FF - |As Fate Would Have It| Chapter 9 June17 - Page 13

Incredible he thought! Just as his words slipping his mouth, a deep blush coloured his wife's face, warming her all over - as his fingers on her back, still continuing to unravel her, would attest. He could not remember the last time he had witnessed a girl not in her teens that blushed. Although he was caught unawares, he realized that her blush had charmed him, and he hoped he could see her blush again, very soon.

This was actually incredible for me!! I never expected Yash to say that! 😲 And I love him for saying this too... I can see where this is coming from. 😆 One thing I very much liked is that he is not denying the fact that Aarti is attractive. He knows that Aarti is stunning and is actually looking forward to see her blush again ! 😲😆 That means more scenes like this, isn't it? I love that he is still unraveling her, he is impatient to know more about her... she has caught his mind properly for now... He won't be able to look anywhere else now. 😆

- I also love that para where you depicted what exactly is gloing on in Yash's mind and I was so happy to read that. He has acknowledged that she is the ideal wife material and is actually pleased with the Scindia's choice. Things are only going to go above from here. 😳

-Coming to Aarti's POV in the bathroom, I was initially thrown off guard at the line 'she fumed'. Then I read the next line and remembered 'oh yeah, she doesn't know the truth yet'. I forgot totally that she doesn't know that Yash has broken up with Arpita. Its we readers who know. 😆 But I certainly loved this part too. That is exactly how anyone would have reacted at such a cheeky remark from a person who has a lover. 😆

-As they laughed, Aarti lowered her eyes, lest anyone notice a distinct sadness within them. Yash, noticed however, and called himself fifty kinds of fools. He would, he decided, make it up to Aarti, and clear the misunderstanding between them as soon as he had a quiet moment between them.

I love the reaction of Yash...😆 He calls himself 'fifty kinds of fools.' I can't stop laughing at his dilemma (sadistic, ain't I? 😉). He must have been muttering away to himself, bashing himself up for his stupidity. And I love how you brought us close to the truth revelation this early. So he wants to clear this misunderstanding as soon as possible, because he too is feeling restless to talk to her, open up to her. 😆

-The next para was beautiful. Aarti, as I expected, is giving him the royal ignore and he is getting all the more edgy...😆 The more Aarti will appear to be oblivious to his presence to put up a picture that she is not affected by her and is allowing him to go to his lover unobstructed, the more Yash will get pulled towards her, and the more will it drive him crazy.

- Looking forward to your next update soon enough cuz I can't wait to see whether the MU is cleared at all and how Aarti is gonna react to it. 😳

That was a fantastic update.👏 I love the progress of the story so far and I'm pretty confident that the coming updates will be even better. The light hearted sections of the update had me laughing and it did well to reduce the gravity of their current situation. Your descriptions of their physical reactions as well as their thoughts were beautifully written and I also liked the realistic situation they were placed in towards the end of the update. Great job and looking forward to the coming updates. 👍🏼