my first OS: love hate#updated Part 4-page 11

arhicommited thumbnail
Engager Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#1
hey guys, i am not a newbie...i am an active member of IF n of this forum but have made this new id just to see the reactions of my first OS...i am sorry i can't reveal who i am...

just read this OS,if u like it, do comment n i will continue n tell u who i am otherwise i will forget it as a bad dream n close the account😭
----------------------

part 1

next day after arhi intense fight scene...

arnav was as usual busy on laptop with work, but loads of things were going around his head...yesterday he lost his cool again with khushi. he can't understand why he does these things to her which hurt him more than her. unintentionally but he had hurt her n no one can deny or justify his actions. his self control is slipping away day by day, he cant hold the truth any longer, its just getting ugly. she has broken his trust, she is house wrecker than how can she feel so strongly for his di n what was all that on holi...

arnav's mind was on utter mess when someone knocked on his door.

Arnav: come in

hari prakash with first aid box entered the room.

HP: arnav bhaiya, khushiji asked me to bring first aid box

khushi's hand was hurt because of his careless slamming of door, he has tried to help her but she refused it. this all was his fault, this can not be continued physically or mentally, it is torturing both of them.

arnav: keep it. i will tell her.

HP left room without intruding further.

arnav saw the first aid box that was kept on bed...how could he hurt her and that too physically,even unintentionally,but it does not justify anything, all things are getting messy, everything is becoming blur, not only literally but also significantly...he doesn't know anything anymore, what to trust? whom to trust?
his heart doesn't for a second believe that khushi can do something like this or his brain who screams what all he saw on terrace is true.

suddenly he realized that he needs to find khushi n give the first aid box to her.

just then the door opened again...

-----------------------

how was it? this is my first OS, should i continue? am i really very bad?be honest, i will continue if u all say so or will forget about it.
do comment n tell me about it.
thanks

Part 2 : http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2904908&TPN=3

Part 3 : http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2904908&TPN=6

Part 4 : http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2904908&TPN=11
Edited by arhicommited - 13 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

87

Views

11.5k

Users

46

Likes

346

Frequent Posters

zafi thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 3 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#2
Hello, It;s really good. Please continue.
Awesome.👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Loved it.
Looking forward to the next update.
Thanks.😃
arhicommited thumbnail
Engager Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#3
OMG, six comments and twelve likes...its like a dream, i will surely continue...thankyou so much, this all gives so much motivation...thanks once again😃
zaniax thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#4
Its really nice..i liked it!!!
plzz continue :)
zillionaire thumbnail
14th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 13 years ago
#5
liked it.. pls continue... :)
smashitup thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 13 years ago
#6
😊 continue .. sounds promising !
harshnee thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 13 years ago
#7
luved it continue soon and pm when u do
bluetaj thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#8
Who is it? Meant at the door hee hee. Pls continue
sruthirishi thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#9
got to know who is on d door...

do continue😃
princess84 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 13 years ago
#10
great start continue soon and plz pm me when u update next

Related Topics

Fan Fictions thumbnail

Posted by: sakshi5050 · 11 months ago

Ranveer's unsaid feelings #14 updated Episode 1019 page no 29

Welcome to the new thread of Ranveer's unsaid feelings. Keep enjoying the world of Ishveer. Their unconditional Love, their friendship, their...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions thumbnail

Posted by: sakshi5050 · 3 years ago

Welcome you all to the new thread of RANVEER'S UNSAID FEELINGS #13 Keep Travelling in the world of ISHVEER LOVE Warm Regards sakshi ❤️ Index...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions thumbnail

Posted by: Rizz-ington · 1 years ago

A N A R H I F F ---- Iss Darr Ko Kya Naam Doon Summary: Khushi is an internet famous 27 year old fashion designer from Lucknow. She has a chirpy...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions thumbnail

Posted by: abavi · 4 years ago

From the author's desk : Welcome to thread 6! I started to write this story years ago when the show was live and now when I look back on what...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions thumbnail

Posted by: desidillse · 1 years ago

[NOCOPY] Hello readers! I am Aditi, I have been writing stories here but this is my first short story on RiKara. Alike, you all have been...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".