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destinylove

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Posted: 13 years ago

My dear fellow RBO friends

I have lot of free time this week

Seeing many writing great FFs I am severely bitten by FF bug

i will give u a peep into the story :*u are mine*

please give ur honest feed back

This happens in Mumbai

but ..It is based on gujrathi families

Khanak is an young girl of 21 years who lives with her father Mr.Dilip Patel .Mr patel owns an

average business construction company ..

he is well to do but not extremely rich and all

She is a simple/ lively /bubbly/ innocen/talkative.. good hearted and

naturally beautiful ...looking girl who likes helpingothers

she does not know mainupulating cheating and any such fake acts

she lost her mother when she was eight years and taken care of by her father with the help of

neighbouring family friend..a middle age widow mrs.shanthi ben who lost her husband and who

has only one son .

.Let me call him Nitin ... who might be one or two years elder to khanak ..

Shanthibens husband was the owner of a super market in the same are ..which is looked after

by her after his sudden death ..

Nitin is a just finished graduate in Visual media communication and is a very talented camera

man who.likes to ...shoots documentary films and also news clip segments ...

he is a budding cameraman who undertakes assigments as per his liking...he is a free lancer

Nitins mom is like Khanaks dad elder sister ..they call each other bhain/ben ..

Khanak and the nitin are great friends from childhood...

Khanak develops a sincere liking for him..But his feelings are never said.. looks like he treats her

as close friend with whom he grew up ...

In the mean while khanaks dad when on a business meeting in a very popular ngiht club

comes across an orphan ...girl sonam who could not continue studies because she lost her only

support a drunkard father recently ...

Also she had a troubled childhood because Sonams mother had a ran off with another so called

rich man leaving sonam ..But she dies later being harassed by tht so called rich man

That is the main reason for sonams dad becoming a drunkard ...

Sonam is of Khanaks age ..good at studies ...Sonam likes to put make up and be glamourous

looking all the time ..she likes to be chased by guys ..but she lacks more moeny to do such

things freely ..she is waiting for an opputunity to become rich ...so tht she can enjoy doing these

acts ...

She longs for real love and is jealous to see girls of her age getting it

Sonams dad meets her at a night club where he has a business meeting with a client .

.Mr patel did not want to go to any night club ..but the client insists he needs to have the meeting

it in a popular night club

Sonam worked as bar tender there to make a living ...

.there is a fight in the night club when the client accompanying Mr patel

is trying to misbehave with sonam ..sonam is saved by khanaks dad..and she starts crying

miserably

.he sees that she is very young...

By chance he enquires her and gets to know her story ..he feels sorry for her becasue he also

lost both his parents when young 😭

sonam says she wants to study further 😭

he takes pity on he brings her to his place .

.He arranges a room for her.in a ladies hostel for students which is located in the same street

wher they lived

.and says that he will take care of the expenses and says he will enroll her soon in a good

college to complete her studies and that she is like his daughter

He introduces her to his khanak and family friends i.e..shanthi ben and nitin

Sonam is from day number one jealous of khanak getting so much love from dad/shanthiben and

Nitin

because she never got it ..

She sees that khanak is fond of Nitin ..

Khanak has neither liking nor any speicla love for sonam..

Nitins mom shanthi ben is not liking her ..some how she thinks th girl is not having good

character ..

Nitin is a nice boy who helps every one so he just smiles at Sonam hen introduced and asks few

formal questions ..Nitin looks good and appears to be little rich too

Sonam gets to have some ideas of trapping him slowly ..but time being nothing..

Dilip patel gets an appliction form for both Khanak and Sonam for Visual media and

communciation course in a popular college..in the same city

Both get admission and Enter the college...

Khanak requests Nitin to come to the college to drop her since her dad ahd some important

business meeting and since she is nervous on the first day. ...to go alone.

Sonam also comes along since khanaks dad asks nitin to take her too ..

Nitin/sonam/khnak reach teh college in Nitins car ..

Nitin ahs encouraging words for khanak while sonam looks on ..

To be continued ..

Wait for the next

precap:

Khanak meetsaccidentally a very rich handsome guy shantanu Modi..She does not know

th real idenity of shantanu that he is the only son of a business tycoon and at present managing

director owner of a very popular Tv channel...

.Shantanus character sketch :

Shantanu has no faith in love /marraige or any such matters because of the bitter happening

with his mother

his Father Mr Rajan Modi had illicit affairs with many *not so good character * women therby

hurting his very good natured mother ..who loved his dad dearly 😭

..though his mother never told Shantanu anything he knew about his fathers shadowy actitvites

well

...He went abroad after schooling ...He has always either stayed alone or with his mom...

...He has no love/respect for his father But he hasimmense love and respect for his mother

becasue his mother requested him. to look after business and help his dad . his father

recovered from an heart attack ..

he without interest t returned to India to take care of business ...

he is not having any belief in *true love* or marriage or Girl friend etc.,

shantanu is the legal heir to a multi million dollar **Modi **business empire which has set its s

strong foot in various fields ..

His family hs very close friendship with another top rated business family of Mr. Anil shah ..Mr

Anil Shah has a beautiful daughter** Natasha **who studied with shantanu abroad ..

Both shantanu and Natasha studied Visual communicaion at Cambridge university ..

Natasha also chooses to return just because shantanu returns

She likes shantanu a lot and Hangs around him..Both sharing hot drinksoften in clubs ..

Natasha likes Shantanu ...

but shantanu feels nothing for her because of hisbitter experiences in his family

Mr Anil shah and Mr.rajan Modi ha serious plans to get Shanatnu married to Natasha

Edited by sshriyaa84 - 13 years ago

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purvi08

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Posted: 13 years ago

oh woowww shri

do continue it👍🏼

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IF_rida

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Posted: 13 years ago

its really gud shriya

interesting story line

do continue soon

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angelic_leena_3

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Posted: 13 years ago

it's interesting shriyaa..update soon😃

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janavi07

@janavi07

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Posted: 13 years ago

shriyaa great...

u start FF that's very nice...😛

i love first part...

khanak is a simple/ lively /bubbly/ innocen/talkative.. good hearted and naturally beautiful ...looking girl who likes helpingothers she does not know mainupulating cheating and any such fake acts.

wow!u add all factor of khanak...

and sonam is fully oppsite to khanak...

shaan dont believe love... that's great yaar...

khanak,sonam,shaan,natash in one college and doing same course...wow!i think shanak first meeing in college with fighting...

waiting for the shanak first meeting...

waiting for the next part...

love u...

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Ramani

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Posted: 13 years ago

nice to see many of them exploring their writing skills on our favourite couple shanak..
do continue soon..
sounds real interesting..

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snigdhanagar

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Posted: 13 years ago

grt start shriyaa...👍🏼
waiting for nxt part...

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Sharon

@sharon18

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Posted: 13 years ago

Hey Shriya nice start😃

Looks like a maze of love stories with a wide variety of characters😃

Its seems really promising...

waiting for ur updates

update soon😃

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ONAego

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Posted: 13 years ago

Omg u started a fan fic sounds gd...loved ur tale interesting. Love u shriya sis ...update nxt prt soon!

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destinylove

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Posted: 13 years ago

#10

Thanx for all ur encouraging feed backs😊

I have given a pretty long update this time ..So hope u like it

and introduced new characters too

..Please read this long update with patience and enjoy 😊also give ur

honest feed backs😊

Friends

some have mistaken Shantanu/natasha/khanak/sonam study in same

college...

No it is not like that ..

Shantanu and Natasha are no more students ...

They have finished their courses abroad and have

returned back to India ..So is Nitin...

Nitin is a cameraman- reporter and not student .

But khanak Sonam have enrollled for an one year diploma course in visual communication ( advanced )for training so as to enter the TV industry as directors/editors /camera women/reporters/news readers in short..

anything creative in Tv industry .depending upon the suitable openings which they feel would give them scope for a good career...

This is advanced diploma after their graduation in the same subject ...

hope doubts are cleared :)

Here is Episode 2

*** College days are back for khanak ***

NItin talked to Khanak in a comforting way and asked her to remain calm

and not to be nervous on the first day...

.He reminded she was only doing an advanced diploma course ..for an

year ..and time will fly off soon...

He told her that after all she is a graduate in the same subject and that this is just an advanced diploma 😊

Khanak asked him few curious questions like*** How to introduce herself properly ..What if the teacher asked to do some thing creative etc., Nitin patienlty answered her ..

Khanaks dad and shanti ben called Khanak over mobile and wisher her good luck 😊

Mr Patel and shanthiben wished Sonam too😊

But Sonam wanted something else ...

Sonam was looking on with jealousy Nitin comforting Khanak..and Khanak asking questions to him like a curious kid..him answering sweetly 😊

She wanted Nitin to do the same to her ..But she thought to herself* wait let

me take step by step* ..

atlast khanak smiled and gained confidence and Nitin asked khanak 's permission to leave and left .

after bidding bye ..he smiled at sonam too and wished her once again good luck too ..😊

Khanak had neither liking nor hatred for sonam.😊

.it was neutral friendship with sonam for khanak.

Khanak told sonam that now** they can enter the classroom ** ..

Khanak/Sonam entered the class room .

..Khanak found her college mate Neha seated and she was damn excited..

Both khanak and Neha were very happy to see each other ..neha was from

Nagpur so Khanak was sort of not so much in touch with her so much after

graduation ..

but they had been friendly at college..

Now both renewed their college friendhsip and were laughing😆

Neha is a witty girl and khanak could not stop laughing at her wits 😆

She introduced sonam to her .

and sonam was also smiling as courtesy when Neha was cracking jokes ..

some handsome boys entered too .

among them was Ayush who was also Khanaks class mate .

he was also excited to see Neha/khanak and he joined the fun..

The teacher entered..Nothing much happened on the first day except to introduce themselves ...

Much to the delight of students t he college was officially closed for a

week ...immediately ...because of severe water scarcity prevailing at hostel ..

Thanx to the hosteliers day scholars also had a week long holiday 😊

sonam/khanak returned home.

khanak enthusiastically briefed her dad and shantiben about meeting neha /ayush..

.Mr patel asked few questions of courtesy to sonam and made her feel wanted ..

he suggested to shanthi ben that she can take Sonam/khnaks to help at her super market for a week

Shanthi ben was not so keen for sonam .

but she liked the idea because she thought she gets one more educated hand to set accounts right ... Khanak was happy to help Mrs shanthi ben and said she will come to her supermarket the next day ..sonam just nodded .

Nitin came in the evening..and khanak thanked him and briefed him too..

in the mean while destiny perhaps had different plans..

There was a phone call from khanaks Bua (Mr patels younger sister who lived in lonavla )

mrs Alka ben asking khanak to come over to help her especialy in managing restarunt for a week since she and Mr chavan both were unwell..

Khanaks Bua(Fathers younger sister) Alka ben:

Alka ben had married her college mate (Mr.sharad chavan a Maharashtrian) much against the wishes of Mr patel';s uncle/aunty who brought them up after they lost their parents and ..Alka had studied catering technology .

Like said before

mr patel had lost his parents.

so he did not want Alka to go against the wishes of their uncle/aunty who were childless and who brought them up so well .

Mr Sharad had studied ***catering techology and Hotel management ***with alka and was a gold medallist.

.Alkas uncle/aunty had objections as he was not gujrathi and also supposed to be from different caste .

Mr Patel knew .mr chavan was gem of a man/.but could not convince them ..neither could he convince his sister to forget mr chavan .

Alka married mr Chavan and soon after ..ther was not much touch with uncle aunty though they were not cut off..Later uncle aunty passed away 😭..

..But Alka could never ever ignore her brother and so could Mr patel ..he

was in close touch with her as he was very fond of his younger sister Alka (younger by 5 years 😊)

Khanak was mrs Alkas darling... since Khanaks mother (alkas bhabhi..Nirmala ) used to be very nice to Alka.😊

.and Alka had a more special soft corner for khanak after she lost her mother😭

..Khanak and Alka bens children( Ankit age 11 and Ananya age 8 ) got on like house on fire and

Khanak used to spend school/college holidays at Lonavla and so did the two children 😊taking turns .

Mrs Alka had children only after some years of marriage .

..so ther was considerable age difference between khanak and them . They were were fond of *Khanak didi * so was khanak .

Mr Chavan worked in top positions few five star hotels of mumbai..and also worked abroad for five years..

With that hard earned money he soon opened a medium restaraunt with boarding in Lonavla ..

Mr chavan soon had good business thanx to genuinity of food and accomadation and also due to loyal client patronage from mumbai..who were fond of his food and tourist influx from mumbai during week ends ..

Soon his restarunt with boarding earned a good name though it was not *five star* ..*****Sharads-Special .

****SS ***Restaraunt - with boarding * was already famous ..It served all sort of food..chinese /continental /chinese., Italian/and all types of Indian ..etc

But its speciality wasTypical traditonal Gujrthi food nd also fusion gujrathi food thanx to the catering technology graduate Mrs Alka .

Traditonal Gujrathi dishes were offered as they were prepared for generations ..It was a super hit. 😊

New fusion Gujrathi dishes changing the old recipes ..to suit new generation were also created and they were all an instant hit 😊.

But Mr chavan always saw to that the restaraunt had his personal touch and not only accounts / but catering/accomodation etc and other facilties provided were personally supervised daily .

..But he had an hernia operation recently..the dr advised him complete rest .

so he could not go to the restarunt /boarding ..he was getting worried increasingly even though he was constantly on phone ..

Mrs Alka also had severe knee joint pain ..Dr asked her to take rest too so she also could not go as substitute for Mr chavan.

children were looked after by maid servants at home .

..In the mean while when Mr patel enquired Mrs Alka of their health .

the same evening when Khanak had told of her holiday to Mr patel

So he told his sister Alka that Khanak was having week long holiday .

mrs Alka thought over for a while and phoned ...asking for khanaks help .

Khanak asked her fathers permission to leave and her father happily permitted.

Khanak was very happy to meet Ankit and Ananya and packed her luggage ... caught a taxi..

She informed shanthi ben over mobile of her non availability at super market and asked her to tell nitin and she called sonam and informed her too .

..She requested sonam to help Mrs shanthi ben .

Little did she know then that Sonam would slowly turn Nitin towards her side fully during her one week absence !!!!!!

***Shantanu at Ilonavla ****

Shantnu had returned from Cambridge .

His mother was extremly happy to have him back his father had fully

recovered from recent heart attack..and was at present in **some other

womans house**

he was all the while with shantanus mother during illness but after recovering he was back to his old ways 😭

Shantanu met his father for courtesy in that womans house(provided by his father) to which he hated going... but he went since his mom insisted ..

He said an *hello* to father and his father was happy to have him since he

needed a most reliable hand from his own family to look after business..and

he knew shantanu was very good at achieving tasks 😊

he arranged for a formal party to introduce shantanu..

In the mean while

Mr Sukesh Modi( Shantanus *chacha* )introduction

Mr Modi (Shantanus father) has a cunning younger brother

Mr..Sukesh Modi who was looking for an opputnity to takeover the

business completely .

he wanted his share as well as Mr rajan Modis share for himself.

he thought Mr Modi was ill.,

He would pass away soon and as Shantanu had stayed abroad he will never show interest in coming back nor will he show interest in heading the business ...

So Mr .sukesh had hatched a plan to give share to shantanu and take over the business empire permanently all by himself.

but his plans failed .

..he was frustrated to see young /charming /confident dashing shantanu return back and Mr rajan modi keen to make him the head of business operations

ther was a welcome party for shantanu coming back to india arranged at taj coromandel .

Mr Anil shah and many close business friends and well wishers were invited .

natasha was skimpily dressed...

she had some friends who came in equally skimpy out fits .. with bright too much make up and was seen drinking a lot too

Shantanu was never a party guy ..He drank... but not too much .

But he had to oblige all now..

..and he was not so happy to have a bunch of skimpily dressed women hanging around with silly jokes ..

he kept avoding natasha and her friends .

.and Natasha after heavy drinks was blabbering a lot saying* shatanu u r hot... I like u a lot...I want to be in ur arms let us dance ***..He was calm and composed *fakey *all the while for the sake of the crowd ..

He was endlessly irritated after the party and decided to take a break for a

week from the maddening crowd and discussions...

he informed his mother and father and left for Lonavla after booking a special

*dont disturb* suite in the restarunt/boarding owned by Mr Chavan .

he had earlier tried for a super classic five star accomadation through his

office male secretary ..

but could not get it all of sudden .

so he had to settle for Mr chavans lodging ..he was not so happy as it was situated in a busy area

But he accepted since he wanted to get away from the mentally tiring atmosphere in mumbai .

...

to be continued

Edited by sshriyaa84 - 13 years ago