MG Waiting For You Thread 1

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A wooden window, framed in beautifully carved design all sides, a faded silver glass in middle giving it a compete look of royalty. Having cover of white silk curtain up to down, in very pleated manner, was applying a very decent look. The owner of this beautiful window was a white bricked wall, which had four companions from all four sides and in middle, a space, which is called a room. A room which was possessed by the most gorgeous and pretty girl of this village Hoshiyaarpur. A village rested in Punjab.


It was sunset time. The reddish of surrounding was descending and darkness of blue was rising up, along with a round shining diamond ring shaped Moon. The Moon which always lived to show his lavishes brought few golden and silver stars along with him, to exhibit its own imperial on this Earth. The atmosphere was very enchanting which could caught anyone vision toward it. The night slips out in complete form when the curtain of window slips a little and a pair of big eyes came in sight. The big middle roundness of eyes was moving left and right, seeming very impatient. Thick layer of eye lashes were twinkling fast, like it was waiting for something or someone, looking out from window.


"Geet what're you doing there Beta'' A middle age lady called from back, making the girl startle. "Nothing Maa'' she said meekly. Rano looked her. She was Geet , her daughter, 17 years old. Simple and fairly beautiful, Innocent and obedient. Rano came near her, corrected her Tika, which was hanging on her smooth forehead. She redid her red Dupatta over head. She was wearing a beautiful bridal Lahanga, which enhanced her beauty tenfold more. "Geet you're looking so beautiful beta!!'' Rano spoke smiling, putting a black coal spot behind her ear.


"Maa, who is that boy?'' She asked gathering her entire courage, very well knowing, she would not have any answer back.


Rano watched her for fairly few minutes, thinking what to say which would make her daughter heart little calm. But she had nothing to say. She cleared her throat. "Umm, Geet I also didn't see him beta but I'm sure your Daarji and Veerji would have searched the best groom for you'' She tried to make her better. Geet nodded, tried to smile knowing she will not have more than this info about her would be husband. She dropped the idea of thinking further, leaving complete faith on her Babaji. Rano left leaving her dripped in her past.


Flashback

"POUSHAMPA BHAI POUSHAMPA,LAL KILE ME KYA HUA
SOH RUPEY KI GHARI CHURAI, AB TO JAIL MEIN ANA PADEGA
JAIL KI ROTI KHANI PADEGI,JAIL KA PANI PINA PADEGA
AB TO JAIL MEIN ANA PADEGA"


"Rajji cheating ..cheating..no..no you are cheating Rajji'' A 6 years old Geet tapping her small feet on ground bare footed. Her cotton wrinkled frilled frock of knee length was twirling along with her little jumping childish movement. Her small arm was rocking up and down, marching with leg moves. "I won't play with you. Go..go..from here'' She pushed Rajji in her baby anger. Her play group stopped playing their Poushampa (A game mostly is played in villages) game and started arguing in their own way.


Rajji- No I didn't

Yes, yes Geet didi, she did. I saw.. I had noticed''

"No..no she didn't. I had seen her leg. It was across line, sachhi I had seen.

"Yes..yes Geet is lying. Rajji was on line.

"No I'm not lying. Bhola is lying.

Bhola- I'm not lying. You are lying.

Geet- No you

"No Bhola!!!'' some children shouted.

"No Geet!!!'' Rest shouted.


"I'll beat you'' Geet angered innocently, wiping her teary eyes from back of hand. Suddenly a sudden push made her fall on dirty, soiled, grassy ground. She started crying out loud, opening her small mouth as big she could.


A 16 years boy, owner of well build coarse body came running hearing her cry. All children got scared. He glared all in anger.


"Bhola Bhaiya pushed her Brij Bhaiya'' one small child spoke, verge of sobbing


"No I didn't '' 7 years Bhola said controlling his cry as he was supposed to be elder in all children presented there.


"Shut up you all!!!'' Brij shouted. Geet started shaking with his anger as she was guessing what is going to be happening next. With a sudden pull she had been raised, on her feet and begun being dragged by Brij, forcefully. She had to almost run for matching her steps with him who was rigid and fast. Her small leg was unable to cop up with him and so she was being cursed in between.


"Jaldi chal!!!'' Brij shouted. "Khelte hue toh tere paau me pahiye lage hote hai. Abhi chla nahi ja raha!!'' Brij tightened his grip on her soft thin small arm. She was sobbing, wiping her nose in frock frills, running, murmuring "I didnt do anything'' in between. They reached Handa Haveli. A big Haveli in Hoshiyaarpur village rested in Punjab. Birj entered, dragging Geet to the living hall and yelled.


"I had told you not to play with those village boys, then why did you go ha!!'' Brij slapped her. Rano came running hearing her daughter loud cry. "Brij!! What're you doing, leave her'' She pulled Geet back to her, tried to remove Brij grip form her arm but he was so furious. He pulled her back. Geet both arm was paining with force of both elders and her face was soaking in tears. "Brij chor isse" Rano yelled and finally pulled Geet, hides her in her embrace. Geet was crying bitterly due to pain she was having in both arms. She was so thin and so it was unbearable for her, not to cry.


"Chup kar !!!'' Brij roared. "Aur sun, khabrdaar aaj ke baad kabhi bahar khelne gayi toh. Paau tod ke rakh dunga samjhi !!! '' He threatened her who turned her cry into hiccups. She hid her round small fairy face in Rano waist, terrified. Afterward, she could never go out for play.


Flashback Ends


"Geet! let go beta'' Rano patted her shoulder , seeing her all lost. Geet rose up from bed. Adjusted her dress, descended stairs and reached in hall. She stared house fondly. Her house, her home, her place. She had spent her entire life here and now, don't know where she had to go. Some warm tears clouded her eyes, made everything so unclear that she could not see her future ahead. Rano touched her shoulder looking her stop in mid way. Geet look her mother. Helplessness was evident in her gesture. She could not want to make her mother weaker so quietly sat in car. Car stared making engine sound. Geet mind flashed some more reminiscence.


Flashback

"Cooo.. chuk chuk..chuk chukk.. !! Rajji come, let's play '' Geet laughed running round and round making train whistle sound, holding Dupatta with one hand of her friend who was running before her in same rhythm, along with two more kids who were behind her, holding her suit. They were playing Train game.


"Geet you are still kid you know! I'm not going to play this childish game. I'm 12 you know'' Rajji said proudly.


"Toh kya hua . I'm too of 12 but I love playing this game'' Geet was enjoying her play without noticing her Dupatta was no more on place. It had already fallen somewhere without her know. She was lost in her game. Some of Brij friends came in with Brij himself. They instantly gazed on Geet, her white skin was so bewitching, to be noticed by them. Brij step stopped in its half way. His face became red like burning coal. Rajji hid sensing his anger tried to make Geet aware of his presence there but, Geet was nowhere near to notice anything. And when she noticed, it already had been enough delay to be corrected on proper. She had been locked in room, without food and water for a day, after making her white cheek red with hard slaps. She had been ordered not to go out alone expect school where she used to go in her car. It was last day of her freedom.


Flashback End



She came back in present with hard jerk of car. She looked around, guessed did not reached yet to temple, where she was supposed to be married with a complete stranger.


##


Meanwhile, somewhere near Handa Haveli,

"Where the hell he is!!! '' Brij yelled on phone. "Aren't you supposed to bring him here for marriage?''

"Brij paaji ,that Dev escaped. Don't know when and how but looked like he had got his conscious back before we had been reached there on place, where he had been kept after abducting''


"I don't know anything. If not Dev than anyone else would go but, I want a man, as soon as, understood? I Can't stop this wedding now. and listen, whoever you will bring make sure his hiding from all. I don't want any attention to see him or you and recognize later before police and all. Got it!!!'' Brij spoke over the phone and hung up.


##


"Maa, did we reach?'' Geet asked to Rano. Rano shook head saying will be reaching soon. She looked out. Nothing was visible. A long large darkness was pretending to be quite but she knew, how tossing and turning it was. The night which was hiding the very complications of moment inside it same like her. She was quite, dark, blank inside but a storm was rising up and down in her heart, making her breath as heavy as one could feel while drowning in Deep Ocean. She closed her eyes, prayed her Babji to correct everything "Please!''.


Car stopped. A last time she breathed, filled her lungs with as much air which would she use later entire her life to breath. She got down, closed car door. There was no one. It was deserted and quite. She had only her mother, on her side. Her heart was pacing fastest without any control. Any moment it could explode she felt. Darkness was terrifying her to the core. The only beam she had, that the hopeful thought of her stranger, her would be husband may be good, which was chosen by her Brij veerji who she knew, never wanted a single sight of her in front of his eyes. Yet, she was hoping for a certain magic.


She, with Rano sits inside temple, on rug. Her Daarji went around looking for Brij who had not come yet. All arrangements had been done for marriage and all was waiting for groom. It was indeed, an odd wedding she was going to have' Geet thought. She smiled bitterly on her fate. How she was being punished by her family for one mistake, which she never had done but, had to accept. How speedily her marriage had been fixed with don't know whom and now, where is he, is a mystery. She remembered how her Veerji had seen her with a boy, coming back from collage and all her dreams turned into nightmare at same day. At night she had been threaten and morning, her wedding been fixed with no one. Well, she had to wait and was waiting with thudding heart.


##


"Who is he?'' Brij asked to his men gazing unconscious man on back seat of car.

"He is Dev's brother paaji. He was roaming around, looking for him'' One replied.

"Hmm, shabaash. Get him ready and reach there fast!! Mai nikalta hu '' Brij ordered them and he own, left for temple. After half an hour Brij saw them coming out from car, taking unconscious groom along with, supporting him with both sides. They reached inside and the temple door had been shut. Geet was in veil, could not see him but could see, he was trembling, walking with support of men. She got scared thinking he must be limp or drunk. Her last hope had drown. Tears trails started falling from her eyes.


Priest started chanting. Bride and groom sat beside. Brij was helping groom. Rano was shedding tears on her being helpless. She cursed Babaji to snatch her husband. If he had been there their princess would not have been in this state anymore. Her sobs disappears in chant of Feraa.


Marriage was completed. Geet hugged Rano crying loud, her heart out. The Groom was starting to gain his conscious. Before he could get his complete sense, they had been forced to sit in car and leave for out of village. They stopped to a guesthouse. Driver ,with the help of guard supported them settled inside the room. They kept groom on bed and left, leaving completely alone Geet with her unconscious husband, to start their new journey of life.


##


The Sun rises with his full arms, hugging this earth in his embrace, taking this entire world beneath. Gives the very first hope of new life and bringing back a continuity of spent days. But for some people, this continuity becomes the very reason of not to wish more because, they had nothing to long for further. Geet, had nothing to wish for. She had lost her last hope as well and now, she had to breath only. She had to live because her Babaji had given her this life which was not worthy for anyone or anything yet, she would live. She loved her Babaji and could not like to disparage him giving her mere life to him back. She would wait until He self, will not ask for her life and then she will be free from all her punishments. And she, will wait and pray for that day come soon.


She was thinking haphazardly, resting her head back on wall, sitting in a lone corner of same room in her same attire. She did not look her husband for once. She didn't want to. She wanted nothing now. Not for once she closed her eyes. She wanted to punish herself, for not dying. She was benumbed, did not see, her husband had gained conscious and was looking around with dazed eyes.


He held his head which was paining loud. He frowned finding himself in a total strange place. "Where I'm?'' he whispered. Rose up, opened door and came out. He saw the place was total unknown. He opened main gate and started to look around when was stopped with few random villagers. "Where're you going?'' one spoke.

"Why you need to know?'' he replied

"You can't go anywhere without her?''

"Without whom?'' He frowned.

"Without your bride''

"What!!! what the crap you're talking about. Leave away ..let me go''


"You can't go alone, didn't you hear me!!!!'' a man yelled, raising his rod in air. They all circled him close, stopping his every way out. "Now go inside . You can't leave until she comes with you!!!'' man threaten.


He was going to answer him back when his phone rang. He took it and went inside to talk in private.


"Hello Dev!! where the hell are you!!!!'' he shouted loud, making Geet jump in sudden fear.


"Bro I'm in Delhi. You can't even imagine what had happened with me. I was roaming around our site in Hoshiyaarpur and then someone hit me from back. When I got my conscious back I found myself all tied up and heard someone saying that i'll be married with some random girl. Bro, I had been kidnapped did you believe it!!! some how I escaped from there and reached here. By the way where are you bro.. Bro?? are you listening me?? hello bro??? ''


"i call you later Dev'' he hangs up staring to a direction which was, in front of him. A girl, in her red bridal dress, looking like a decorated wooden doll which had only one expression of face was that was, fear. Her feature was shaking, vibrating, face was bending down, like was searching something precious on ground, loosing all sense of this world. He could not see her face properly. " Who are you??'' he questioned. His voice was firm, hard and patience. He waited until his patience slips away and a thought '' Not without your bride'' runs in his mind. His expression changes. His leg moves him toward her, slowly. She unknowingly moved back, pushing wall behind, wishing to immerse in it if, were possible.


"I asked who are you??'' he gazed her dangerously.


She found no second choice. "G-Geet '' meekly said, near to mere whisper. "Geet Han-nda''


"W-wo.. our marriage.. so '' she could not complete when felt a forceful pull with his tight grip on her fragile arm. "Ahh!!'' a hiss came out from her mouth but disappeared when found herself out, surrounded with men with rods and guns.


" So this is my bride Hm!!'' he mocked before all villagers. He stares Geet who was looking down shivering. The pain of his grip was slightly visible on her face. He left her arm, don't know how, he noticed her frown.


"Now keep this girl here and let me leave!!!'' he roared. Men stared him. Their patience was vanishing and own-self was covering brutally. They pointed their guns to him.


In no time he pushed a man next, snatched a knife from him , pulled Geet before him like shield and kept knife on her neck.


"No one can stop Maan Singh Khurana!!! Leave !!!! leave away... else this girl, will be dead'' He thundered. Geet shocked with this sudden act. She felt like dead before he would kill him. She was alarmingly terrified, sweated and frightened.


"Kill her !!! '' Brij came out from back. He gazed Geet then Maan. "Kill her and you, can leave!!!''


"Brij veerji'' a silent whisper came out from her lips along with tears, making Maan shudder somewhere inside. He didn't want to harm her, just showing his threat to them. He was shocked to hear a brother was wanting to kill his own sister. His grip loosened. He had to play smart, he decided.


Brij smirked. "If you really want her to kill then I show you the best place for it. Take her in desert right from here and complete your task. If you are afraid then my men will do this for you !!!'' he moved to Geet. She moved back, unknowingly hid behind Maan, clutched his arm tight in, deadly terror. Maan could feel speedy pulse of her hand and loud beat of her heart. He looked her, over his shoulder. Her eyes was big and red in fear. Somewhere he didn't like her panic. He knew this marriage did not keep any place in front of him. In minute he could come out of all this drama but inward, he was little fearing for this girl. He could see these men will kill her if he leaves her here alone so, he agreed to take her with him. He left for Delhi with Geet.


##


They were silent in car. Specially Geet. She was still not knowing what happened suddenly her life turned to completely unknown side, which she never had imagined. She had no courage to look him, her husband who was sitting beside. She had still fear of to be left alone somewhere, in this desert and so, was panicking in anxiety. She was famished but could not sound out. She wanted to cry loud but could not. She wanted to talk scream but could not. She wanted to die but could not. She had nothing in her control, and so , she sobbed softly.


Maan looked her. He found her extremely beautiful. Seeing her condition he understood, this marriage was not in her acceptance. Somewhere he started knowing she was innocent in all this. He wanted to know why this happened, how. He started talking her.


"Ahem..'' he cleared his throat to start conversation. "Geet !'' his voice had normality.


She turned her face to him but did not rose or look him. " I want to know everything'' Maan asked


She thought for a while. He was talking properly without any shout, gave her some calm of heart. She tried to open her mouth and after some struggle, she succeeded. She said she too, did know anything. It all was a secret for her as well. She told about her family and Brij who had fixed this marriage. Maan remembered Dev call. He was saying something related to marriage and guessed, it was same gang who would have been kidnapped Dev too and after Dev escape they trapped him. He remembered how he was looking for Dev after his disappearing showing his photo and suddenly felt a hard hit on his head and then everything became black. After he found himself in guestroom and all those happened. His sharp mind started putting together all pieces in one frame. He looked back to her and found her already slept.


##


In Handa Haveli, Daarrji was talking to Brij, how he found Maan. Brij told he found Dev first near his new construction site. He was having his drink and staring village girls and was perfect, for Geet. But somehow he escaped and then his brother had been trapped, thinking he would be same as Dev. And today's incident made his thought more certain. How he threatened Geet to kill , made it clear he was too a bad character man and now they, did not have to worry about Geet, anymore.


##


Geet felt cool breeze of ambience on her face and made her open her eyes. She did not understand where she was but when saw Maan, every happening recalled clearly in her mind. She instantly straightened and looked down, nervously. Both had no idea what to do or talk. Everything was unclear and new. Somewhere Geet started to accept his presence in her life and Maan, wanted to try her existence, near him.


"You don't need to be scare of me Geet'' He said looking her. Wanted her to look him back. She conceded his wish, looked at him. Her innocent face attracted his vision. He wanted her to be free from any fear. A unknown wish appeared in his heart to make her happy, smiley as it would be the best achievement of his life , he felt. Was it consolation or anything else, he did not understand but whatever was, he was relishing it.


She was unsure about her emotion. Her family never admired her as their own expect Rano. Her heart cried thinking about her mother. She sobbed meekly. Her whimper pulled his attention to her. He felt bad , felt like comforting her. She was something new in his life, something strange but fresh. She was indeed a different part of his life and he, would not let it be half or incomplete. He will complete it with all his intensity and zeal. " Well.. at least now Dadima will be happy to see her '' He smiled slightly inward thinking how his Dadi was adamant to make him married man and now, he was.


"What the hell Maan!!! how can you accept her , this marriage easily!!! '' He cursed himself and braked car abruptly, making her jump and hit in window glass suddenly. "Are you okay?'' He held her head instantly without any second thought. He caressed her head, unwittingly letting a worry be appeared on face. She shivered with his touch, a fondly touch. She nodded.


" Is it paining??'' He asked unsure how she was feeling. It was real concern which came out in his heart seeing her hurt. She looked him, hearing his bother for her. It was first concern in her life which she was getting from a complete stranger but seemed, he will not be stranger, anymore from now, onward. Her eyes twinkled, finding finally her Babaji best gift, in her Daman, in her life. She smiled, welcoming him, honoring him entirely in her blank heart. He looked her smiling and felt peace. The sudden change of emotion left him messed up purely yet, he was calm unlike him. He decided to give this change a chance. A chance to their odd beginning of new life. A chance to his sudden deflected feelings toward her. A chance to let her rule in his life. A chance to their new relationship . A chance to them for their new future onward...


INDEX

Part 1 (page 1)

Part 2

Part 3

Part 4

Part 5

Part 6

Part 7

Part 8

Part 9

Part 10


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Posted: 12 years ago
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wowww lovely os lovu...differesnt concept...har jagha pe dev maan ko fassa dete h per isbar accha hua dev vag gaya isliye toh maan ke sath sadhi ho paya...ye birji kitna kamina h kaise keh diya kill her aur jagha v advice ki...hayeee maan ne toh accept kar li naa so aur kya batt hai...very nyc lovu...😃
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oh wow, it was an amazing first part, nice start

Brij 😡

how come a sister - bro can kidnapped any boy n married his sister to a stranger, n tht stranger too is unaware of his marriage

gud tht DEV ran away from marriage n finally MAAN married GEET

Poor GEET 😭 dont know her future

waiting for next update
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lovely os buddy :)

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i'll read and cmmnt after sometime yar.plz don't mind.
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Originally posted by: sona-rai

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i'll read and cmmnt after sometime yar.plz don't mind.


i wont mind sona .. but long commnt chahiye 😛
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Originally posted by: geet.lover


i wont mind sona .. but long commnt chahiye 😛

ok dear😃😃😃tmrrw i'll paka give u long cmmnt insha-allah😃😃😃
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This is really amezing story...waiting for next part plz iska bhi daily update do
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very lovely story..hope u can give another update..looking forward...
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Originally posted by: sona-rai

ok dear😃😃😃tmrrw i'll paka give u long cmmnt insha-allah😃😃😃


will be waiting 😃

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