ManVeer Short Scenes - *Short Update - page 25** - Page 11

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Angel_20

firstly thnks 4 the PM gal!!!😉

secondly u did a wonderful job loved it!!!⭐️ 5 stars 4 such a great writing it was filled with emotion yet made me feel those emotions i did cry a little especially on the part where M is left alone n she cant cry since no tears would fall really loved tht piece...😳
u r jus too good i could imagine most of this happenin with Manveer 😍 really hope u continue n keep me connected with ur short scenes would love to read more!!!😉



No mention about the PM sweets! I am obliged to PM people who want me to PM them 😆

Oh! I didn't mean to make you cry. I just wanted to make her cry. But a little part of me is happy that I made you cry It kinda sorta gives me a boost 😆 Thanks for always dropping such kind and sweet comments! 😳 Inshallah I will keep writing more!
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: IndigoBlues

hope everything gets alright for you because your one shot was totally..intense. 😳

of course, i'm in a weird la-la mood right now 😆 perhaps in some earlier time i would have actually empathized with all the angst and darkness in your short scenes..
but woah girl, you said so much in so less! 👏
the 14th part: this is ACTUALLY what i'm expecting him to do in the show to get back at her. 😆 i mean on one hand i felt pleased because he got his cruel revenge, and on the other hand could totally feel maanyata's grief.
and my favourite line was the one about her smiling like an angel and looking like an enchantress...i think that's actually the way he sees her and loves her in the show. 😳😃

looking forward to your next update,
megz.😳



Awww Megz dear! 🤗 I feel fine now! I shouldn't have said that I wasn't feeling very well but I had to give a proper explanation for the weirdness in the update 😆 You know, till Friday I was feeling in a SUPER La-La mode (the PriyAsh's SBB segment keeps spinning in my head 😍) but then something-something happened and then the forum was very empty over the weekend so my low mood got lower 😳 😆

It would be nice if it were to happen in the show but I don't want it. The reasons could change to better suit it. But him completely breaking her apart - NO! I wouldn't want that, I'd cry. But if he does that as something of a reaction then I'd be fine. What's wrong with me? 😕

It's also my fav line and I thought it'd be apt for her description. He just gets caught by her beauty and is so mesmerized...hayyyeee! 😍 Mashallah! Nazar na lage! 😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome scenes..Mais..You are one gem of a writer :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
Maisy!!!!

i know honey that u get really pissed when no body comments, par main to teri apna hi hun na!😆
upar se kiara and nizzie! phew!

okay jokes apart, AS usual, awesome writing! i loved the 2nd one of the three scenes, wow that was so painful, yaar i hope for a continuation scene to that one! cuz i wanna see how u show both of their emotions...

Uday's guilt conscience yet love for her and Manyata feeling betrayed.

pleez! pleez!😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
Amazing ones dear...
I hope you are feeling all good now...
Coming upto the scenes..very well written
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the emotions were beautifully penned down in each scene...
Great work..
Just keep going
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Looking forward for more.
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Thanx for the pm
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Posted: 13 years ago

Maisy, I'm so happy I decided to give into temptation and read.

Beyond worth it. Absolutly BEAUTIFUL. All three- each with a different purpose, persona and feeling, but so well written, artful and...touching. Loved it, keep up the great work🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
Such a quick update from my side! Lawlz 😆 Couldn't help it. Was inspired. Hope you enjoy!

16.
(inspired by Reeha)

She was standing at the balcony, her face gently rested on her palm. High above her, the stars shone brilliantly. And she was the first thing he saw when he entered the palace. As if she was standing there waiting for him.

And sure enough, when her awaiting eyes met his mesmerized one, they started to shine. Her face which was sulking just a moment ago, broke into the most genuine and the happiest of the smiles. Her face glowed, mirroring the thumping of her heart. Even from far apart in the lonely night, he could feel her pulse raising and the blood rushing to her cheeks.

And when she was feeling like that, he only wondered. Wondered whether it was her sheer innocent beauty which shone the brightest in the night or the stars?

Neither.

It was the tear of happiness that slid down her cheek which shamed the night stars and make the time stopped. As they looked at each other...

...and the time stopped.

As they fell...

deeper and deeper and deeper...

17.

He thought that she was actually very naive for thinking he didn't notice her. Because he did. Whenever she peeked from behind the wall to look at him thinking that he didn't notice, he knew exactly what she was doing. And he let her. Because it was the only time she didn't put up the walls of ego around her and actually admire him. So what if he couldn't fully enjoy that admiration which was rarely shown in her eyes. As long as it existed, no matter how much hidden, it was enough. Enough for him. Enough for her.

Enough for them.

18.

Sometimes she acted just like a little girl. Gathering up air in her mouth, making her cheeks puff up then release the air noisily by hitting her cheeks with her fingers; it was so childish and un-princess like. Swinging her legs while sitting on the large chair and looking around the room, sighing loudly while admiring the classy and expensive interiors; she'd always give this bored un-royal expression.

And he'd peek from behind one of his files, books or newspaper and look at her. And she would notice his look and stop immediately. And he would smile at her obedience and hide his face again, never noticing the tongue she'd always stick out at him whenever he silently stopped her from doing another one of her bored actions.

After all, he was the King of Jaigarh and she was the Queen, of both the state and his heart. No matter how childish.

19.

They never really felt distant from each other. Despite him being in another country and her being in another continent, they weren't really apart. They didn't even share the same sky anymore, for when the sun shone over him, she gazed at the night stars. But still, they weren't really separated.

Because when the night wind would blow, she'd kiss him. And when that kiss would reach him, he'd thank her by smiling at the stars.

Then a shooting star would fall and she'd wish on it to be in his embrace. And he'd open his arms wide in the pouring rain to feel her.

And she'd cry silently in her sleep when he'd do so. And he'd pray hopefully that she wipe away her tears. In her sleep, the kind loneliness would make her wipe away her tears and a gentle, strange shoulder in the unknown crowd would assure him that she was alright.

See, they weren't really apart. For them being together meant just to reach out...

...and the rest was done.


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Posted: 13 years ago
Woahha..this is simply out of this world...
very very beautiful penned down dear...

I am really out of words to appreciate them...
they are marvellous, outstanding, awesome, superb..
I specially loved the last scene...what a intensity..loved it
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keep going like this..
looking forward for more..
thanx for the pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
These were so beautiful and deep 😃 Loved them to the core 😳 I really hope CVs read these ⭐️ Awesome Work Mais 😊 Continue soon 😉
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Posted: 13 years ago
Lovely Scenes dear...loved them...
19th one was so touchy...i wish that we get to see such scenes in DEK...
🤗

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