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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#641

ina,

don't feel bad, just come when you can... always good to see you.

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DurgaS

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Posted: 12 years ago

#642

Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I had lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I had lost you?

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Edited by DurgaS - 12 years ago

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Mysticaldivine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#643

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

DurgaS's Index

Durga...😊

BEAUTIFUL...👏⭐️

You really gone so far this time...really really heart touching .

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble👏

He was having sansain ruk jana moment...no matter what.and that is coming in the very next epi...

Outstanding⭐️ edits...way to go Durga...all rounder.

poems,updates,translations,stories,edits ...we are having a winner here...👏

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Arshidiehardfan

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Posted: 12 years ago

#644

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

DurgaS's Index

Wow Durga... Amazing👏 U beautifully described Arnav's panic & relief 👏

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Putija

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Posted: 12 years ago

#645

Durga fabulous poem and the edits too

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

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BarunDiwani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#646

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

DurgaS's Index

Durga, what another gorgeous one by you. the whole thing is great but my fav lines in purple. Sobti was so good here portraying a man whose wall is truly melting, losing something he holds so dear...his control.

uff the fear and frustration as he tells here how he's looking for her like a mad man and "tum yah cha-?" frea and frustration reaches new heights and converts into anger "tum yahan chane kha rahi ho!"😆 poor guy, kya kar diya Khushi ned iske saath? thanks for this treat Durga! you are so good at this!! btw lov the edits and thos caps..uff!

Edited by BarunDiwani - 12 years ago

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Katelyn

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Posted: 12 years ago

#647

Originally posted by: DurgaS

Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

DurgaS's Index

Oh wow, this is outstanding! 👏 You beautiful depicted his state of mind! I especially love the purple parts! Awesome edits, Durga! Thanks for sharing!

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DurgaS

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Posted: 12 years ago

#648

@Arshi, @AD, @chalhov, @Ami, @Kate

Thank you all for the lovely comments on my poem. It gives me great joy to see that you loved the lines so much.

Thanks for the all rounder compliment Arshi. I unknowingly keep doing that, Jack of all trades, master of none. 😆

Yes Ami, he was going insane searching for her and she was busy bargaining chanas. 😆 He had to burst out on her.

Thanks all for loving my edits too. Started downloading the epis slowly and steadily, so can't resist capturing and making the edits. Thanks Kate and Arshi for the tips on downloading. 😊

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wiwy

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Posted: 12 years ago

#649

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

DurgaS's Index

What a remarkable poem Durgey!⭐️

These lines were special to me

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

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indi52

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Posted: 12 years ago

#650

Originally posted by: DurgaS
Disclaimer: Please do not copy my work anywhere. If you do, please give credit.

Episode 177 - Episode 178

What if I lost you?

A desperate search for a lowly girl

The task taken, to appease the restless soul

A tug felt, when she left with someone else

The heart yearns, while the sturdy wall melts

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble

Panic stricken, amidst faltering fears

A sweet familiar voice fell on his ears

A soothing vision on the rearview seen

Refreshing relief felt in his whole being

Feel her, touch her, her face he had to hold

With anger and concern, he spoke words of gold

Do you even know what I have gone through?

What if ... what if I lost you?

DurgaS's Index

lovely poem, durga, and wonderful storytelling by visuals. so you are editing now too? nice. 👏 👏 👏

his scattered sate of mind very aptly expressed here...

A broken bangle, a solitary sandal,

Found on the road, thoughts in a tangle

A slip, a tumble, a fall, a fumble

Hitch in the breath, mind in a jumble