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Posted: 12 years ago
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Since you guys are awesome and leave me so many comments! Here is a short chapter as my heartfelt gratitude. Thank you...

Chapter 5: Three coins in the fountain

"You have tanned a lot," Payal said the moment Khushi was near earshot. Khushi smiled a little.

"Too much of exposure under hot Sun and there is only so much moisturizer could do," Khushi replied. Payal hummed and took a step further.

Khushi smiled and walked towards Payal and spread her arms to hug her sister but Payal took several steps back. Khushi physically felt a blow to her stomach and staggered several steps back, her arms suddenly feeling useless and unwanted. She heaved couple of breaths loudly to accustom to that gnawing, clutching, wrenching and hammering feeling that went through her body as the ache of rejection pierced through her flesh and jilted her bone. Maybe she deserved words filled with malice, anguish, and despairs and probably even...hate but she hadn't anticipated anything remotely like this.

Payal just walked past her with a small smile and entered home without a backward glance. Khushi leaned on the pillar on patio and willed her heart not to scream. Her legs felt like jelly and she felt a little faint. She slid down when her legs couldn't handle the weight of despondency anymore and simply sat on the steps.

There was a sudden burst of conversation inside where her parents started with "Why are you late?" and "You look winded out." And the following answers of her sister "Paperwork is taking revenge ma, for ignoring it last week" and "I ate salad for lunch papa now I am starving."

The world that was unfolding inside was now alien to her. It felt a long time ago when she would be part of the conversation and there would be some joke inserted here and there. There would be laughter, arguments and daily life in general. For seven years she had gone to an empty house, whenever she got the chance to go home that is. They were in her thoughts every waking moment of her day but she couldn't call them as often she wanted to. And when she got around to making calls, Payal was never around to speak.

She shivered a little when wind picked up. She jumped when a shawl was draped on her shoulders. "It's a little cold out here," her father said sitting next to her. Khushi nodded wordlessly. "Payal didn't exactly give you a warm welcome now, did she?" He asked as he had previously anticipated.

Khushi shook her head.

"She has been through...a lot after...everything happened. Give her some time and...some space," he added for good measure.

They sat in silence for several minutes before Khushi spoke up. "Didn't Payal get married?" Pankaj turned to look at her and stared at her for a long moment.

"Things got complicated after you left Khushi. Maybe you should hear it from her," he said and pulled her along the way. Arm in arm father-daughter duo walked inside.

Payal was polite through the entire meal and met Khushi's stares with poignancy. The meal was a regular affair but the conversation was lull. Payal stood up first under the notion of getting some work done before she hit sack and Khushi followed next. She wanted to talk to Payal preferably alone and this was probably the best time to do so.

She found Payal sitting on bed with laptop and a stack of paper next to her, typing at a constant pace.

"How is Dev?" Khushi asked standing at the foot of bed looking at the photo of a handsome man on the side table. Payal stopped typing and looked up from laptop.

"Dev is dead." Payal replied her voice tight and went back to typing. Khushi felt her mouth dry.

"How did it happen?" Khushi rasped.

"Did you already forget?" There were no emotions in Payal's voice. "We both were to be married on the same day. You ran away and both marriages were called off," Payal said looking at her sister. Khushi's eyes were downcast and filled with tears.

"Payal...I didn't..."

"Dev didn't understand why his parents were so upset with the whole situation so the two of us decided to go meet them at their farm house. We got into an accident on the way." Payal said holding her sister's gaze. There was pain her voice but she held her head high. She had learned to live with the loss of the love of her life.

"I lived and he didn't." She said gulping down the sorrow that had risen yet again. "All thanks to the choice you made that day," she said bitterly. No matter how many times she had cried and accused Khushi for what happened with her, she had never felt this bitter anytime. Confronting Khushi face to face had come as a blow and the ministration of the drastic nose dive her life had taken.

Khushi felt the burden on her shoulder grow heavier then.

Music companion: Three coins in the fountain by Four Aces

Next Chapter: Chapter 6, Don't be cruel

Edited by RockBarbie - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#72
I just sandwiched you, being silly 😆

{Edit}

You know there are only two-sides to the coin, either way you look at it, someone either looses or wins.

It's really not fair for Payal to blame Khushi for her loss! What if Payal would have still married Dev and they had an accident where he lost his life? Why should Khushi carry the burden of his life? How can you blame another person for their own destiny?

I don't feel bad for the way Payal treated Khushi, cause she can't just expect life to pick up from where she left off, there are things which need justification and explanations. Times, can either be your biggest enemy or your best-friend in sorrow!

You pen emotions which run very deep...



Edited by -Aarya- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#73
That was touching...So much happened. Cant blame Payals indifference and anger towards kushi.
Nor fair to blame Kushi for her loss...but the loss of loved ones is intolerable. And it depends on people who find ways to find solace on certain reasons to escape from facts




Edited by sammymas - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#74
TGIF 😃
After an awful evening, this was so welcome...
Edit

I am not sure what to comment anymore, there is so much that has happened in the past and everything is simply not pleasant or should I say unfortunate. Payal in her place is justified to feel the way she does and it is never easy to come to terms with a loss that significant. At the same time, it would be stupid on Khushi's part to expect everyone to welcome her with open arms. She did leave for whatever reason, uncaring of the impact that one decision would have on the people she was leaving behind.

I don't want to be sympathetic to Khushi, just because she happens to be the female protagonist in the story; she has a long way to go to earn any regard from my end. Now we have to know the Arnav side of the story, if Payal feels this way, I can just imagine the state of affairs at that part of the world.

PS – RB, the way you penned the rejection and Khushi's despondency was brilliant. Jaaved Akhtar asked Anand Bakshi for his pen after he wrote a very popular Hindi film song. I ask for your laptop, it may help me write better.

Edited by Kalyaani - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#75
Lalala!

~Edit~

God you write well, I felt my own gut doing a somersault on reading this :

"She heaved couple of breaths loudly to accustom to that gnawing, clutching, wrenching and hammering feeling that went through her body as the ache of rejection pierced through her flesh and jilted her bone."

Now I understand Payal's unusually bitter feelings for her sister, Khushi's is hardly aware of the many repercussions of that one decision she made. You're throwing crumbs of information our way and I am greedily picking it up, two update in one day - I am a happy soul!

Yeh dil maange more!
Edited by vgedin - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: Kalyaani

TGIF 😃

After an awful evening, this was so welcome...



I knew it...so a little thing to cheer you up though the update is a bit depressing... :=)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#77
Oh god ,,, i dont whom i am feeling more bad for Payal or Khushi.
Slowly the bits and pieces of the past are coming out.
Choices made by Khushi have affected all her loved ones quite evidently.
I guess since she was away for so long now she will have to face resentment before the mending of relationships begins.
Since the beginning till this update the focus has been more on the other characters of this story like Arnav, Payal and even Khushi's parents now i am waiting to read more into Khushi's side of the story , she has been facing the consequences of her actions but what has lead to this is the question???
Thanks for updating at a quick succession ,,, it was a pleasant surprise !!😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
#78
I always knew I was going to fall in love with Payal. And boy, do I love. She isn't warm but then she has no reason to be, does she? But she is still polite. And I know she still cares. The way sisters are sometimes

Look at me, feeling for fictional characters like they are my own friends...

Great work, RockB. And I'd rather have the lump in my throat on a Friday than a Sunday when the blues are ready to hit :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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oh God!!!!! This ix sooo heart wrenching n an emotional one...
beautiful update dear...
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thnxxx 4 da pm...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#80

Originally posted by: RockBarbie



I knew it...so a little thing to cheer you up though the update is a bit depressing... :=)

RB,
I read the update and wanted to change the emoticon but thought of letting it be as the PM for the update cheered me, even if the update was depressing.

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