how about if remaining story goes like this...?

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aditya151

@aditya151

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Posted: 13 years ago

REGARDING AAYI,HER PRIDE,ROHINI,DAKSH,NAINA ETC...

HOW ABOUT YESTERDAY IN PRECAP...AAYI FAINTING...🤢NEAR...TELEPHONE EXCHANGE OFFICE...IMAGINE THERE WILL BE MRS JOSHI...COMING THERE FOR SOME WORK...SHE SEES AAYI...AND GOES NEAR HER...HELP HER THEN..take her to her home..SHE MAY ASK ABOUT NAINA...THEN AAYI SHOULD EVOKE HER ANGER OVER NAINA...😡

AAYI:US LADKI NE THO HAMARI PARIVAAR KO THODA HAI...MERA CHINTU,MERA PATI,SAB KUCH...US KI VAJE SE...

MRS JOSHI:VIBHA JI ye aap kya keh rahe hai...mein samjha nahi...naina aisi ladki nahi hai....😲

AAYI:nahi mrs joshi ...usne pehle mera daksh aur meri beti kaa shaadi thod diya...phir mera parivaar...usne mera pyaar ka aapman kiya...usne mera daksh ko mujhse door kar diya...phir sonakshi ko galat sabit kar ne ki koshish kiya...bechari sonakshi ko dhoka diya..etc etc...she bursts about naina..😡aur wo bina maa ki ladki hai us liye maine apne ghar me usko jaga diya...usne mere pyar ko dhoka diya...ab parayi ladki mein andh vishwas karke maine galat kiya...

MRS JOSHI GETS ANNOYED LISTENING OVER TO THESE WORDS...she gets more anger then suddenly...😡

mrs joshi:vibha ji bas kijiye...naina bina maa ki ladki nahi hai...usko janam deke ,usko chod kar chala gaya 😭... uski maa...main hi hoon... haan main hi woh aurat jo ek nanhi si bacchi ko chod kar chala gaya...bichari...mere wajhe se bohut jyada takleef utane padi hai...😭

then she goes on to say her story...,her visit to darjeeling during dakshna marraige...etc everything...,also sonakshi shooting naina...but she coming in middle...etc etc...

and sonakshi listening to their convo from some corner feels bad..,guilty,,,,,on her mistakes...

finally ,repents...goes crying near..explains everything...she planned with rohini...to eliminate naina...and dakshna love...and aayi stunned with expression of guilt...😔😭

and then

AAYI :SONAKSHI ye tum ne bohut galat kiya...tum aur rohini ki iss chakkar mein mai mera parivaar ko chuka hoon😭...sabse jyada apne naina,chintu ko galat samjha...naina ko maine bohat takleef diya...ab mai mera chintu aur naina ko kaisa saamna karu...😭AUR IS GATIYA HARKAT MEIN ROHINI TUMHARA SAATH DIYA YE MAINE..SAPNO ME BHI NAHI SOCH SAKTHA...TUM DONO KI WAJHE SE MAI MERA ...SABSE LAADLA BETA DAKSH KO GALAT SAMJHA...😭

and then...assume u know that what happens after aayi repents on her mistake AND THEN HAPPILY DAKSHNA START THEIR RELATIONSHIP...😊...this should happen because there are only two weeks left so...less time...

AND AFTER EVERYTHING:DAKSHNA GO FOR A HONEYMOON...,😊THEY SPEND HAPPILY THEIR HONEYMOON...THEY COME BACK...ONE FINE MORNING NAINA FEELS DIZZY AND FAINTS IN KITCHEN...,DOCTOR COMES ..AND REVIELS THEM THAT NAINA IS PREGNANT...AND AAYI BECOMES SUPER HAPPY...,DAKSH BECOMES DOUBLE HAPPY...AND AT LAST THEIR BABY...AND ONE HAPPY FAMILY PHOTO...😊

BUT CVS PLEASE BRING OUT TRUTH.FIRST..DOESN'T MEAN THAT U BRING OUT TRUTH ON LAST DAY...AND JUST SHOW A HAPPY FAMILY PHOTO AT LAST...ATLEAST GIVE SOME DAKSHNA MOMENTS...😊

Edited by adityarao151 - 13 years ago

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Walter J. Pais

@walquest2000

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Posted: 13 years ago

@adityarao

You should apply to Shakutalam Telefilms, and start writing scripts. It is because we do not have good writers that we get shoddy story lines, and when they find some, they do not want to pay them. In any case, let us enjoy these stories ourselves on this Forum. Your story went very fast, perhaps, because there are only a few days left. Any way, your imagination is good. Please try your hand at writing stories. Slowly, the words will start flowing. You must make a start, and do not give up.

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aditya151

@aditya151

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Posted: 13 years ago

thanks a lot mr walter...for ur ...comments...

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ssbndaksh

@ssbndaksh

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Posted: 13 years ago

@aditya

good one...hope they truth is out before...only...and show dakshna more...

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LadyMystique

@LadyMystique

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: adityarao151
REGARDING AAYI,HER PRIDE,ROHINI,DAKSH,NAINA ETC...

HOW ABOUT YESTERDAY IN PRECAP...AAYI FAINTING...🤢NEAR...TELEPHONE EXCHANGE OFFICE...IMAGINE THERE WILL BE MRS JOSHI...COMING THERE FOR SOME WORK...SHE SEES AAYI...AND GOES NEAR HER...HELP HER THEN..take her to her home..SHE MAY ASK ABOUT NAINA...THEN AAYI SHOULD EVOKE HER ANGER OVER NAINA...😡

AAYI:US LADKI NE THO HAMARI PARIVAAR KO THODA HAI...MERA CHINTU,MERA PATI,SAB KUCH...US KI VAJE SE...

MRS JOSHI:VIBHA JI ye aap kya keh rahe hai...mein samjha nahi...naina aisi ladki nahi hai....😲

AAYI:nahi mrs joshi ...usne pehle mera daksh aur meri beti kaa shaadi thod diya...phir mera parivaar...usne mera pyaar ka aapman kiya...usne mera daksh ko mujhse door kar diya...phir sonakshi ko galat sabit kar ne ki koshish kiya...bechari sonakshi ko dhoka diya..etc etc...she bursts about naina..😡aur wo bina maa ki ladki hai us liye maine apne ghar me usko jaga diya...usne mere pyar ko dhoka diya...ab parayi ladki mein andh vishwas karke maine galat kiya...

MRS JOSHI GETS ANNOYED LISTENING OVER TO THESE WORDS...she gets more anger then suddenly...😡

mrs joshi:vibha ji bas kijiye...naina bina maa ki ladki nahi hai...usko janam deke ,usko chod kar chala gaya 😭... uski maa...main hi hoon... haan main hi woh aurat jo ek nanhi si bacchi ko chod kar chala gaya...bichari...mere wajhe se bohut jyada takleef utane padi hai...😭

then she goes on to say her story...,her visit to darjeeling during dakshna marraige...etc everything...,also sonakshi shooting naina...but she coming in middle...etc etc...

and sonakshi listening to their convo from some corner feels bad..,guilty,,,,,on her mistakes...

finally ,repents...goes crying near..explains everything...she planned with rohini...to eliminate naina...and dakshna love...and aayi stunned with expression of guilt...😔😭

and then

AAYI :SONAKSHI ye tum ne bohut galat kiya...tum aur rohini ki iss chakkar mein mai mera parivaar ko chuka hoon😭...sabse jyada apne naina,chintu ko galat samjha...naina ko maine bohat takleef diya...ab mai mera chintu aur naina ko kaisa saamna karu...😭AUR IS GATIYA HARKAT MEIN ROHINI TUMHARA SAATH DIYA YE MAINE..SAPNO ME BHI NAHI SOCH SAKTHA...TUM DONO KI WAJHE SE MAI MERA ...SABSE LAADLA BETA DAKSH KO GALAT SAMJHA...😭

and then...assume u know that what happens after aayi repents on her mistake AND THEN HAPPILY DAKSHNA START THEIR RELATIONSHIP...😊...this should happen because there are only two weeks left so...less time...

AND AFTER EVERYTHING:DAKSHNA GO FOR A HONEYMOON...,😊THEY SPEND HAPPILY THEIR HONEYMOON...THEY COME BACK...ONE FINE MORNING NAINA FEELS DIZZY AND FAINTS IN KITCHEN...,DOCTOR COMES ..AND REVIELS THEM THAT NAINA IS PREGNANT...AND AAYI BECOMES SUPER HAPPY...,DAKSH BECOMES DOUBLE HAPPY...AND AT LAST THEIR BABY...AND ONE HAPPY FAMILY PHOTO...😊

BUT CVS PLEASE BRING OUT TRUTH.FIRST..DOESN'T MEAN THAT U BRING OUT TRUTH ON LAST DAY...AND JUST SHOW A HAPPY FAMILY PHOTO AT LAST...ATLEAST GIVE SOME DAKSHNA MOMENTS...😊

@adityarao,

Nice storyline!👏... even i have a feeling that the joshi's will come into the scene when vibha faints... CVs dont have much time left to show aayi's being taken care of by some stanger while PH members find her... so the quickest way to solve things is to bring supriya or sonakshi in to the scene... and they will take another week to show how sonakshi explains her dirty plans and another week for aayi to scold her and rohini and on the last day in the last minute, she will forgive Naina and accept her...then THE END

And like Mr. walquest said , u r a really good writer and try ur hand at this... but i dont think u will be hired by shakunthalam telefilms or starplus bcz u write sensible, realistic storylines with common sense...whr as they want writers who can twist things around and create completely tangled bogus stuff... hehe... so i think u should remain entertaining the forum members who appreciate ur work...

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Neethu

@ntsindia

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

excellent story line..👏 hope and wish something like this happen in SSBN and the problems should solve soon.. and we get Dakshna more... 😍

but after watching couple of epi i have a feeling that Ayi is gong to understand who is for her and who is not for her. So wonder this incident is for Ayi to start thinking right or not.