SORRY!! sorry hazaron sorry!
So after much dilemma and discussion Luna is back. Also warning my words might be yours, S's or TG's..dont feel plagiarised yaara..this is mere inspiration. TFS.
This story is turning out to be one of those, where whenever a new chapter is introduced you want to go back and re-read it all from the beginning. Then the discussion makes me go back a third time. And yet I cannot for the life of me give my two cents to the mystery. For me the pheelz, the character buildup, the relationship changes..are way too distracting dammit! I am all for the now. The slow revelations make it so much more of a fulfilling experience, with a million Eureka moments when I go back and re-read it all. I love the pace of this story..its logical and progressive, with the correct amount of suspense which never leaves me confused, just attached to the story hook, line and sinker.
Chapter 1 was freaking amazing. Chapter 2 was even more freaking amazing...heer is another random luna(tics) list as to why:
1. Its always been the way hasn't it, when K confronts A about something, and he more or less runs away from it. Many a times that has seemed so un-justified and so weak of ASR's character, but I think the whole nafrat thing you are going with gives me the pheelz that for once there is a legit reason he keeps running away, I love how you showed that in the beginning.
2. I love the fiery KKG's you have always given, but this one is even more special, like I said more mature..more worldly. May it be admonishing him for his unprofessional behaviour or sticking up for her beliefs religious or fashion wale.
3. Vulnerability. due to his past...? I have a total soft corner and irrational wala heart pounding for a vulnerable ASR. Cannot wait. Waise even the eye wala looking is quite different here, its not quite rabba-veyish, more practical I think, more real? (ps. although I do love your version of the eye sax to infinity and beyond) Am I making any sense..?
4. THANK YOU! For making him object to "chote" seriously he was way too much of an ASR for that shizzle. And even a grown man like Arnav doesn't deserve that, bas. Unless ofcourse *jumps in the gutter*
5. Ok so there are very Arnav's I like from the beginning, and I do like this one. I like that he did come back for his family when they needed him but at the same time he is selfish/self-made person. The way you handle both his sides is phenomenal and by means not an easy task, I know he might have to take tough decisions in the future pertaining to nani's "mujhe pota-poti de do beta, aur apne liye ek house wife le lo!" haha kidding kidding.
6. Again A.R. makes so much sense, a perfect escape from the stifling atmosphere. You know as much as he suits the neta role, I think this is what he really wants to do..his calling. I dont think he will be able to give it up easily, in the end (today's convo ya?)
7. Sheetal seems nice enough, it is only natural to crush and care about someone as magnetic as ASR who can blame her. She doesn't sound super clingy or chasing him endlessly types, because they do seem to share a great professional relationship?
8. JUJU IS BACK -
She was definitely not an opinionated spitfire who dressed in muted sarees and never accepted her mistakes...
9. I like the subtle way you are describing things in this one..khushi's feelings. There is a 500things going on under the surface, I am not sure if she feels guilty yet, because what was with the questioning look in her eyes in the beginning, but she sure doesnt NAFRAT Arnav, yet.
10. I love that La and NK are already shipped. bas.
11. La and K are midnight calls wale buddies..not the same as 2am calls but yeh bhi chalega. I really do like La's understanding wali advice there are a lot of things on line for K, the new life she has built for her after that 10year old incident. But at the same time K's "We can't keep it from him forever, La. And I feel guilty about asking you to keep secrets from your own husband..." This is something TG once said to me, and it really stuck out! The conversations as usual are well thought out, rational and show all sides of the coin.
12. I really love your take on ASR the businessman to Netaji transition. Nailed It. His coming early to the office, his need to take action rather than just be a name head, his need to succeed in what he was doing..typical.
13. Sheesh mahal has HAPPY memories. oh the irony.
14. I think this was by far my favouritest God related scene in your stories, when Arnav enters K's cabin and finds her praying. That was a genius idea J!! I wonder if along with surnames, and changing names, and political backgrounds...religion will play a part in this. Or is it the same old case of belief vs non belief? Regardless you always do take a fresh perspective on that, I mean you brought in the Indian Constitution and all :P
15. I like this new way of changing feeling dynamics, without any rabba-veys or eye sax, just plain old introspection. It feels like you consciously want me to get something out of this more than a SKD haha. Now A's thoughts about getting adrenaline wali feelings with verbal combats with K makes me doubt my point 6 about him wanting to go back for AR.
16. The politics..are you sure you dont know much? As usual you go your Juju way of doing things..logically, almost see a ff-real life reflection in K and J yaaara! LOL. I cannot freaking way to see how they, if they, manage to bring about some change. This gives me such a kick!
17. From firing to assurance. I think it made complete freaking sense. You always have the tendency to change things up, but not abruptly and not just cause you want to or have to move to the next phase of their relationship.
18. I love the way he described her, what all of us have been saying all along. I think if rabba-vey does happen it will be on the merit of these things. I dont know if one of those happened in the past, because as she said this was the first time he smiled at her..ever! I
19. The nightmare and waking up from it well done, but no comments from me LOL.
The more I read this story, I feel like you have reallly PLANNED it all to the D. Maybe you should give me a few planning lessons in your free time, no gutterz wonly professional talk ya?
So now what now mila paaye kabhi dono?
Luna
ps. ah I tried to stay away from guessing but its hard..
Edited by LooneyLuna - 12 years ago
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