||The Punishment|| Chapter 3/Note : Page 19

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hello everyone !

So here is something that has been in my mind for a long time now ...

It may be an OS or an SS ... I am not sure !

Secondly, it is set in ancient times and i have tried my best to give it that historical feel with vivid descriptions but i don't know how far i have gone in giving you that experience !

So that is for you to tell and me to know !

Here's presenting ...


Prologue

The lady sighed as she looked at the pompous welcome being given to the guests from her palace balcony; her eyes searching for someone. Admist the cheers of the people below and the shower of the flowers, her eyes caught a pair of deep intoxicating eyes. She held the gaze for a moment and then looked away not able to bear the intensity.

"Your highness, the king awaits your arrival." The maid said with hesitance, breaking into her thoughts. The lady nodded and beckoned her to leave. Sparing a last glance at the proceedings going on below, she made her way down the stairs, in the most graceful manner possible. Many slaves came alive from the shadows and resumed their place, behind the princess, for her protection.

The lady made her way through the gardens, which were made to suit her taste, to the court where the proceedings of the day where to be held and where her father called upon his favorite daughter to be. As she made her way, something in her mind made her lips curl up into an evil sardonic smile. Anyone looking at the princess could tell that someone or something had got on her wrong side and, well, his/her future seemed bleak. Her laughter rang through the mild breeze of the morning hours but it was not pleasure to the ears for it held the soundless anger and sadism one could fathom.

As her highness princess Manyata Kumari, the un - pronounced heir to the throne of Devgarh and the star of her father's eyes, made her way up the stairs leading to the palatial building where the court was held, the gateman announced her arrival and everyone including the king got up in reverend respect for the princess. She made her way to the grand chair erected beside her father's throne, with her chest swelling with pride. The chair had been made from the finest cotton found in the kingdom and the best silk was bought in from the distant lands to adorn it. Emeralds, the favorite gem of her majesty were studded into the hand rests of the chair which held more respect than the king's throne for everyone knew even if they didn't speak that the princess actually ruled for she had the ears of the king.

Her highness princess Manyata looked up at the subjects below her and she smiled in contentment. But suddenly her smile vanished as she remembered something. But soon her features again rested into that smile that could make anyone burst with warmth.

"This is my game and I have beaten everyone at it. It's your turn now, Yuvraaj Udayveer Singh, to face defeat. And yes I will make sure that defeat is all you will get from her highness Princess Manyata Kumari. The game begins now ... and I am the mastermind." She sneered and laughed in her mind at her thoughts as she declared war.


Prologue : Page 1 (Above)

Chapter 1 : Page 7

Chapter 2.1/2.2 : Page 12

Chapter 3 : Page 19



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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hi vidhi, I have just read the chapter and I think it is great new concept!!!
I love what and how you have done the description...
It seems very suspenseful do far and I would be happy to read further if you continue... Personally I think it is a good track of thought and you should pursue it...
Please do continue if you feel...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Have read something apart from course books after a long time. At least it feels like its been ages. The prologue is intriguing... mysterious is the word for it. Uday must've hurt Manyata bad since she wants revenge on it. Continue soon, do write a character sketch if the characters here are kind of different or if they have some other qualities as the original DEK characters.
Nice to see someone keeping this forum alive.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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woah nice
confusion but awesome prologue!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice prologue pls update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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so she's the wicked 1 here huh?
nyc start...
do pm me for this story
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hey vidhi...how r u??? 😊

well i personally really loved the entire prolouge...each and every word was just perfect, u r a very good writer. so keep it up baby 👏 👏 👏

so manyata is upto something and that is related to udayveer...hmmm well u have build to0o0o much suspence...and i like it. 😃 i wanna read more n more, and i really want u to continue it, plz plz plz write more and update. it will be a very amazing SS. 😊

so do continue so0o0on and good luck 4 future update. and tanks 4 p.m...love u 🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome prologue Vidhi, it has the exquisite, majestic feel which you wanted to convey. Well done with the description👏. BUT NOW ... the question is - Are u going to update it REGULARLY😉?
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey.. Vidhi..
I would kill you..
If you don't continue it..
Because I love your writting..
And these kind of historical stories too..
So I would be more than excited to read this further...
Talking about the prolouge..
It was amazing..
Manyata is a little evil kind of girl in this story..
And maybe Uday too..
So this will be..
A kante ki takkar between the too..
I would like you to continue it.. (Like.. I am dying to read further)..
Update soon..
Thanx for the PM..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice prologue ... this is new concept i must say in this story we seen manyta in uday's charector plz if possible so pm me ...

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