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Posted: 17 years ago
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ook!!! minnie and lashy... no pressure huh😕 ?! j/k...im now freaking out that the next parts wont b upto standards!

but thank u both so much for the comments... feeling very gratified! 😃 [:D/]

SS and inder thanks to u too..

i should add that im gonna b taking scenes that have been shown in the serial and will b working around them, giving a lil twist here an there..so no foul cry for originality!

hopefully have th next 2 parts up by friday.. since 3 n 4 r short..
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hey Sophiya, 🤗Where were you? thank god i turned to PRC.....

Oh my my...... I loved ur "Choices...".

Its so beautifully written👏, I m going senti yaar..... With such a depth u ve potrayed grown up and changegd Sanyo..... I could feel her sadness😭. U know what i usually read while travelling, and when i was reading this, sun was setting outside my window 😳 and "Dil naa umeed toh nahi" song was being played in my player..... u could imagine... how i was feeling while reading this... I enjoyed yaar.
Loved Sanyo's entry in ur story😍..... and Vaishali too. I was expecting like this from the great Sagars, but discourteously ruined the beautiful story 😭 as well as characters😡

" we will meet again ,Sanyogita. If it is destined, it will happen" ahhh ha..... I feel like reading and reading. 😛

U r very good in penning down emotions👏, keep it up dear..... and please do continue. 😃

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: ppiyu

Hey Sophiya, 🤗Where were you? thank god i turned to PRC.....

Oh my my...... I loved ur "Choices...".

Its so beautifully written👏, I m going senti yaar..... With such a depth u ve potrayed grown up and changegd Sanyo..... I could feel her sadness😭. U know what i usually read while travelling, and when i was reading this, sun was setting outside my window 😳 and "Dil naa umeed toh nahi" song was being played in my player..... u could imagine... how i was feeling while reading this... I enjoyed yaar.
Loved Sanyo's entry in ur story😍..... and Vaishali too. I was expecting like this from the great Sagars, but discourteously ruined the beautiful story 😭 as well as characters😡

" we will meet again ,Sanyogita. If it is destined, it will happen" ahhh ha..... I feel like reading and reading. 😛

U r very good in penning down emotions👏, keep it up dear..... and please do continue. 😃



thanx ppiyu!😳 im just trying my best...i felt so sad u werent updating ur ff...
btw which song is the one u were talking about?
Edited by sephora1 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: sephora1



thanx ppiyu!😳 im just trying my best...i felt so sad u werent updating ur ff...
btw which song is the one u were talking about?

U r doing a good job 😃 Sophiya.

Oh that song..... its from the film 1942 A Love Story 😳.. "Dil naa umeed toh nahi, nakaam hi toh hai....." Further it starts with ... "Yeh safar bahut hai kathin magar, naa udaas ho mere hamsafar." 😛

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Posted: 17 years ago
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PRITHVI(part3)


Prithvi sat by the window. Having just returned from a mission,he was exhausted but couldn't sleep for some reason.
No , that wasn't entirely true. He knew why he couldn't sleep.

Today was the anniversary of the day that had changed his life.
4 years ago, on this very day, he had been crowned king of Delhi. In the last 4 years, many things had changed. Mostly, for the better. The kingdom was prospering and the threats at the borders were minimal.


Over all , Delhi was at peace with her neighbors. The people were happy. He felt a sense of satisfaction. He knew his father would have approved ad he only hoped he would b able to shoulder his responsibilities well in the future too.


A light breeze caressed his face and he closed his eyes.. and there she was…Sanyogita.

Usually he never allowed himself to dwell on her, it was just very painful. But some days when he felt like allowing himself some tiny piece of personal space, he would think about her. Today, he needed her presence, her soothing touch.

He went about his day to day running of the kingdom and even slept soundly at night, but she had a knack of slipping from his subconscious mind into his conscious mind at the most unexpected of moments.


Like a meeting with his ministers.

Or smack in the middle of a mission.

Mostly, though, it was when he needed extra courage or was facing a tough decision. She would come and go from his thoughts, peeking from behind someone, smiling from a corner, nodding her encouragement. He would have to fight to bring himself bac and the only way to do it would b to remember the last time they had met.

Even now, the memory of her pain, the tears in her eyes ,the absolute heartbreak he had heard in her voice when she begged him to go away, made his pain feel fresh.


He opened his eyes and walked over to his bedside table. Opening the top drawer he pulled out a little box, he kept hidden in the corner. Inside lay the one tangible, physical proof of the days they had spent together. Holding her earring like a life line in his hand, he went back to his moon gazing.


The past four years had changed many things about him. He had acquired even more calm then he had before. He had gotten more serious, and according to arjun, he seemed to have lost the sparkle in his laughter.

He supposed it was true to some extent. He was still attentive to his sister and considerate to his mother. His trust and concern for his friends was there too. But a part of him was just shut off from everyone and everything around him


Over the past year he had heard about her. Her beauty and talents had won her many admirers, even though not many people had actually seen her. The King of kunauj had forbidden her being drawn or painted and it was a crime punishable by death.


Prithvi wasn't really curious. He would always remember her as the "wild cat" he knew years ago.


And just as he had promised her, he had stayed out of her way. Never giving into the moments of impulse which prodded him to go see her.


Prithvi had always believed in creating his own destiny. But this was one thing which he had left to the fates.


A few days ago, his mother had told him about a certain Rajkumari Indravati. Even before she could ask the question, he had said no.She asked him to atleast tell her the cause of his aversion to all matters pertaining to his marrige.He wouldn't give a reason.

He couldn't tell his mother, he was waiting.


Waiting for Sanyogita to give him a sign.


Waiting for fate to have mercy on his heart.


"Just once sanyogita. Just once,call out to me. Just once, tell me u still care and not even Hades will keep us apart, much less ur father's palace walls"


He loved her still. The love had intensified instead of diminishing, but he wouldn't make the first move. He had promised her. He put the earring back in it's box and lay down to sleep..


Woh pal tumhare saath jo guzre
kya phir who ayenge
gulshan main ban ke phool phir
masti main kya lehrainge

baat yeh mumkin nahi
phir bhi najane dil main kyun
kehte hain kha key yeh hum kasam
har pal bandhi kuch aas hai

ankhon se tu door hai
dhadkanon ke paas hai
Teri har yadein sanam ..
Kehte hain kha k hum kasam ..
BAn kar labon pe payas hai . .


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sorry thora short hai but thats becoze the next part is gonna b up tmrw .

comments will as always be greatly appreciated.
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Posted: 17 years ago
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👏 👏 ............ Wowooooooo!! I loved reading this very short and sweet part Sephora!! But I beg of you to have mercy on poor greedy me and post a little longer part 😛 .

How well you describe emotions!! 👏 How sensible and natural, your characters sound!! 👏 How much sense their thought make!! 👏

Prithvi missing his lady love......." Holding her earring like a life line in his hand"...... 😭 😭

👏 👏 you are getting better with age 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: minnie2308

👏 👏 ............ Wowooooooo!! I loved reading this very short and sweet part Sephora!! But I beg of you to have mercy on poor greedy me and post a little longer part 😛 .

How well you describe emotions!! 👏 How sensible and natural, your characters sound!! 👏 How much sense their thought make!! 👏

Prithvi missing his lady love......." Holding her earring like a life line in his hand"...... 😭 😭

👏 👏 you are getting better with age 👏



awww..shucks!!😳

thanx minnie... the next part is gonna b tmrw.. but i do have a something else.. will post it in 5 min
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Posted: 17 years ago
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ok so the trailer im about to put up is kinda long, but thats coz its the kind of music i can keep on listening to repeatedly.. in fact this particular piece has been on my mind for the past week and i just couldnt resist doin a trailer to it.. the music is "ONE DAY" from Pirates of the Carrib: 3..
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Posted: 17 years ago
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plz plz do comment, coz personally im pretty pleased with the way it turned out

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wMaHX1zo-lE[/YOUTUBE]
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Posted: 17 years ago
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ok as i said yesterday..here is the next part..


MOVING ON(part4)


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Sanyogita sat on the stairs leading down into the gardens. She worked on a painting , she intended to gift to her grandmother.


Vaishali , who had just received an imp msg came running to find the princess.


V: rajkumari ji, I've been searching everywhere for u


Sanyogita smiled. Vaishali always knew where she was , but she still insisted on making it sound like a big deal.


S: this is where I usually am at this time, every day, so why exactly where u looking "everywhere" else?


V: becoze I have news… the sun rose in Delhi this morning…


Sanyogita quickly flicking hands stilled. After a few seconds, she diligently started painting again.


S: all is well, I hope?


V: perfectly well and hale n hearty ur highness..and from wat I'v been told pretty successful too..


Sanyogita didn't speak again for the next few moments and both friends sat in companionable silence, each lost in their won thoughts.


Sanyogita broke the silence.


S:u can say it vaishali, I know u want to..


V: uuhh…. How do u know I want to say something?


S: u can tell me wat im thinking before I even say it, wat makes u think I don't know wat ur thinking?



Vaishali sighed. It was true.. much as she was Sanyogita best friend, the truth was ,Sanyogita was also her's. Somewhere along the ups and downs of the young princess's life, the line between servitude and friendship had been crossed. Vaishali, knew just as she would go to any lengths for Sanyogita, the princess too would cross anyone and anything for her…



V: don't u think its time yet?



Sanyogita didn't stop working as this was a routine she and vaishali went thru on a regular basis.



S: no..not yet.



Vaishali felt her anger rising. Anger at the unfairness of it all. Anger at Sanyogita and anger at the whole world generally..


V: wat?! U don't think u'v punished yourself enough? Or is it become so much of a habit, u cant break it? Atleast ,apologize to him and free urself from some of the guilt. U may not forgive urself, but he might. Infact im sure he will.



Sanyogita understood her friend's distress on her behalf and would have said something but vaishali's last sentence pushed her bac into the fearful corner of her heart.



S(softly): and that's wat im afraid of…(loudly) I will do it vaishali, I will, I promise.. but not now, not yet.. the time..it just isn't time ....



V(sighing softly and taking hold of sanyogita's hand): but u refuse to see him. U keep tabs on where he is but u don't even want to know wat he looks like now. The number of times I'v seen u worry for him yet never once letting him know how much u still care.. I frankly cant imagine how u could go on living like this, and for how long…



Vaishali's mind went back to the days they had spent at the ashram.



Sanyogita wasn't the only one whose fame had spread. His exploits and bravery were already well established facts when they had first met, and they had grown by leaps and bounds. He was referred to as the " Warrior King" with great awe and respect.


The news of the adventures of the heroic, handsome young king had reached all across the land and even found their way into the seclusion of Maya Ma's ashram


Sanyogita liked to paint and poetry too was something she enjoyed, though dancing and archery were her passions.


Nevertheless , whenever a painter or poet came by, Sanyogita never missed an opportunity to learn something.


But sometimes those poetry session turned into an exercise in self pain.

She would still thru those sessions, listening to his name and exploits extolled and though it hurt, it would also fill her with a sense of pride.


She had found it very hard to accept his decision to become king but then, over time, she realized it was the rite choice. She understood that HE was the rite choice.


The one thing she had refused to do, was look at his portrait, not that there were many of those.


The king of delhi was reputed to being elusive and highly private.



A few painters who claimed to have seen him , painted a portraits and gladly showed them to the eager princesses and ladies in the various courts.

Sanyogita however made sure, she never came across any of them. At the ashram it had been the hardest. But now in her father's palace , where even the wind from delhi was frowned upon, she knew she would never have to worry about any sudden chinks in her armour.


Vaishali looked at her friend and her heart ached for her.



V: oh… I almost forgot.. there is something else u should know..i overheard the Maharaj and ur grandmother. They are thinking about your marriage again…


Sanyogita dropped the brush she had been holding. Turning to face her friend, she looked like she was being sentenced to death

She whispered : "no"


Vaishali quickly soothed her distraught mistress..

V: its not like they have piked someone out, just another prince from some obscure estate, wanting to marry the beautiful Sanyogita.. I don't think the maharaj will say yes.. but u know wat happens every time a proposal comes..
The maharaj starts thinking along those lines..




S: I need to get out of here… we need a distraction..


V: ur rite, wat we need rite now is time



Sanyogita looked around her, desperately seeking inspiration, mind racing from one excuse to another



S: koteshwar yatra.. its been delayed by a few months this year becoze of the weather.. its now supposed to start from next week..



Vaishali, though extremely surprised, did not disagree. This mite be the best option they had. But it would b emotionally hard on Sanyogita


She slowly asked" are u sure?"


Sanyogita, knew exactly where her friend's mind was


S: yes..im ready to do this. If I can , that means im ready to face him, its taken me 3 years but I think its time to start moving forward.


Vaishali nodded and put her hand on Sanyogita's shoulder for support.

V: as u wish ur highness..im always in ur corner

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *


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Over the years Sanyogita had managed to b the daughter her father wanted. Well, at least she had pretended to.


But she had managed to find ways to fulfill the demands of her curious and rebellious nature. Apart from vaishali, only her grandmother was privy to the real persona of Sanyogita. And usually the queen mother was always helping her out .

Even now, she was the one who convinced the Maharaj, to let Sanyogita go to the yatra with only a minimal few soldiers.



A week later Sanyogita was on her way to the yatra..



Sometimes, in order to move forward to your future, U have to go back to ur past


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