Asya-True love pt2page3

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Hey guys, this is Farhana, I want to start a story on AsYa, It's my first so please bear if it's lame. I'm going to try writing urdu/hindi but I'm a total zero at it so please don't mind
Also excuse my grammatical mistakes
Here goes...

Part 1

New York, a very busy city, where everyone thinks for themselves and themselves only, but among them was one who only thought for his mother and sister, it was none other than Asad Ahmed Khan. A young, not to mention good looking Architect. He started his business at the mere age of 16, with the help of his mother, after his father had abandoned them for another rich woman. They were a small Muslim family living among the rest of the citizens.
He sat in front of his laptop clicking numerous keys, the sun a couple of hours away from rising. He had to finalize a deal through net and his eyes were stuck to the screen. With one hand he reached over to the not-so-warm coffee mug, not daring to move his eyes away from the screen. For Asad this was life, every morning Asad woke up with a new goal, that too for his mother, who took care of him and his sister, Najma, through tough times and Najma, who always looked up to him as her father figure, she was too young too even remember how her father looked, but Asad did, every little detail on his face, his image was etched into Asad's brain, he disgusted him. Asad clenched his fist around the handle of the mug thinking of him...
Knock Knock
He looked up to find his mother walk into his bedroom...
Dilshaad Khan a single mother who bore two kids
Dilshaad- Asad?
Asad- Ammi...aap jaake so jaiye...
Dilshaad- Asad yeh saab kya hai, raat ke 4 baje hai aur tum abhi bhi jag rahi ho?
Asad- Ammi mujhe bhas yeh deal final karne hai phir so jaounga, aap please jaake so jaiye.
And he didn't say further, but looked back to the screen, his mother shook her head and exited the room closing the door behind.
He looked up one more time at the door before his eyes moved back to the screen.
The clock kept ticking and the clicking of keyboard keys didn't stop. From 4 am it went to 5, but Asad Ahmed Khan was yet to sleep, but time didn't stop it kept going and finally the clock hit 6 and the ringing of his alarm went on.
He stood up and slowly made his way to his bed side and shut it off, he then rubbed his eyes, the results of zero hours of sleep. Now he had to head to office, they had to sign a contract for a new deal today. He closed the laptop screen and headed to the bathroom, but before doing that he un-draped his windows of his curtains letting the sun in revealing a clean bedroom with blue painted walls and magnificent furniture, everything was set in it's exact place, and not a spec of dirt was visible.
He slid open his wardrobe door and took a clean towel and a change of cloths and headed to the bathroom.
This was the life of Asad Ahmed Khan

That's it guys, how was it? Please leave your opinions and point out my mistakes, and let me know if I should continue... it'll mean a lot to me
Thanks <3
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blueflames thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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interesting please do update soon.

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its very nice..do continue soon
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hey first was superb..loved it
plz add me in ur pm list
plz update soob
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nice start...continue soon...just wondering you love ian somerhalder too?
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very nice plzz update soon
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Hey this was amaazing
loved the start
want to read more
pls update soon and pm me
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Loved it. Can't wait to read more. I guess the next update is going to be on the life of Zoya? I just have a suggestion, can you please italic the line, when the people speak? It would make it easier to read, and I won't get confused with the description. Ah, someone loves Ian. I like him to, he is a nice guy. Do you watch Vampire Dairies?

-Maria
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: leafmaria

Loved it. Can't wait to read more. I guess the next update is going to be on the life of Zoya? I just have a suggestion, can you please italic the line, when the people speak? It would make it easier to read, and I won't get confused with the description. Ah, someone loves Ian. I like him to, he is a nice guy. Do you watch Vampire Dairies?


-Maria


Yes I will make sure that I italic the line when a person's speaking
and yes I watch Vampire Diaries
Thank you for commenting
Edited by risingsea101 - 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: ilvuday

nice start...continue soon...just wondering you love ian somerhalder too?


Thank you for commenting
Yes I love Ian <3

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