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Posted: 13 years ago
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Sorry…sorry guys for my disappearing act. I was travelling on work and hence no connection to personal sites. Also not responding to any comments though in my mind I did it…I just so want to comment back but time constraints... But Thanks a lot for your detailed analysis, feedback and burst of emotions. I feel so elated after reading your comments and love you all for showering me with so much affection….muaah.

Next, this chapter was vey difficult for me to balance. So Maan and Geet lovers let me know if I did justice to both their emotions.

Also now few clarifications -

Ok first thing I want to clarify guys. Mohinder is not listening to their talks. He asked the door to be open so that they can hear if Geet calls out to them or cries. That's all. I don't think that was clear. Basically he doesn't trust to leave Geet alone with Maan where if she needs them, they wouldn't know about it.

Next a buddy asked me how can Geet allow divorce and leave him now when she herself decided to stay in this relationship. How can she just let her parents decide for her and Maan. Thanks dear for the question. My point of view as a writer is that she doesn't know what he feels for her. She thinks she is a burden on him. Also, she thinks it was her decision to stay with him and not his and that is the issue. She is not letting her parents decide but she is convinced that her feelings are one sided and Maan wants to be out of this relationship. It may be wrong on her part to presume because she has misread Maan's silence.

Hope next few parts will make things clearer from her POV. She is just thinking at this point that Maan is not happy with her and she has failed. She hasn't blamed Maan in anything. She just does not want to be a burden on him and want her happiness. Now it is up to Maan to ascertain where his happiness lies.

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Chapter 39

Maan entered the room softly to find Geet sitting at the window gazing at the moon with her back facing the door. Even in that pose, he could see lines of water etched on her cheeks as her silent tears rolled down her eyes. She sat like a statue looking at oblivion with no sanity of her surrounding.

Maan coughed slightly to bring her back. She was startled and turned around to find Maan standing in front of her. She never expected him to come back for her and it just seemed like a figment of her imagination. With a slight smile even as fresh ears rolled off her eyes, she kept on looking at him in trance.

Maan felt new pain pierce his heat as he realized that she was not responding because she thought of all of this as a dream. He understood the need to win her trust back. She could probably not even relate to his emotions anymore. The damage he had inflicted on her emotionally will not let her believe that he truly loved her. For the first time, he realized the need of going slow and to win her back along with her trust one step at a time. He realized the need for making her believe that her love was not a one sided street.

He gulped down the raging emotions inside his chest and controlled himself. He called out softly to her "Geet"

Geet's eyes widened in response as if realizing just now that he was there for real. She hastily wiped her tears and looked down to control herself "Aap yahaan"

[You here?]

They both stood silently for few moments before both blurted together "I am sorry"

Again a small silence stretched between them as they both tried to realize the words they just heard. Maan was fascinated with the mere thought that after so much also, Geet was saying sorry. He tried to make the conversation - "Saari galti toh meri hai phir tum kyon sorry bol rahi ho?"

[It's all my fault then why are you saying sorry?]

Geet just looked down trying to control her tears. She shook her head in denial – "Nahin that is not true. Please trust me I did not want dad to find out anything. I was just talking to mom and he just…he heard it and…I am sorry. I don't know what he said to you or Daadima but I never wanted truth to come out like this. I never wanted you to get humiliated in front of everyone. Please believe me I am really sorry…I…"

"Chup bilkul chup. Bas bhi karo Geet. Ab bhi tum sorry bol rahi ho. First of all I trust you and I know you will never do anything knowingly to harm me ever. Secondly, acha hi hua sab ko pata chal gaya. After all, they all are our family and have every right to know. Koi gair nahi tha wahan ki I will feel humiliated.

Galti toh maine ki hai. Bahut badi galti. I know that my behavior and my decisions were wrong. Unhe haq hai mujhe daantna ka, sazaa dene ka. Waise bhi, I may not have said it before but they are part of the reason I married you. Mujhe unmein apne mom-dad dikhte hain. Aur jab bache galti karte hain toh parents ka hi haq hota hai unhein thik karne ka. It is not humiliation but their love."

[Keep quiet. Stop it Geet. Even now, you will say sorry? First of all I trust you and I know you will never do anything knowingly to harm me ever. Secondly, it is good only that everyone came to know of truth. After all, they all are our family and have every right to know. No one was a stranger there that I will feel humiliated.

I am the one who has made a mistake. A big mistake. I know that my behavior and my decisions were wrong. They have right to scold me, punish me. Moreover, I may not have said it before but they are part of the reason I married you. I see my own mom-dad in them. And when children make mistakes, it is parent's prerogative to make them realize it. It is not humiliation but their love.]

"Lekin Maan"

[But Maan]

"Please Geet let me speak today. Don't think that I am saying all this because of what happened today. Sach to yeh hai ki I did not say what I felt correctly. I am very bad at words so phir se koshish karta hoon.

Before going on this trip itself I had decided to move ahead in this relationship. I missed you a lot over the trip and somewhere in my mind I just accepted you and moved on. But I never mentioned it to you and after I came back... Aaj jo kuch bhi hua, it was not because of the name of our relationship but because I truly care. I care Geet for you and for our relationship.

I did a mistake of not telling you first how I feel but still the fact is that for me now your happiness, dream and pains are not different from mine anymore. I was pained when you had to sell one of your dreams – your painting. It hurt because it has the same importance for me as it holds for you. Also, I could not understand that house was one of your dreams too. I was wrong in not realizing that because your every dream is mine now.

Main jo kuch kiya hai uske baad shayad tumhare liye meri baat pe yakeen karna mushkil ho but please Geet, at least give it a chance. Please believe me. I promise that this time you will not be disappointed."

Maan moved ahead and held both her hands into his lightly caressing back of her palm with his thumb gently.

"Please Geet. Say yes. Ghar chalo Geet, mein tumhein lene aaya hoon….isliye nahi ki this is expected out of me or you but because I truly want it. Mujhe tumse nahi balki tumhare saath jeene ki freedom chaiye.

I know ki tum mere bina shayad ji bhi lo. Zaroorat to meri hai Geet. Don't leave me again in the same darkness…please mere saath wapis aa jao."

[Please Geet. Say yes. Come home Geet, I have come to take you…not because this is expected out of me or you but because I truly want it. I don't want freedom from you but to live with you.

I know that you may be able to live without me. But it is my need Geet. Don't leave me again in the same darkness…please come back with me.]

Geet looked at Maan still trying to absorb his words. Her heart danced at his words but her head threw caution signals. Can she undergo this pain again? What if like last time, things fell apart between them. Can their families withstand this emotional onslaught again?

They stood silently looking into each others eyes as if trying to understand and read each other. Maan's eyes pleading for her to understand and give him another chance and her eyes trying to read the sincerity in her words.

Few minutes later, Geet slipped her hands away and stole her glance away.

"Please Maan mujhe galat mat samjhiyega. Dil toh mera bhi yahi chahta hai ki aap ke saath wapis chalun. But it has been a very emotional day for both of us. Shayaad humare immediate emotions are clouding our judgment and hearts and we may not understand what we truly want.

Kya aap mujhe aur apne aap ko kuch waqt de sakte hain. Pehle bhi ek baar I took decision for both of us and see where it landed us. But this time, I want both of us to think this properly and then when both of us want the same thing, then only to go ahead with our chosen path. Bhawnaon mein beh kar ya family pressure mein aa kar I don't want us to take any steps.

Bauji ne thik hi kaha hai. These relationships are as delicate as they are strong.

Is baar mein soch samjh kar aage badhna chahti hoon so that our decision has our complete acceptance. Pehle hi bahut dard diya hai humne sab ko. I don't want to give them anymore pain. I want both of us to be clear and accept our decision whole heartedly so that all of us can move on.

I am hoping aap meri baat samajh rahe hain Maan. Please mujhe aur apne app ko thoda sa waqt de dijiye. Please"

[Please Maan, don't misunderstand me. My heart also wants to come back with you. But it has been a very emotional day for both of us. Maybe our immediate emotions are clouding our judgment and hearts and we may not understand what we truly want.

Can you give me and yourself some time? Even before, I took decision for both of us and see where it landed us. But this time, I want both of us to think this properly and then when both of us want the same thing, then only to go ahead with our chosen path. I don't want us to take any steps by getting flowing in emotions or under family pressure.

Dad has said correctly. These relationships are as delicate as they are strong.

This time, I want to think properly before moving ahead so that our decision has our complete acceptance. Even before, we have hurt everyone a lot. I don't want to give them anymore pain. I want both of us to be clear and accept our decision whole heartedly so that all of us can move on.

I am hoping you understand what I am trying to say Maan. Please give me and yourself some time. Please]

Maan closed his eyes and sighed. He knew this was not going to be easy and he has to earn her faith back in their love. She loved him completely but was sacred of the pain he has given her already.

He nodded his head and held her one hand again softly. With his other hand, he cupped her chin to make his intent very clear to her. Forcing her to meet his eyes, he responded very calmly - "Don't ever think that your decision was not correct. As a matter of fact I can't thank you enough for your selfless gesture to come back in my life and light it with your love. You made me feel alive again Geet and I will always be grateful that you did not leave me when I pushed you away.

Lekin aaj pehli baar tumne khud mujhse kuch maanga hai toh mein mana kaise kar sakta hoon. I can wait for a life time Geet. Tumhein jitna waqt lena hai tum le sakti ho. I will be right here waiting for your yes."

["Don't ever think that your decision was not correct. As a matter of fact I can't thank you enough for your selfless gesture to come back in my life and light it with your love. You made me feel alive again Geet and I will always be grateful that you did not leave me when I pushed you away.

But for the first time today, you have yourself asked me something, so how can I refuse. I can wait for a life time Geet. You take as much time as you want. I will be right here waiting for your yes.]

A lone tear mixed with love, sadness, helplessness and happiness slid from her eyes.

Maan wiped it away gently.

"Nahi Geet. Bas. I know I am very bad. Bahut rulaya hai tumhein. Lekin bas ab khushiyan dena chahta hoon.

Haan…ek aur baat. Jab tak hum faisla nahi lete tab tak, hum baat kar sakte hain. I mean we can meet sometimes and talk. I don't think I can go without talking to you now."

[No Geet. Stop. I know I am very bad. I have made you cry a lot. But now I only want to give happiness.

Yes…one more thing. Till the time we don't decide, can we talk? I mean we can meet sometimes and talk. I don't think I can go without talking to you now.]

Geet nodded and gave him a smile smile – "Aap aise kyon puch rahe hain. We are not strangers. Dost toh hum ab bhi hain."

[Why are you asking like that? We are not strangers. We are still friends.]

Maan smiled as well with that assurance. He dropped her hand.

"Thik hai, toh phir mein chalta hoon. It is quite late. Also, you have time now so please don't think too much about what happened. Take rest and try to catch some sleep. I don't want you to fall sick."

Geet was really touched by his words and care. She nodded and realized that Maan was in wet clothes.

"Ek minute rukiye."

[Please stop for a minute.]

She went to cupboard and came back – "Woh aapke kapde gile hain. Thand lag jayegi aapko. Yeh Rahul ki tracks aur shirt ahi. Aap change kar lijiye."

[Your clothes are all wet. You will catch cold. These are Rahul's tracks and shirt. You change.]

Maan got very emotional at her gesture and his control slipped glistening his eyes with unshed tears. He controlled his shivering lips (not from cold but the emotions inside him) – "I am going home and I will change first thing. I will also drink warm coffee and take medicine. Tum fikar mat karo Geet."

Geet tried to protest but Maan stopped her by reiterating his words - "Itni fikar mat karo Geet. Mein tumhein zabardasti utha ke lajaoonga."

[Don't care for me so much. I will take you back with force.]

Maan gave her a wet smile.

"Good Night Geet. Sweet Dreams and sleep tight"

Geet swallowed the lump in her throat and whispered back "Good Night Maan"

Maan turned back and left for Khurana Mansion.

Andhere se bhari gumnaam raat ke baad ,

ek sunhari dhoop ki roshni zindagi mein kadam rakh di hai ,

bas us halki si roshni ko apne chor se pakde hue us manzil ko pana hai,

jo kismat ne ek doosre ke naam likh di hai hai

(By Anu – hermoso)

Precap – Next Morning

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Posted: 13 years ago
me first wowgeet seeing moon and thaught maan as dream maan realise from this how much hurt geet was and he have to be slow in making geet realise his love for her maneet saying sorry finally geet explained how her family come to know about it but it that maan said its good that everyone know it and they are family they have right to know and what he said that he think them as his parents and they have right to punish them and maan confession how he felt and wanted to say it but couldn't and importance of hope and dream house but geet still have hesitation and she showed it in her talk maan knew it and understand it that it will not be easy and yes maan confession that he is thankfull that she didn't left when he pushed her out of life and he will wait for her and he asked for talking and meetings and geet accepted as they are still friends geet care and maan feeling touched and finally after emotions 1 dialogue utha le jao maan and left for km do next soon



Edited by tamanna1391 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
I was so much waiting for this update... and ofcourse it was an awesome blossom update...

as always... beautiful emotions... i just loved the first few lines... Geet thinking that she is hallucinating when maan calls her for real... and the pain maan felt on seeing that...

I was so glad that maan realized that his confession of love at this point of time will not convince her and he really needs to take it slow...
Also, the decision of Geet asking for time is completely understandable... she took a decision initially and realized the pain that it had cast on their near and dear ones... And the time they have decided to give each other would surely help them to make things better...

and not to miss the caring gesture that comes out naturally when she realizes he is wet... it was just a little moment but just beautiful...

Thanks for the update ritzy... eagerly waiting for the next one!!!


Edited by shrutheAjay - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Brilliant 😳

Geet Needs Time 😭
I understand But I thought that She'll go with Maan

"Sabr Ka Phal Meetha Hota Hain"

Waiting for things to be better between them...!
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Posted: 13 years ago
GR8 PRT LOVED EVERY BIT OF IT
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Posted: 13 years ago
Haiyye Ritzy...rhula diya yaar...


Kitna senti dialogues the... Aankhon se toh gangajamuna behti jaa rahi hai in dono ka pyaar dekh ke..
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Posted: 13 years ago
wow Fantastic update
loved it
nice decision take geet .
maan lagjoa kaam par geet ka trust jeet ne...
plz yaar update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
loved it! Hope they will be together soon. Bechara maan, loved the way u have express maans emotions. I wish ki wo use utha le jata! Continu soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
Amazing part, loved the way geet asked for some time to think, she is right such decision cant be taken in jaldbaji.

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