SwaRon os:An Angel in White❤️

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Posted: 13 years ago
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k guys m writing an os after real long tym...its nt hot romance, nor u ll find a sinle kiss or hug..but its just the romance wic depicts purity, innocence n yearnin fr LOVE...yyeah i hav ma ss to be updated..but fr now enjoy this one..well one more thing..i saw sharon lukin absolutely stunnin in saree in fiona ka siggy..so i gav her an indian luk in ma write up..

character sketch fr some characters:
sunaina:swayam ki mom
rishab:swayam ka dad
seema:sharon ki mom
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the snow filled hilly area..all around the place luked no less than heaven..undoubtedly Kashmir is the heaven on earth..two guys gt out of their car n luked all around the place..a handsome guy tuk of his glares n viewd the most beautiful place he ever saw before..

swayam 'bhagwaan ne bhi kaisi duniya banayi hai yaar..a master piece of his creation'

well yeah his eyes was one such master piece made by god..but he never thanked god abt it.Swayam was here wit his best friend Rey.Swayam always loved photography n no place wud be better than kashmir to click the beauty of heaven.

Rey 'haan yaar..jagah aisi hai..toh yahan ki chicks kaisi hogi?'
Swayam 'tu apne bird hunting main lag jaa..aur main apne camera ke saath iss paradise ke saat romance kartha hu..
Rey 'cool dude..pata nahi tu kabh ladkiyon ko dekhega..'
Swayam 'jab koi dekhne layak mile..'
Rey 'hope aaj tujhe yahan koi mil jaye mere dost..accha teek ab chalo'

Swayam n Rey start on their journey..they walk around the streets of kashmir..a beautiful place wic had a world created by its own..a diffrent style of dressing,their accessories wer much heavier n yet beautiful..the streets had kinda markets all around sellin fruits,variety of necklaces,bangles n such heavily studded accessories..some places had these chaiwala's,butta sellers..

with every walk rey saw gals who luked absolutely simple n elegant.Their apple red complexion almost killed him..

rey 'yaar in ladkiyon ke gaal toh dekh yaar..bilkul kashmiri apple jaisa hai yaar..'

swayam was busy wit his cam clickin pics..

swayam 'unse bhi zyada khoobsurat dekhne layak cheezein hai yaha yaar..just luk at the ppl..i love their dresiin sense..woh accessories..yeh markets..all around pahads..so beautiful..place is breath takin..'

rey 'tera kuch nahi ho saktha'

they walked down the lane..wer they saw a bunch of school kids happily merryin songs as they wer their way back home..swayam clicked pictures of these kids..a smile curved his lips..he joined them in their walk n started merrying wit them..he laughed n enjoyed with the kids..rey too joined him..n they wer jumping like kids..swayam was still capturin the pics n he turned around still wit his camera..n suddenly he saw something wic he cudnt take his eyes off..he still luked from his camera..aww..wat a pleasant eye pleasin beauty she was..her smile cud lit thousands of lights..her eyes twinkled more than the stars wud do at night..she had the perfectly carved figure n she was dressed in pure white half sleeve salwar..she had this heavy kashmiri kinda silver earings..her hair brushed so perfectly...the open hair beauty was even loved by the air around her tat they kept playin ith her hair n duppatta..she was thr in the market buying bangles for her..she tried the bangles one by one..n loved playin wit them..she was with her friend or may be a relative he thought..he removed away his camera n saw her from his naked eyes..his heart lost a beat..a smile curved his lips..

rey 'oye kya dekh raha hai'

rey's call disturbed swayam n he turned to him..

swayam 'nothin'

sayin so he turned again tu luk at the magnificient creations ever..ohh..!he lost her..she wasn't ther..he ran towards tat shop..he luked all around..but he cudnt find her..he ran around the whole market..rey realised tat somethin is wrong wit swayam..he followed him to knw wat was it that he is searching for..

rey 'swayam ruk yaar..kisse dhoond raha hai'
swayam 'woh..ladki..'
rey 'arre wah ladki..pehli baar tu kisi ladki ke baare main baat kar raha hai..exciting'
swayam 'shut up yaar..kaha gayi woh??'
rey 'ahhaa..!aaj tak mumbai main saari ladkiya tere peeche bhagthi thi..aur aaj pehli baar tu kisi ladki ke peeche bhaag raha hai..woh bhi first luk main hi..not bad..kuch toh baat hogi uss ladki main'

swayam wud always get irritated wen rey spk some flirty lines but fr the first time swayam dint react much..his eyes wer constantly searchin fr the beauty he saw..

rey 'chod yaar chali gayi shayad..chal raat hone ko hai..hume tikhana bhi toh dhoondna hoga..warna sadak par sona padega..chal abhi'

swayam was nt much bothered abt wat rey was talkin abt..his eyes still serachin n wondering whether wat he saw was true o not..rey just pulled swayam n made him sit inside the car n they drove off..they finally gt a place to rest..rey was damn tired n he slept off soon as they had to travel tomorrow to himachal wic was quite far away frm kashmir..

swayam mind was nt stable..he gt up from his bed n sat beside the window..the cool breeze hittin his face gain reminded him of the angel he saw..he still had the glimpses of the beautiful gal he saw..he said to himself 'kya woh sach main thi ya..mera wehem tha..matlab achanak se koi kaise gayab ho saktha hai..but she was soo damn beautiful..simple but yet elegant..ek pari se kam nahi thi woh..'

he tuk out his camera in wic he clicked her pics..he went thru the pics again..'kitni khoobsurath hai..her eyes reflects her pure heart, her smile her innocence, her dressin her simplicity, her hair reflected her soft nature n her lips reflected her overall beauty..koi itna perfect kaise ho saktha hai??no i gus..she was ma imagination..may be an angel..tats it..kyunki in reality koi itni perfectly beautiful to nahi ho sakthi..i gus i shud sleep..aur waise bhi agar woh sach hai.fir bhi shayad mere naseeb main nahi hai..'with the heavy heart he slept off..

5 months later in mumbai

rishab 'swayam beta tum tayyar ho na'
swayam 'haan dad..packin sab ho gayi hai..'
sunaina 'hope beta iss baar tujhe koi ladki pasand aajaye..warna tu har baar ladkiyon ko reject kar detha hai..'
swayam(huggin his mom) 'mama..main kya karu..koi mujhe pasand anewali abhi tak mili hi nahi...(he had the flashbacks of the angel he saw n murmurred)ya shayad mili..par woh mere naseeb main hi nahi hai..'
sunaina 'tumne kuch kaha beta?'
swayam 'haa..nahi mama..'
rey 'abe saale idhar aa..maza ayega..aaj tere liye ladki dekne jayenge..'
sunaina 'arre rey agaya tu..accha hai..chalo jaldi kar lets move'

swayam n rey both had no idea to wic place they wer goin..their flight landed in delhi n thn they finally they reached kashmir..swayam n rey wer utterly shocked at the sight of kashmir..

rey 'kashmir??'
rishab 'kyun tuna socha hum london ja rahe hai?'(teasin)
rey 'arre nahi uncle..woh bas aise hi..'(n luked at swayam's face)

though swayam never spk abt the angel later..rey knew that the gal had made an impact in his heart wic he cud never ever wash away..rey many times had seen swayam lukin at her pictures in his lappy..swayam had started likin the gal just by lukin at her only once..he had lost his heart n mind fr her..though swayam's parents wer the coolest mom dad on ths earth..he still hided things frm them wit the matter of fact that she was just someone who he cud never ever get in his life..

swayam's face turned pale..n again his eyes unwantedly n unknowingly started searchin fr tat angel..they wer on their way to some rai prakash's house wer he cud see the gal who might be his future wife..but he hardly was interested..the place gain brought all his 5 months old memories back..

they reached the rai prakash house

swayam and his family wer greeted..all sat on the sofa n started discussing abt their personal matters..sunaina started spkin abt household stuffs wit seema(gals mom)like a typical housewife..the men wer discussing the buisness matters..swayam remained silent n rey watching swayam still remained silent..swayam was told to take sweets n snacks by seema..he tuk them n gav a slight smile..

seema 'haan woh dekhiya aa rahi hai hamari beti..'

the cool breeze welcomed her..swayam felt a wierd but very strong feelin in his heart..he closed his eyes n he cud sense the angel..he opened his eyes n luked up wer the gal was walkin n comin downstairs..he only cud see a few glimpses of her coz of the long curtains disturbing his sight...n now he saw her walkin down stairs..his eyes cudnt believe wat he saw..a smile curved his lips..his heart again skipped a beat..oh they started pondering..he dint even blink his eyes for a second may be wit the fear that he might again loose this breath takin sight..he lost her once..n dint wanted to loose her again..yes his angel was ther right in front of his eyes..again dressed in perfectly white salwar studded wit silver n jardosi works..she had untied her long beautiful hair..she had wore a dozen of silver n white bangles..she had this smile cravin her lips..it was this sight wic he longed frm past 5 months in his life n she was finally here..right in front of his eyes..the gal slowly luked up to see who is the man gazin at her..their eyes met..for the first time she saw a pair of deep black eyes wic wer no less than PERFECT..it seemed like a deep sea..with some much of love,care,affection,longing n need..wit just one sight she fell in love wit this man..but unaware of the fact that he was already in love wit her..

*swayam mind voice*

"An angel in white stole my heart 5 months ago n nw she is here in front me going to be mine forever..She wasn't my imagination but she is my Destiny.."

~~~END~~~

k guys i knw its silly..😛but i had written this in another forum..so i thought i shud write it on my SwaRon too..hope u guys like it..do hit the like button n do comment plss..joothe chappals bhi chalenge..😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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RES

🤗I m here even with out your PM
So let me read this Awesome OS from you and will comment in soon.

Beautifully written Neetha 👏
You gave me a feel of visiting Kashmir in person, the way you shown what Swayam felt for the gal he just saw moments ago, was awesome. So pristine you made Sharon seem n white..nicely done.
Loved the humor you gave this OS with ReYam. and the last line was perfect..just loved it. It was nice to see a very different angel to a SwaRon we know off.


"An angel in white stole my heart 5 months ago n nw she is here in front me going to be mine forever..She wasn't my imagination but she is my Destiny.."
Kuduos to this line dear 👍🏼


Edited by Sudha-SK - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Neethu...SwaRon and boring!!! ... Naah

They hav so many facets to them that u can keep on fantasizing them in different scenarios - this Kashmir angle was well-attempted - from ur description thru the eyes of Swayam of the beauty of the place and the beauty of Sharon, both were vying as to who is more beautiful - there was a pristine quality to the imagery thruout and the white color which u described Sharon in... enhanced the beauty even more as we all know that Sharon luks so angelic in white...it was a sweet romantic (for me toh tha!!!) OS

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Posted: 13 years ago
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SwaRon and boring !!! As Meera said not possible. A beautiful OS. Loved the way you have captured the beauty of SwaRon romance along with the serenic beauty of Kashmir. And your description of Sharon was just breath taking. And btw awesome title for the OS. Thanks for writing this .
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Anant nd navya ..
But this story luks beautiful on swaron too awsm work..
Loved it
thnx for pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Neethaaa!!!! you call dis boringgg???
are you serious my friend? 😲😲

Damn dis was soo good!! I loved reyam..obviously their bond is awesome...! 😃
and i could literally imagine sharon in the white kashmiri salwar nd kurta...breathtaking beauty!!
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aur haan...tumne apne killer ka naam edit nhi kiya ek jagah..haha anant!!!
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i lovedd these lines especially--


well yeah his eyes was one such master piece made by god..but he never thanked god abt it.
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"An angel in white stole my heart 5 months ago n nw she is here in front me going to be mine forever..She wasn't my imagination but she is my Destiny.."
❤️

I absolutely loved itt!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I'm guessing this was written for the Navya forum... I read Anant at one place which you missed!

It was beautiful!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wowww!!awesum 1!esp sharon in indian luks,dat 2 in white..with kashmiri touch..wohhh!! real me hoti toh,wow!!!angel dikhti!!!i can imagine her!anways,hw cn u call dis boring????huh?hav u gone crazy gal??i was jst awwwsum & swayam,wid his killer smile..hayeee..mar jawan me toh!!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@surbhi...tune bacha liya... 😆 😆 😆maine edit kar diya woh..

@pree ya i had written ths thr some days ago..😆😆

@d3lover now i knw hw u gt it gal..😆😆


@all sorry fr the mistake😛😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: neetha

@surbhi...tune bacha liya... 😆 😆 😆maine edit kar diya woh..


@pree ya i had written ths thr some days ago..😆😆

@d3lover now i knw hw u gt it gal..😆😆


@all sorry fr the mistake😛😳



Arre dun be sorryy!! we are grateful to you for putting dis up on swaron!!
ThankYou neetha
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