new fiction amna's entry

maine ek story likhne ki oshish ki hai========
alekh in canteen.smiling to himself then there comesnaina huda ali pooja ud=
huda=oye bahi dooston kya khanna hai aaj
bittu==cake
ud==yeh wine shop pastry shop kab se ban gayi
bittu==
aaj mera aur meri didi ka birthday hai
everyone shocked, they wish him then comes bc
BC==tumhare birthday par koi tumhare liye koi gift laaya hai chalkar dekh lo
bittu aur baaki log confuse hote.vo BC KE PEECHE ek kamare mein. there a gift was lying. bittu opens it.there is a old watch which has stopped.on seeing it there r no of tears in bittu's eyes.he looks at BC with qoestioning eyes

BCreplies vo zinda hai.yeh tumhara gift hai ek aacha cadet banane ke liye

then fromback comes a viose,"alekh"

bittu sees behind there stands amna bittu's sis.bittu uns and hugs her,saying,"mere saath aisa kyun kiya mein apse baat nahin karoonga.everyone ther including BC cries

next cene of KMA canteen where there is a birthday party of bittu and amna bittu is very very very happy

nexr scene in BC'S room bittu,amna,suri ji,huda,naina,pooja,ud,ali,raj,ritu,shalini,simran r present

alekh begins his story==============

ma paise kamati thi baap sharabi tha .jab ma bimar haye apun ne pehli baar chori ki.di ko pata chal gya vo apun se bahut gussa hui. ma ke kehne par mein di ko bahar le gaya. jab hum lote o ma ki halat bahut kharab thi. vo apun se yeh vaada le kar gayi ke apun di ka khayal rakhe.

ma ke jaane ke baad baap di ko pareshan karne laga .ek din jab mein aur di ek pahadhi par gaye to baap vahan aa gay. di ko gusse hone laga unhe marne laga .apun ko gusa aagaya apne baap par hi hath utha diya.usne apni revolver nikal kar di ko shoot kiya aur phir mudje.di ko hill se neeche girte dekha tha apun ko jabtak hosh tha apun ne apun ke baap ko mar diya phi mein bhi faint ho gaya

FIRST BREAK

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