Darmiyan: A cross border Love story - Page 2

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hola Jaren!!! Goodness I loved it! I love your writing and your other FF but this is simply MINDBLOWING!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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loved it
a cross boarder love story huh that would be nice
pls continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey..jerry...nice storyline yr...pls continue...wanna read hw this veer-zaara lovestory grow futher...

pls continue...& do PM me dear...

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Posted: 12 years ago
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loved it...title is catchy...update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Disclaimer: This is not to offend patriotic feelings of any person. Kindly read it just as a story of people from two countries that don't have very good relations. I personally believe in peace and love.

Part 1

"Eee I am so excited. Finally I would be able to see Taj mahal for real."
Zoya exclaimed as she boarded the train to Amritsar with her friends.
"Who knows one of us ends up meeting her Shah Jahan." Sabeen commented in a dramatic fashion.
The five of them settled down in their seats.
"Check your passport and visa again. You wouldn't want to get caught without those documents on Indian soil when you happen to be a Pakistani. No points for guessing what happens to such people on either side of the border. Especially you Zoya. Being an Army Officer's daughter won't be much of a help for you."
Rehan said as he opened his bag to check his own documents before the train started moving.
"Rehan kaali Zaban, Shakal achi nai e to baat to achi kar liya karo. I am so glad there is peace between the two countries. Larai jhagre se kisi ko bhi kuch hasil nai hota."
Zoya replied aghast at his comments.
Rehan: "Lo maine to such baat ki hai. Isme kya hai."
Sabeen: "Stop fighting guys. So what is the plan?"
Ali took out his Ipad and looking at the map replied
" From Amritsar, we will go to Dehli, Dehli to Agra and back."
Zoya: "Why not Lucknow. I would have loved to see the city of my ancestors."
Ali: "Because it's way too far. Hmare budget mai nai e. We already added Agra due to your pestering. And meri behn hmaen thori itne lambe time ke liye visa milne laga e. Peace sahi dosti nai e Pakistan and India mai."
Zoya: "Honi to chahye."
Ali: "Hona to boht kuch chahye jo nai hota."

Asad took hold of the rifle and aimed it. As soon as he fired it his fellow, Capt. Sharad commented.
"Yeh cheez Cheetah. Bull's Eye!"
Asad handed the rifle to him and moved back. Sharad moved forward and took his position before firing at the mock targets in front of them.
"So are you coming to Agra with me?"
"Decide nai kiya abhi. Bari lambi journey o jaye gi. Pehle Agra phr Dehradun."
Asad replied.
Sharad: "Lalay Nitish chore ga nai tujhe. Uski shadi hai. He wants you to be there. Waise tu kab kar ra e."
Asad: "Tu ne knsa kr li e jo mera dimag kha ra e."
Sharad: "Main to ajkal roz nai nai haseenao se milne ke mazay loot ra un. One of the perks of arrange marriage."
Asad: "Hahaha. Sharam kr le. Jaib pe bhari nai parteen ye mulaqatain."
Sharad: "Kameena to main by-birth hoon. Phr ajkal official license mila wa e to avail kiun na kia jae. Tera koi plan nai nazar ara? Kr le lalay is sai pehle ke sir ke baal gir jaen or phr koi bhi na manay tere sath shadi krne ko. You are already twenty six."
Asad: "Kar lunga jab koi esi milay gi. Mere baal salamat hain, tu apni fikr kr."
Sharad: "Ye esi pta nai kesi hai. Pura India ghoom chukka e abhi tak esi nai milli. Foreign se laega? Acha kher I need to leave now. Colonel Saab k darbaar pe hazri deni e. Tyari kr laeen teen din tak nikalna e."

Zoya and her friends had a gala time at both Amritsar and Dehli. Finally they were on their way to Agra. Zoya and Sabeen were really excited to see the Taj Mahal.
Rehan: "Yar tum logon ke enthusiasm ko dekh k to esay lagta e jaisay asal main Shah Jahan se milne ja rae o. Mujhe to samaj nai ata dunya kiun marti e Taj Mahal ke peeche."
Zoya: "Tum chup e raha karo to behtar e. Taj Mahal is an epitome of love."
Rehan: "Apni fazul ki philosophies tum apne pas he rakho."
Zoya: "Tumse baat kon kr raha e."

Asad was getting really irritated with the comments Sharad and Nitish were passing at anything female they saw. They had come to Taj Mahal with Nitish's family on the insistence of his newly married wife. He excused himself from them and decided to move around himself. This piece of architecture had always intrigued him and the fact that someone had got it built in memory of his beloved added to his reasons for liking the place.

She sighed at the beautiful palace in front of her. She had always dreamt of visiting this place once in her life.
Zoya was getting irritated at the slow pace of her friends and the fact that they wanted to click pictures everywhere they went irked her to no end. So she decided to explore one of her favorite places in the whole world by herself.

Zoya was walking lost in her thoughts when her foot got entangled in the strap of a bag lying on the floor. She fell down as result. A few people snickered at her state and moved on. A guy came running and cried
"My bag! Oh my God."
Zoya got up and rubbing her bruised knees replied.
"I am sorry. I didn't see it."
The guy replied
"Sab kuch bahir gir gaya sirf tumhari waja se."
Zoya irked by the guy's arrogance replied
"Oye Hello! Just because I am being nice to you doesn't mean tum mujh pe charhai kr do. Public place pe apna bag zameen pe rakhne ka kya maqsad e."
Seeing her dangerous expressions the guy collected his things quietly and moved away.

"Yahan to Rehan se bhi baray ghaday en. Idiot, Stupid, Moron."
A tall guy was standing in her way rather stiffly. It reminded her of her father. She was still awarding the bag guy with all bad adjectives she could think of. Asad heard someone say "Idiot, Stupid, Moron" behind his back. He turned around to have a look at the source of that voice but was stumped. He had never seen a girl more beautiful than her. May be he had but there never had been a moment like this in his life. He had never felt like this by just looking at any girl. May be she was the one for him for which Sharad always said.
"Usay dekh ke tere dimagh ki ghanti bajay gi."
"Ye to dil dimag sab ki ghanti baj gai yar."
He stopped his train of thoughts and asked her.
"Are you talking to me?"
Zoya got startled for a moment but soon recovered and replied,
"No. There was a guy back there. I fell down due to his bag. Like who the hell places his bag on the floor at a public place? Right?"
Asad: "Err yah."
Zoya: "So what brought you here? I mean what could an Army Officer be possibly doing at a place which is known as lover's heaven."
Asad: "What? How do you'"
Zoya: "How do I know about you being an Army Officer?"
Asad: "Yah."
Zoya: "By the way you were standing and your hair."
Asad: "G?"
Zoya: "Easy dude. I have grown up among Army people. I can tell one among a crowd. Actually my father is an Army Officer."
Asad: "O really? What is his name? May be I know him."
Zoya: "Oh no you don't. My father is in Pakistan Army."
Asad: "Oh so you are from Pakistan?"
Zoya nodded her head in the affirmative.
Asad: "So what brought you here?"
Zoya: "This. I so love the Taj mahal. You still didn't tell me what brought you here?"
Asad: "Oh nothing. My friend recently got married. Came here with his family."
Zoya: "Boring and unromantic! Hey we have been talking for so long and I don't even know your name."
Asad: "It's Asad. Captain Asad Ahmed Khan."
Zoya: "Heavy name dude. I am Zoya."
Rehan called Zoya from the back.
"Zoya! There you are. Itni dafa bell ki tumare phone pe. Banda dekh e leta hai. Ek to roaming pe bell marne ke bhi ache khasay paisay lag jatay en."
Zoya introduced Asad to Rehan. Rehan told her they were leaving for lunch. Zoya bid him goodbye and left.

"So you are telling me Ghanti bajane wali teri baja ke chali gayi or tune uska number vgera kuch nai liya!"
Sharad commented incredulously when Asad told him about Zoya.
Asad: "Yar wo Pakistani e."
Sharad: "To kia huwa. Maine to pehle e kaha tha teri Indian nai ogi. Lalay teri to ek amar prem katha bannay ke baray bright chances hain."
Asad: "Konsi prem katha? Ab kahan milay gi wo? Ab tak to ho skta e apne mulk wapis janay ke rastay main o."
Sharad: "Subha tu us se mila e. Shaam ko vo vapis ja rae ogi. Get real dude. Milay gi. Destiny mere bhai. Evain to ghanti nai bajti. Vese naam kia e bhabhi g ka?"

Asad: "Zoya."
Sharad: "Veer-Zara...Asad-Zoya"
Asad: "Oye kia le kay baith gya e. Let's go for dinner. Itni filmy story nai bnani mujhe apni life ki. Ek to wo Pakistan se e dusra uska baap Army mai. We are simply not meant to be."
Sharad: "Meant to be hai ya nai, ye to waqt he btaye ga mere bhai."
Edited by Jaren93. - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow!!! awesome start👏 AsYa first meeting. and Asad ki dil mein ganti baji.😆 i think he is not that emotionally challenged in your story as compared to our serial😃 Veer-Zaara, Asad-Zoya... it has a nice ring to it😉 continue soon. want to know where their destiny takes them
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Really interesting 😃 Please pm me when you continue.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Rarepearl

hey Jerry, sry my like button isn't working. but I love dis ff. its soo good, i'm already hooked to it. plz tell one thing, is it a sad ending story or not? plz add me to diss ff of urs too.

Sad ending? Lo abhi kese bata doon? You will have to read the story to know. Well happy and sad moments dono hain. :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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WOW their first meet was great...thanks 4 pm...cont soon

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