'Tujhe paake adhoora na raha' new luv story

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Tujhe paake adhoora na raha
Its cute romantic love story ..😳
There will be few parts of ETF bcz m a romantic person sirf pyar ke maamle solve karne aate hi,, crime n khoon kharabe ke nahi šŸ˜†
So 1st thing is introduction

Rawte Mansion
Mukesh rawte(Dadu):business tycoon n one of the richest man in delhi,,very sweet n humble
Suryakant Rawte(dad): bigda ayyash rude selfish guy
Madhura Rawte(mom/dead): she was the life of rawte mansion par ek haadse main margayi :( iske baare baad main baat karenge
aCP arjun Suryakant rawte:) : the most Handsome charming guy,,lovely person but mom ki death ke baad kafi kuch badal gaya n the most important information about arjun he is (single ready to mingle) ;)
Anjali rawte shah :arjuns sister sweet cute girl marreid n lives in US
Avni rawte rathore ,arjuns sister ,,sameer damsingh rathores wife
ashlesha(ash) rawte,,arjuns aunt,,not married a fashion designer n she is very close to Arjun somtimes more than his sisters
Sheena rawte,,Arjuns step mom,,a Daayan
Ansh rawte:arjuns step brother:bloody kamina X( hates arjun like hell
Rajat rawte:arjuns step brother he loves arjun so much cute funny adorable handsome boy,,
Lavanya rawte:arjuns ster is sweet adorable shy girl she loves her bro arjun so much but she never show because of her mom
...
Bajaj Mansion
Mahesh bajaj ,,business tycoon n mukesh rawtes business partnes and best friends sweet soft sensitive peron but he has very strong personality
Mira bajaj,,maheshs wife,,adorable housewife sweet but sometimes she really gets very hyper without any reaon hehe
Shanaya/bebo bajaj ;).. Sweet adorable very beautiful shy innocent girl :) n she is the youngest in her family
Manav bajaj ,,bebos eldest brother
Janvi,,bebos eldest sister married
Rima bajaj,,bebos sis married
Harshad bajaj,,bebos bro n her best friend
...
And ETF team :)
Shree ,, chotu,,ayesha ,, sameer rathore
Yuvraj rathore,,sameer n avnis son
...
At rawte mansion
Ash,,god arjun kitne dino ke baad tumhari shakal dekhne ko mili hai jabse ETF join kiya hai tum to ghayab hi hogaye,,pehle canada bhaag gaye n yaha ayye to ETF main saara din rehte ho ,,arrey bhai tumhari apni family hai kabhi to aake dekh lo kya horaha hai tumhare aas paas par tum to
Arjun staring at her
Ash,,ab ghoor kya rahe ho
Arjun,,bua aap ek saans main kaise itna bolti hai mujhe bhi sikhao main itna boloo to mera to dum hi nikal jayega
Ash ..Arjunnn topic change mat karo
Dadu,,arrey bhai kis baat pe jhagda horaha hai
Ash,,papa aap hi samjhao isse kitne dino ke baad aaya hai ghar
Dadu,,arrey bhai kaam main busy hoga yeh ghar pe beth gaya to phir criminals ke to maze hai
Arjun,,exactly
Ash,,papa aap na ha,esha iski side lete ho
Dadu,,uffo ab jhagda band karo aur jao jake packing karo
Ash,,haan jarahi hoon
Arjun,,packing?
Dadu,,haan arjun woh lucknow jarahe hai woh mr,kapoor ne bolaya tha unki bete ki 4th wedding anniversary hai to
Arjun,,dadu main nahi jaonga
Dadu,arrey beta ek din ke liye hi sahi mr.kapoor hamare bohut purane jaanne wale hai n har saal hum logo se khaas milne aate hai hume to jaana hi hoga n tumhare liye special invitation bhi aaya hai
Arjun ,,,aaah ok par sirf ek din ke liye
Dadu,,yeh hui na baat you are my good boy
Arjun smille,,tareef khatam hogayi to main chaloo
Dadu,,haan haan timese pohoch jaana kal theek 9 baje nikal na hai
Arjun ,,ok dadu good night
Dadu,,good night beta
...
Manav,,dad hum log nahi jaayenge,,itna sab hone ke baad jaake wish kare unhe!
Mr,bajaj,,manav samajh ne ki khaushish karo mujhe bhi shauq nahi hai unko shakal dekhna ka par yeh mat bhoolo tumhari behen uss ghar ki bahu hai n apni behen ki khaatir to chalsakte ho
Manav,,dad mera bas chalta to ussi waqt usse ghar leyata par najane woh kya soch rahi hai kya karrahi hai waapas kyun nahi aana chahti
Mira,,woh apni shaadi bachane ki kaushish karrahi hai manav rishta todna uske liye itna asaan nahi hai
Manav,,par mom
Mira,,manav tumhari behn kuch ghalat nahi karrahi n hum log waha jayenge plz tum ya harshad waha hoi tamasha mat karna apni behn ke khaatir chup rehna
Manav,,theek hai mom main chaloonga
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Next day the flight is ready to takeoff
Ash ,,oh god oh God
Arjun,,ouch bua kya karrahi ho itni zor se haath kyun pakda hai kahi bhaag thodi raha hoon main
Ash,,tum nahi bhaag rahe i know par jab plane takeoof karta hai mujhe darr lagta hai n she noticed arjuns band
Ash,,Arjun ek baat poocho
Arjun,,haan poocho
Ash,,main hamesha se dekhti hoon tum yeh band apne haath main pehne rehte ho koi special band hai kya
Arjun looked at his band n smiled,,bohut special
Ash,,kisne diya dekhna se kissi ladki ka lagta hai
Arjun looked at her,,yeh ek ladki ka hi band hai
Ash,,OMG,,ladki aur tum! Batao na kiska hai plz
Arjun,,bebo ka
Ash,,bebo? Omg u mean shanaya bajaj
Arjun,,haan
Ash,,woh tumko kaha mili aaj kal kaha hai woh?
Arjun,,pata nahi aakhri baar usse 5saal pehle dekha tha,,n tabse main badal gaya

*flashback*
five years ago
Bebo,,haan dad main rawte mansion ke saamne hoon ab aap phone rakhiye
Ting tong
Shambu dada (caretaker) ,,arrey bitya tum yaha
Bebo,,haan shambu dada woh actually yaha guzar rahi thi to papa ko dadu ki ek file chahiye the bas eahi lene aayi hoon
Shambu..par bitya bade saahab tu nahi hai ghar pe koi nahi bad woh,,
Bebo,,ohh Its ok main khud leloongi
Shambu,, therk hai bitya mujhe geustroom main kuch aam hai tum jao tu darwaza band kardena
Bebo,,ok dada she went upstairs n opened the door,,oh yeh lo thank God yeh file to saamne hi hai she took the file n went downstairs n she heard some scary noises from the storeroom,,
Bebo,,yeh awaaz kaisi? Shambu dada,,shambu dada
No answer
Oh God yeh to koi chillane ki awaz lagti hai,,she went closer n was shivering she opnend the door:hate rabba kitna andhera hai n suddenly she saw a long black shade
Bebo,,aaa aaa bhooot bhooot bhooot bachaaao
He came closer,,
Bebo,,dooor hatooo maine kuch nahi kiya bachao bhooot
He covered her mouth,,shhh chup!!!
He turned on the light n saw her beautiful black eyes he was still covering her mouth with his hand ,,he was lost ,,bebo? He romeved his hand
Bebo,,arjun! Omg kitne saal baad dikhe ho ,,hmmm not bad mr.rawte kaafi fit hogaye hai warna bachpan main kaise golu molu the bilkul aate ki bauri jaise hahahaha,, n aap kaha the kya karrahe the mujhe to bhool hi gaye aur yeh baal itne chote chote karliye warna to shahrukh jaisi zulfe leke ghoomte the police force join kar liya kya ab chup kyun khade hai boliye naaa
Arjun smiled,,tum chup ho to main kuch boloo
Bebo,,ok baba chup hoayi ab boliye..
Arjun,,tumhara guess sahi tha
Bebo ,,heee kya sach main policewala banenge?
Arjun,,baahar chalke baat kare storeroom se nikal ke
Bebo,,ok
Arjun,,oohhh shit yeh darwaza to jam hogaya
Bebo,,kyaaa ab hum baahar kaise jaayenge
Arjun,,apna phone do
Bebo,,phone to bahar hai,,
Arjun ufffo,,shambu dada,,shambu dadaaa
Bebo..shambo dafa to guestroom main hai baahar
Arjun,,God ab yahi bethna padega jab tak ke koi aye nahi ufff
Bebo,,chalo ab jab yaha qaid ogaye hai to time paas to karna padega chaliye baatien karte hai
Arjun,,tum nahi badli bachpan se ek number ki chatterbox ho
Bebo,,woh to main hoon,,ek baat pooch sakti hoon arjun
Arjun,,haan poocho wise bhi na kahoonga to phir bhi pooch lo gi,,bolo
Bebo..kya aap sach main police...?
Arjun,,haan
Bebo,,Par ap to singer bana chahte the
Arjun,,banna chahta tha par nahi banpaya ab har baar waisa to nahi hota jaise hum chahte hai
Bebo,,aap ghussa kyun horahe hai?
Arjun,,woh sorry main bas aise hi tum pe
Bebo,,arjun aap bohut badal gaye hai,,uss din ke baad se aap bilkul badal gaye
Arjun,,uss haadse ne mujhe zinda laash banadiya ,,mom ke jaane ke baad se sirf saanse le raha hoon jeene ka mann nahi karta mera
Bebo,,aapko jeena hoga Arjun main janti hoon jo hua woh bhool nahi salte par aapko jeena hoga apne liye na sahi apni mom ke liye,, aap jaante hai arjun aapki mom aapko har aapke saath hai,,aapko aise dekh ke woh bohut dukhi hoti hongi,, aap to hamesha unki khushiyon ke liye jeete the phir aaj aap hi dard de rahe hai?
Arjun,,badi hoke philosopher bamgayi ho
Bebo,,arjun ek to main achchi achchi baatien karke aapko behla rahi hoon aur asp hai ke
Arjun,,achcha baba meri chodo tum batao tumhara future plan kya hai
Bebo loves this topic she was damn excited lol she jumped from her place n went closer to him main na shaadi karke ek housewife banoogi
Arjun shocked,,to yeh tumhari future ka plan hai,,
Bebo,,haaan par kaafi achcha hai main na love marriage karoongi ek aise ladke se shaadi karoongi jo mujhe apni jaan se bhi zyada pyar kare jo har pal mere liye jiye jo meri ek smile ke liye apni jaan tak dene ko tayyar hojaye ,, n main bhi usse utna hi pyar karoongi,, main subah subah usse good morining kiss deke jagaongi n chai doongi n kahoongi chai peeke tayyar hojayye warna der hojayegi ek achchi si smile ke saath unhe bye boloongi n unke liye khana banaogi unki sewa karoongi ek typical housewife n mere na zyada bachche nahi honge bas 6 ya 7
Arjun,, bas 6-7 ! Itne kam bachche bebo?
Bebo,,haan isse zyada nahi sanhaal sakti n she contiued her blabbering
Arjun smiled,,God abhi bhi kitna bachpana hai tum main bebo,Ab bhi sapno ki duniya main jeeti ho ,he thought
N suddenly,,oh arjun dekhiye guitar!yeh to aapka hai
Arjun,,haan mera hai
Bebo,,chaliye ek achcha sa gaana sunayye
Arjun,,what?
Bebo,,haan gaana
Arjun,,maine gaana chod diya bebo
Bebo,,aise kaise ,,aapko gaana hoga
Shambu dada,,bebo bitya
Arjun,,thank God
Shambu opened the door,,arjun tum ghar main the!
Tring tring
Shambu,,main phone dekhta hoon
Bebo,,theek hai arjun main chalti hoon late horaha hai,,phir milne aongi
Arjun,,main kal ja raha hoon bebo
Bebo,,kal par kyun
Arjun,,sirf ek din ki chutti mili thi main jara ha hoon
Bebo ,,wapas kab aayenge
Arjun,,bohut jaldi aaonga ,,chalo main tumhe gate tak drop katdeta hoon
Bebo,,ok Arjun main chalti she was about to leave when he stopped her
Arjun,,bebo
Beo,,haan arjun
Arjun,,thank you so much
Bebo,,kis liye
Arjun,,mere dil main phir se jeene ki umeed jaga ne ke liye,,aaj bohut saal baad kissi se bast karke achcha feel karraha hoon,,thank you so much..tumne aaj phir proof kardiya ke tum aaj bhi meri best friend ho,, tab bhi tum mere saath thi n aaj bhi
Bebo..dosti kari hai nibhane to padegi,,par apko mujhse promise karna hoga,,ke aaj ke baad aap kabhi apni mom ko yaad karke sad nahi hoyenge samjhe ya samjhaon
Arjun smiled,,nahi meri maa bohut samjha liya aaj ke liye itna kaafi tha
Bebo,,apne khayal rakhiyega
Arjun,,tum bhi,,bye bebo
Bebo,,bye arjun
After she left
Arjun was so confused,,yeh kya horaha hai mere saath itni ajeeb si feeling aarahi hai kyun mujhe is baar waapas jana itna bura lagraha hai,,he went inside n saw her band on the floor he smiled,,pagli har jagah kuch na kuch chod jati hai he took the band n put it in his wrist
*flashback ends*

ash,,awww to yeh baat hai,,arjun kya tum usse?
Arjun,,nooo bua main usse pyar nahi karta
Ash,,maine to pyar ka naam bhi nahi liya ,,u love her Arjun i knowww
Arjun,,nahiii bua aisa kuch nahi ai
Ash,,therk hai mujhse jhoot bolna hai o bolo par apne aap se na bolo,,ab chalo flight land horahi hai
,,,,,,,,,,,,,
At kapoor mansion
Mr,kapoor,,mr rawte aap apni beti ke saath aaye bohut achcha lafga n arjun ko laaye woh to aur bhi zyada achcha laga
Aditya kapoor mr,kapoors son
Dadu,,happy anniversary beta
Adi,,thank u uncle
Arjun,,happy anniversary aditya
Adi,,thnks buddy
Ash,,tumhari wife kaha hai bohut tareef suni hai uski ke bohut khubsoorat hai zara hum bhi to dekhe
Aditya,,oh yes,,shanaya come here
Dadu ash Arjun were shoked
Arjun,,nahi isa nahi hosakta yeh meri bebo nahi hai,,she was his bebo,,but she looked totally different
Arjun,,kya hua hai isse itna udaas chehra kyun uski aankhon main wahi dard hai jo meri aankhon main hua karta tha aisa kya hogaya ,,mujhe jaana hoga,,he thought
Bebo went closer n saw dadu ash n arjun
Adi,,meet my wife shanya
Dadu shocked n confused,,happy anniversary beta
Bebo with fake smile,,thank you
Ash looked at Arjun ,,he looked disturbed
Adi,excuse me main aata hoon
Arjun,,bebo
She looked at him n smiled,,bohut dino baad kissi ne iss naam se pukara
Arjun ,,kaisi ho bebo n tumne bataya nahi ke shaadi karrahi ho
Bebo,,theek hoon Arjun saanse lerahi hoon
Adi,,shanaya yaha aao
She went to her husband
Arjun,,no nooo way aisa nahi hosakta mujhe jeene ki umeed dene wali aaj khud aise nahi tootskti main tumhe kamzor banne nahi doonga bebo,,

Teaser
Bebo crying,,aditya 4saal hogaye hamari shaadi ko aos kab tak chalega kyun mujhse door bhaag te ho aaj tumhe jawab dena hoga
Aditya,,tumhe agar mere saath rehna hai tu aise hi rehna hoga warna dafa hoao yaha se,,
,,,,,,,,,,
Arjun,,bohut dard hai tumhari aankhon main iss muskurahat ke peeche aanso main dekh sakta hoon,,
Tumhari zindagi ka khaalopan tumhari aankhon main dikhta hai
Bebo,,aap mujhe itni achche se kaise samajh lete hai
Arjun,,yeh sawal mat karo bebo kyunki iska jawab nahi hai mere paas
,,,,,,,
Arjun n bebo HUG


Hope you like it
Plz comment this my first story everrr so koi ghalati ho to maaf karo plz
2/3 part will b lil serious but after that romance hi romance😳





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Posted: 12 years ago
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heyy!!
nyc!!
gud effort!!

P.S dnt mind, Arjun ki heroine kaun hai??
No sakshi no riya??
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sumu4JayD

heyy!!
nyc!!
gud effort!!

P.S dnt mind, Arjun ki heroine kaun hai??
No sakshi no riya??



Arjun ki heroine main hoon šŸ˜†
Bebo is me 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice story...
Continue soon...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ketakee

<font color="#990000" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Nice story...
Continue soon...</font>šŸ‘šŸ¼


Thaank u so much dear
Yes 1/2 days n ill send the next part 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: luvyoubarun


Thaank u so much dear
Yes 1/2 days n ill send the next part 😳



No problem...😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Lovely Story Continue soon Dear šŸ‘ šŸ‘šŸ¼
Looking forward to this and I wish Shaleen can read this šŸ˜‰ 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Waooo šŸ‘šŸ‘
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thaaank u sooo much everyone for your lovely commeent
M really srry couldnt reply to eachone of u actually aaj meri sis ka operation hai so lil busy
Dnt worry she fine but she is pregnant so new member ki tayyari

I promise next time ill reply to every comment n yes part 2 in the next post
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