SwaRon OS : Corrections of errors

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Disclaimer : I wrote this OS for SwaRon anniversary challenge.


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CORRECTION OF ERRORS


"Sharonnn?" Swayam smiled widely as he read Sharon's personal diary after his many many failed attempts and called Sharon who was busy in kitchen trying to make pan cakes which were next to impossible for her as every time she would pour some batter on pen it just get some weird shape.

"Yeah, Swayam?" Sharon yelled back as she was already very frustrated with her oh-so-perfect skills of making world's best pancakes and now Swayam's back to back calling was disturbing her more.

"Are you done yet, honey?" He asked sweetly.

"No, Swayam. I guess it will take few more hours." She yelled back making a cute confused face when she realized that the recent batter she pour took a shape of Swayam's hairstyle and then she immediately smiled.

"Can't be you little quick with it? I am getting bored." He yelled back with full frustration.

"Come here, Swayam. I'll show you YOU!" She shouted and then he could hear her giggling.

Swayam made a confused face when he suddenly heard her giggling quiet loudly and walked out of the bedroom. He thought looking at Sharon that 'Oh, shit my wife has gone mad in anger that she can't make even a pancake.' But then she called him up near her with her hands. He smiled at in relieve. Yeah, she is yet to get mental.

"What happened, Sharon?" Swayam asked smiling at her he smile.

"Look, it's you in the pan." Sharon said pointing towards the pan like a cute little baby excited for something.

"Yeah, something little similar we can say. I guess hairstyle is similar, isn't it?" Swayam asked while he ran his finger in the batter picture because he could not imagine himself in the pan, cooking.

"You ruined it, Swayam!" Sharon gasped and made a O shaped mouth.

"Ya. It seems weird you know." He said and kissed her cheeks.

"Yeah. But Swayam in Sharon's cooking pan seems totally cool you know!" She said and winked at her.

He WINKED back.

"Why did you wink back, mr?" Sharon asked him with curious face.

"Umm, why do I tell you?" He said smirking. Now he is playing!

"Look, just tell what mischief have you done?" Sharon glared at him dangerously.

"You dare to glare at me because your cards are in my hand, Sharie!" He said and winked at her.

"Now. Now, you are scaring me. What cards?" She said to him and pausing for a second immediately ran to the bedroom.

Swayam did a huge 'ha ha' and ran behind her. He found her looking something on her writing table in corner and she PAUSED.

"Swayam, where is my diary baby?" She asked turning back with a sweet smile trying to get her diary back from her. She gave him a nervous smile which made him press his lips in a tight line to refrain from laughing at her expressions.

"What diary, Sharie?" Swayam asked oh-so innocently just like I kid who pee in his pants and said I slipped on the water.

"Swayam, babe please don't do this?!" She asked trying to get her diary back. Of course it was personal.

"Nope. You will not get back your diary till I read it all this time even last time I tried sneaking in but you just took away! Finally, I will get to read SSRP's diary. What a luck man!" He said and patted his shoulder.

"Now, who the hell is this SSRP?" Sharon asked resting his small palm on her bums like a little cute baby.

"Siren Sharon Raiprakash, Duh!" He said and made an irritating face.

"WHT! Give me my diary back right now, Swayam!" She ordered him.

"Babe, you are not in a condition to throw tantrums or make any orders on me. Are you?" He said crossing his arms on his chest and flung raised his eyebrow.

"No, I am not." Sharon said as her face fell down.

Swayam walked close to her and without any notice pulled her plump and cute cheeks and in return Sharon started hitting Swayam on his shoulder and chest so that he leaves her but he took all his precious time to leave his rightful asset. Her cheeks!

"I hate you, Swayam!" She winced and rubbed her cheeks showing him her tongue.

"I love the color of your tongue! And taste, oh my God don't even ask I won't be able to describe!" He said and winked at her and in return Sharon again started hitting him because he being such a lover boy pervert was talking such sexy things when her life was hanging in mid air. Her personal diary! It's not good if he reads her diary because then all the inner emotions and the past feelings will be disclosed to him.

"I have an offer if you agree?" Sharon asked Swayam sitting on the edge of bed.

"What?" He said raising his brows and smirking as SSRP never gave any offer instead she made demands only. Every dog has his day. Today it was her dog's turn, Oops I mean his husband's turn.

"Well, you CAN read this diary but on one condition or else I will eat you up." She said glaring at her.

"What condition?" He said getting curious.

"Well, we will do correction." She said t him.

"We will do what, Sharon?" He asked as he could not understand what actually she means.

"I mean to say that I have mentioned almost every single conversation, every single meeting, every single silent talks, every single things related to us from the time of college in this diary but somewhere I feel like it's incomplete. I mean sometimes you spoke and left and sometimes I spoke and left but there wasn't actually the time where we both spoke to each other about each other. Something was missing, we were there together as strangers, as trial couple, as post breakup couple, as trying to be friends, as friends but all the time we talked about something which was not important, which was useless and stupid to waste your time on. We never talked about us, we never shared our feeling with each other you know." She said and looked at him.

"Ya. You know what Sharon you just made me realize that how we are still not complete, we love each other but we don't exactly know each other's feeling and emotions on past things happened. You know you actually sometimes speak sense?" He said randomly and Sharon again hit him on his chest. Wow, she does some real hard workout. Keep going SSRP!

"Aww ouch, ok fine! I am sorry. So can we start our correction of errors now?" He said forwarding his hand for her.

"Of course." Sharon replied and placed her hand on his hand and he led both of them to the bed, they both sat down and adjusted some pillows to be comfortable.

Sharon hesitantly opened her diary but before Swayam could start reading Sharon jerked.

"Umm, can we start from 2012? I mean I dun think in 2011, I was right in any of the conversation." She said cheekily and glared at him when he was trying to control his laughter.

"Yeah yeah laugh on me!" She said and showed her tongue.

"Ok, we can start from 2012." He announced.

Sharon opened the book and hid her like a baby till she found the word written '2012' so that Swayam could not even get one single glimpse of horrible 2011. Swayam smiled at her and shook his head. She placed the diary in front of them and Swayam when he read his name written zillions of time in diary. He looked at her who just lower and gaze and bit her lips.

"Ok, now turn these pages." Sharon said instantly and turned all the pages containing only his name.

"Sharon, don't you think we should also discuss why you wrote my names so many times when there was nothing between us in start of 2012? He said and she nodded.

"So, tell me?" He said and resting his arm on the pillow and looking at her.

"Actually I dun know why exactly I wrote your name. These names were written from 1st Jan to 23rd April you know. I could not do anything else rather than writing your name zillions of time. I used to sit to write SOMETHING at least but I used to get lost somewhere and when that spell blasted, it was you which was written all over the diary. Even I didn't have the answer of this why. All those time I never knew when I was writing your name, you know when on 1st Jan I for the first time wrote your name I was angry on me because I was hurting you and making you jealous using Shivam so i tried tearing the papers which had your name but I could not. I just couldn't tore them and trash them. You know how many times I have written your name?" She asked Swayam who was not even blinking his eyes because such beautiful words were not letting him.

"Yeah." He whispered lightly.

"33 lacs and 45 thousand times!" She said and Swayam raised his hand and held her resting that in her lap, he was speechless and what he would have said wouldn't have described what was he feeling now so he better decided to me be and just smile.

"So, you were trying to make me jealous using Shivam?" Swayam asked her.

"Yes, I was such a fool to do such a stupid thing. I was making you jealous but it did work, alright as you was jealous!" Sharon said smirking at him.

"Yes, I was such a fool to get jealous but you know what Sharon we boys look tough. We say it doesn't matter if some other guy tries to come close to the girl we love, but it does matter. It does matter a lot. We don't say but it hurts, I don't know what I was more hurt or jealous but I never liked him being close to you. I was afraid that I night loose you like I had you that time but I really love you Sharon and seeing you with someone else is difficult to die for me." He said and Sharon rested her head on her shoulder.

"I love you too, Swayam." She said and kissed the bare part of his neck softly.

"Hey, why you wrote my name till only 23rd April?" He and Sharon got paled as it was the most horrible incident and day of her life.

"Turn the page and check 24th April's event you will know then." She said as she even didn't want to re-call that day with her words.

Swayam was about to turn the page but Sharon stopped him. She held his hand and inter twin it with her hand.

Swayam flipped the page and started reading it, just a few lines and he stopped. He didn't have enough courage in him to re-call that day, that faithful day when he insulted Sharon and called her cheap and pointed his finger on her character. He still couldn't forgive himself for going such low with her, with her Sharon.

"Sorry, Swayam." Sharon said looking down to their inter twin hands.

"No babe, I am sorry; I am sorry for every word I said to you that day. I can't forgive myself for doing that to you. I made you cry and I broke your heart, I am really sorry Sharon." He said and instantly hugged her.

"No, Swayam as I said we will do correction of errors; so we will." Sharon said and broke the hug.

"What do you mean?" Swayam asked and he could see a single pearl glistening in Sharon's eye.

"It wasn't only your fault. I started it, I insulted you, I questioned your intensions. It was my fault too more than yours. I am really sorry for that Swayam. After that day I knew it was my fault too but still I behaved like a bitch and didn't even apologized to you. I tried to, but I couldn't and you know why? I thought there are so many things I should apologize for but they are countless and I can't apologize for them not at the moment so I let it be. I was so hurt when you called me easy girl but believe me I was more hurt when I was re-calling like how I questioned your intension even knowing that only you on earth have the most purest and beautiful intensions towards me. I felt sick of myself. I felt shame on myself, Swayam!" She said and her head fell down.

"Hey, hey who said that you are an easy girl? Ask me, your husband!" He tried to cheer up her.

"Shut up!" She scolded him for his teasing and nudged his chest.

"You are the most beautiful, innocent and purest soul I know in this entire world!" Swayam said and kissed her forehead lovingly.

"So what's next?" Sharon asked smiling.

"Next day when you insulted me in front of whole college, I guess? Only if you are comfortable." Swayam immediately added the comfortable part when he saw Sharon's changed expression.

"Yeah, I am. Swayam still my comfort is very important for you na?" She said.

"Top most priority." He said with proud.

"That is why you didn't touch me in first 3 months of our marriage?" Sharon teased him.

"Topic change!" He immediately said making cute and weird face.

Swayam flipped the page and read what Sharon had written about next morning.

It felt so bad to do that. I insulted Swayam in front of whole college. I could clearly see the pain in his eyes but I wanted to do that so that he won't get a chance to hurt me again like this. It was my fault that it why he could hurt me like that, everyone hurts me but not now. I won't let anyone hurt me again, after all I have emotions too, right diary? I don't show it doesn't mean I am emotionless, or I don't have heart. It pains a lot. Every time when he say something rude it does pain. I know I do same no I actually do worse but I can't help it. I can't let him enter my heart. I can't let anyone enter in my heart or in my life. Sharon Raiprakash always has spent her life alone and I don't need anyone. Sorry, Swayam for hurting you and for insulting you so badly.

Swayam just kissed her forehead in reply and Sharon rested her head on his shoulder.

"I am sorry." She whispered.

"I can understand, Sharon. I really do understand." Swayam said and wrapped his arm from her right shoulder to right shoulder from back.

"You know I was from a broken family. Mom left dad, and I never knew the reason. Dad was always busy with other stuff, like office, business and important things but I was the least important thing for him. He used to talk to me when I used to call him, we used to met after long period of time. He gave me everything I wanted except his time which I wanted the most. I was alone all my childhood, I never had any good friend except Rey. I was alone and I was craving for someone's love but when I saw that love in your eyes, I got scared you know. I am sorry. Can you ask you something?" Sharon asked him.

"Yeah, babe?" He said.

"At that time you didn't know all this, frankly tell me how you felt when I insulted you. Will you tell me every single emotion you felt?" She asked.

"I did felt hurt. I won't lie, I really did. I was broken, Sharon. All I wanted in my life was you. All I EVER asked for God was you. Loving you was passion for me. You were my life and still is. Looking in your eyes always gave me some kind of strange happiness. I actually could see me faint images in your orbs. I wanted to walk with you., I wanted to hold you close to my heart. I wanted to give you all the happiness you deserve. I wanted to make you feel loved. I wanted you because I loved you. Some says priceless and love is demand less but I demanded to God, for you. I demanded so that I can love you and give you a new world filled with happiness, our own peaceful and beautiful world where no one can harm you, no one can hurt you. All I did was to love you. I tried to control myself when I called you easy girl and insulted you but after hearing all those harsh words just broke me. I wondered why you don't love me and why you CAN'T love me! I was hurt but not much that your love can even erase a pinch from my heart. I still love you and will always love you, Sharon!" He said and looked lovingly into her eyes which were filled with tears.

"You made me speechless!" Sharon said and kissed his chest from top opened button of his shirt while hugging him tightly.

"Oh, pl-heez!" He said like a girl and Sharon bit on his chest.

"Can we directly go to the day of our trial confession?" Swayam asked.

"I was thinking the same, ok turn to page of 11th July, 2012." Sharon said.

"Wow, Sharon you remember each and every date. Not bad, I am impressed babe!" he said and patted her shoulder who just grinned proudly at him.

"Before you even say anything I do like to tell my side of story regarding this beautiful day of my life, can i?" Swayam asked.

"Of course, My husband!" She said.

"I know you used to think what kind of person I am, like I was stone, never moving on, still there waiting for you, loving you.. but stones doesn't have emotions but I had, they don't love a girl, but I loved a fairy, they don't get romantic, ahem ahem, I do. I simply loved you and to wait for you was the second name of love to me. What kind of person or lover I would have been if I wouldn't have even waited for you. I knew one day or other you will come to me, you will realize what importance I hold for you and you did. You came though we only got into trial relationship but even a single chance for me was like I was about to die and you gave your breaths to me. It was my achievement. It was something I only craved for, it was what gave me you. It was my win." He said and smiled at her.

"I don't think so I am able to say anything more on this because I actually wanted you to feel the way you felt by giving you that chance. That relationship was equally important for me." Sharon said.

"I know, I really know that. So what's next now?" Swayam asked flipping pages.

"Breakup?" Sharon asked hesitantly.

"For sure, honey!" He passed her an assuring smile looking at her hesitant.

Swayam was about to say something when Sharon immediately cut him off and started saying her point if view.

"I lost all hopes at that time, all the hopes you raised in me that I deserve someone loves, someone support. I was failing every time I tried to pass in that exam, I know I know, love is not an exam for me but I put myself on an examination because I wanted to know if I can pass, if I can care for you the way you do, I if can love you the way you do, I wanted to see in your eyes and make your legs like jelly the way you used to do, but nothing happened. I failed in each and every thing I tried to do. You don't know how it felt when I used to fail every time I felt like crying and destroying this entire world. All I wanted you to take me in your arms and tell me that you are here with me. I was feeling so helpless, so incomplete, I didn't liked it .. it felt like I was suffocating you too with me. I thought I don't deserve you and you deserve much better and happy partner then me. How could I give you the love even after trying, I failed. A girl so unhappy and unloved like me could never love you or could never make you happy! All I could do was to give you more sorrow and pain so I thought to release you from that pain. You know even thinking about releasing you again made my heart sunk. How I wished I could do anything, something by which I could prove myself that I am good for you and I deserve you but nothing happened and I had to release you." Sharon said and tears were flowing from her eyes like water fall, never stopping.

"Hey, Sharon? Look at me. You think you don't deserve me? No, you are wrong because I never deserved you. I used to scold you and fight with you on little things when we were in relationship, the time which I should have made the most beautiful time of your life, I just ruined it by caring all other things. You were there to support me to support Tani when I needed someone to support her but I fought with you. All you were doing was the care about me but I fought with you. I don't know it seems like I started taking you my property when I knew that all this is new for you and you need time, you need my love and support but I cared for other stuffs and didn't gave you my time. We should have sat together, talk and laugh with each other. It was my fault that I couldn't make you fall in love with me because I didn't do any effort! I couldn't make that time memorable for you, I am sorry, I remember whenever you like a true and good partner tried to make me share your feeling with you, I denied. When Rey and Tani's rumor thing happen you tried to talk to me but I ignored and I asked you to leave, I am sorry for that. I didn't realize that without the intense love, with new in caring stuff and with new with such kind of relationship you are trying to give your best in it. You are trying to be like a perfect girlfriend or partner does but I didn't do anything like that. I should I have understand you and love you but instead I was so much busy with all other problems and worries! He said and guilt was evident in his eyes.

"Aisa nahi hai, ok? I was wrong. You did love me and cared for me!" Sharon said and holding his hand.

"No, Sharon I was wrong and I know this!" Swayam said.

"When I am saying that I was wrong means I was wrong!" Sharon said trying to convince Swayam.

"Sharon! Uffo, tum se tu baat karna hi fazol hai!" He said and pouted.

"OH, really? Then why are you talking to me..huh?" Sharon yelled a bit.

"Why you getting angry, Sharon?" Swayam asked her with exact pitch.

"Because you are such a dumbo! I was wrong and that is final!" Sharon jerked his hand from her grip and glared at him.

"W*F! No ways, I was!" Swayam said glaring back like a tiger.

"Don't you dare give me that looks, alright Shekhawat?" Sharon said crossing her arms on her chest.

"Oh, really! I was wrong!" he said while gritting his teeth.

"I said I was wrong!" Sharon said while sitting on bed with her knees.

"I was!" Swayam took the same position and now they both were inches apart glaring at each other.

"I was wrong!'

"no, I was wrong!"

"I was wrong!'

"NO, I was!"

"I was!"

"I was!"

"I was!"

"I was!"

"I was!"

"Stop it, please! Or else Tanya will be deaf!" A 4 year kid shouted.

Swayam and Sharon both looked towards the door and saw their little Miss. Tanya Swayam Shekhawat standing there resting her hands on her ears and little pink colored monkey called "Nicky" resting on the floor.

"Tanya was sleeping! You woke her up! Dada, mama you both have grown now!" She scolded them and they both lower their faces.

"Better!" She said and jumped on the bed between both, pulled them down and held Sharon's right arm and Swayam's left and dozed off.

Swayam and Sharon both glared one last time and mouthed "I was wrong!".


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Lovely OS swthrt...

Loved the way u used her diary to go thorough their past memories...

To be precise mistakes...and they took a chance rectify the mistakes... Loved the way u showed the cute and adorable sharon in the midst of the engaging sequences..lovelyyy

"Nope. You will not get back your diary till I read it all this time even last time I tried sneaking in but you just took away! Finally, I will get to read SSRP's diary. What a luck man!" He said and patted his shoulder.

"Now, who the hell is this SSRP?" Sharon asked resting his small palm on her bums like a little cute baby.

"Siren Sharon Raiprakash, Duh!" He said and made an irritating face.

The whole idea of knowing each other better that too by going through past tracks was adorable yet unique..

"I mean to say that I have mentioned almost every single conversation, every single meeting, every single silent talks, every single things related to us from the time of college in this diary but somewhere I feel like it's incomplete. I mean sometimes you spoke and left and sometimes I spoke and left but there wasn't actually the time where we both spoke to each other about each other. Something was missing, we were there together as strangers, as trial couple, as post breakup couple, as trying to be friends, as friends but all the time we talked about something which was not important, which was useless and stupid to waste your time on. We never talked about us, we never shared our feeling with each other you know." She said and looked at him.

"Ya. You know what Sharon you just made me realize that how we are still not complete, we love each other but we don't exactly know each other's feeling and emotions on past things happened. You know you actually sometimes speak sense?" He said randomly and Sharon again hit him on his chest. Wow, she does some real hard workout. Keep going SSRP!

Loved loved the way u showed how they went through shivam fiasco...the show down...the confession...beautifully done...

Loved the OS swthrt...👏👏👏
Luv
Deep
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I loved and loved dis os . Even I voted to dis ( Swaron anniversary contest) very amazing . U penned it very beautifully .
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Posted: 12 years ago
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When i read it in the contest ... i knew it was written by you only., I could make out... 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nehal92

When i read it in the contest ... i knew it was written by you only., I could make out... 😉



HEY PARTNER🤗

Even i could make out ...she wrote this one😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: deep_Tanha



HEY PARTNER🤗

Even i could make out ...she wrote this one😛


Tum dono kabhi nahi sudru gai. Pehle se hi jaan lia ke mera hai! I thought nahi pehchan paogai tum log! Jeez, kamino! 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: deep_Tanha



HEY PARTNER🤗

Even i could make out ...she wrote this one😛


I know 😃 Clever us 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nehal92


I know 😃 Clever us 😃


kamini tujhse itni din baad baat karke main yahan pagalo ki tarhan monkey ban gai hoon. Tu thi kahan ab tak?
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow I wonder if it happen in real
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hey this os is jst the best os i hav ever read of yours...i already read it in the contest and also voted for it...u hav awsmly dipcted the show scenes along the whole os...jst loved it...and the way sharon asks him to directly turn to the day of classroom showdown as till then she has only written his name all over was jst way too cute...bottom line...i jst loved the os...

Rohan😊

P.S.: THNX FOR THE PM AND CONTINUE SENDING THEM

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