend the extents of aarti's self hatred. Her innocence were snatched away by the people who were supposed to preserve it.


Seriously Indu you're a fantastic writer and I salute you for this work. It's easy to write a romance piece as either we have gone through it or dreamed/fantasized about it but to write such pain, insecurities and emotions which we never want to feel/go through in our entire life really requires talent and immense imagination. I really don't know how you managed to write Aarti's pain in such depths. I'm shell shocked and rendered speechless with your brilliance Indu. You're fantastic and here is my jhappi and hug for a woman with beyond this world imaginations. 🤗

Sheema, you are still young. You lead a very protective life at the moment. You have still years to go before you meet people of varied kinds belonging to different strata of society. Believe me there are worst people than the Dubeys in our society who follow some staunch, blind beliefs. In fact if we look within our own family system, we may come across superstitious people within us. Listen to this: My brother too is a fauji. His wife belongs to Rajasthan. They have two daughters...grown up now. When she had the first child, she started crying on seeing my mother and apologizing, when ma went in to see her after the birth. Her grandma almost fell at my father's feet. They thought my parents will be disappointed and treat my bhabhi badly, since she was the eldest bahu and couldn't beget a son. Mind you she is a highly educated girl. My father was livid at his DIL's thinking. They were taken aback when he walked out disappointed at her behavior, and it took all of my mother's patient explanation how in our family a girl is not only adored but worshipped as Lakshmi before they understood that the little one was a joy for us and my father had already planned out the celebration. Today my bhabhi is more modern in her outlook than probably even I am...all because of my brother and parents.


Well, that got long. Thank you for the kind words Sheema. Your jhappis are as always the most welcomed part of your post. Hugs back to you manifold...🤗

Originally posted by: sara1990

Wonderful update...

Feel sad for Aarti and Yash😭

Waiting for your next update...

Thanks Sara.😊

Originally posted by: sia221

Read the chap 4 & 5 together...!!

Oh my... !! thank u Indu for giving us the warning and preparing us in advance...abt Aarti past...it was really tragic...!! 😭 Yash has to really work hard.. to get thru her...!!

Well.. one could be really marvel at the love btwn Satya and Shobha... but the same love became a CURSE to daughter Aarti and her life...!!

Feeling really bad for Aarti.. for.. she had to go through so much...but really glad that she had Radha.. Malti.. Pandit dadu...with her...!! 😊

I really like the fact.. that Yash's entry is in bits and pieces...for now...coming at the perfect time.. and and one way or the other making a difference in her life.. !! 😃

Yash also facing betrayal.. and rejection(sort of).. Hmmm..interesting...!!

Very nice.. Indu...!!⭐️⭐️

Thanks... and Do continue...!! 😊

Sia...now I am relieved. I was waiting for your feedback. Thank you for the approval. Satya's love for Shobha was of the worst kind...the possessive kind, in which even a baby becomes an outsider and a rival to the affections.

Yash's entries are all fated...he comes in when Aarti needs him the most. The meetings leave their mark on them...but they themselves are oblivious of each other. I touched upon the beginning of Yash's past with this.😊

Originally posted by: InduG64

Sheema, you are still young. You lead a very protective life at the moment. You have still years to go before you meet people of varied kinds belonging to different strata of society. Believe me there are worst people than the Dubeys in our society who follow some staunch, blind beliefs. In fact if we look within our own family system, we may come across superstitious people within us. Listen to this: My brother too is a fauji. His wife belongs to Rajasthan. They have two daughters...grown up now. When she had the first child, she started crying on seeing my mother and apologizing, when ma went in to see her after the birth. Her grandma almost fell at my father's feet. They thought my parents will be disappointed and treat my bhabhi badly, since she was the eldest bahu and couldn't beget a son. Mind you she is a highly educated girl. My father was livid at his DIL's thinking. They were taken aback when he walked out disappointed at her behavior, and it took all of my mother's patient explanation how in our family a girl is not only adored but worshipped as Lakshmi before they understood that the little one was a joy for us and my father had already planned out the celebration. Today my bhabhi is more modern in her outlook than probably even I am...all because of my brother and parents.


Well, that got long. Thank you for the kind words Sheema. Your jhappis are as always the most welcomed part of your post. Hugs back to you manifold...🤗

Oh gosh seriously?😲 but yeah that I know coz even my best friend's sister when she got pregnant, her husband and his family were expecting a boy and even picked a name but when they found out it was a girl (during the scanning), her father in law just walked out of the hospital so disappointed and didn't return til very late at night. She was so worried and disappointed herself as she too wanted a boy and was worried that the family might not love the girl but as soon as the baby was born, her father in-law cried tears of joy and is now really close to the baby girl.. So I thought that initially though people may get disappointed, the moment they see the child's face, they'll just melt. I guess in that sense I am naive as I've only been and met people who gets showered with love.

Originally posted by: sheema_rajoo

Oh gosh seriously?😲 but yeah that I know coz even my best friend's sister when she got pregnant, her husband and his family were expecting a boy and even picked a name but when they found out it was a girl (during the scanning), her father in law just walked out of the hospital so disappointed and didn't return til very late at night. She was so worried and disappointed herself as she too wanted a boy and was worried that the family might not love the girl but as soon as the baby was born, her father in-law cried tears of joy and is now really close to the baby girl.. So I thought that initially though people may get disappointed, the moment they see the child's face, they'll just melt. I guess in that sense I am naive as I've only been and met people who gets showered with love.

See...I rest my case. In our family, my parents made the difference in my bhabhi's maternal side, as they finally had a precedence where the DIL was showered with endless blessings for gifting the family the first grand child...it didn't matter that she was a girl.

Originally posted by: kinny_ranvir

wow superb update...loved it..poor Arti...she is really mentally affected loads...

loved Arti-Yash interaction...

Thanks Kinny.😊

Where shall I start off? I have probably told you before,but I'd say it a million times more.You always manage to leave me spellbound.Awed... The reason I love this piece of art is because it helps me connect with myself.I start exploring crevices I never knew could exist within me.Whats the point of an expression if it doesn't invoke an emotion out of you? Yash as a father warmed up my heart.Payal and Aayu,brought familiarity,them being fragments of me.Aarti.Ihave a feeling you love aarti a tad bit more than Yash.She is a direct consequence of yash's actions.A la' Adam and Eve.Fitting.Aren't they the only two in their world,apart from the kids ofcourse.He has molded her as she exists in the present.like a mother molds her child,with love,dedication and samarpan.What she went through as a child can't be comprehended in mere words.she had me crying her unshed tears.I would never wish something as such on any child.I love malti.Thank God for small mercies. But what I love the most is the love that carries Yash and Aarti through anything. Whatever you write is a piece of Your Soul.I,for one,am not qualified to judge if its upto the mark or not.Also my maa says that souls aren't judged,they're embraced. I can't promise how sooner I'll review.But I can sAy that I will however review.I eagerly await your next update.Loved all your previous ones.Take care😊

@pg 70, sorry for rambling.. 😕

Originally posted by: J12L85

Indu dear just mindblowing...u are as gifted as our Aarthi truely:) The way you changed the ambiance from the previous update is not a easy thing to do and yet you have done this beautifully. This update was so mellow yet so insightful at the same time, lots of other emotions surfaced to better understand Arya. Malti and Aarthi share such a pure and strong bond and I'm so glad that Malti is apart of Aarthis life cause she not only has been her confidant but she has been there to reinstate to Aarthi that she has a purpose in life and has a right to happiness and love. She has kept the flame alive in Aarthi, showering her with love and filling her life with colours. Pandit has also played an equally important role and I believe that he tried to fill the role of a father. Aarthis artistic talent was a world of escape for her from all the negativity and it was the retreat she needed. Wow Yash again saved Aarthi (divine intervention) and again helping her and encouraging her to empower herself...a true gentleman and a selfless human being. I just loved the moment where both Yash and Aarthi remembered each other. Although Aarthis memory was mentioned through Pandits words, I am sure she rmembers their 1st encounter clearly cause Yash was the reason for the start of her eduacation. Yashs memory of her stirred by her behaviour...sigh even though it was so breif its etched in his heart. My heart went out to Yash on hearing that horrrible Tanyas words but so glad that he did find out the truth.This heartache will definitely create trust issues for Yash..makes sense now cause in an earlier update Yash and Nanimaasi mentioned this in one of their talks. I also foresee this trust issue and Aarthis emotional pain causing misunderstandings for Arya when they do meet. Maltis parting words to Aarthi was just brilliant and I am sure she will remember and heed this advice when she deals with future situations. Aarthis mind has been tortured and broken so bad that she can'even think about love and thinks she would be a curse on her soulmate:(...can only imagine how hard Yash had to work to break this mindset that she formed about herself. You yet again steppped up Indu and delivered magic...your talent is just wow. Can't wait for the next piece.

PS: In response to your earlier comment to mine, I am doing much better thanx, been down with the flu. Thanx for the well wishes and concern, its really appreciated...big hug:D <3

Hi J...so glad you are much better now. The flu can really sap energy.

(Bold) It makes me really satisfied to see you connecting the initial chapters with this one. The whole point of those chapters were to give a glimpse of how it turned out for them, how although wounds are healed, faint scars still remain.

Once again thanks a ton for the profuse words of appreciation and for such a heartwarming feedback. Yours is one response I always read more than once. 😊

Originally posted by: lovely_nikki

What would have happened to girls like Aarti, if people like Pandit Dadu and Malti didn't exists in this world. Because of them Aarti was able to keep her inner talent alive. And Malti made sure that Aarti will out the forms for her further studies. I am feeling so proud of them and so happy for Aarti. 👏

Aww loved it when Pandit Dadu gifted her that statuette of Goddess Saraswati, which she later on gave to Payal.

OMG I'm in love with the following line

"Her subtle, delicate actions reminded him of the touch-me-not flower, who is expressively articulate and at peace amidst trees, flowers, and birds but at any human contact withdraws into herself." 👏 👏

So once again Aarti's savior Yash came for her protection. And he still remembers her from childhood. Just he didn't knew that she is the same girl.

Poor Yash is also heart broken. Hope Aarti will mend his broken heart somehow.

Indu I forgot to mention it before, I loved the way you wrote how Aarti got her name, when she was a baby. That was the most beautiful way of naming a baby and it was so symbolic also. 👏

Missed my Aayu though 😭 😛

Thanks Nikki. Well, what God takes away with one hand, He balances by giving with another. Aart's life was always like that since the day she was born: While her parents' love didn't come her way, God ensured she holds the hand of the one person who will ultimately give her so much love that all that she never had will be forgotten. What was so simple about Aarti was that for all that she suffered, she didn't let it come between her relationships with Pandit dadu, Malti, Radhama, and even her school teachers and classmates. If they gave her something, they also received a lot from her. Her touch was never unaffected.


Aww you miss Aayu...so do I pal. However, we shall have to wait. I promise he will be back when we cross the past to the present. He will have a very important role to play in his Di's life...that's all I can say at the moment.😊