Tum Hi Ho- A SwaRon OS

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Heyy Guys🤗

This is my first ever os..!! I don't know about you all but the moment I heard this song, I could totally picturize SwaRon..!😃
I'm in love with this song and SwaRon, as you can already see..!!😆

This one's specially for my Chicklet aka Palak.. Really hope you like it! Agar acha nahi lage toh joote chappal maar dena..!😆
Congratulations for becoming a Goldie..!!🥳 I love you..!!😳

Constructive Criticism is most welcome!😃 Please shower me with your longgg comments..!!

If anyone would like a KriYaansh version..please let me know 😃

And one last thing, I tried with all my might to get the song to play on the thread, but it just wouldn't happen..
Please play it from this link, to get the gist of the story😊




Tum Hi Ho- A SwaRon OS

It was pitch black. The rain pattered and the wind rapped against the desolate highway. The clouds shrouded the sky with an eerie, ominous blanket. But this gloomy atmosphere seemed like the perfect getaway for the newly engaged couple.


Swayam and Sharon strolled along the pathway against the unnerving storm.


Swayam dressed in a formal black suit looked as dashing as ever. He continuously gazed at his fianc without a blink of his eye. The sultry Sharon was dressed to kill, at least that's what any sane man what have thought!


Clad in a ravishing aqua blue sari embedded with precious jewels, Sharon could feel nothing but vulnerable under Swayam's constant stare. He bore his eyes into her. Her petit figure drenched in the rain beckoned him to claim her soul. The still silence was soon ruined by Sharon's sudden eruption of laughter that startled Swayam.

Swayam- Sharon, kya hua? Achaanak, itni hassi?


Sharon- Sw..Swa'Swayam..*laughing* Apna chehra toh dekho.. ekdum bandar lag rahe ho!


Swayam- *pouting like a baby* Kyun? Mere face pe kuch hai, kya?


Sharon- Nahi! Tumhaari "zulfein" is baarish ki vajah se bhikar gaye hai.. idhar aao.. I'll sort it out.


Swayam- Ok.. careful! Meri zulfien meri prized possession hai!


Sharon's face paled.


Sharon- Really? *muttering under her breath* Par mujhe laga main tumhaari prized possession hoon..


Swayam noticed the change in her expression and heard her silent conversation, but decided to take undue advantage of the situation and tease her.


Swayam- Huh? Kuch kahaa tumne?


Sharon felt genuinely hurt and anger raged within her. She shrieked against the piercing breeze as the rain mercilessly soaked her.


Sharon- Nahin, main kaun hoti hoon aapko kuch bolne waali Mr. Swayam Shekhawat? Aapko jo karna hai aap ki jiye. Main thodi naa maaine rakhti hoon tumhaare liye, hai naa Swayam? Sirf apni puri zindagi tumhaare naam kar di maine, sirf apna vajood tumhaare naam kar diya, sirf paagalon ke jaise tumhaare saath jeene marne ki khwaahish..


Swayam pulled Sharon by the waist with force and sealed her trembling lips with his. As they broke the enchanting kiss of pure bliss due to the lack of oxygen, they shared an eyelock. Silence prevailed them yet again.


Swayam- *whispered hoarsely* Tum hi ho, ab tum hi ho, zindagi ab tum hi ho. Chain bhi, mera dard bhi, meri aashiqui ab tum hi ho. Tere liye hi jiya main, khud ko jo yun de diya hai. Teri wafa ne mujhko sambhaala, saare ghamon ko dil se nikaala. Main jo mit bhi gaya toh wajood mera, sadaa tujh mein rahe zinda.


Sharon quickly placed her hand on his mouth to stop him from saying anything else. Swayam kissed her fingers one by one with all the love in the world, while Sharon blushed crimson just like a newly wedded wife. One wink, with a glow of mischief from Swayam made her heart skip a beat and just as she was about to bolt, her six inch heel decided to betray her. She lost her balance and squeezed her eyes shut as knew she would hit the rock hard surface of the road. As luck would have it, Sharon was pleasantly surprised as she fell into the arms of the man of her dreams.


Swayam- Jab jab aasmaan se ek Sharon pari ban ke gire gi, tab tab uss pari ko bachaane ke liye ek Swayam zarur hoga.


Sharon was so touched by his words, that it had left her speechless. A lone tear slid down her cheek. Swayam scooped her off her feet before she could digest what is happening to her. He held her close to his heart and they drifted off to a world of their own.


Swayam- I love you Sharon


Sharon- *Hitting his chest playfully with her delicate hands as her bangles jingled merrily* I hate you Swayam, I hate you, hate you, hate you! Because I love you'!


Sweet nothings could be heard, as Sharon hid herself in the crook of his neck and Swayam refused to stop teasing her. Their smiles could be seen from miles by an elderly couple that witnessed this epitome of love as the rain was dripping down both of them.


Hope it was atleast readable!


Love,

Vedika❤️

Edited by arjuhiswaron007 - 12 years ago

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Crazy4AshVik thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res for Chicklet😃

Unresed...😉

Heya chitti 🤗 🤗 🤗
First of all thank you for such a pleasant surprise !! I'm really overwhelmed with all your efforts 😃
Tum hi ho is one of my fav songs and this song added more beauty to your OS😊
I'm glad u wrote your first OS on swaron ❤️ I bet no one can say its ur first OS :D
Yup I agree it was not readable
But
It was amazing and romantic one 😳
Swaron's essence You penned it down beautifully ...
"It was pitch black. The rain pattered and the wind rapped against the desolate highway. The clouds shrouded the sky with an eerie, ominous blanket. But this gloomy atmosphere seemed like the perfect getaway for the newly engaged couple."
U created perfectly the romantic atmosphere by these lines ... And as a reader I could imagine that 😳
I love the way sharon being jealous of swayam's zulfaien 😳.,.. And swayam teasing sharon .. and then swayam going back to his majnu mode and showering his love 😳
"Swayam- Jab jab aasmaan se ek Sharon pari ban ke gire gi, tab tab uss pari ko bachaane ke liye ek Swayam zarur hoga."
These lines were the most romantic and loving part of this OS... I loved it ❤️both confessing their love in their way ...
"Sweet nothings could be heard, as Sharon hid herself in the crook of his neck and Swayam refused to stop teasing her. Their smiles could be seen from miles by an elderly couple that witnessed this epitome of love as the rain was dripping down both of them."
The ending was beautiful ...I loved the OS ,thanx was writing one and putting your efforts 😊

Lots of love ❤️
Yours,
chicklet 😳
Edited by arjuhiswaron007 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Vedika...🤗

Wooo girl u r multi-talented ...poems and now OS...this doesn't look like ur first write up though ...its beautiful...u have some serious skills of a writer...

It was not long but each word made its mark...loved the scenario...Rain...just engaged..madly in love SWARON...teasing each other...confessing love to each other...can't ask for more...

Loved below conversation:


Sharon- Nahin, main kaun hoti hoon aapko kuch bolne waali Mr. Swayam Shekhawat? Aapko jo karna hai aap ki jiye. Main thodi naa maaine rakhti hoon tumhaare liye, hai naa Swayam? Sirf apni puri zindagi tumhaare naam kar di maine, sirf apna vajood tumhaare naam kar diya, sirf paagalon ke jaise tumhaare saath jeene marne ki khwaahish..


Swayam pulled Sharon by the waist with force and sealed her trembling lips with his. As they broke the enchanting kiss of pure bliss due to the lack of oxygen, they shared an eyelock. Silence prevailed them yet again.


Swayam- *whispered hoarsely* Tum hi ho, ab tum hi ho, zindagi ab tum hi ho. Chain bhi, mera dard bhi, meri aashiqui ab tum hi ho. Tere liye hi jiya main, khud ko jo yun de diya hai. Teri wafa ne mujhko sambhaala, saare ghamon ko dil se nikaala. Main jo mit bhi gaya toh wajood mera, sadaa tujh mein rahe zinda.

Loved the flow in ur writing...Below line made me go awww...how cute and adorable these two can be...

Swayam- Jab jab aasmaan se ek Sharon pari ban ke gire gi, tab tab uss pari ko bachaane ke liye ek Swayam zarur hoga.

LOVED the OS...would love to read more from u 😳

Luv

Deep


Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res
Unres
Sabse pehle srry cuty!
Mein unres karne mein bahot late ho gayi!
Sowieee!!!*pout*
Now back to ur OS.
I loved every line of dis OS.
D way u expressed swayam's love for her was beautiful.
No one can ever guess dat dis is ur frst work.
Ur OS is vry sweet, cute n amazing!
Jst like my cuty!
I love dese lines a lot!
"Swayam- Jab jab aasmaan se ek Sharon pari ban ke gire gi, tab tab uss pari ko bachaane ke liye ek Swayam zarur hoga."
Truly amazing cuty!
Love u! 😊
Edited by ayu_kriyaansh - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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HEY VEDIKA ITS JST AMAZIN FRM THE WAY SWAYAM TEASES HER TILL THE WAY HE LOVES HER ... JST AMAZIN THANKS FR THE PM...<3 GUD NITE..:)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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That was such an awesum one veds

i soo loved it

damm sweet

do write more...

would love to read them

-Cookie
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Posted: 12 years ago
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so sweet... loved it...
keep writing more...

P.S. pls write KriYaansh version too😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Small but a beautiful OS!! Loved it, honey! 👏

Keep writing more stuff like this.

- Marium
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Posted: 12 years ago
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hello vedika...
wats up

ur first attempt on swaron was mind blowing...
the song was wow n even the os 👏
loved it 😳😳😳

it was simple sweet... n i loved it totally
keep writing n pm me... 😃😃😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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This was your first Attempt Vedika? o_O
Shuruaat aisi hai toh journey toh AWE-some rahegi ;)

The Aashiqui OS itself from the title 'Tum hi ho' seemed so romantic to me ^_^
And through the introduction i easily could feel rain knocking my window! The detailed description was fabulous.

You know what...you should publish this line somewhere...because if it is original then it is miraculously romantic!!

"Swayam- Jab jab aasmaan se ek Sharon
pari ban ke gire gi, tab tab uss pari ko
bachaane ke liye ek Swayam zarur
hoga."

Aisi lines likhogi toh mujhe toh apni Fan-List mei include krlo bhaai!

Definitely write more!
Keep it always UP!
*ThumbsUp*

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