AeAjnabee| A Reyaansh Singhania OS

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Hi everyone! I'm new in this forum, as you may have guessed, and this is my first ever OS here. Basically, I never followed the show, used to watch it here and there, but in the past week, Shaz has turned me into a total KriYaansh-ArSha pankha. I've watched the scenes, and I somewhat know what's going on😆 So please please please don't judge if I get a few technicalities wrong. 😃 Shazzy, this one's for you! 😳

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AeAjnabee

One expression on someone's face is all it takes. A single quirk of an eyebrow; the twitch of someone's nose, the pain reflected in their eyes.


Reyaansh Singhania stood in front of the full length mirror, staring at himself. The shoulders that used to be barred straight and gave out a certain sense of confidence were now slumped and dejected. The eyes that gave out a playful sparkle were now lifeless, hollow.


Ae ajnabee, tu bhi kabhi, awaaz de kahin se,

Main yahaan, tukdo mein jee raha hoon,

Tu kahin, tukdo mein, jee rahi hai'


He moved flawlessly with the music, falling on the floor, stretching his arm upwards as if to ask for a wish, a prayer, a boon. He'd never thought he would be stuck at such crossroads where he wouldn't know what to do, where to go, and whom to turn to. His two best friends, Swayam Shekhawat and Sharon Rai Prakash seemed to be having problems of their own to deal with his. Was it true? Was love as overhyped as people claimed? He had tried one end of the rainbow, the one where love was supposed to be the best feeling in the world', but what had happened, was neither imagined in his wildest dreams, nor something that he was hoping for.


It hurt. It hurt then, and it hurt now. It hurt when Kriya Ghai, his first ever love, had ruthlessly told him that he was nothing but the ticket to her success and it hurt even now, when he thought about her. Where was she when he needed her the most? Where had she gone? Was love never meant for him? He knew he came across as a charmer, a Casanova, and someone who would fall in love everyday with a different girl. He knew it couldn't be more wrong.


Roz roz resham si hawa,

Aate jaate kehti hai Bata

Woh jo doodh dhuli, masoom kali,

Woh hai kahaan, kahaan hai?

Woh roshni kahaan hai? Woh janasheen kahan hai?

Main adhoora, tu adhoori, jee rahe hain'

He had been waiting for someone special, someone he could love, pamper, cherish, protect, and most of all, dance with, for the rest of his life. Did his feelings ever matter? His moves turned aggressive, as he flailed his arms about, somersaulting across the empty rehearsal hall, his eyes turning cold, his legs giving way as he ended up collapsing against the floor, looking skywards, arms to his side, completely helpless. Why did it give him so much pain that he thought he couldn't breathe?


'Tu toh, nahin hai lekin, teri muskurahatein hain,

Chehra nahin hai lekin, teri, aahatein hain,

Tu hai kahaan kahaan hai?

Tera nishaan kahaan hai?

Mera jahaan kahaan hai?

Main adhoora, tu adhoori, jee rahe hain'


The rehearsal hall echoed the lyrics the song played and haunted him. He didn't know why, but whenever he thought of rehearsal hall, all he could recall when he closed his eyes was her face in front of him, her body shivering as he pinned her to the mirror, and attempted to memorise every minute detail about her, despite being blindfolded. The scarf that she had left behind, the mask that marked their first meeting, the determination carved on her features as she competed in the face-off, the happiness twinkling in her eyes when she danced with him on the empty streets. He wanted to scream but no words came out, and as he lay there, his eyes tightly shut, fighting the silent tears, Reyaansh Singhania felt all the walls around him starting to build, and that was the day he vowed never to love again.


And to think about it, all it took was an expression.

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Annnd, that's a wrap!😆I know, completely OTT, and cheesy and filmy and all that, but main toh aisi hee hoon!😆 And with an exam tomorrow, this is all I could manage, but I just HAD to pen something down.

Anyway, jootas, chappals all welcome. Hit the 'like' button and comment! Reviews are like cookies! I LOVE them! 😆


-Raina

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Reserved...
Shall leave out a comment soon

Unreserved


Raina First of all a warm welcome to you into Kriyaansh/Arsha Fandome
Shaz tussi great ho ji
Coming to your OS its beautifully penned..
I loved it how you described Rey's feeling on missing Kriya the love of his life..
Its a pleasure to read the OS with Song as BG.


Thank You for writing up on Reyaansh

All the best for your Exams


Edited by -FrozenRain- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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that was beautiful and emotional!
a perfect view of Reyaansh pov.. i loved it..

you have described emotions and feelings very well with your choose of words.. amazing!!

keep writing more.. you seem like a flawless writer!!! :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg!! Hats Off...To you for writing such a marvelous piece. I mean...Like really WOW! Song was so perfect, And the description, the way it was written- Wow!

So glad that Shaz turned you into a ArSha/KR fan x) Thanks Shaz 🤗

And thanks for writing this beautiful piece 🤗

Loved it :')


Welcome here though ;)

-Upi.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Res.
Mera REY!!!
I am highly flattered at the fact that I could turn you into such a pankha in a week <3
Thanx Upi :* Apne ArSha ke liye kuch bhi <3
Unresed!
Okay...RAE!!!!! 🤗
Dude...am I happy to get you on board this ship or WHAT!!!!
You know , I think I've commented about how your OSes, though rich in depth & emotions, tends to go a little on the mushy side. Ek do-baar to kaha hoga 😛 But you know what...THIS was perfect from the first line till the end <3
I'm so proud of you Rae 👏 Most of all because, even though the basic essence of your writing is same, some how, its become better :p This was so controlled & perfect & angsty & BANG ON!!!! The way you described Rey's heartbreak...best of all through his first love...DANCE, was perfection.
Reyaansh Singhania felt all the walls around him starting to build, and that was the day he vowed never to love again.
THIS!!! I loved it <3 I don't know whether it was the perfect placing of the dialogue, or the way you fit it with the song...but it was extremely poignant & powerful & struck straight into my heart. And you know what...I connected to Rey again in the way I used to when I watched D3 <3 I could feel HIM, & his heart was open for me to read. And that...you don't know how much that means to me! <3
I am going to now go & repeatedly pat my back...for having made YOU a part of this fandom which I adore SO FREAKING MUCH!!!! Because damn...you have SO much to give it <3
#countingtillKriyaGhai
PS...Love ya 😉
PPS...Everyone else...yeah, yeah...I am awesome😎 Excuse the modesty😎
Edited by ..DamonCrazy.. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ..nams..

that was beautiful and emotional!

a perfect view of Reyaansh pov.. i loved it..

you have described emotions and feelings very well with your choose of words.. amazing!!

keep writing more.. you seem like a flawless writer!!! :)


Thank you so much! 😳

Haila! I'm flattered! I'm hardly flawless, but thank you so much! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Incandescence.

Omg!! Hats Off...To you for writing such a marvelous piece. I mean...Like really WOW! Song was so perfect, And the description, the way it was written- Wow!

So glad that Shaz turned you into a ArSha/KR fan x) Thanks Shaz 🤗

And thanks for writing this beautiful piece 🤗

Loved it :')


Welcome here though ;)

-Upi.


Thank you Upi! I'm flattered! And yeah, it's all thanks to Shaz, paagal ladki! 😆

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: CutielovesChocs


Thank you so much! 😳

Haila! I'm flattered! I'm hardly flawless, but thank you so much! 😳


as a writer myself i can see that in u 😉

its my pleasure to flatter u 😆 there would be more stories coming from u in future then 😉 see im selfish 😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
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You know me right?

Hope u remember

I read ur RaHi OS n appreciated ur writing skills too n also we had chotu-motu arguements😆

I like it now...

I got a KR/ArSha Phankha in u😉😆

🤗🤗🤗

Forgive me if I ever hurted u

And coming to this One Shot.

It was beautifully penned down.

Marvellous.

I loved d way u portrayed Rey's feeling so fantabulously...

I am in love wid dis ❤️

Emotions were aptly penned down.

Stupendofantabulous One Shot.

Keep 'em coming..

😃🤗

- Snigs.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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So, I'll forever love Shaz even more for turning you into a KR fan! Cause, we need brilliant writers like you to write such angsty amazing things and blow our minds. I loved it. It made me feel sorry for Rey which I haven't felt in forever.

Now, you said Reviews are cookie.. I'll do you one better. 😉





Much Love. Muaaah!

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