Alright, so I know that I promised you a detailed comment for the hundreth time but failed at fulfilling that notion. But here I am with a detailed comment on this piece. Of course, when I say detailed comment, I don't mean that detailed because you know how bad I am with words. Alright, so here it is:
First of all, the title was perfect (I have a feeling that you just picked one and went with it like always but still lol). I really liked it, because even if it covered the whole story, it still was a mystery until we read it. I really liked the whole story. I loved the progression. I loved how it didn't seem rushed. You took your time and explained everything. I liked how this story had a very different perspective than other stories you have written. First of, it was lighter. It had emotions and everything and it was definitely relatable but it wouldn't make you weep in agony. I liked that too. This doesn't mean that I don't like your other stories. I am just saying that you proved your versitality with this piece. It was nice.
I felt so sorry for Sharon though. But it was really nice seeing the other side of Swayam. Their fights were adorable and reminded me of school where a guy bothers and messes with a girl to get a rise out of her because he likes her. You know, in this story, Sharon may have been craving for his attention. But I think that it was the same with Swayam. He wanted her attention too. That's why, he bothered her so much so she would give it to him.
I also liked the end a lot. It was truly magical! It was like reality and fairy tale molded in one.
Amazing OS!! I am truly looking forward to more and I am super sorry for replying in details after so long!
Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi 2
Arjun
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