Originally posted by: Tanuka_TanHa
I was hoping we are gonna get an update today and we did , Yippeeπ
ANINDITA π€resunres π³awesome update !!the way swayam stood between sharon and the mystery guy was really nice , protecting sharon always , also saved sharon from an accident .swayam and kaka's convo was very well penned , kaka was teasing swayam πsharon remembering donald in her sleep was cute .it will be interesting to see how sharon reacts to swayam sleeping so close to her on the same bed .really eager to know who was the mystery guy , suspense jaldi khol ani .will be waiting for the next part , update soon..thanks for the PM.
Originally posted by: pujan_luv_kreya
fabulous update.
omg.. sharon scared like hell...
swayam confused...π
sharon run n faint in swayam's arms...
sharon traped in fever...
sharon needs her donald (how cute)
swayam always there for her daisy (so sweet) ...
now i'm curious to know who's that evil?
who can intimidate swayam's daisy like this?
plz do update asap.
Originally posted by: deep_Tanha
resπ
unres...
Awww...its the CUTEST FF ever...π
I am madly in love with this FF...π³
Donald & Daisy...β€οΈ
...
Who was that person...i hope she will know his identity soon & they will together fight the evil..
Kaka-swayam convo was cute...swayam blushing...awwwβΊοΈ
She was missing her donald...even in sleep...awww...
βΊοΈβ€οΈ
LOVELY UPDATE...update soon swthrt ...
Originally posted by: pratik54000
heya mishty superb update...after long time i read your update...and i really enjoyed a lot both the updates...
now comming back to this update...it was superb...the way sharon was getting scared with that unknown person was really well created suspense...and swayam was also puzzled about her wierd behaviour...
But the suspense was still not reveled that who it was that scared sharon so much scared with person...what is the relation of that person with sharon??
than the road accident part and sharon fainting in swayam's arms...the way showed worried swayam and his actions were absolutely superb...and the monologues were just outstanding...
than swayam and ramu kaka convo came which was cheerful and brought all smiles to our faces...ramu kaka knew swayam liked her from all beginning and he came back for her so it was just cheerful...
than came rey swayam convo which irritated swayam as he had to lie and rey was all over him as dectactive...and finally after all the explainations rey gave swayam no and relief you showed there in swayam's expression was really enjoyable..than swayam.called sharon's home and still swayam is worried for sharon...
but the most cutest moment was now in the whole update sharon was remembering donald and wanted him near her...so it made her all happy so it was very nice way to end...waiting for next part now...
thanx for pm...do update soon...
pratik...
fabulous updateπππupdate next soon very soonπ
Love the way Swayam stood between Sharon and the mystery guy !! He's always there to protect her !! Ramu Kaka teasing Swayam about Daisy was cute too !! I can't wait to see Sharon's reaction when she wakes up and hopefully Swayam will let her know the truth that he is Donald !!
Originally posted by: marauder
Well I think that this update is more like calmness that precced a storm. I am sure kal Sharon pehle uthegi aur Swayam ka band bajayegi :p Looking forward to the moement when Swayam discloses his identity to her. Fabulously written update. Swayam and Ramu kakaa scene was amusing but it made me miss Swayam's mom and dad and her sister. They were awesome in the first chapter while teasing him. And the way Swayam took care of Sharon and meanwhile Sharon was mumbling donald in his sleep was really a nice touch. Will be waiting for the update.
Originally posted by: sadiyaswaron
Awesome update
But I really curious to know now who's that person whom sharon is afraid of.Kaka n swayam convo was really nice n uper se blushing swayam..:p
Waiting for next part eagerly
Originally posted by: Tanya_Swaronluv
Thanksuuu Annu for updating on my request on such short notice! I mean tum logon ke liye tu 2 saal bhi kam hotain hain this time u updated in 2 days...Hats off baby...to ME not to you..afterall i forced you to update...hahahahaπ
Coming to your update...It was mindblowing..i really loved it..I wonder who the secret bas***d is! Shivam?? um...may be..may be not..reveal soon..because i know something has happened to sharon in past when swayam(donald) was not here..π
Loved the ramu kaka and swayam's sweet talks..ramu kaka called sharon their house BAHU...AWWW!!!!! love it..Finger crossed kyun ke kal subah agr by mistake sharon swayam se pehle uth gai...tu phir swayam kabhi bed se uth hi nahi payege..He will be dead because..hahahaπ
Do update soon darling..!π
And PM me..
Originally posted by: shaani2209
lovely update anuπ
liked how kaka was pulling swayam's legπand the swayam worried for her n how he managed to get the number was nicely put...waiting to know about sharon n that person(shivam he hogaπ³)do update sooner next time...thanks for the pm...
Originally posted by: surbhimathur
Anindita...wow..you updated fast mahn!! π
who's that man?? like rosh said..is that shivam?? gosh yaha bhi! π€’
Poor sharon...she really got scared..!
Behosh ho gayi bechaari...! π
And haha kaka toh gazab nikle! π
Hope swayam tells her the truth! π
Originally posted by: lassipriya
thanks for d pm!!
nice update..
i love d way u choose pics of swaron in all chapters of ur ff..nice idea π
sharon becomg vulnerable swayam confused n trg to pacify his daisy... was nicely penned down..
"Donald i need you." "i am always there for you daisy..forever..i love you."sharon rememberg her donald was really cute n swayam feelg happy listeng to it...π³
Ramu Kaka teasing Swayam about gudiya was amusing n cute π
reyam convo was funny... swayam getg irritated and as rey keeps on askg questions...π n he tryg to get sharon's no
who wakes up first.?? π i hope Swayam discloses his identity to his daisy.. waitg to see Sharon's reactn when she comes to know dat swayam is her donald...
Originally posted by: swaronamit
Wow grt update yaar...luvingthe story and i m sure koi shivam type character hoga woh person...thnks for pm and do update soon
Originally posted by: frankyfio
awesome update
Originally posted by: sanstina
Awesome update π
loved the way swayam was caring for sharonwaiting for sharon's reaction when she will know about her donald
Originally posted by: sweetsimi123
Awesome update dear...
Thnkx for the PM...
Update soon and please PM me...βοΈ
Res...will unres after exams...
Originally posted by: truptiswaron
hey just read ur all update in one go.i just loved it.
send u buddy req.pls accept it nd next time pls pm me. π
Originally posted by: princessaaliya
great updateee...
thnx for the pmswaron were too cute..continue soon!
Originally posted by: AmRiTa_S
Cute one..Swayam is taking care of his daisy so sweet. I hope she does not fight with him. Thnx for the PM..update soon. π
Originally posted by: prateekdave7
Thanx a lot for pm, so this part is really awsum.. i like the swayam and ramu kaka convo..in which ramu kaka's comments are super best..
but this time u again stop at big question mark.??
who is that person..?
my curiousity level is going at high volts...
so pls, update next part asap...
and last, i love u'r unique way of picturisation to a particular scene...
i think u'r story is only one at 'IF',which contain pictures with each scenes...
i loved this pictures,which justify the present scenario.. ... (particular scene)...
hats off for u...
prateek..
Originally posted by: Sudha-SK
Throughout the first part of the update i was thinking the same as Swayam, who could be the mystery guy in the lift, why was Sharon so tensed and how dare he trouble Swyam's daisy? Will wait to know more but loved how Swayam took care of her and his concern for her and how he was being teased by kaka..nicely done. Looking forward to read what the Siren-Diva Sharon is going to do with Swayam..am sure that is going to be fun :P I hope Swayam tells her soon enough that he is her Donal before she kills him bare hand :P
P.S - Loved the pics you added..ekdum mast and goes with your update and setting..Love them..
Originally posted by: Joshua_TANHA
res ...
Unres:It is a cute update!!!Now who is that guy , whom sharon is scared of π² ...When sharon was having cough in D3 , i expected swayam to take care of her in serial . If not in D3 atleast in your FF iam able to visualise π Swayam taking care of sharon was cute and on top Kaka teasing swayam π ...Morning when sharon wakes up first thing I think she is going to say is "How dare you" π
Anindita π€
*a big wali pappi and a big wali jhappi*hayyee kya update thaππFantastically pennedππThe way ramu kaka was teasing majnu boy was soo adorable and cuteβοΈand swayam taking care of his daisy was so so SwaRonPlease update soon ^^P.S- The best line of the update was "donald I need you" π³π³ *Touchwood*
Originally posted by: arjuhiswaron007
Amazzingg Update!!
Loved Swayam's unconditional concern and love for Sharonπ
Chapter 9
Swayam's flat, Mumbai
The clock was striking 2:55am. Two souls were sleeping peacefully in each other's arms.
One of them started to wake up. It was Sharon. She felt something heavy on her, something blocking her from moving. She opened her eyes and saw swayam was sleeping peacefully hugging her tight. She was shocked. She was fully awake now. She jerked his hands off from her body and sat on the bed making some distance between them. Swayam moved a little bit and then again falls asleep. Yesterday's events flashed in her mind. She again started shivering remembering that prison and that monster. Then she remembers that moment where swayam saved her from getting hit by the car and then she fainted in his arms.
Sharon: [looking at him in her mind] thank god kal swayam mere saath tha nahi toh pata nahi kya ho jata. Lift mein woh.. [tears started to flow from her eyes]
Then today's event flashed in her mind. Swayam sleeping beside her hugging her tightly. She immediately wiped her tears.
Sharon: [in her mind] yeh monkey. How dare he touch me? Chorungi nahi main isse. He slept on the same bed that too hugging me? How dare he do that?
Sharon: [jerking him] swayam utho. RIGHT NOW.
Swayam moves a little bit and says
Swayam: kaka sone do na. Abhi toh soya tha.
Sharon: [again jerking him] TUM ABHI UTHOGE YA NAHI?
Swayam pushes Sharon by her face, turns around and covers his head with the pillow and says
Swayam: please don't disturb me.
Sharon: [in her mind] mujhe dhakka deta hai. Mujhe? Sharon raiprakash ko? Abhi dikhati hoon isse.
She gets down from the bed furiously and looked for the bathroom. When she finds it she went inside the bathroom and searches for an empty bucket. After getting it she places the empty bucket under the tap and opens it. She then waited for the water to reach till the rim of the bucket. When it was done she took the bucket full of water and proceeded towards the bed. While going towards the bed her eyes fell on something. She placed the bucket on the ground. It was her favourite doll. The one with which they have promised to be together forever. Her mind took her to that day when she gave her baby..her favourite doll to him.
11 years ago [swaron 7 years old][the day shekhawat family left Mumbai]
Swayam was waiting for Sharon at the park to meet her for the last time before going to London. He was very sad because he will have to leave his best friend and his family behind. Raiprakash family was like his own family. And for Sharon shekhawat family was like her own family. He waited for one hour but she didn't come. He then went to her room and saw her crying holding their baby doll. His little heart ached seeing his best friend daisy crying. He went towards her and with his little fingers wiped her tears.
Swayam: ro mat daisy. Main bohot jaldi wapas aayunga. Ekbar mujhe bada hone de. Main aa jayunga tere pass.
Sharon: [sniffing] tu chala jayega toh hamari promise ka kya hoga. Meri aur hamari baby doll ka kheyal kaun rakhega.
Swayam: main rakhunga na kheyal hamari baby doll ka. Main isse apne saath London leke jayunga. Main iska hamesha kheyal rakhunga. Lekin ha jab main wapas aa jayunga na tab hum dono milke iska kheyal rakhenge. Aur mujhe hamari baby doll ki jarurat paregi na London mein. Waha tu nahi hogi toh main kisse baat karunga?
Sharon: [questioning eyes] achha tu isse apne saath leke jayega toh mera kya hoga? Main toh bilkul akeli par jayungi na?
Swayam: [smiling] nahi main bhi tere pass kuch chodke jayunga na..
Sharon: kya?
Swayam: ruk..
He runs out of the room and after few seconds comes back with a Donald soft toy which he hid outside of her room to surprise her.
Swayam: yeh main mom k saath jake tere liye laya hoon. Jab tujhe mujhse baat karni ho isse baat kar lena aur main hamare baby doll se baat karunga jab bhi mujhe tujhse baat karni hogi.
Sharon: [flashing a cute smile] wow yeh kitni pyaari hai [takes it from his hands and hugs it]
Swayam: hai na? bilkul teri tarha hai.
She in return gives him a huge smile.
Swayam: main bohot jaldi hi wapas aa jayunga daisy. Tu kisi aur ko apna dost mat banana. Mera wait karna. Aur hamara promise yaad rakhna.
Sharon: main kabhi kisi aur ko dost nahi banayungi. Hamesha apna promise yaad rakhungi. Aur tu bhi yaad rakhna.
Swayam: ha hamesha.
Present day
Sharon happily looks at sleeping swayam and then quickly jumps on the bed and hugs him tightly. She felt she is the happiest person of this world. Tears of happiness came running out of her eyes. That person for whom she has waited for more than a decade is here with her. That person whom she needs the most. Whom she loves the most. Her life. Her Donald. Then she remembers those moments where he was teasing her by calling himself a cartoon. She clutched his shirt and with rolling eyes said to herself.
Sharon: hmm toh mister Donald. Mujhe satane me koi kasar nahi chora hai aapne. Usdin mere samne ek k baad ek jelly candy's kha rahe the aur aapne aap ko cartoon bol bol ke mujhe tease karte rahe. Mujhe bataya bhi nahi ki tum Donald ho. Ab kya lagta hai tumhe main tumhe chod dungi. Main tumse pura revenge lungi mister. You are in for a big trouble now.
She had a naughty smile flashed on her face. She left him and gets down from the bed. She again took the bucket full of water and splashed the water forcedly on swayam. He jerked up from his sleep saying
Swayam: OH NO MERE GHAR MEIN TSUNAMI AAYA HAI. MUJHE KOI BACHAO. MUJHE KOI BACHAO.
Then he realizes it was not tsunami it was Sharon who splashed water on him. She was standing in front of him with folding hands over her chest. That sight gave him the shock of his life.
He rubbed his eyes to believe what he was seeing is truth. He looked at the clock nervously. It was striking 3:20.
Swayam: [in his mind] yeh itni jaldi kaise uth gayi. Cute daisy se sherni ka roop dharan kar liya hai isne. Aise dekh rahi hai jaise abhi mujhe kha jayegi. Ab toh bhagwan bhi mujhe nahi bacha payenge. Ab main kya karu? Kaha jayu?
He gulps down the lump in his throat and nervously opens his mouth.
Swayam: listen..sharon..woh..
Sharon: daisy.
Swayam: [shocked] haan?
Sharon: DAISY.
Swayam: daisy matlab?
Sharon: WHAT THE HELL DO YOU MEAN BY DAISY MATLAB?
Swayam: [he understood she knows it that he is donald] tumhe kaise pata chala?
She points her finger towards their baby doll. Swayam looks at that direction and understood she is pointing towards their baby doll.
Swayam: [in his mind] arre yaar main hamari baby doll ko toh kal cupboard mein rakhna hi bhool gaya. Daisy ko surprise karne k chakkar mein mujhe duniya ka sabse bara jhakta lag gaya. Ab ye mujhe mar dalegi.
Swayam: daisy woh..
Sharon: KYA WOH HAAN? KYA WOH? Tumne mujhe batana jaruri nahi samjha ki tum Donald ho. And upar se mujhe tease karte rahe. Meri dil ki sari baat janli aur mujhe apna bataya bhi nahi..
Swayam: [smirking] achha toh tumhe meri dil ki baat janni hai. Kya kya sunna chahti ho tum?
Sharon: SHUT UP.
She picks a pillow and throws it on him.
Swayam: arre par meri baat toh suno..
Sharon: mujhe kuch nahi sunna. Ab tum sirf meri baat sunoge.
She started to throw the remaining pillows on him. Then she ran towards the kitchen. He silently follows her to see what she is up to. He saw that she was searching for something in the racks. Then he saw her picking up the bucket of flour and coming towards him like an angry rinosaurous. He ran towards his room and she followed him.
Swayam: daisy kya kar rahi ho. Meri baat toh sunlo.
She didn't say anything. She throws the flour on him. Half of the flour fell on him and the remaining fell on the bed. Then she picked the powder case from the dresser and throws the powder on him. He was looking like a white ghost with flour and powder all over him.
Then she took the flower vase in her hand which was there on the bed side table.
Swayam: daisy pagal ho gayi ho kya? Usse rakh do. Bhoot aa gaya hai kya tumhare andar?
Sharon: TUMNE MUJHE BHOOT KAHA?
Swayam: maine tumhe kab bhoot kaha?
Sharon: ABHI.
Swayam: par..
Sharon: [cuts him] you are so dead now.
She started to run after him. They were running all over the room. While running swayam jumped on the bed and he slipped because of the messy wet powdery bed cover. He was about to fall when Sharon comes and holds him trying to stop him from falling. But her sudden force made him loose balance and they toppled over and fell on the bed. Sharon was on top of swayam. But he quickly rolled over and took the flower vase from her hand and kept it aside and holds her wrists from either side.
Swayam: meri baat toh suno pehle.
Sharon: KYA?
Swayam: I only wanted to surprise you. Tumhe surprise karne k chakkar mein mujhe itna bara jhakta milega kise pata tha.
Sharon: huh jhakta haan?
Swayam: [in a very low voice] hmm
She understood he was lost in her. Their faces were too close. Just inches apart. He was lost in her beauty, in her big greenish eyes and she could only see pure love for her, she could only see her own image in those chocolaty brown eyes. In the eyes of her love, her life. He started to lean forward. She slowly lowers her gaze. Both were lost in each other. They could feel each other's hot breath on their face. He slowly brushed his right cheek on her right cheek and kissed the mark softly which was left by the flour. She closes her eyes and shivered. His touch made her shiver. He then slowly moved his hands forward from her wrist towards her palm and intertwined his fingers with her. He then brushed his left cheek on her left cheek and kissed the mark softly. He brushed her tiny nose with his nose and kissed it. Then he leaned to claim her soft rosy lips.
For the first time i updated this fast. Just within 1 day π I know this chapter is a bit long. I hope you all didn't get bore reading it. Do hit the like button and leave your precious comments. Please forgive me for my mistakes. Thank you.
Swayam: main bohot jaldi hi wapas aa jayunga daisy. Tu kisi aur ko apna dost mat banana. Mera wait karna. Aur hamara promise yaad rakhna.
Sharon: main kabhi kisi aur ko dost nahi banayungi. Hamesha apna promise yaad rakhungi. Aur tu bhi yaad rakhna.
And the strond..tsunami ...aha...loved it...finally the romance...cute ..adorable...the kiss...
I LOVE THIS FF...OFFICIALLY π³
U R AMAZING SWTHRT...LOVELY UPDATE...plz update soon...
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