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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: ridzzi

ye dhanvi di k liye...

deewna main hoon deewana tera deewana.
mausam hai mastana uspe dil deewana
deewana tera tujhe hi bulaya
ye marzi teri tu aye na aye...

yaad shikaar ki ane lagi jaan jane lagi hai
ho k juda kiu tu mujhe azmane lagi hai
ye bhi toh soch le dila hai sheesha mera
jaane kab toot jaye

ff tera jabse pada,bhul baithi main sabko
tune magar jaana nahi dhadkano ki talab ko
mere ehsaas main veer chand bas gaye
kaun tujhko bataye
deewana tera tujhe hi bulae
ye marzi teri tu aye na aye

Loved it...mujha read kar ke bohat achi laga...aapka shukriya...i will surely update...i am so happy that you liked my FF so much...thank you...
for Ridzzi
you are a darling...aapka songs and phrases mujha incourage karte hain...aapka intezaar almost poora ho gya...how can i keep my ridzzi waiting...
lov you🤗

for sweetsanyo
ab aapke baare main kyo bol sakte hain...you are always my sweetie...
lov you🤗

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Posted: 13 years ago
⭐️yeh ...
ridzzi di, we hav finally manged to impress dhanvi yeh...

thnx dhanvi di, for bearing me always...

be it ridzzi di, be it with mugdha 24 and be it with princesspriyart...i m the most common element in evry mischievousness...😳

really thnx fir bearing alwayzz

actually i m alwayz loyal to 2 things,,,

no no no..
actaully 3 things
1) sleep🥱
2) rtmc ffs...😳
n 3) mischievousness 😆
Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago


Part 16


Dense evergreen forests of Sal and oak lie around the town...The car passed the slippery paths of the himalayan city...



"This will be our last meeting Mr Veer Raichand" she flared with anger at the smiling face that seemed enjoying with her emotions and chafing them every moment...



"I simply love the weather...the rains...see it started raining again" he muttered without looking towards her and making her more furious...



she was indignant "stop the car" without bothering to look at him...her face fuming with anger and her fist closed...for the first time ever Chandni was so angry at someone...



She couldn't bare the pain that she suffered the night before...her lips were sore...whenever she closed her eyes she could see him kissing her fiercely, hurting her lips, her body, her mind...


She felt as if she was his prey...a prey where the preyer doesn't bother to think about the feelings or emotions of the person he is laying his eyes on...



she felt like crying though her eyes were moist...she could only burst out her anger at him...the worst of all she can do is leave the project and never see his face again, she did decided this the moment he crushed her feelings under his lips...



He stopped the car...disgruntled she flung open the door of the car and stepped outside, resentfully took out her bags and stood on the edge of the road surrounded by the dense forest...



"Chandni, what are you doing??...listen you won't find any transport here, so let me drop you..."

he came closer to take her bags...



"don't...just don't Mr Veer...please leave me..." she ordered him with scornful grimace...



But Veer Raichand can never follow any orders...and there wasn't anyone on the earth who would make him follow the rules...he did what he liked... "listen..." he hold her arm and pulled her closer... bringing his lips closer to hers



She stared at him...her tender body cleaving from his strong arms...he whispered while looking at her sore lips that looked more delicious from last night... "i wanted to kiss you..." he said while grasping her more closer...his eyes couldn't lay on anything else except her lips "and you should be happy that you received what most girls just dream of"...he looked into her eyes for few seconds then pushed her away...



Tears gathered around her beautiful eyes... but she didn't let them fall on her soft cheeks...angrily she stepped backwards "go away..."



That was the last thing Veer could hear from her mouth... "go away"... but Chandni didn't had a clue what he could do with her... with frightening speed he stepped towards her... this time Chandni was scared...he looked dangerous...she stepped backwards without thinking that she was standing on the edge of the road...her foot slipped and she roll down into the dense forest...



Another moment she found herself in mud... she got up and looked around...the grass was wet and muddy...with dirty clothes she looked up towards the devil... "i won't leave you" anger in her voice...but for him it was nothing more than an amusement...


He walked slowly towards her...laughing on the way... "you won't stop rankling"



With full rage she lifted her hand to hit him when he hold the soft wrist and twirled it around... "a snobbish girl like you, deserves this"...



His hold was strong enough, she cried out in pain "leave my wrist"...



After few seconds he pushed her away... that was the biggest humiliation she had ever seen before... she was quiet and tears rolled down her beautiful eyes... he was standing at a distance watching her with a frown...



Suddenly the mud on her clothes was cleaned by heavy rain... she stood still and did not move...he was about to leave when he turned back to look at her...something stopped him...he gazed at her...the frown on his forehead vanished...he scanned her from top to bottom...



Her jacket was in the car...her blue top was wet and transparent now...he could see the straps of her bra...the silk hair were now tangled...



Standing under a huge tree she crossed her arms and looked at the rain...slowly he took his steps towards her... her eyes were red with anger but her body was miserable...



She felt trapped, trapped under his prey...sounds of thunderstorm made her shiver...it rained more heavily...it was not easy for her to run away...the paths were slippery, even if she tried to run she would not be able to escape him... "please leave me" she requested him...as if something inside her was sure that he can harm her...



his hands moved towards his jacket...next moment he was covering her with his jacket...she looked at him...he was about to step away when she hold his hand "please don't go"



She could hardly think of anything else in the very moment where she was stuck and felt miserably helpless...



Was she seeking the help of that man who humiliated her few minutes ago...she felt terrible...the thoughts were flowing in her mind when out of the blue she felt strong arm touching her shoulder and holding her wrist "i am sorry" the three words melted her and she hugged him tightly and cried out... she buried her face in his chest...he took her in his arms...gently stroked his fingers in her tangled hair...



after few minutes when she felt relieved, she lifted her head and stood still against the tree...

"lets go...i will drop you" he said wiping her tears... this time he didn't seemed a devil but for her he was the most handsome boy who offered her a support...who seemed to be regretting what he did... she smiled... and walked towards the car...



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"Certain things are unpredictable...mostly the secrets will be hidden unless the right time comes...even this crown has its own history...i am sure Kaka..." Bhuvan tried to explain to the old man...



Kaka was not relieved, he only wanted Veer's life...if something happens to him that would be the last thing the old man could see...he knew there were many things unknown...many stories untold... "but there could be some way Bhuvan?"



"Kaka if I could see a way I would have told you...but as I said you must leave some things to the destiny...we cannot save anyone life, but we can pray...you must not worry"



Kaka found it hard to believe...in his mind he made an assurance that he will save Veer no matter what happens...even his Father couldn't tell the whole story...but he must not loose hope...he closed his eyes and took the crown, put it back In the box...


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He took out her luggage from the car "hope to see you soon"... she didn't say anything...

as she reached the door she turned at him "not in this life"...he was still for a moment...

something struck him...



"not in this life" '..the words echoed in his ears... but he ignored and left from there...



It was difficult for him to stay away from the bar...he drove towards the town and went inside a famous night club...



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"Chandni open the door...how long will you take...beta I have to give you this..." Kamini knocked at the door thrice...



but Chandni was sitting in the bath tub...she was still thinking about Veer...how he forcefully kissed her...then laughed at her, twisted her arm, gave her the jacket, embraced her...finally said sorry... there was a little smile on her lips... slowly her hands touched her lips... she closed her eyes and took a deep breath... something was tormenting her...



she remembered how he touched her...she couldn't forget his strong grip around her body...she could hear her heart thudding... what was that...she was angry at him for kissing her and now she's touching her lips and feeling his strong hands around her body... she opened her eyes and heard her grandmother's voice... "coming" '..



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"I tell you Veer...its so good to meet you...you are an amazing person..." Vishal patted Veer's back...Vishal had just met him an hour ago...Veer had a attractive personality that made him famous among people... some boys in the club didn't had enough money left to buy more drinks... Veer paid for their drinks...now these boys would make Veer their leader... they started dancing in the club...



Veer was drunk... "how come I can see you in this bottle...how did you come here???"



Vishal was surprised at Veer '.. "who is she?? your girlfriend??" he smiled while drinking...



Veer smiled and walked up towards the dance floor... "I have trapped a girl who is just like a bottle of alcohol" '..all the boys hooted at his comment...they clapped...and cheered him...



"and... and...i '.i had an empty pocket in my heart, I kept her carefully in it"



he took off his jacket and danced with the other boys at the club...



after few minutes he took another bottle and opened with his mouth... "each part of her body is attracting...anyone who looks at her praises her...the...the addiction she carries with her...i...i can't describe...there is no value of her beauty and tantrums" they danced and made noise the whole night...



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Next Day...



"yes memsaab I have worked there for few years...yes I can do every house hold work" Pratima answered the questions confidently...



Chandni was convinced... "well I think everything is fine but you have to stay there then..."



Pratima baffled "no no...i am married...my husband will kill me if I stay some other place..."



That was enough for her to panic...Chandni thought something... "what does your husband do??"



Pratima was silent...she knew very well that the only job he does is drinking... "nothing memsaab, he just drinks all day and I have to get him one bottle everyday when I go home" she answered helplessly...



Chandni smiled "well I have a solution to your problem...can he drive??...i mean if I give him drivers job??"



Pratima was excited...she folded her hands "memsaab, if that drunkard gets a job, I will be relieved...you are God to me...please...please give him some job...i am tired of his drinking habit..."



"you don't have to do that...wait...there is one condition...no one in that house drinks...they hate drinkers...so make sure your husband doesn't drink inside the house or when he's at work..."


Chandni made it clear...she opened a small notepad...and wrote the address... "well take this and tell them that you will start work from today...now go"



Pratima was happy, she touched Chandni's feet...Chandni immediately got up from the couch... "i told you...please don't touch my feet..."



Pratima didn't knew what to do, her happiness was reflecting on her face...



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After few hours...



Veer was sleeping when he heard the knock again... that always made him angry...anyone disturbing his sleep was the most annoying thing for him...he finally got up...



"coming you bas***d...stop breaking the door" he yelled while walking downstairs...

he furiously opened the door... "yes...who the hell are you looking for" still rubbing his eyes...



To his astonishment she was smiling "saab...my name is Pratima...and this is my husband Deenu" she pointed towards a slim man standing behind her who looked as if he will fall any moment...



Veer was more angry "thank you...now get lost." he was about to close the door at her nose when he heard the next word that made him change his mind and he wide opened the door "Chandni!!"



Pratima "yes Saab...Chandni memsaab has sent me to work here and my husband will drive your car"



Veer rubbed his hand on his face "come in...now don't expect me to tell you what to do..."



Pratima immediately answered "don't worry Saab...Chandni memsaab has told me everything...i will make sure all the work is done properly..."



"hmmm" Without bothering much he walked back to his room...


but he thought about her... "Chand" ...she cared for him or was he thinking too much about the damsel...


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Edited by Freethinker - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

di u r amazing...just amazing.

some times i feel, ki i juz dont deserve to comment here. a child like me, jus dont deserve it...

u r awesome.

may b i m d youngest rtmc ff writer here...right??

n u all di's are ma inspiration,,,,


but still if u wanna read ma bak bak, u r alwayz welcome...

lets strt wid ud.

She felt as if she was his prey...a prey where the preyer doesn't bother to think about the feelings or emotions of the person he is laying his eyes on...

just like the title of story- shikar...

i feel pity for chand,

be it or not, veer really annoys dis way. he shud nt b so rude to her.

she feels like crying here... i feel like shouting on him, kicking .him,, ...

But Veer Raichand can never follow any orders...

attitude haan!!...yo boy...killer, damn killer.

"listen..." . "i wanted to kiss you..." "and you should be happy that you received what most girls just dream of"... wat is dis...he is damn shameless, amazing creature,

veer don't flaunt urself too much

its not her, its u deing for her...u cn't control her attraction, u cn't bear her beauty...

aww..chand fell in wet mud...kapde gande ho gye...

koi nhi, daag acche hote h, surf excel h na!!!!(actually di, its a punchline of a detergent powder in india, very famous dialogue)

"a snobbish girl like you, deserves this"...he called her snobbish...u snobbish veer.

barish aa gyi...rain dance karenge ab sab...

i have a request, plz can smone give ma chand to ATTITUDE...

i want her to speak the way he speaks.

she hold his hand "please don't go"......why did she do dis...

lagta h bachi der gyi, koi baat nhi

loved d way he gave her his jacket.

she felt so weak n helpless dat she hugged him, the cause of her pain, n her healer too...

wat a contradiction, i must say...

lovd dat scene.

so veer, finally confessed. good boy.

"not in this life" '.- is she gonna suicide.

or she is gonna run some wer to abroad?????????

ooo...suspence, i like it!!

she ws thnking of him ...his kiss n his confession, she even smiled,

chand, dont b so easy to him, plzz...

di u noe, the part of the story ws scene in club, club nite is the scene of ud...

i read it 20 times, literally...

still i can't stop it reading, i donno why, i loved it so much

may b i lovd the way he is missing her, he cud see her in bottle, bestest dialogue ws

"and... and...i '.i had an empty pocket in my heart, I kept her carefully in it"

funny part ws, he loved loved her hissy nature, her tantrums...hahahaha...

chandini, do she really cares for him?????????

chalo he atleast thinks of her...

but he thought about her... "Chand" ...she cared for him or was he thinking too much about the damsel...

he called her chand...wow, me feel like jumping on ma bed...(coz i cn't jump on ma brother's)😉

lov u di

u r awesome.

ud soon...

Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
totally superb...awesome...👏
veer,veer,veer she is hell angry with you...n he not bothering about her anger...god he has so much of attitude...

''... "i wanted to kiss you..." he said while grasping her more closer...his eyes couldn't lay on anything else except her lips "and you should be happy that you received what most girls just dream of"...he looked into her eyes for few seconds then pushed her away...''

man how could he say that...he is not feeling regret of what he did...he is really shameless...😡
n couz of him she fell in mud n he is enjoying...man agar main chand k jagah hoti na toh use bhi usi mud main dhakka de deti...😈...
she tried to slap him...but he stoped her n said her snobbish...veer you...god i can't say anything to him...he is the hero of story...but veer you really doing it wrong...😡
but still their is some one nice inside him...whatever he did...after he felt guilty...n apologised too...good...now don't show any type of attitude towards her...just be like this...a good man...
n she asked him not to go...god this girl really unbelieveable...one moment she is scared of him n next moment she felt safe with him...
kaka was still not able to find the way out...to save veer...kaka sometimes you should leave things on destiny...

''...He took out her luggage from the car "hope to see you soon"... she didn't say anything...

as she reached the door she turned at him "not in this life"...he was still for a moment...

something struck him...''


😲god does she really didn't want to come back than what was that why she send those servents to him...???????...😉
n she is angry with him but after reaching her house...she is only thinking about him...she smiling thinking about him...what was that...?????...she doesn't want to go back,she doesn't like him but smiling thinking of him...😍
n veer in night club...veer clear your misunderstanding...you haven't trapped her...you are in love with her...but the thing which need is to understand your feelings...
but what about that white dress lady...humne phir use nahi dekha...where is she...???????...darr gae kya...??????...😆
thank you for updating...once again...🤗
update soon...
luv u...😊
Edited by ridzzi - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
awesome update

really loved it
veer is so cute when he gave his jacket to chand
n she hugged him
sooo sweettt

really chand cares veer..,thats why she sent maid for him.,very cute

lovely update,yeh veer sudherega nhi when h stop drinking yr

cont soon
thnx 4 pm
luv u
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Posted: 13 years ago
AWESOME
👏👏👏👏👏
jaldi ud dedo didi
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Posted: 13 years ago
Nice update... Why did Chandni send those two here.. to have people around them.. or what..?
Continue soon... 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
di ...im really sorry 4 not comntng previously...😭...had xams...
di all d ud r awesum !!! brilliant !! amazing !! 👏 👏 👏
luvd all of dem !!
d words u hav usd r fabulus !!! ⭐️ ⭐️
seriously beautiful ,powerful,soulful emotions...perfectly descrbd by u !! i luvd it !!! 👍🏼
d ambience dy create..out of d world !! 😍
i luvd d way Veer broke d window n came...😃...but culdnt he b more gentle...👎🏼
d words u've usd 2 descrbe d kiss ...is just wooow...
petrified paroxysm of desire he lay his lips on hers.. ☺️
dis is calld killng by words di !! 👏
felt bad 4 Chandani...
the first time in his life he forcefully touched a girl and kissed her so badly y do u hav 2 do dat 2 Chandani...??
dat king is such a 🤬 🤬
his wife luvs him soo much !! wat more does he want ???
she was right in cursng him !!! 👍🏼
she's a strong women ...i.like dat !!
poor Chandani her fathr tried 2...😡...dats disgustng !!
dat guy is an even biggr 🤬 🤬
n how culd he do dat 2 his wife 2??? 😡
he such creep.he shuld die...!!!
no wonder Chandani doesnt believe in luv...
Veer is so... confident n carefree...totally cool...xtra cool...😎
likd d jackt n embrace n sorry...😳..
now i undrstood d meang of d title...shikar...hunt...prey...wid help 4 Rashu 2...😉..
Chandni is under his spell...😍...
luv shikar...n u di...🤗
plzz...dont mind if my commnts r irregular these days...

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Posted: 13 years ago
Amazing update.:-) I loved it:-):-) Veer to Attitude ka bhi Baap hai;-);-) cont,.

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