Dohraha: Tale of Crossroads:Update&Note Pg 22 6/9 - Page 17

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Posted: 12 years ago
superb jenny
i like the part abt armaan's and khanak outing
hmm he was not able to join her for dinner but i guess it compensates he took early evening off hmmm it would have been better if he had informed her earlier
but at least she enjoyed the outing as she blvs... zyada acha hota hot chocolates ki jaga starbucks coffee hoti ;)

the textual conversation were good and cute... especially the part tthe 5th one is adorable
hope they will have more adorable picks including trio at the lights festival

i wonder how raina had a gr8 day and lukin fwd to the festivals and funs
it was lovely
update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
A vry different characters frm Rbo...Matured n responsible...beautiful UPdate JENNY...-saroj
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Posted: 12 years ago
I still wonder what is going between Sachdev n Malik couple?
They r still a mystery.. Shaan-Raina & Armaan-Khanak...
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Posted: 12 years ago


Drive, Lights, and an Imprinted Cap

Her impatient eyes could no longer wait for the decorative round wall clock in the living room to struck 4:00 PM. Her meetings and weekly submissions at the pre-school wrapped up earlier than she had expected so she had taken a cab back to the penthouse and decided to change into something more dressy…she had no pressing reasons to do so yet she still did and stepped out of the huge walk in closet with a Michael Kros faux-wrap dress in emerald green accessorized with James Avery's semi precious studs and locket.

Her phone buzzed by the ottoman… The text read "Leaving home with Dari…will be there in twenty…"

She acknowledged the msg with a simple "Okay…" and left the penthouse after bundling up in her over coat, boots, and scarf. She had tried again to get a hold of Armaan once she was inside the cab but once again got his voicemail. She had told him about her plans last night when he had been working and asked her to fetch him his drink. He had given her the most casual reply, didn't bother with her reasoning and simply wished her a good time before he switched topics.

……………………..

It was Darya's day to be the most excited little girl and her daddy did everything to encourage her excitement. Her favorite outfit, matching hair accessories, down to her shoes and back pack filled with her favorite snacks. She had been singing along her favorite tunes with Shaantanu on their drive over to pick up Ms. K.

Shaantanu couldn't remember the last time he had tapped his fingers on the steering wheel to the sound of music or some pop rock rhymes his Munchkin had insisted to put on. Raina had been in haste this morning but had left everything aside for good thirty minutes to tend to Darya during breakfast. Shaantanu felt a bit satisfied with her behavior and even teamed up with her when she tried to explain her professional reasons for not being able to come along for the Light Show.

"Daddy...shzz huere…sheez here…!"

"You see her…?"

"In the cab Daddy…" Darya pointed through the closed window as Shaantanu had been looking the other way towards the preschool gates. He thinks back to her text about being in school.

"Mishh. K!" Darya is first to greet her teacher as she had insisted on getting off with Shaantanu.

"Hey there Princess in pink…!" Khanak bends herself down to Darya's level and high-fives her tiny little mitten covered hands.

"Dari luuvzz PINK…!"

"Hmm…jaanti hoon…" She says glancing up at Shaantanu Sachdev's figure by the front passenger side door to the black Lexus. It's the first time she is seeing him in casual apparel, but even then he is sharply groomed.

"Hey…"

"Hi…sorry, voh main…actually, things wrapped up earlier than I had expected at school today, so I went home…app ko wait toh…"

"Nahi…we just got here too..." He assured her and felt assured himself at her clarification as well. They exchange polite smiles as he held the door open for her and then made sure Dari is tucked properly in her booster seat at the back.

Their drive to Hamburg, NY for the annual Fairgrounds Festival of Lights is estimated by the GPS system as a 40 minute drive and they make it out to the Brooklyn Bridge in the first five which is when Dari's pop rock CD starts to give trouble by being stuck.

"Daddy songs…??"

"Hold on a minute Munchkin…traffic se nikal jaaye phir…"

"Mish K can you fixsh it…?"

"Dari...i'll…"

"It's okay, app mujhe bata de…" She insisted turning her neck to face him while he kept his eyes ahead on the road.

His hands move to pull his iPhone out of the compartment on the driver's side door and he hands it to her over a momentarily glance.

"Search out the song on Pandora App and plug it in on the dock please…"

She follows through on his instructions, confirming the song choice with the little one in the back before pulling herself forward to place his iPhone on the dock. Her hands fumble to adjust it and his right reaches out to help…a reflexive gesture, but more…her fingers slip through his…

"Thaankk Youuu!" Darya's gratitude in exclamation brings her back and she turns with an acknowledging smile to mouth "you're welcome" to her.

The rest of the drive goes smoothly with Khanak and Dari indulging in "I SPY" game and Shaantanu deliberately busting the mystery behind the things that were being "spied" on. The forty something minutes to Hamburg, NY were well spent and the adults could hardly contain themselves from laughing along with Darya on her silly little jokes or cute jingles that the four year old made up on anything and everything that inspired her mind.

The spectacular view of the Fairgrounds Festival of Lights is an annual attraction for families, couples, wanderers, admirers, and anyone else looking to find the spirit of Christmas. The place is glimmering all over in literal terms…the elves…the carolers…the sleighs…and the reindeers...if North Pole really did exists and the scenes from the movie "Polar Express" could be brought out from the screen, then this place would be the canvas for that same magic and delight.

"Waaaooo! It's sooo BIGGG!"

"I told you so…" Shaantanu says pulling up an awestruck, wide-eyed Darya.

"Dari LOVES Daddy!" A smacking kiss on his left cheek is paired with that declaration. Khanak is just a happy bystander, admiring the father-daughter bond like she has many times before.

"Love you more Munchkin…" He says hugging her to him.

Darya is let down on the ground to explore on her own while Shaantanu and Khanak closely follow behind her. Stopping by displays whenever she does, answering questions if they can, and snapping pictures at some special ones. The light Christmas music is adding to the serenity of the atmosphere and the wind chill is just right for bundling up in outerwear like they have.

"Coffee…?" He offers, spotting an espresso cart near them.

"Okay…" She nods accepting his offer politely. They are by the grand Christmas tree which is over 69 feet in height and fully decked with ornaments and lights. Dari is completely awed by the sight in front of her and Khanak picks her up, knowing she'd enjoy the view just a bit more with the boost in her height.

He has no qualms in stepping away momentarily to get the hot beverages. There is a sort of trust he has on Khanak with Dari, something he feels he can count on.

"Here you go…?"

"Thanks…" She says while managing her grip on Dari and getting the Styrofoam cup from his hold.

"I think I better hold till this little spoiled princess gets down…"

"She is just awed, not spoiled…"

"Hmm…how about you…? Bored…?"

"Exactly the opposite…amused…"

They walk and talk, letting Darya interrupt with her point and show every few seconds. She is ecstatic to see Santa Claus taking wishes in the centered set up, not too far from the Christmas tree. Khanak has to let go on foot as she couldn't be contain her excitement and wanted to be the cue of kids waiting for Santa herself.

He puts forth her coffee cup and she takes it out of his hand. Her first sip would've been completed fully if it wasn't for Darya turning and exclaiming "Mish.K..!" out to her. She has to hand it back to him, this time with a light imprint of her peachish-pink lipstick on the cap. He surely won't have any trouble mistaking it as his now.

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Posted: 12 years ago
Important NOTE:

Hey everyone...! I know it's been MONTHS, (i totally deserve all your sneers and yucky looks) I can't apologize because i don't think i'd be deserving of your tolerance and forgiveness for leaving you all hanging here without any explanation from my end. But's that's why i am here today, to simply explain myself.

I had been so excited with this concept when i decided i wanted to write on it. I was superbly inspired and felt this urge to go ahead and attempt it, but the time has just been not with me on this from the get go. I am not a seasoned writer at all, infact it's my first and only long running Fan Fiction, I have to admit that it takes me a lot of time in churning out each and every chapter. The effort that is required to carry the story is over-whelming, there is no room for loose-ends when it comes to continuous tales. I have great appreciation for all the writers so who are able to master that art here on the forum as well as elsewhere. The thing is that i don't know if i'll be able to do this, especially with the schedule that will soon be back with a new semester and internship. It's summer for me right now and i am not completely bound by the clock like i was all semester from Jan to May, but even if i do get a few updates out to you this summer, there won't be a guarantee of an stable schedule as soon as the semester is back in session and i am running wild, trying to meet deadlines and projects. As much as i'd like for this tale to grow and groom me as a writer, i don't think it's fair to any of you to put up with huge gaps in the process. If there are any takers for this story and want to continue from here, i'd oblige and hand it over. I even thought about making it an open-fanfiction, where anyone can continue from the last part, but i don't think that would be much of a appeal for this concept. I am extremely embarrassed to say that i am sorry, as it's really too little of a word for taking your precious time and expectations about this story. Please believe me that this discontinuation is not something i do with a light heart, i am upset myself.

Your take, suggestions, comments, and anger are awaited on this matter.

Thanks for bearing with me for this long.

-jenny
Edited by jenny159 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice update...loved it...
Aww you are discontinuing it??
rather you can end it na?
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Posted: 12 years ago
aww lovely trio had so much fun so good to see them together
r u discontinuing it ?
plzzz dont do this i was looking forward to shanak's romance
how can u do this or if u want end it but itni jaldi end karna bhi not possible bcoz this tale is very different
plzzz tell that u r not discontinuing it plzzz
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Posted: 12 years ago
Babe y dont u just fast forward and end it..
Because i dont think that anyone can write it as beautifully as you did b3cause this is ur story..
so just end it in fast rorward ..
xxx
Edited by aasma1 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Loved it..😊 It was so beautiful..😃 ShaNak went out with Darya and all enjoying like a family..😳 The small small incident like Shaan touching Khanak's hand are so cute and its very natural too..I love how you realistically portray given the complicated relationship all four protagonist share in general..

Looking forward and thanks for writing an amazing update..😊

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