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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: sweetsanyo

di today hi ud dena,...


ab main sone jaa rhi hoon...

apke pass 2 n half hr aur h, jaldi ud do...😈...

alright my sweetie...here's your update...
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Posted: 13 years ago


Part 12


It was evening and Kaka was busy in preparing the dinner...Chandni woke up from her sleep, she looked outside and saw the evening sun settling down...the weather wasn't clear, black clouds were covering the sky making a very little space for the sun to draw its rays... there was little fog on the window panes...Chandni stretched herself and looked at the time... "oh no...how did I sleep that long" her eyes were wide open...


she quickly got off the bed and wore her t-shirt over her spaghetti top, she tied her hair in a bun and clipped them together with her hair clip. She washed her face with luke warm water just to get rid of the laziness that came after lying cosily in the bed for past few hours...she patted her face with the towel and was about to open the door when she realized herself standing in her short pants... she quickly opened her bag and took out a trouser...


"good evening Kaka" she came strolling towards the old man...


"good morning Chandni" Kaka said in a low voice... she looked at him, there were tears in his wrinkled eyes...


Chandni worriedly asked him "Kaka...are you alright??"


Kaka glanced at her... "oh absolutely...why do you ask?" he looked at the furrow on her forehead...


Chandni asked him reluctantly "you are crying?...so I thought I would just ask..."


Kaka smiled "oh...these tears are cause of these onions...actually I am finishing the work quickly, I have to go buy something before the shop closes..."


Chandni smiled "you always cook yourself??"


Kaka answered her question "well not in Mumbai...i used to guide the staff...but here I didn't wanted any chef with me so I am cooking myself, I don't find it difficult...we hardly have anything to do"


Chandni felt happy talking to him and she somehow thought of helping the old man "do you mind if I help you?...i mean I know how to cook..."


Kaka was smiling "thanks Chandni...but how can I ask you to cook...you can rest, you have big job tomorrow"


Chandni immediately came near the kitchen bench top "please Kaka, its alright...believe me I make nice food... and I have been sleeping since last few hours..."


Kaka had to give up in front of her "alright...if you are happy to cook...then I will go and buy some groceries and will be back soon...hope that's a not a problem Chandni"


Chandni picked up the knife and was about to chop the onions... "please Kaka...i have no problem...you go ahead and easily do your shopping..."


Kaka smiled and left after sometime...


Chandni started chopping the onions...though she had never chopped onions before she didn't felt as if she was doing it for the first time...chopping was always done by Kamla, her maid servant...Chandni always saw her cooking and that's how she got some knowledge of it...


She cut the half onion, but it didn't make her cry...she was happy...but as she finished it...tears started rolling from her beautiful eyes... she wiped her tears with the back of her hand...she continued chopping...


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Veer got up after he heard his phone vibrating under his back... he picked and disconnected the phone... he rubbed his eyes and got up from the bed and opened the first drawer of the huge cabinet and took out some pain killers...he took one tablet and searched for water...he took the jug and walked downstairs...to his surprise he saw her crying but he didn't see the onions she had been chopping...


he came closer...he was curious to know the reason...he wanted to kill that thing, that made her cry...her cheeks were red... "what happened??" he asked her as he came closer to fill the jug with water...


"nothing" she replied hurriedly while placing a big pan on the gas... he quickly had a glass of water... but didn't asked her again...something was urging him to know the reason of the tears coming from the mesmerizing eyes... she was stirring the pan with a spoon...


he couldn't resist...it was almost difficult for him to go back to his room...he sat on the couch for some time... then turned to look at her...


her beautiful features looked so innocent...he finally got up and came closer...he was standing behind her... she turned to pick up the vegetables when she banged into him and was about to fall when he hold her hand...


she glimpsed at him...he looked innocent...his personality made him look extremely aristocratic... for a minute Veer and Chandni were lost...


She stood still...but he didn't leave her hand... "Veer" she asked him, with a quick glance at his hand holding her hand...he immediately pulled his hand back...


she resumed back to her work while he was still standing and looking elsewhere for few seconds... "are you crying?" he asked softly but there was concern in his voice...he was waiting for the answer...


Chandni smiled but didn't turn to face him "yes" she said clearly...


Veer was now more curious, something was disturbing him... "who made you cry?"


Chandni heard his voice turning into anger...this time his voice wasn't soft...it seemed he was concerned and somehow curious... "well leave it...we can't do anything to the one who made me cry"


Veer was burning in rage, he hold her arm and made her look at him "you just tell me, who made you cry and I won't leave him"


Chandni looked into his eyes that clearly showed how much he cared for her, he was asking her seriously and she was smiling inside... "alright, if I tell you, then will you chop him into pieces?"


Veer was still holding her arm...he was angry "yes I will...you just tell me who is the one?"


Chandni pulled back a little and picked up some onions from the rack "here...they made me cry"

she smiled broadly...


Veer looked at her embarrassingly... "onions!!!..."


Chandni broad smile turned into laughter...it seemed thousands of flowers started showering from heaven... "Veer...you must chop them …..you told me that you will..."

she said and laughed...


Veer was about to walk away when she hold his hand and gave him the knife, then pulled him towards the chopping board... "please Veer...you told me you will chop the one, who made me cry..."


the moment she hold his hand...he felt himself drawn towards a different world... he didn't heard what she said...he was happy...something was soothing him inside...he felt her hand touching his soul...it seemed he was her admirer since forever.


Chandni's laughter turned into a gentle smile...she thought while she looked deeply in his eyes "why can't you let me remain in my senses...why I want to shrink in your arms?...why I want to hide in your chest as if you are my ocean"


Deep in his heart he said to himself "you don't know Chandni, my eyes search for you everywhere...i live and die when I see you...i think of you every moment, stop me from getting close to you..." he closed his eyes and took a deep breath...


there was a sudden noise from the pan on the gas... Chandni came back to her senses... she turned off the gas... "thank God, it didn't burn".


She looked at Veer who was looking at her... "are you cooking??"


Chandni replied while covering the pan with a lid... "yes, hmmm don't forget you have to chop the onions..."


Veer smiled "alright...where are the onions..."


Chandni handed him the onions... "you have to chop these five onions..." the gave a mischievous smile...


Veer began cutting the onions...


After few minutes... tears were floating his eyes...

Chandni smiled at him "oh Veer, onions made you cry as well..."


Veer glanced at her while her clip fell down...her long silk hair opened...she picked up the clip and tied her hair again... All this while Veer was looking at her...he didn't bother to look at the chopping board...finally the sharp knife gave a small cut on his finger... "ouch" he said while lifting his finger and looked at the blood...


Chandni came closer and hold the finger... she looked at him and put his finger in her mouth... she sucked his finger with her tongue...


that was enough for arousing Veer...it was difficult for him to control his feelings...her soft hands were holding his hand...he moved his hand forward and touched her hand... "its alright" he said while she looked at him...


she saw the finger...it wasn't bleeding anymore... "its fine now" she said while looking carefully at the finger... "where were you looking Veer...?...how did you cut your finger?" she queried worriedly...


Veer saw the innocence on her face dragging him towards her...he stepped closer while she gazed into his eyes and stepped backwards...he again stepped forward and she stepped backwards... both didn't say anything...there wasn't any space for Chandni to step behind when her back touched the wall of the kitchen...


with dreamy eyes she looked at him then looked at his jacket...her hands were on her sides...he moved his hand to touch her cheek...and other hand towards her waist... he was so close to her...

for Chandni it was like a spell...she couldn't stop him from touching her...she felt all the world around her like a magic... as soon as he touched her cheek... she felt her cheeks burning in fire...Veer's hand on her waist made her completely lost in him...


his captivating eyes made her look at him...she was shy, for some reason she wanted him to embrace her tightly in his arms... but on the other hand something was signaling her the danger that was coming near her... he gripped her waist, not so tightly but slowly...his arm curled around her slim waist... making them more closer...her hands automatically lifted up to touch his chest...both were looking into each other eyes...


He looked at her "i can't think of the consequences of touching you" he was all lost in her beauty...


Chandni was lost in his charm "who is asking you to think about the consequences"


Veer slowly moved his fingers on her cheeks "my life is becoming your desire"


Chandni touched his neck with her soft fingers "what desire is this, what gesture is this?"


Veer looked into her eyes as if he was waiting for her since ages "i have spent every moment in agony without you" his fingers softly touching her cheeks


Chandni's fingers entwined in his thick black hair "stop this before I mislead my steps" she closed her eyes...


he came closer and touched his forehead with hers...


there was silence around...nothing heard, no words were said...only their hearts spoke...

All they could hear was the sound of the cold wind outside...


There was enormously big thunderstorm that seemed a warning to the entire universe... both came back in their senses... Veer realized what he was doing...they moved apart...


Chandni embarrassingly walked towards her room, and closed her door from behind... "why was I so unconscious, what kind of effect is this" she touched her burning cheeks...she felt restless...


Dark clouds occupied the whole sky, accompanied with lighting and thunderstorm...it seemed it was a sign of danger that started creeping its way...


Veer walked upstairs...he couldn't think of anything else... the passion was becoming a pain, a torture...the distance between them was killing him...he wanted to get her...


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Posted: 13 years ago
yeah yeah yeeppiii akhir mil hi gya ud 😆
M 1st 😛
ye lo to mera cmnt 😛
ye chandu ko to meri or rajat ki adat lag gai sone ki 😆
m bhi bhut soti hu
kitna bhi sula lo my fav hobby 🤣
i luv sona
are aqe gold wala sona nhi sleep wala sona 😊
kaka ache wale kaka
kitne ache kaka
btati hu btati hu ki kaka ji ki itni tarif kyu
are kyuki kaka chandu n veer ko akela chod kr chle gye 😳
kisne rulaya chandu ko btao btao veer usf abhi chop krega 😆
Onion ne
veer -awww 😲
kro kro ab kro 🤣
awww poor veer ungli cut gai 😭
uuummm jo aage hua hone do m in my LALA LAND 😳
dont disturbe me 🤗
Edited by princesspriyart - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
🥳party party party party...

aajao oye sab shikar readers...😉...

milke party kare, gulchaare udayein......

dhool bhajayo oye...





(di aap dhol ko tho nhi bhole na!, india culture ka atoot, unbreakable part h yeh...)

aur bhangra bhi hoga...(aaj kal main saare ffs par yahi kar rahi hoon.)



di bhangra tho banta h, after all aap chandigarh ki kudi n main haryanvi chori, khoob jamega rang jab mil-baitheinge teen yaar, aap , main aur shikar ff ud...

okay ab aap yeh soch rahe hogr ki kahin meri sweetie sweetsanyo-rashmi pagal tho nhi ho gayi...ki faaltoo ka party kar rahi h

di chinta mat karo, mera mental balance ekdum proper h...

mere pass reason h party ke liye...

do u noe,,,😲,,,,of course u noe, u r the writer, but still......do u noe...😳.. veer is really in love with her, yes he cares for her, our chandini...☺️...
but beechara bar bar terms his loves as lust...he is naive in case of true love,...otherwise he is hw much mature we all noe!...
nadaan bacha!!......
kala tikka lagao mere naye naye, newly born lover ko...
kitna sweet romance karta h...😳...
so here goes the kala tikka. . dikha????????

ud ws mindblowing...

dekha dekha, chandini meri company main rahkar bigad gayi, i spoilt her habits......so communicable i m ......
she is sleeping for long hrs...
i m so happy for her new change...

kaka is damn good,.....he gives veer n chand privacy...

i like it, love it actually.😳

''will u chop them, who made me cry''...
''yes of course!''...
''then have these!''
''onions!''🤣

loved this scene,...

oops veer ki finger cut gayi,voh tho hana hi tha, aakhir dhyan khin rakho ge tho yahi hoga!😆 ...but ointment bhi tho kitna romantic n sweet mila h...😉
she immediately sucked his finger tip.😳

the way u wrote the last scene, man that surely makes it the scene of the ud.
just perfect...

di kya kar diya aapne, aisa scene likh kar jaan hi le li.

dialogues, u r master in dis di...
sooperbo jii, hats off.
lovely language used.

only their hearts talked,...☺️...dhak dhak dhak...

me in dreamy land, not in a mood to write more n disturb ma veer-chandini romance imagination...😍...
here by stop ma comment...

still hav ma punch line...😳

di u r amazing.🤗
love u...

ud soon.



Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Haye mar gayi main,itna acha update Dhanvi maar dala mujhe, mujhe is ff se pyaar ho gaya. i miss this ff so much ab to dreams main bhi imagine karti hoon, rajat as veer is cool.haye dono ka romance kitna acha dikhaya. lov u too good bindas update 🤗
Edited by mugdhas24 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
lovely ud dear..😊
sorry for nt commenting before...
exams chal rahe hai na...🤢
.continue soon
luv u...
Edited by mddmayuri - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
lajawab, mahasha alla, kya kehne aapke di. itna khoobsoorat likha hai ki mera dil bagh bagh ho gaya. sunder ati sunder. jitne app sunder us se bhi adhik aapka ff sunder. 😊
Edited by mugdhas24 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
kuch comment bhi kare gi rashu ya res hee rakhne ka iraada hai. 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
terrific update yaar...
kitichen scene was funny and romantic too..😊😳
but what was all that storm and thing...
story is turining very mysterious...
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: mugdhas24

kuch comment bhi kare gi rashu ya res hee rakhne ka iraada hai. 😆


aaj kal mujhe ek serious defect ho gaya h...

sleeping sickness(seriously mat lena, the disease caused by trypanosoma microbe...bas likhne ke liye likha h..)_

voh kya h na! medical entrnce dene ke baad main dhang se soi nhi hoon, u noe- 13 -14 hrs waali long sleep,...
voh vahi le rahi thi...

abhi poore comments main sabse baada comment dongi,,,,,,,,

yeh tho tujhe bhi pata h n di ko bhi...

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