||The Devil's Keep|| Updating ...

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey guys,

I have been having this idea from a long time but i was hesitant to post it. I was sort of unsure as to how it would come out.

But having some great encouragement from Annesha di and Hina and a few really good reviews from Shahi di and Prankz i am trying my hand at it !

There have been quite a number of people encouraging me ... 😆


Prologue

Her profound gaze pierced his soul threatening to tatter him into pieces. He

stared back into her eyes and was left staggered for a moment.

She trusted him.

His heart beats rose placidly as he realized this.

His insides clenched with a fear he had never known existed within him.

Looking straight in her eyes, crushing his rising conscience, he masked his

face and the cold smirk was back and so was the devil.

"Goodbye Princess!" he said emotionlessly and winked as he pulled off the

trigger.

She cried out as the bullet pierced her abdomen and toppled over her

knees and rolled on to the ground.

She stared at him as if searching for something but all she saw was the

smirk plastered on his face.

Why ? Why had he broken her trust, the faith she had in him ?

Her eyes started turning heavy as she let herself embrace the darkness.



How was it ? Good or bad ?

Do tell me if it is worth continuing !

Waiting for your reviews !




Vidhi


P.S. Shahi di this one was for you otherwise i was about to post it on Sunday !


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Prologue : Page 1 (Above)

Chapter 1 : Page 8

Chapter 2 : Page 15

Chapter 3 : Page 19

Chapter 4 & 5 : Page 23

Chapter 6 : Page 30

Chapter 7 : Page 35

Chapter 8 : Page 44

Chapter 9 : Page 48

Edited by catty2000 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Just mention it in your comment and i can send you a buddy request !

Edited by catty2000 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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😆 I thought you'd post it on Sunday, but glad that you did it now.
The concept sounds new and unique to me.
Though it was rather confusing, it's a masterpiece.
Loved the story's name and hoping to read more.🤗
Edited by -DEATHmusic- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow that was mindblowing Vidhi😛
really very good..please continue with this FF
im really eager to read more😃
thanks for PM😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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AWW CHOTI, SO GLAD YOU POSTED IT, JUST FOR ME... HUGS🤗
'NEVER HESITATE OR BE AFRAID TO TRY OUT SOMETHING NEW... IF ITS ON YOUR MIND JUST LET IT OUT'
😆 🤣 THATS MY OWN QUOTE BY THE WAY...
BUT SERIOUSLY CHOTI, ITS AWESOME AND VERY PROMISING. THE TITLE ITSELF IS SO CATCHY...
PROLOGUE LEAVES SO MANY QUESTIONS WHICH GIVES US SOMETHING TO LOOK FORWARD TO. UDAY THE COLD KILLER SHOOTING HIS PRINCESS...DEFINITELY A STORY THERE.. 😉
LOOKING FORWARD TO IT AND WAY TO GO FOR TRYING OUT SOMETHING NEW...
HUGS AND LOTSA LOVE
🤗
Edited by Shahista01 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey nice prologue
i think its uday who shoots manyata
pls pm me and continue soon
sry me like button is not working
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome work dear!!
as i told u its awesome and it surely will catch awesome response!
will giv nice cumnt later, tomorw
continue soon, i am too eager to know ahead
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awsssmmm prolougeee i think uday shoot manyata but Y
continuee soon and do PM me
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Posted: 12 years ago
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vidhi 🤗 that was amazing. congrats on your first ever manveer ff

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