STORY CONTEST : NAARI SPECIAL RESULTS PAGE 13 - Page 15

I really really enjoyed reading all the stories. It was so refreshing for me. I loved all stories thanks to all of you.

First of all very good attempt. Which I couldn't do you did it. You elaborated the scenes well. Some dialogues written are brilliant.. Till middle of story I was liking these elaborated scenes after that it feels like extra elaborated scenes. Now why I am saying this firstly I felt you should have chosen the scenes which you should elaborate and which not. Some scenes I was feeling like they are being repeated after sometime which increased the length of story as well. And reader feels that writer lost grip of story which actually is reader him/herself is also loosing grip over reading. You have to bind reader. Which you were doing very well but some elaborated scenes if have been cut short then story would have been more charm.

I really loved the way team was distributed. There was some confusion points which are already pointed out. I really liked casual conversation between team. 👏

Very nice story. There was no confusion. It was in flow. Very bold act by female cops. Narrated story beautifully. Some of the dialogues were brilliant. Suspense was missing from the story. The eye catcher of story was the bold act by female cops. 👏

Beautifully written story as always. Nice flow. Best part was there was no disconnection it was smooth. You build story beautifully. Female cops did brilliant job. There are always loopholes in story but when story is like this the loopholes become very small compared to overall story. Your story did that. I read this story twice. Not because I was confused because it felt so refreshing to me. 👏👏

I will write my experience over here. Although its of less than 24 hours. On Friday I saw some contest is going on but couldn't figure out its closed or open as stories were already posted. I went through full thread and figured out as Vis is getting stories she is posting it. I PM her to know deadline and it was next day i.e. Saturday. Wow I have 1 full day to write story. Vis offered to wait till I submit story and I asked her to wait for me till evening only and then close it. In past 1 and half years around 3 stories I have deleted. They ended up not even in my recycle bin. I woke up Saturday morning sat and pledged to myself this story is going to make in contest whatever happens I am not going to read it till I submit it. I wrote story in one go and submitted in afternoon. I didn't know what I wrote but somewhere down the line I just want to know could I again create mystery of any sort or not again. Even if one member say that there was mystery in some part of my story that means I have achieved it. ( One thing I haven't read my story yet.)

Another great story or can say another bold story. Loved the dialogue or can say learning and 'Cheque de' dialogue. CID team was always there for female cops (mainly Abhijeet was there for Poorvi as Shreya's role was very less). Narration was brilliant I could see happening in front of my eyes. Climax was brilliant. It was sweet story. 👏

Good attempt. Seem written in very hurry just like me. Nice to see you chose Hockey. There were few dialogue's which I liked. Female cops disguise scene was short as already pointed out by many they were not escorts but I liked there this disguise as well. Even if seemed written in hurry you still build good story. 👏