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Posted: 14 years ago

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sooo cute. anyways how can you call Maan katte koti and all haan?

He is such a olle huduga .

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Posted: 14 years ago

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This is absolutely brilliant, looking forward to read more.

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MystiqueDew

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Posted: 14 years ago

#53

Finally Here I am with my comment😉

First ...let me give u big bear Hug🤗 🤗 🤗

It was Fantastic ...Excellent ...loved it!!!

Beautifully penned down ...from the start till the end ...Brilliant Job.

Really enjoyed just like my Dark Forest Chocolate Sundae ...Btw would u like to taste it??? Its really Yummyyy.

Beautifully portrayed Geet's yearning to get a glimpse of him.

Btw tum tho mera Maan ko Chef sae Coach banadiya😒 ...& let me tell U agar ye mera coach hota hena ...I swear I would have never bunked my Swimming classes ...God how I hate it ...but now I wish to resume it again if he is the Coach ...point to be noted ...Only Mine😳😆

I loved the Kiss ...Both are in pain though Maan's pain are hidden but the way how he stepped back & looked down ..it can really felt from that ...but I wonder y he is acting if he loves her.

Geet restlessness to have a glimpse of him cheering her showed how much he looks up to him & love him & the positin he holds in her life.

Maan knows how to play with his words ...striking at exact point ...nerving her ego ...coz he wants her to be best in everything ...after all She in MSK Ladylove ...right Madhu???

Loved the way how U have portrayed the Fire in her to show her Love that she is the Best.

Geet's outburst was emotional ...loved it!!!

Rachana was a sweetheart ...loved this line ..It was Best - "Rachna aur Maan never go together, magar Maan aur Geet is eternal and I shall never come in between them."
It shows how much she loves him.

So he was Keeping away from her to save her.

loved Maan entry with his trade lop-side smile with smirk ...loved the way how they made up ...U know I found one thing ...let tell U ...while making up they forgot to say those three words but I loved it how they made up for that with three Kisses😳😆

LOL ...Did he really meant that??? Madhu U need to give answer for this - "Jaan, one more kiss and I seriously will not think twice before doing it right here
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The concluding part was Beautiful ...Maaneet with their Little angel & one on the way.

Beautiful OS!!!

loved it ...Fantastic Job