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Posted: 12 years ago
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Such a intriguing, powerful and captivating start. The concept itself is very interesting, and hooks you to find out what must have happened in the past for them to separate and then, now cross roads again...

Deserting your groom at the mandap is obviously something that no one wants...and I get Arnav for holding that against her...but the question really lies in WHY she left him? Cant wait to find that out because Im sure youve got something up your sleeves...

I also really enjoyed the conversation between Khushi and her parents...it was soothing in a way and then, Suman mentioning that Khushi may have also come back for peace...

Intriguing for sure!

On the other hand, we have Payal who doesnt seem too happy with Khushis return, but she is also the 1st one to inform Arnav that Khushi is back...wonder what he is going to do and how they will meet...

Will be bookmarking this :) Keep it up!!


Edited by nyxx - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#52
Loved the way u throw small bits and pieces of info in each update, keeping us engrossed .

Pankaj- garima-Kushi moment reminded me back home...miss u my parents badly lols!

Do i miss payal in this family gathering? Is she unhappy with Ks return? May be shes angry and hurt of K's action in past like all elder sis...
Its interesting that payals angry with K and on other hand shes the first person to inform Arnav abt Ks return and decision to stay...

Ks an eminent civil engineer. She was in Africa for past 7 years volunteering for water project. Nice social thought. The un availability of drinking water...people starving for a drop. reminds me of Need to save water. 👍🏼
Arnavs battling with ego and heart...Poor boy was left alone in mandap 😲

Nice update...keep going!


PS# nice banner
Edited by sammymas - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#53
[:o] and the story begins!!!!!! Awesome can't help but wonder if khushi really did mess up or arnav is indirectly involved behind her decision...hmmm can't wait..fab update
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Posted: 12 years ago
#54

Chapter 4: Peggy Sue

"How are you holding up kiddo?" He heard her chuckle from other end of the line.

"Arnav I am thirty five and a year older than you. One would think I am a six year old girl," Payal said still chuckling.

"What can I say? After one point boys grow up too fast and too old while you ladies still manage to look like our younger siblings." He said casually and slid into his car. He had stopped driving years ago when his presence of mind went on an overdrive ignoring reality. After realizing his bizarre driving, he quit driving altogether and hired a driver who doubled as his body guard. Not that he needed one but his sister had insisted.

"I am not sure if that was an insult wrapped in a compliment or a compliment overshadowing an insult," Payal said easily.

"I am an enigmatic man Payal. There are layers to even my monosyllabic answers," he said picturing Payal with an eye roll.

"I am on my way home Arnav and am almost there. What about you?" She asked smoothly changing the subject.

"I just got into car and smoothed right into a nightmare-ish traffic. It's so much fun," he groaned loudly looking out of the window. "Are you on a rickshaw?" He asked when the honking sound from the other end of the phone made him move the phone from his ear.

"I missed company cab so decided to take an auto back home." She said over a din the auto was making.

"Hectic day?" He asked gently.

"I was on phone for most part of the day and when I wasn't I was swimming in paper work," she said with a bit of frustration.

"Don't you generally take work home and manage to leave early?" His voice was still gentle but she didn't miss the accusation there.

"I..." Payal trailed, caught off guard with his insinuation.

"You should have called La or me so that either one of us could have picked you up," he said getting his answer in her non-answer.

"La is at a fund raiser tonight. Didn't you see her tweet?" Payal asked mentally thanking him for not pursuing his original train of thought.

"Tweeting is a waste of time," he said flatly. "Besides I don't know why it is so important for people to share every tiny bits of information of their life." He grumbled. "Like I care two hoots about what they ate for lunch or what is their favourite quote." He breathed a sigh of relief when he heard Payal's laughter on the other end.

"Okay M. Luddite, as you wish. La looks stunning today in her cocktail dress. I will email you that picture after I get off from this call." She said and chuckled when she heard him groan and say "Do I have to?" from the other end. "Arnav, I will call you later alright? I am home." She said softly.

"Okay," he said shortly. He was about to hang up but stopped when he heard "Arnav" softly on the other side. "Yes?" He said.

"Thank you for calling me." She said. "Thank you for calming my nerves Arnav. I was so...jittery since I heard the news," she said.

"I have no idea what you are talking about kiddo. Good night," he said and hung up as she mirrored his good-bye.

Payal sighed and shifted on her feet, her fingers twiddling on the hook of the gate. When the gate opened, it made a loud creaking noise notifying everyone inside that someone was here. She never got the gate fixed as she called it as their first alarm before someone could ring the bell. But today she hated the fact that her presence would be known much before she wished her sister to realize.

Adjusting her features, she took a deep breath and opened the gate. Like expected, the door opened before she could reach the patio.

And then she saw her sister on the threshold.

*****

He purposefully ignored everyone in the living room and climbed the stairs two at a time. His sister and his brother-in-law Shyam were there laughing seeing something on television. He didn't want to be a part of a false propaganda of happy marriage and take part in its hypocrisy.

He knew that his sister had seen him and like clockwork she would come to his room just after he would finish getting refreshed. Usually they would chat for several minutes - her sitting on his bed and thumbing through a magazine while he organized his paperwork and the work he had brought home for the night. Sometimes she would bring his dinner to his room and talk mundane things till he finished his dinner. Things had changed a lot over the years because of that husband of hers. He generally backed out whenever her face fell due to a comment he made about Shyam. But when their sham of a marriage started grating his nerves more than necessary, he became more vocal about it.

"Chote, will you come down for dinner?" She asked standing by the door. He turned around from the table and took a long look at her. She looked...happy. "Maybe good for nothing husband of hers, had come home after spending yet another day in sheer debauchery." He thought snidely.

"I already ate di," he said tonelessly and turned back towards table.

"Shyam and I were waiting for you to come home. He...wanted to talk to you," she said haltingly. He whirled around and gave her a look of disbelief.

"His business isn't doing too well again?" He asked sardonically. Anjali missed it completely.

"His NGO's sponsors are a bit late in releasing funds for the water filters Shyam had ordered and received shipment. These filters have already been shipped to villages where they were promised so now he cannot return the goods either. So...he was wondering if you can cover the charges for now and when the funds are released, Shyam will payback." Anjali explained.

"And if the funds are not released?" Arnav asked turning to look at her. "How will he repay me?"

Anjali felt tears prickling her eyes. Arnav had never gone to this line of questioning before but for a while now he had become an absolute businessman even while dealing with family. She didn't understand why he was making such a big deal out of it.

"Chote...why have you become like this?" She asked hurt in her voice. "Shyam is doing charity work Arnav and I love him for those...NGOs always undergo minor setbacks but they always manage to bounce back..."

"Anjali, why is there a need to cry for everything I question?" There was nothing familiar in his voice she could cling on to. "I know he is doing charity and I am aware of the problems these charitable institutions face. But don't you think it's odd that the similar kind of problems happen often?" He tried to explain but his sister wasn't all that open for rationality.

That had always been her main problem. She let emotions overturn her rational side making impulsive and hasty decisions along the way which sometimes injured more than helped.

She wiped tears from her eyes. "You know what? Forget I asked anything." She said coldly. "Clearly money has become more important than anything to you nowadays." She slammed the door behind her as she walked out in anger, embarrassment and hurt.

Arnav collapsed on chair. He wished for the day to end already.

Music Selection: Peggy Sue by Buddy Holly and The Crickets

Next Chapter: Chapter 5, Three coins in the fountain

Edited by RockBarbie - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#55
😉

Twitting 😡...happy tht i do share the same opinion with Arnav.

So Arnavs is34, payal s 35... Loved their buddy relationship.

intro to Shyamly...a sham marriage? 😕

NGO's, water filters...etc throw glimpse to work relation btw Shyam and Kushi.

Anji...not again another crybaby. Cant blame Shyam completely 😈.

Whats happening with Payal & Kushi now?
Edited by sammymas - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#56

Me

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I am awful at driving and get teased like crazy for my nonexistent driving skills, had to say that, there is something common between Arnav and me.

Another thing I agree with, is his take on social networking sites and the unnecessary information shared there, I am not on any so another thing we have in common.

Now it would not be wrong to say, I understand Payal and her hesitation, things are never black or white. She has her reasons to not like the fact Khushi has returned to their lives and the ripple effect it may have. We are yet to know a lot that has happened in the past, yet the present and future will be impacted by those events.

I don't want to waste time and energy writing my views on men like Shyam; they are like the pus on the fungus, that disgusting and useless.

Already wishing to read the next update.

Edited by Kalyaani - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#57
Twiggy

~Edit~

Oh, I enjoyed the Payal-Arnav conversation; she is kiddo, really?

"I am an enigmatic man Payal. There are layers to even my monosyllabic answers," Oh, Arnav...

I do understand Payal's hesitancy in all this, she would see herself and her family as the wronged party here and to see her sister after 7 long years, one cannot expect things to just suddenly become normal.

Loved Arnav's take on social networking, I guess people feel better about themselves to think there is an audience out there waiting to know about their lunch menu or when they go to the damned loo.

Shyam is disgusting, no surprises there but Anjali is getting on my nerves more than anyone else, I am glad Arnav is not a sickeningly doting brother here, no "Anjali di hai sabse sayaani" crap

Waiting to read more ..

Edited by vgedin - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#58
What is really going on in that pretty brain of yours !!! I am loving this ff more with every update !
Arnav and Payal talking like chaddi buddy's !!😆
How have the equations changed ????????
Payal being so apprehensive to meet her sister ?????😕
And then of course shyam and anjali,,, and their "sham of a marriage" which apparently Arnav is aware of! He obviously knows what a douche bag shyam is and Anjali well some people never change i guess...once a floozy always a floozy !!!


Edited by _disha_ - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#59
after reading this update why do i have the feeling shyam has a hand for khuhsi leaving the country...and arnav hates him for that
well,now i'lll wait more as its more interesting
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I really liked Payal and Arnav's equation.. the name of the title is apt...

It felt like Payal was pushing Arnav towards La.. does she feel responsible or guilty for what Khushi did or what Arnav is going through..

Looking at khushi's character it doesn't look like she is someone who would leave another at altar.. but it is pity that her sister doesn't understand her..

this story is very gripping...

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