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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: --Ruchi--

Congrats for new FF ridzi.

Nice start...giving me glimpses of DV... it came as a refreshment coz after a long time I reading a FF based on medieval era.keep updating.Thanx for PM.


thank you ruchi...well i too loved on writting something on that era...
luv u...😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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first of all thanx to all who have commented or pressed like button...guys it really encouraged me a lot...luv all of you...😊,here the next part:-


DESTINY'S GAME:-THEIR FIRST MEETING

After that deadly incident no shramiks has dared again to raise their voice against the aryavarats after seeing whatever happened with bhimsen and soma.Jaivardhan has diged the grave of the voice,the fire which bhimsen and soma has raised and the things in aryanagar kingdom again went back to the same place as it was earlier and on the other hand all the three prince were learning all the techniques of sword fighting,archery,horse riding etc,etc''.which a price suppose to know and with these,days started passing by veer's continious arguments with his teachers on their system and getting punishment everyday and dharam finding ways to defend his younger brother and to protect his brother from getting punishment and agni planing and ploting against the two brother as he didn't like the bond between the two and jealous of their popularity and their perfectness to complete each other and like this tweleve years passed.

Today all the students were more than happy as their principal had given them the permission to go outside the gurukul, because while learning in gurukul these royals got very less chance to communicate with the outer world.

Listening this veer's face brighten up as he really likes to meet and to communicate with the commoners and meeting with new people and get to know different and new things is his favourite hobby,so he insisted dharam to go to the carnival helding in nearby village.First dharam hesitated because he generally didn't like to interact with the commoners as he thought that it was against their royality proud but on seeing veer's innocent face he agreed as he new that his brother is very stubborn and he always make sure to get the thing which he like in any case,so dharam also asked agni to come along with them but he denied as firstly he too feels same like dharam about commoners and secondly he didn't want to be a scaregoat of two brothers fun,but dharam tried to convience him but he again denied,thinking it's a better opportunity veer asked dharam to leave him in gurukul as he too didn't like agni's company and find his company a bit annoying and irritating.


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Both the brothers were roaming arround the carnivals looking at the things which are attracting veer more,but dharam was not paying attention to any of the things their,he had just came for his brother's sake,both saw too many things,talked to many commoners and even tried some of the games and participated in the challerges which are going on in the carnival,when dharam saw a temple and asked veer to come along.

After some time both the brothers were standing in the temple infront of lord shiva and godess parvati,eyes closed,head bowed infront of them and hands folded in prayer.The temple was open with three sides and had three entrance and exit.The first entrance was on the right side of the temple facing the village area,the second one is on the infornt facing the carnival area and the third and last one is on the left side facing the area from where the forest begin.After completing their prayer,they both bowed down,touched their feet and taking the blessing they moved outside from the second exit which was facing the carnival area,they both came out and suddenly veer's face lit up with an cute,adorable and princely smile on seeing something.He asked his brother to move ahead and he will soon join him as he has to buy something from carnival,dharam didn't said a single word as he knew his brother's stubborn nature,so he just nodded in yes and asked him to come soon as he was waiting for him on the left side entrance of the temple,veer nodded and in next moment he ran down the temple towards the carnival leaving behind dharam alone.


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Dharam was moving on the left side of the temple observing the area and scanning the temple,when his gaze fell on a girl who was not more than 12 in age,wearing a dark maroon heavy ghaghara with same coloured dupatta with broad border and heavy diamond embroidary with too much heavy jewellary of same color was standing on the threshold of the temple and continiously moving back without knowing that she has reached to the edge of the threshold and unfortunately her foot got slipped and she lost her balance and was about to fall when dharam moved showing his swiftness and balanced her by tightly holding her in his arms by keeping his one hand on her petite waist and holding her hand with another and she too held him for the support by holding his coller with one hand and holding his hand with other.Both looked at each other and was lost in each other as if for that moment the world around them doesn't matter.Dharam looked at her innocent face,her childish eyes,her rosy lips and her beauty was so mesmerising that he was not able to remove his eyes off from her face.He slowely made her to stand on her feet,not tearing their gaze:-''are you alright''-he asked still stairing at her.She was about to answer him when their gazing-gazing session was disturbed with a female voice and they both came back from their dreamland and turned in the direction of the voice and saw a girl wearing a dark green mehendi coloured ghaghara designed in same fashion as the first girl was coming towards them with a guard behind her.

''what happen? Are you alright your highness?:-she asked after reaching at them and scanning her from top to bottom.

''relax kaveri,don't worry I am fine'':-princes replied assuring her that nothing has happened to her and that was the moment she relised that a stanger is holding her hand,she slowely pulled her hand back totally embaressed.

''who the hell are you? And how dare you to touch our princess like this?don't you know that behaving like this with a princess is a crime and you will have to face the consiquences for behaving like this?:-kaveri asked the boy who was standing jut infront of them.Dharam's voice got stuck into his throat listening her tone filled with anger and he was looking at the girls in utter confusion as if he had commited the biggest crime of his life.

''can't you hear? Will you allow us the pleasure,so we can get to know that who the hell are you?:-kaveri repeated her words in same tone.

Seeing his condition princess tried to control her friends behaviour towards a starnger but kaveri denied by saying:-''no princess you don't know these kind of boys,they always need a chance to get close to the girls that's it,all mens are same'';-she replied glowering at him.And not getting any answer from him she again shouted on him:-''will you speak up you monkey?''.

Listening to her words dharam was about to snap her back when from somewhere veer jumped in between them to defend his brother and speak out in behalf of his brother:-''my brother,why do you have any problem?:-while folding his hand towards his chest,he glowered at her and pausing for a second he continued:-''and the way you are clarifying the nature of all the men,may I ask you how many affairs did you have and with how many that you know all the men so well and are judging all of them in the same weighing'':-veer asked by getting more arrogance in his attitude.

Listening to his taunts dharam and princess eyes were almost popped out and their jaw literally dropped open,while kaveri fumed with anger:-''arrest them'':-she ordered to the guard or rather it's better to say she shouted on the guard.

Listening her shout the guards which are standing down at the temple hurriedly made their way towards the satirs upward and the one guard which was with them moved and tried to grab veer when he swiftly moved a step ahead and punched him hard that the guard fell on the ground and then veer hurriedly turned and shouted:-''run'':-and saying this he ran from their but dharam was standing their trying to collect the ongoing incident because firstly he was lost in his dreamland with his princes and when he came to his scense,a girl was shouting on him,then from somewhere his brother jumped in between and imerged into a fight with the girl and then he heard him shouting ''run'' and he was standing like an idiot trying to understand ''what's going on?''.

Veer was able to reach just a little far when he realised that his brother is not with him,he turned and saw his brother standing at same place like a dumb,he hit his forehead with his palm and again ran towards his brother when he saw some 10-12 guards coming towards them from the front stairs of the temple,he hurriedly gripped his brothers hand and dragged him along with himself on the left side of the temple with guards chasing behind them.


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Both the brothers were running in their full speed as if it was the case of their life and death.After some time they both stoped and turned back too see the guards and with a winning smile veer shouted:-''yes we won,we are too fast,no one can catch us'':-dharam didn't said anyting just smiled and nodded in confirmation and then his gaze moved to scan the area and suddenly the color drained out from his face and his eyes got wide horror open.He tapped on veer's shoulder but veer ignored but then again dharam tried still fixing his gaze on the area and this time veer responded:-''hmmm":-still looking in the direction from where they had came.

''we are in trouble'':-listening his brothers words veer got confused and turned to look at his brother with confused expression:-''TROUBLE????????''.

Dharam looked at his brother and moved his pointing finger towards the whole area while veer's gaze followed his finger and in just a moment the color from his face too drained out as they didn't realise that while running where they were heading? And now they both were standing in mid of the forest.Veer turned his gaze towards his brother and found him stairing at him with a deadly look,veer smiled innocently and asked:-''what,I didn't do anything,why are you looking at me like this?''.

''you didn't do anything''.you didn't do anything,we would have apologised to that princes but no you have to stick you nose in that matter and emerge into the fight with her friend,poor princess she was trying so much to calm down her friend but you'''.you have messed it veer and now we are here in mid of the forest'':-dharam shouted while stroming towards his brother with pointing his finger while veer was continiously backing off.

But listening to his brothers words he halted in his backing of track and stopped his brother too by placing his palm in between them:-''I have messed everything?,what ever I did was right,her friend was shouting at you like you are about to kill her much time softer than rose petal princess'':-veer replied totally annoyed and pausing for a second he continued:-''and by the way,why are you bothering so much about that princess,oh sorry poor princess'':-veer said exactly immitiating dharams voice on which dharam's expression changed and he looked in the other direction which brought a mischievious smile on veer's face and by keeping his elbow on his shoulder he teased him:-''listem my 1 day elder brother,control,control your emotions,you are just 12 and loosing your sense at this age is not a go'''.:-veer stopped his teasing session in mid as he saw his brother glowering at him,he gulped down and slowely removing his elbow from his shoulder he said with a silly smile:-''I was just kidding,you know,why are you burning like a coal fire,I am sorry''.

''you better be,now lets go we have to find the way to get out from this forest before the night drew'':-saying this dharam moved ahead.

''wait,WE,you are mistaken my brother,it's not we,it's only you who is going to find the way not me'':-veer replied confirming his each and every word.

Dharam halted his steps in his way and turned:-''only me and may I ask you why my 1 day little brothe?'':-he asked raising his eyebrows.

''I mean that if we are here in this mid forest then the reason behind it is you,YOU met with that princess in the temple,because of YOU I emerged into the fight with her friend and we ran from their just for YOUR sake not for me,so in all conditions only YOU are the responsible for all this,so you will find the way and I will play this'':-veer finished his words while taking out a flute which was tied on his waist with the help of his waist belt.

''ok fine,i will do it by myself'':-saying this dharam again proceeded his walk to find their way.

''we will see'':-veer said with a smirk and then he too moved ahead following his brother while playing flute.


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Juat a little far away from them in the same area in between the rusteling of the mere individuals of forest,a petite physic wearing a black thin golden bordered dhoti and silvery black knee length kurta with a cross bag hanging from her left shoulder till her heaps on right was walking fastly with a dagger in her hand cutting and clearing the bushes and leaves coming on her way.She was wearing a black turban with red mix with it and her face was fully covered with the remaining end of the turban,she was covered from top to bottom,one can only see her blue eyes in her whole body.

Her steps came to an abrupt halt as some melodious voice of the flute reached to her ears,she turned to look the source as the voice was increasing more and more.Slowely she closed her eyes as if she was lost in that voice and by misleading her path,she moved in the direction from where the voice was coming.


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Both the brothers were still walking to find their way,dharam was moving a few steps ahead and veer was following him,still playing his flute while a naughty smile was playing on his lips on seeing his brother getting restless or rather it will be better to say he was enjoying his brother's condition.Veer stoped in his track and saw the path,it was narrow and a bit slippery but he was not able to recognise that moving a little more ahead the path was slopy.He closed his eyes and again begain to play his flute because he knew that dharam is walking just ahead of him and he will never let anything happen to him and thinking this he started moving ahead blindly but in the same instant dharam moved to the nearby tree and started to make a cross mark on the tree trunk so that they will able to know that they are moving ahead or just roaming in the same area and veer didn't realise it and by crossing him,he moved ahead.At the same time a man wearing a black dress with black turban came out from the bushes and they both dashed with each other.

As the path was slippery they both lost their balance,Veer opened his eyes with a jerk and they both tried to hold each other for the support but their attemt to grab each other went in vein and they both fell on the ground with a loud thud and rolled down from the slopy path holding each other tightly.


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Listening this wiered noise dharam attention got broken from the tree tunk and he turned to know the reason and to his utter shock his younger brother was not their,he got worried and ran towards the direction from where the noise has came.After reaching a little far,he saw his brother was rolling down from the slopy path holding a stanger and then he too moved down balancing his body on the path so that he too didn't fall.


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Veer was rolling down with the person still holding him when the turban from the person's head fell down in between their rolling down session exposing her long black hair.Their rolling-rolling game came to an end when they both came to the lateral surface of the ground.The girl was on top and veer was lying under her.

They both looked at each other and as their eyes met with each other,the world around them has stopped,it seems like the world around them doesn't matter or it doesn't even exist,for that moment their was only veer and that girl.Veer looked at her face which was still covered with black netted scarf (like the night angels in arabian nights),her shining blue eyes which was looking like a blue pearl in the ocean,her delicate skin of her forehead which was visible now was shining like the first ray of the morning sun,her hairs which are ticking his fair cheeks and neck are hundred times softer than the velvety cloth he had ever touched in his life,her angelic touch and her smell was so mesmerizing that it can creat an havoc of desire in anyone in just a second,her beauty was so unmatachable,so pure that one can spent his entire life just gazing at her and then veer's gaze moved towards her lips which are hidden behind the black netted scarf,veer raised his hands to remove it but his trace of thoughts was disturbed listening his brothers voice.Both turned their gaze and saw dharam coming towards them and then they return their gaze at each other and embarissingly they both stood up on their feets and was looking every where but not at each other and by then dharam has also reached at them:-''are you alright? What happen? How you came here?'':-dharam asked looking at his brother who was not meeting his gaze.

Veer didn't say a single word as he was not in the condition to say anything,his mind was still lost in the incident,for the first time in his life veer's mind was not in his control and the most worst part was his thoughts just a while ago:-''what actually he was thinking at that time?,he is the same guy who is advicing his elder brother not to loose his sense at the tender age of tweleve just a while ago then what was HE himself doing right now?''.

On the other hand the girl was totally embarresed and the environment was becoming suffocating for her,so to get rid of that uneasy and uncomfortable situation she decided to take a step:-''can't you see? Do you have eyes or the wheels of a cart?'':-she asked while cleaning the dust from her dress.

Dharam casually looked at her but veer's eyes got were wide open:-''what??????''.

She looked at veer and repeated her words:-''I said,can't you see? Do you have eyes or the wheels of a cart? Do you have hearing problem too apart from blindness?'':-she replied getting totally annoyed.

Dharam was looking at her in awe but for veer it was the limit,firstly because of his own wiered feelings and secondly her nature towards them:-''well same goes for you too madam?'':-he snapped back.

''for me,it was you who was walking like a blind'':-she shouted pointing her finger towards him.

''wait you have arrived somewhere from the bushes not me and how I suppose to know that a sever mentally ill patient is coming out from her home?'':-veer snapped her back.

Seeing the condition getting worse dharam decide to interrupt in between:-''wait, listen I am saying sorry on behalf of my him,I don't know what has happened but I know that would be just a mistake'':-dharam tried to convience her.

''why are you saying sorry on behalf of this half minded person? And by the way who the hell are you to apologise instead of him?'':-she asked hell irritated.

''I am not a half minded person'':-veer pointed his finger at her and then turning at his brother he asked:-''and yes why are you saying sorry,it's not my mistake it was her''.

But dharam was looking at the girl and was thinking that ''why the hell on this earth today everyone is asking him that who the hell is he? First that girl in the temple and this girl,suddenly he has started feeling like his identity doesn't exsit in this world''.

Shrugging all the thought from his mind he turned to veer:-''veer just shut you mouth'':-and then turning to the girl he replied:-''I am his elder brother,listen whatever happen between you two was just a mistake and I am saying sorry on behalf of my brother''.

''you better be'':-saying this she glowered at veer and then moved ahead and picked her turban and moved in the direction from where she has came but before going in bushes she turned to look at him and in same instant veer too caught her gaze and they kept on satiring at each other untill she was lost in woods.

''ok that much of adventure is enough for today,lets move we still have to find our way before the night'':-dharam said while veer just nodded in agreement.

Dharam moved ahead and veer to moved when something caught his attention on the ground,a silvery shining material was lying on the ground just an inch away from his feet,he picked it up and carefully examined it and after few seconds he got it,it was an anklet.

Veer looked in the direction where the girl was gone''may be it is of her''-veer was thinking when he heard his brother's shout,he turned and saw his brother standing a liitle far from him impatiently waiting for him.Veer hold that anklet in his hand tightly and ran towards his brother.

Finally destiny had played his game and four strangers met with each other but did they knew that this mere meeting of just few minutes will became their lifetime relationship????????


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hope you guys like it...do give your reviews

luv radhika...😊


Edited by ridzzi - 12 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#33
reso jii
now dis time, me first...

lalalalala

~~EDITED~~
ach acha laga...bhot acha laga..
sooperbo ekdum, sachhi, app ki stry jab main padti hoon,
beshak aapka desc. simple h, but ussmain ghoos jati ho main, stry ki world imagine karte karte lagta h, mvie dekh rhi hoon jaise,

ab iss baat main mujhe credit nhi lena, meri imagination acchi h, i noe, but... stry bhot jydaa achi h, isliye movie around me wala credit aapka :0

veer, sacha bhai h, mujhe psnd aaya,...
kya bindaas tareke se lada aapne bhai k liye,
dharam ws doing nothing oder den gawking at sia,
kya hoga isska...??
veer na hota, tho dharam tho pakka sia ki kaal khothari main hota, .. lol.

oops! baghte baghte jungle main pahuch gye,

but ek bhot famous kkahwat h-

JUNGAL MAIN MANGAL!!...

yipieee,,!!
ho gya jungal main mangal...
mil gyi humare veer n ananya,...
wow di, kya mulakaat h,
bechari veer ki niyat, at the age of 12 pr hi phisal gyi...

abhi abhi tho khud dharam ko bhashan de rha tha,

yeh dono kabhi nhi sudhrenge,
hr jagah pehle ladai kr lete h...


wowie, dowie...
humari anu ki payal mili h veer ko, veer sambhal kr akhna, bade hokr kaam aayegi...

ud soon, di, lovd d part.

lov u

Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#34
haven't read it yet but the blue font caught my eyes

itni age accuracy explaination🤣
1 day ; one hour ,15days😆

age issue rtmc ff mein hamesha aata
we writers should get a calculator and calculate every thing
before introducing leaps and flashbacks
hai meri ridzzi

ff likhana chodke pehle characters ka birth certificate bana pe concentrate karna padh raha hai🤪 🤣

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superb
very well descripted

send this SAGARS n tell them 2 make DV sequel. miss rtmc

love the way u described D N V 's nature

loved sia n dharam meeting

they got into trouble by veer's nosing😆

but jo hota hai acche ke liye hota hai verna hamari princess charming angel cum dacoit annaya se 1st meeting kaise hoti😊

loved dV CONVO IN Forest

aww veer flute bajajta hai

wow hamari annanya ki entry👏

"khiche mujhe koi dor teri aur" i thot of this wen anu was into veer's flute tune

yay annaya helped veer

after rolling session eye locking session

""""""AANKHON KI GUSRAKHIYA MAAF HO""""""😳

BUT nok jhok started

poor dharam in wondering why everyone is bothering him😆

aww pyar ki nishani. veer treasure it

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update soon eager 2 see there next meetin certainly after 6-7 yrs

Edited by pranita1202 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#35
ina bada part h, tho bada comment bhi hona chaiye...

di kal subah pakka ek bada comment milega..
but sirf padklr jana h, padai bhi karni h,

but kal subah , pakka ek coment
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Posted: 13 years ago
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parnita di, last time main second thio aap first...

dekha, hum dono ki jodi yuh hi bani rahe 😆
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OMG WOWWW:-D:-D:-D What a BEAUTIFUL update dear:-D:-):-) The First Meeting was jus FANTASTIC;-);-) I LOVE VEER:-):-) and The Fight was so CUTE:-):-) Awww Veer is so Stubborn;-);-) and Dharam loves his younger brother a lot:-):-) I LOVE This FF so much:-):-)
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di maine kuch dhondha h aapke liye bhot mahanat se, mere comp main rtmc pics ka bhandhaar h, usese search kiya h


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She was wearing a black turban with red mix with it and her face was fully covered with the remaining end of the turban,she was covered from top to bottom,one can only see her blue eyes in her whole body.


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it was very nice... loved it
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Hey

Wow!!!!!😊😊😊😊Amazing update 😊😊😊😊Loved RTMC meeting😊

Plz continue soon😊

Love😊

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