What a perfect ending to this tale. Just goes to show that people find love (even they don't recognise it as that particular emotion) in the most unexpected ways and places.
Firstly, I would like to commend you on the chapter titles in this story Jen. They speak volumes, even before reading the chapter. Simply perfect. Hence it's no surprise that this chapter - Floodgates tells us the impending eruption that Khushi would have that would inevitably lead to Arnav opening up the heart he had kept imprisoned for the longest time.
You portrayed Khushi's distress over her living conditions, her hopelessness because she had taken Arnav's harsh words calling her a s**t to heart and her anger brilliantly. The way she screamed, pushed, spoke sarcastically and finally walked away from him was painful but great.
Her disgust over his reasons for coming to her was so evident.
Coming to Arnav...how do you salvage a mistake like the one he committed with Khushi. I loved the way he kept on despite multiple rebuttals from her. Shows the man's strength of character. When he is wrong, he owns up. He wants her happiness. he wants her but doesn't believe he can give her happiness. Such is his poor self-esteem due to the murder he had committed. He wanted to die..I feel terrible.
These two deserve happiness and if there's anyone who can thaw him out of that misery, it is only Khushi.
I loved the way you wrote the last part jen. The way she talks to herself about how he gave up, the way she runs to him and clings to him and finally reassures him that all mistakes need to be forgiven and last but no the least...the way she tells him that she likes him a lot. Gave me goosebumps.
May I say, romance is your genre. Continue writing it. Incorporate it into whatever you write because you really do have a flair for it.
I would like to end this comment with Arnav's smile. What a smile? I could see it and he more than anyone needed and deserved that smile. đ
Good Luck Jen. Love and hugsđ€
Edited by AquaSandhya - 12 years ago
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