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Posted: 11 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: shamanbk

superb startingawesome concept, and nicely saidplease update soon and pm me😛


aww thanks a lot dear 😊😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#92

Originally posted by: allseasonrain

hats off to you for the story line...
WE SHOULD BE PROUD TO AS WE ARE GIRLS... really for some mean minded cheap people a girl suffers so much... be it domestic violence or social nuisance ...
continue soon and pm me...


aww dear thanks a lot , 😊
it really means a lot 2 me , 😊
u r right ,its d girls who suffer always 😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: Natasha.

Beyond amazing, hats off to u for this superb story
It's so true that girls always have to pay for such disgusting crimes committed against them when it's totally not their fault
I love the way u expresses Taani emotions and feelings
It's very heartbreaking
I hope she finds the courage and strength to fight against her attacker


😲omg thank u so so so so much natasha ,
it really means a lot 2 me .😊😊😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: -upama-

Oh di i loved it😃 cont soon!!


thank u so much sweetu 😊😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: -Sweet_Soumya-

Awsum di

Hats off to u...

It was so emotional n heart touching

Luved rey feelings on a gal

Well written...

Luv u di..really

Thanx for making such a nice story

Updt soon n PM me


🤗 awww gudiya love u a loads muaahhh muaahhh ,
thank u so much muaahhhs 🤗
it really means a lot sweetu 😊😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#96

Originally posted by: anitasharma

Nice concept
update soon


thanks a lot dear 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#97
first of all a big thank u 4 all ur lovely comments , they all r really very very precious 2 me so pls keep commenting and sorry i could reply till page 5 but after that i will reply very soon pakka , spare me as i m a little unwell today , but really love u all buddies and as u all know yes i did a poll and found this story as ur all favorite so today i m here with its update and ya friends , this story will be of at least 11 chapters , i know i told u ki it will be of 4 or 5 but it cant be finish in 5 chapters as i wanna show d bad situation of our society so pls support me till its last chapter , i hope u all will ... , sorry in advance if i disappoint anyone but i m really putting my level best .. so pls do like n comment from heart
ek aasman pe
do chaand aadhe hain
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chapter - 3
(both were sitting n talking in that jeep only )
open d follwing song link in other tab , sorry i couldnt get better song
taani - but hum yahan se vapis kaise jayenge ... itni raat main to rasta bhi kho gaya hai .. bilkul meri life ki tarah
rey (just 2 cheer up her and bring a smile on her face) - heyy , ok first of all i also dont know ki yahan se hum vapis kaise jayenge , ek baar subah hone do phir dekhte hai kya karna hai , and ya tum mujhe apna dost samjh sakti ho .. and ya , main koi bhoot nahi hoon , so u can be relax .. k
taani (smiles a little after so long ) , dont know why rey felt relieved by her smile
and by now taani came 2 know one thing 4 sure , that he is different , jisne tumhari life save ki ab vo itna bura bhi nahi ho sakta , aur usne usse life ka imp samjhaya .. but still ... she was feeling a little awkward as she was alone with a stranger , and moreover that she was still feared and scared after what happened with her , as no one can even forget 4 a sec that worst thing ...
she was looking here n there ,..out of fear and also 2 find a way out there but no there was no way
rey speak up 2 divert her from thinking that cruel past ..
rey - taani , acchha ab hum jab dost ban he gaye hain , to can i ask u something ????
taani (nods in a yes ) - ya ..
rey - tum yahan he rehti ho ???
taani - no i live in mumbai ..
rey - hey main bhi mumbai main he rehta hun ..
taani - par tum yahan kaise ..
rey - vo actually main aur mere friends yahan college trip pe aaye hain., aur hum sab recently ek dance competition bhi jeete hain (he became a little sad thinking about kria ... and how she used him )
taani - kya hua
rey (hides it as he dont 2 stress her at all ) - nahi kuch nahi .. aur tum yahan kaise
taani - vo actually main bhi yahan apne friends ke saath picnic pe aayi thi ... par kal (tears again brim up in her eyes )
rey understood that he asked d wrong question
taani starts crying again ,... tears again make way and come down from her beautiful eyes but this time before they could fall rey catch her tears in his palm but as he catch her tears in his palm taani looks at him in suspicion
rey - ye jo tumhaare aansoo hai na , ye bahut bahut precious hain , isiliye kabhi bhi inko useless bad people pe waste mat karna .. sambhal ke rakho inhe , (takes her hand and ask her 2 open her palms and then he make her tear in his palm flow 2 taani's palm ) n then say - kiss ur precious tears and make a wish ki tumhare dil ka saara dard finish ho jaaye aur phir ye kabhi tumhare dard ke aansoo banke naa laute tumhari pyaari aankho main instead kabhi aaye bhi to sirf aur sirf tumhare khushi ke aansoo banke he aayein
(taani nods in a yes and while she was about 2 make a wish with her tear closing her eyes . )
rey - ahunhh aise nahi , first close ur hands with d tears like u pray , now close ur eyes and make a wish ,
while she was closing eyes joining hands with her tear inside it ,
rey was watching her .
taani in heart - hey krishna ji , pls help me n give me strength 2 fight and overcome all these pain n that hurting breaking bad memories of rape 😭😭 and aap pls aisa kabhi kisi aur ke saath mat karna ,kabhi bhi nahi and thank u 4 sending an angel 4 me (rey )
while watching her , rey in heart - dear krishna ji pls end her pains , sadness n all sorrows and never make her cry again and fill her life with a lots of happiness n love so that taani forget what happened 2 her 😭😭plss ,
she open her eyes and was about 2 open her palms but rey - no first kiss them , come on kiss them , and then keep ur hand with that tears n pain inside them at ur heart so that ur prayers get filled with ur pure love and tumhare aansoo , tumhare dard ka ehsaas krishna ji ko ho jaye aur vo tumhara har pain , jaldi se finsh kar de tumhare dil ke har wound ko jaldi se heal kar de ,
kyunki rab ji to hamare dil main hote hain , so
ur prayers will reach 2 krishna ji more fastly , so that he may answer them soon infact very soon 😉
(taani with tears n a little smile on her face , kiss them filling love in it and then keep her hand at her heart )
rey - now blow them , letting all ur pains n sorrows blow away n go far away from u ...
she opens her palms and blow d air😲😲 , letting d tear n pain be blown by d air and taken away from her ...
now she was feeling a little light as if
she has pour out and blow away all d deep pain of her heart
but she was really touched by rey's words now and this time a lone tear of having someone really very special escape her eyes , but again caught by rey
rey (says smilingly ) - not again plss ..
taani just nods with a little smile on her face
taani - ab tumhare pas har question , har pain ka answer hai to ye bhi bata do ki hum ye apna khoya hua raasta kaise dhudege ?????? aur main meri zindagi ka raasta kaise dhundhu ,
rey - , ji balike !!! (2 make her smile ) abhi batata hun . suniye dhyan se , rasta kho gaya hai to kya hua , hum apna man chaha rasta khud banayenge ... apni spirit se apne dil se , apne dil main chupe hue sabke liye pyaar aur care se ,
if we have problems so what , we will face it and since god is with us then he will be our confidence when we dont have confidence on us ...he will be our greatest strength when we get weak or tired .
he is d one who test us n give us problems then he will only help us 2 solve our each n every problem..
vaise ek baat aur bataun tumhe ki tumhe pata hai har raat ke baad naya din kyun hota hai ????? har adheri raat main chaand , taarey kyun hote hain ..
taani (curves her eyebrows in curiosity ) - kyunn
rey - ruko abhi batata hun , pehle ye batao ki
tumne kabhi chaand ko gaur se dekha hai ,(points her finger 2 d moon in d sky ) - nahi to vo dekho , bilkul dhyan se dekhna
taani looks up at d moon and she was adoring d beautiful night sky with moon n twinkling stars
rey while talking just look at taani , he was mesmerized by her 4 a moment ... he forgets what he was about 2 say ... he was just adoring her along with a try 2 measure d deep pain of her pure heart . he was staring at her without even blinking his eyes
taani (still looking at d sky ) - kya hua , tum kuch bol rahe the na , (still no effect on rey )
but then taani looks at him and found him staring at her ... 4 a moment she also got lost in his deep brown eyes ... d cool breeze was flowing making her hairs play more with her enhancing her serene beauty ... but pain filled and mixed in it ...
taani first came out of d eye lock and moves her hand in front of him
taani - hey kya hua , kahan kho gaye tum ????
rey (still in taani's universe )- beautiful , soo beautiful
taani - hunhh , whattt
rey came out of d trance n say - noo i mean so beautiful d sky is , isn't it , see
taani - ya it is very beautiful but u know moon n stars make it even more beautiful ..
rey - ya it is ... haan to main kya keh raha tha ( forgot what he was about 2 say as he got lost in taani)
taani - mujhe kaise pata hoga , haan tum mujhe moon ko dekhne ko keh rahe the ...
rey(now he remembers what he was saying )- haan to i was saying ki ... see d moon ...( he starts singing a little ) [ ok so now here is one more poem 4 it , ]
and taani looks at him as he starts singing ... she was surprised that rey has such an amazing voice .. it was quite soothing , dont know why , but his voice filled with his love was relieving her deep pain ...
and slowing quietly she was being lost in his voice , in him

uss chaand ko , dekhoo to zara ,
haa uss chaand ko dekho to zara ..
raaton ke andhere main , chaandni bikherta hai,
kabhi gumnaam hai vo to ,kabhi chamakta hai .
kuch vaise he hum bhi gum ho jaate hain apne, gamon main ...
par chamakte hai hum chaand jaise, khushiyon ke baadlon pe
khushiyon ke baadlon pe ..
par ye bhool jaate hain hum ki
chamakne ke liye,
uss chaand ko bhi baadlon aur toofano se ladna padta hai ...
aur laakh taaron main usse akele he rehkar chamakna padta hai ,
apne liye khada hona padta hai ...

rey - nahi samjhi , dekho .. moon shines n sprinkles moonlight in d sky but it spreads light in d darkness of d sky by that .. but u know sometimes moon have 2 fight with d clouds 2 shine in d sky , and so like that we also have 2 fight 4 our rights ..even if we r alone , but we have 2 stand 4 ourselves 4 our rights , like moon shines n spread moonlight in d night sky alone between d lakhs of twinkling stars ,
sometimes its d half moon n sometimes d full moon , but it do comes fighting with d thunderstorms or clouds or d sun ... so we should fight with our problems 4 our rights . never give up 4 any right thing
and see sometimes it also hid behind d clouds and let d rain fall .. like u were crying just now letting d deep pain inside ur heart fall .. but see moon fights again , so u should also fight so that happiness come back in ur life like d moon comes back after fighting with thunderstorms ... and see after our fights n efforts d happiness comes , which make us like we shine on clouds.. as d moon shines in between d clouds
taani was listening so carefully understanding each n every word n getting their deep meaning ..
she was shocked .. at first , she has never listen a boy saying so deeply and also so good n kind
taani - please i wanna listen that full song , pls ... aage sunao na ...
rey continues singing

dekho na daag to uss chaand par bhi hai ,
par isse band vo chamakna nahi karta ...
aur phir vo chamakta hai ,
aur sabko andheri raaton main
chaandni deta hai ..
aur kaali raaton main sabko vo raasta dikhlata hai ...
ek ajeeb baat uss chaand ki ye bhi to hai ki
chalta hai vo har kadam par , hamare sang sang ,
jaise chalta ho , vo khuda hamare sang sang
rehta hai chanda sang hamare , rehta hai chanda sang hamare ~ har pal, chahe aaj ho yaa kal ,
par subah hone par vo chanda , chup jata hai sooraj ke ujaale main
jaise hamara khuda chupa ho hamare chote se dil main
haa chote se dil main

taani was listening his voice full to mesmerized as if his voice was going inside her heart and washing away its pains
rey - tumhe pata hai , iska matlab kya hai ??????
taani - kya ?????
rey- yahi ki chahe koi bhi dukh dard kyun na ho hamein muskurana nahi chodna chahiye .. dekho jaise vo chaand daag hone ke baavjood bhi chamakna nahi chodta and dekho to zara usse kitna pyaara lagta hai vo ... aur tumhe pata hai , jab bhi jahan bhi hum jaate hain ,. vo hamare saath chalta hai ..jaise ki vo jo hamare rab ji hain vo hamare saath chal rahein ho , hamein dekh rahe ho , muskura rahe ho , aur sometimes he is with us but we cant see him as he has hidden himself in our little heart like d moon hid it inside d sunlight ... but god is always with us watching us all throughout
taani (nods in a yes ) - ya u r right , vaise itni acchhi baatein kaise kar lete ho tum , maine aaj tak kisi boy ko itni sensible aur itni pyaari baatein karte nahi dekha
rey (with a little smile on his face ) - ye taareef thi yaa burai ????
taani smiles a little and say - taareef janab ,
rey (bows a little ) - thank u , thank u ,..
taani - u deserve it dear ,
rey - dear whattt me tumhe bhaalu lagta hun .. just joking , i know its meaning in english ... so chill ...
taani smiles more hearing that
u r quite funny ,
rey - ahun , i m not funny , but u r very pure , tumhe pata hai , pata nahi kyun i m loving talking 2 u 😳
(taani looks down due 2 shyness )
rey - pata hai kyun kyunki pehli baar kisine meri aawaz itne dhyan se , bina ande tamatar maare suni hai ..😆😆
taani - whattt , tumhari voice itni bhi buri nahi hai , infact , u have a wonderful voice i must say😳
rey - thanks again .. 😛 😃
taani - thanks to mujhe tumhe bolna chahiye , meri jaan bachane ke liye , varna main na jaane kya kar bethti
rey - agar main tumhari jaan nahi bachata to rab ji kisi aur ko bhej dete tumhari jaise itni pyaari ladki ki jaan bachane ke liye ..
taani - but still thank u so much ...
rey - pls ab ye thanks bolna band karo , friendship main no sorry no thanks 😉
taani - ok as friendship ki hai
(but rey completes 😆) rey - to nibhani to pedegi
taani - rey i m hungry ,do u have something 2 eat?????
rey - bhookh to mujhe bhi bahut lagi hai par mere pas khane ko kuch hai nahi aur yahan hamein kuch milega nahi ... but wait let me go n check
(there was jungle all around )
he was about 2 go but taani holds his arm
taani - 😒 rey pls dont leave me alone na 😳
rey- hey main bas yahin paas main jaa ke dekh ke aata hun , chill , no fear no tear when i m here finally taani agrees - ok
and he goes from there ,but taani was feeling scared
[ dont know from where n how but those bloody rapists came drunken with a big knife , as they kill d victim girl after raping her ,( they have did this 2 so many girls), but somehow taani manages 2 run away when they slept drinking after raping her thinking her unconscious as they hit a pipe on taani's head but after sometime taani gains consciousness when all those 4 bloody rapists were sleeping after raping her ..and she ran away from there ... those rapists were already searching her so that she may not file any complaint against them in police station , and now they found her talking 2 rey . but finding d correct chance 2 kill her and so as rey go they came behind her ]

taani was sensing danger and some people behind her , she was sweating terribly ... and so she immediately tries 2 open d door and run away but they 4 surround that open jeep laughing disgustingly .
boy 1 (touching her cheeks ) - kal jo huaa vo bhool gayi , aur uske baad bhi teri itnii himmat ki vahan se bhaag aayi ,
boy 2- aarree abhi hum chaaron ko puraa maza to lene deti ...
taani was screaming - REEYYY , REEYYY , REYYY
---- end of this update -----
friends pls do like n comment from heart 4 me n my hardwork , trust me ur comments really means a lot 2 me , this time i m giving ur fav story so i want more n more comments n loads of likes also k , plss😛😛
otherwise i m not gonna update ,even if i write it , so u all pls pls hit like and do comments , lots of love ... moni tc keep smiling always 😊
Edited by chinudolly - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#98
res
unres
moni...
it was seriously an inspirational update...
the song was ossom...
rey's words seriously will change any1's mind!
or i shud say ur words???
and me jitna bolu utna kam hai yeh update k baare me...
i am truely speechless,
rey taani ko bacha lega na?
pls mujhe darr laging!
update soon!
and sorry 4 small comment...
no time aaj kal!
love u!!!!
Edited by hima_taarey - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#99
res/unres
yipee me second...
woah wat a cute update
loved Taarey conversation...
they were soo adorable😳 loved the way u show their character...
are koi aise stage mein bhi finish karta hai😕...
ab taani k saath kya hoga😭...koi usse baacho...😊
plz update soon and pm me
and yes ur a great writer...👏
loved the update
it was awesome...
Edited by QTPie99 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Haww!! I hav nothing to say!! Bt aap plss jaldi update karna!!

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