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Posted: 13 years ago
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new KR OS... thnx meow for the idea... this one's dedicated to u!

from Rey POV...

Part 1-

I make myself comfortable in a corner of the couch, my back resting against the arm rest. You're lying on top of me, an arm dropping loosely to the side, your face very close to mine; so close that I can make out the nuances of all the expressions playing across it... even the quizzical look in your eyes which seems to say, "I don't know why am I saying this, but I love you too much to complain anyway." Your breasts rest gently against my stomach & they make my navel tingle with nervous excitement. Several small beads of sweat glisten on your back in the warmth of the room. Some of them come together and, tracing symmetrical geometrical patterns, run down your spine to your hips. A cheap cigarette dies a slow death in my hand, ash waiting to be flicked to the ground. Every now & then, when you turn your head to find a more comfortable nook, you're lips brush against mine, willing me to kiss them. But I hold myself back. I had sworn it would always have to be you.
I like the fact that my senses receive a new lease of life each time your head heaves gently on my chest, rising & falling slowly, in tandem with my laboured breathing. I inhale the woody fragrance of your freshly washed hair & marvel at its rich & luscious bouquet. You have let them loose & they cascade in dark ripples, covering you're shoulders with their modest silkiness, but exposing the nape of your neck. I absentmindedly run my free hand through them, thinking of all the conversations we had shared & all the promises we had never made to each other. None of us speaks and the silence seems to be emptying out the little space between us.
The curves of your body are all so sensual that I feel a force rising up inside me. And yet, you seem too preoccupied to notice any of this. I choke on my tears & pretend to cough a little in order to hide the obvious from you. Not that you would care, but you do. You look up, our eyes are locked in an embrace for a second & I try to smile. Comforted, you shift ever so slightly & go back to your thoughts, the payal jingling in appreciation. It is the lone piece of jewellery adorning your body & I feel overwhelmed by its presence. I put out the cigarette & hold you just a little bit tighter, surprising myself, & you sigh contentedly in response, as if in a world of your own.
You look so serene that I hate to even touch you for fear of upsetting some delicate equilibrium. The turmoil in my mind is in sharp conflict with the peace you refuse to share with me. I kiss your eyes, rousing you. The light is dim, just the way I want it. It gently caresses your face, highlighting only the features I have come to accept as mine. And before Ghalib runs out of words, I decide to script a few of my own. I contemplate them, mulling over them as they come to my mind, before letting you know. You look at me expectantly, & so I begin my assault on your patience.
Rey: We don't have much time left Kriya.
You rub your eyes & force the remnant of half-dreamt dreams out of them.
Kriya: What do you mean? It's still time 1 in the night. I don't have to leave till morning.
I cant help but smile at your innocence & cup your face in my hands.

Rey: That's not what I meant. It's time we went back to our lives. This cannot continue forever, you know.
Kriya: I knew you had to pick up some subject like this. Why can't you just let us be? And who says it has to anyway, Reyaansh? When we first started out, didn't you promise to work things out? I believed in you then & I believe in you now.
Saying this, you try to put an end to the conversation. But I am relentless, & holding your chin up to my face, kiss you lightly & tenderly on the lips.
Rey: Yes I did. And I would have, at any cost. But you see, I'm dying. And the strength to carry on has left me.
This time you sit up, your legs entangled in mine. However, the discomfort of such a position does not bother you.
Kriya: What do you mean?
Rey: I'm dying. A few more months maybe. It's cancer and, you see, I'm still 38 tonight.
Kriya: Is this a joke? Because if it is, I don't wanna be a part of it. I get enough of them where I come from.
Rey: I wish it was.
I'm smiling now, & the tranquility which I envied switches bodies deftly. Your hair is trussed up & you look wild with passion.
Kriya: THIS IS INSANE! IT CAN'T BE. I CAN'T LET IT BE. I WON'T. AND YOU'RE TELLING ME THIS NOW?
Tears well up in your eyes & I wipe them away before they can mar your beauty with their sadness.
Rey: I had wanted to tell you earlier. But I was too weak, Kriya. I could not bear to let you go. But I can't be selfish anymore. I won't let you suffer through this with me. I owe you that.
Kriya: Ohhh... you're being soo melodramatic. Everything can be cured. I'm sure you haven't tried hard enough., the tragic hero you are. Uff, I'll have to deal with this as well for you.
Rey: Believe me, I have. If not for my sake, then yours. But this is inevitable now. And since it is, it's best we did the right thing. For both of us. And that would be to put an end, not to our love for each other or our romance, but to our story. Begin afresh. Don't feel guilty about anything Kriya, for you didn't do anything wrong. I never did get all your love & I still believe its welled up inside, waiting for someone better.
Kriya: And who would that be Reyaansh? Don't do this to me, please. I deserve better than this... I want to be with you forever.
Rey: Shhh... Don't be so tragic that you become a part of my tragedy. I won't be at peace if you cry. I can't say I will be if you're happy. But at least, that will be something worth fighting for. Remember, learn to deal with memories without having to deal with the past.

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part 2-

You're sobbing now. In short fitful bursts. The kajal is running down your cheeks in small rivulets. I clean the mess & some of it comes off my fingers. You try to smile, but fail miserably. I smile instead & hold your chest closer still. You finally agree to rest your head against my shoulder.
Rey: It's okay. You always knew my shelf life had an expiry date of 40 yrs, didn't you? When I'm here, you think it's impossible. But when I'm gone, moving on will be so much easier. So will letting go, I believe.

Kriya: You know nothing about what you're saying.We wouldn't be here, dangling in each other's insecurities, if it was that easy.
Rey: Yeah I guess so. But you'll try, won't you?
Kriya: What options do you leave me with? You won't agree to anything I have to say. And I have always felt helpless around you. Darling, this is so much more difficult than I make it seem.
I feel jealous, for you have always been that person I could never be--- strong, confident, resolute, happy, & alive. But I detest my own pangs.
Rey: It doesn't have to be difficult, & the reason I'm having this dialogue is because I will not let it be. I guess it'll hit you when you're least secure. But you'll be ready for it. Trust me when I say this. I've known you long enough. But before I let you go, I want you to tell me the story of our lives. In your own words. Start at the beginning, for that is always the easiest. Tell me everything. I want to re-live it all. Paint it with as many colors as you can. Run wild with you're imagination & don't miss out even the smallest details. Could you do that for me?
Kriya: What is this? Some kind of a game?
Rey: Humor me.
You nod & with a gentle sigh, plunge into your exquisite narrative. The details are fantastic & their quality surreal. It seems as if they're projecting a black-&-white movie on the canvas of my senses... Frame by frame, our story unravels- a story which I purportedly remembered so vividly, but had obviously relegated to some nondescript corner of my memory.
The people come alive & emotions are felt once more, their bite more tangible than ever. The plots, the subplots & their umpteen characters are sketched to perfection & it seems you had been lying all along, pretending to forget, so that you could goad me into telling my version of things. You sigh, you smile, you wish & you yearn. The night seems to dilate in order to accommodate the vividness off your narration &, by the time ends, I have lived another life in the span of a few hours. You're exhausted & parched.
Rey: Should I make a cup of tea for my lady?
Kriya: Shut up & kiss me... & don't leave me wanting for more.
I am agreeably surprised, but I oblige, & for a few moments the world shrinks to the space that separates us. A buzzing sound disturbs this strange union. I reach out for your phone & recognize this no.
Rey: It's your son. He says Vickram has been asking for you ever since you came back from work. Tell him that you'll be home in 30 mins. I'll get you that tea.
I get up & start banging the cheap utensils, perhaps a tad too loudly, proclaiming my ineptitude with those alien objects to the world at large & to you in particular. Some of the tea leaves cling to the rim of the pot as the froth boils over. I pour the brew down the sieve to the sound of the sobbing in the washroom. The washroom is flushed in order to mask the more violent outbursts... 3 times. I grab the can of cookies you had bought for me last month & notice that it's empty.
Rey *re-entering the room*: It's ready.
But you've already left. A green post-it note is stuck to m pack of Gold Flakes...
YOU'RE MINE. AND I'M YOURS. SAMJHE! *kiss*
Overcome, I sit down & light up.
Then, realizing the enormity of the occasion, I drink my first cup of tea.

There you guys...
jootas, chappals, tamatars, andas everything accpeted..
taniya
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Posted: 13 years ago
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res

unres

1st one to comment😃

i m actually quite surprised reading the OS. but loved it😳 a different one👏

Edited by Asha_ArSha - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks for dedicating it to me..

And you never failed to surprise me..

Love the way u wrote..

Each n every word u used was superb..

Cigarette smoking by Rey, this is the first work which showed it.

Sad for Kriya but gracefully the OS didnt dishearten me much..

It was simple and light.

Truely loved it.

It was amazing.

Keep writing...Im sure many people out here luv ur work!!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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ummm i actually read this is 'urban shots' novel.. there wer 31 stories.. in it and one it is this written by 'siddharta' it would be appreciative if u credit him to coz point to point its same as the one he wrote !!! jus a lil diff may b thr but once its same as that one!!! and that OS title is 'your mine' ..

well written i dont wat to say sorry
Edited by nams_arsha - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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it was awesome
loved it
really a unique one

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Posted: 13 years ago
#7
Awesome piece of writing...

but sabse pehle sawal... whats the equation b/w kriyansh...
matlab kriy is married?? since her son called... but then y did rey say ki start afresh??? confusion...

loved how u portrayed everything...

rey's feelings were amzingly described... and how he was describing ech and everything...

loved how he was wanting everything for her...

it ws touching bto read

i cudn't feel the sadness u know nxiety that y did it end like this... u know the flow was such that it felt it was supposed to...

splendid piece of writing...

i didsn't get a pm...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Its mind blowing
loved it
a different one
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Posted: 13 years ago
#9
B'day ke din peetna hai tune? 😆
rey ko cancer 😲
nahiii . . . . 😭
kitna acha chal rha tha 1st part . . . . She's resting on his body digging her head on his chest 😍
& he's holding her gently,, possesively 😊
& her way to try to kiss him & take in the moment ☺️
& then u dropped the bomb 😵
why the heck . . . Hottie is a patient 😔
& 1 thing I could'nt understand . . . . He said ur son 🤔
they were not married kya?
but their love is eternal 🤗
achha hua end me maar nhi diya sach me... 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wowww bas itna hi bol sakti hoo
thanks but feel sad for kriya ...

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