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SORRY TO POST IT HERE I AM UNABLE TO ENTER THE FANFIC ZONE.

A gr8 story FIONA. All-in all I must say it is very- very creative on your side.

HERE ARE SOME FAULTS OF YOUR STORY---

Fault1>Yuvraj never accepted kittu's daughter in my story so if u want to write the second episode of my story then u can't bring her daughter close to Yuvraj. She could either be send to a boarding school she should live with Sonia Kapoor.

Fault2>When rohan meets yuvraj he must ask him why did yuvraj send him inside the school when no one was there except the terrorists.

Fault3>Kittu heard the truth from a watchman at Panchagani, u haven't mentioned about him. You must neutralize this proof.

Fault4>Is it that easy to escape from Afghanistan?????????? The terrorist r shown coming from, Afghanistan so after failure of their mission they must have returned there, because it is very difficult to keep a popular man like Rohan Kapoor with them for 5 years in India-a foreign country for them.

NOW I HAVE AN EXTENTION OF YOUR STORY------

Kittu is very much shocked, but before she could do any thing Rohan escapes from there. But luckily she had tapped Rohan's confession. Now she goes to the police station and reveals the truth, and in basis of this proof the police frees Yuvraj. The police issues arrest warrant against Rohan and Yogi for helping him. But both have escaped. Yuvraj and Kittu along with Kruthika, Mishti and Antara, happily.

A 5 YEARS LEAP--------

Kittu and Yuvraj are very happy together. But there is a problem with NNN. The channel is not working properly. It is unable to face the competition from other modern channels. Yuvraj had already sold his other channels. Now Misti is 9 now but she still hates her father. There is no news of Rohan or Yogi. Kittu's father is no more. Sonia kapoor is dead as she couldn't bear her lifr without Rohan. In this crisis period also Yuvraj donates Rs 2000 per month to some organization ffom past 5 years. Kittu knows about it & once she asked also but Yuvraj said he don't want to speak about his charity, & so she left it to him.

One day a postman comes to their place & gives them a cheque of Rs 5 lacs. It is on the maturity of a savings certificate of Antara. Everybody is shocked as there is no name of the person who had purchased the certificate( I know it is not possible in real life but any thing can happen in a daily soap, remember the heroines like Tanya can be pregnant for 2 years.). But still they accept it as they r in economic problem.

A few days latter their financial problem increases & Yuvraj stops paying the money one month. One day Antara finds her father going out of their house leaving his spectacles, as he looks very tensed. She follows him to return his spects & finds him entering an old factory where no one is present. She follows him & sees him talking with Yogi & an unknown man. She hears everything & gets a shock. She heard Yuvraj saying Yogi that he is unable to pay them 2000 Rs this month. Then Yogi threats him that if he fails to pay their money next month then he along with the photographer(the other man with Yogi, who earlier showed Kittu pics of Rohan killing Daksha) will tell the whole nation that it was Yuvraj who actually killed Daksha & passed the blame to Rohan.

Now Antara gets wery angry on Yuvraj and comes in front of him. Yuvraj is very much

Shocked seeing Antara. Yogi & the other man run away. Now Antara threats Yuvraj to tell the truth else she will kill her self. Then Yuvraj confess everything.

He says--- "It is true that I killed Daksha as she understood my plan to separate Kittu and Rohan, but she was ready to shut her mouth if I married her, but I wanted to marry Kittu so I killed her. After I came to know that Kittu's mother wanted us to marry and I was very happy but then I heard that she was carrying Rohan's child so I got very annoyed & I dumped her and went to Mumbai, but there I felt that I couldn't live without her so I returned back to Delhi. Then quite unexpectedly at my 2nd attempt she was ready to marry me. I was very happy with her when one day I got the news that Rohan is back. At that moment I got a plan to separate those 2 emotional fools (Remember Ffiona wrote in the beginning—"There In NNN, Yuvraj sees the cover story and gets angry and tells himself now that I had Kitu for me. Rohan always comes in between. I am not going to allow and he bangs the fist on the table." Well I developed my story from here.). At first I bought Yogi and promised him to pay Rs10000 every month if he helps me. But suddenly I found I was loosing the game as Kittu tried to expose me. Then I purchased the photographer & promised him the same, that's why I had to pay Rs 20000 every month from my salary to these two people. Once when I was in the jail Yogi called me that Mr. Rohan Kapoor wants to meet my driver in table No.20 of XYZ restaurant, as he wanted to give some money secretly to you (Antara) because he was worried about her future, where she won't have any support from her father as he would be in jail. He didn't gave the money directly to you (Antara)as he knew you won't accept it. Jogi knew all this as Rohan gave him the responsibility to make arrangements for contacting my driver. That Saturday morning when I was arrested Yogi informed him that every thing was done & he was very happy as every thing was going on in secret as planned by him and you didn't knew about it. It was celebration time for him because I was being punished but I changed the entire situation. I asked Yogi to call Kittu and tell her to come to that restaurant where Rohan will come and instead of my driver I send the photographer there. Rohan didn't recognized him as he didn't knew my driver. Luck favored me as Kittu didn't asked Rohan directly instead she caught my photographer who showed false photos to her which were moved."

Antara asks Yuvraj "then why did that Rohan confessed to Kittu aunty".

Yuvraj replied—"Rohan is an complete emotional person, he really loved Kittu, so when Kittu doubted him he couldn't bear it I guess he was mentally broken & out of frustration he took the entire blame on himself. Out of sadness, pain, misery & mental trauma he lied to her & left her forever. I understood that the people would think that he had fled away to save his life & so I asked Yogi to escape along with the photographer, so that the people feel they all went away together."

Antara asks him to confess it in national television through NNN & he, seeing no other way says yes.

A 25 YEARS LEAP----

Life has changed for Kittu a lot in these 25 years. She lost every thing. Misti left her as according to her, she lost her father for her mother's fault. Her Mother, Bhai, Bhabs is no more. Yuvraj committed suicide in the prison out of guilt. Due to economic problem she sold NNN. As she didn't had a single penny so Antara transferred those 5 lacs rupees which Rohan gave her to Kittu's account, but she also don't have any relation with kittu as she too feels that Kittu played with 2 lives.

She donated that money to a organization in Shimla where mentally challenged people are kept & trained & now she is a teacher of that school.

Rohan is also alive. He is somewhere in Assam where there is habitation of some tribal people. Once upon a time he too was in Shimla & in the same organization where Kittu is working. They met there, but he couldn't recognize her. In doctors advice he is shifted to the larger branch of that organization in Assam.

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Posted: 19 years ago
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where is fiaona's fan fic?

i'll like to read..

give em the link plz someone.
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Posted: 19 years ago
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aryan dipika is is fanfic link. just check out there.

as for AVFAN Yours is a great story. Yeah i am definitely working on your story. i have almost finished the story 50%.
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Posted: 19 years ago
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gr8 story AVFAN Enjoyed your story.

I am not a professional writer like you have wriiten maybe reading some of your FANFIC I will learn.

Thanks for finding the faults in my story. I will rectify one by one in my story.

NOW I HAVE AN EXTENTION OF YOUR STORY------
Kittu is very much shocked, but before she could do any thing Rohan escapes from there. But luckily she had tapped Rohan's confession. Now she goes to the police station and reveals the truth, and in basis of this proof the police frees Yuvraj. The police issues arrest warrant against Rohan and Yogi for helping him. But both have escaped. Yuvraj and Kittu along with Kruthika, Mishti and Antara and Karthik happily.

A 5 YEARS LEAP--------
Kittu and Yuvraj are very happy together. But there is a problem with NNN. The channel is not working properly. It is unable to face the competition from other modern channels. Yuvraj had already sold his other channels. Now Misti is 9 now but she still hates her father. There is no news of Rohan or Yogi. Kittu's father is no more. Sonia kapoor is dead as she couldn't bear her lifr without Rohan. In this crisis period also Yuvraj donates Rs 2000 per month to some organization from past 5 years. Kittu knows about it & once she asked also but Yuvraj said he don't want to speak about his charity, & so she left it to him.

One day a postman comes to their place & gives them a cheque of Rs 5 lacs. It is on the maturity of a savings certificate of Antara. Everybody is shocked as there is no name of the person who had purchased the certificate( I know it is not possible in real life but any thing can happen in a daily soap, remember the heroines like Tanya can be pregnant for 2 years.). But still they accept it as they r in economic problem.A few days latter their financial problem increases & Yuvraj stops paying the money one month.

Now well I have developed my story from here.

One night, antara is on her bed and she is doing her project work and she dozes off. Suddenly, she keeps tossing her head from left to right and she loudly calls says Papa, I am sorry and keeps saying more loudly that Kitu and Yuvraj come to her and wake up and say Antara kya hua beta and she gets up with her start. She is sweating from her forehead and she looks at Yuvraj. Dad aap theek ho sorry papa maine bahut bura sapna deka. Yuvraj asked what dream you had. She tells both of them that I dreamt that

Blend of your story some changes

One day I found Dad was going out of the house leaving his spectacles, as he looks very tensed. I followed him to return his spects & found him entering an old factory where no one is present. I followed him & saw him talking with Jogi & an unknown man. I heard everything & got a shock. I heard Dad saying jogi that he is unable to pay them 2000 Rs this month. Then Jogi threatened him that if he fails to pay their money next month then he along with the photographer(the other man with Jogi, who earlier showed Kittu pics of Rohan killing Daksha) will tell the whole nation that it was Yuvraj who actually killed Daksha & passed the blame to Rohan. Now I got very angry on you Dad and I came in front of you. You were very much shocked seeing me. Jogi & the other man ran away. Now I threatened you to tell the truth else I would will kill myself. Then Dad you confessed everything. Kitu and yuvraj listening to her dream . Antara continues that you confessed that you killed Daksha as she understood your plans to separate Kittu and Rohan, but she was ready to shut her mouth if you married her, but you wanted to marry Kittu so you killed her. After you came to know that Kittu's mother wanted youall both to marry and Dad you were very happy but then you heard that she was carrying Mishti ie Rohan's child so you got very annoyed & you dumped her and went to Mumbai, but there you felt that you couldn't live without her so I returned back to Delhi. Then quite unexpectedly at your 2nd attempt she was ready to marry you. You were very happy with her when one day you got the news that Rohan is back.
The height of my dream was that At first you bought Jogi and promised him to pay Rs10000 every month if he helps you. But suddenly you found that you were loosing the game as Kittu tried to expose you. Then you purchased the photographer & promised him the same, that's why you had to pay Rs 20000 every month from my salary to these two people. Once when you were in the jail Jogi called you that Rohan Uncle wants to meet your driver in table No.20 of XYZ restaurant, as he wanted to give some money secretly to you (Antara) because you were worried about her future, where I won't have any support from her father as he would be in jail. You didn't give the money directly to me (Antara)as you knew i won't accept it. Jogi Uncle knew all this as Rohan Uncle gave him the responsibility to make arrangements for contacting your driver. when you got arrested Jogi informed you Dad,that every thing was done & you were very happy as every thing was going on in secret as planned by you and I never knew about it. It was celebration time for Rohan uncle but I changed the entire situation. I asked Yogi to call Kittu and tell her to come to that restaurant where Rohan will come and instead of my driver I send the photographer there. Rohan didn't recognized him as he didn't knew my driver. Luck favored you as Kittu Mom didn't asked Rohan Uncle directly instead she caught the photographer who showed false photos to her which were moved.I had made you confess it in national television through NNN & and you said yes. Yuvraj and kitu were smiling to what Antara was saying and Yuvraj then tells Antara that she should have a good night sleep.

Yuvraj tells I wont do anything which will put you and kitu down in shame and kissed Antara on her forehead and Kitu smiles looking at them and tells antara to go to sleep and we will talk in the morning. Antara says butDad you have been paying to some oraganisation and who are you paying too. I heard Kitu mom asking you the other day but you didn't answer. Yuvraj tells her beta, for many years , I have been giving to the orphanage school. You are lucky that you have parents like Kitu and myself who love you. But there are children who do not have parents and there are children who have single parents and Kitu looks at him with a sad face and leaves from there. Yuvraj see kitu leaving and looks at Antara and tells her that to go to sleep we talk about it later. And put off the light and leaves from there.

Kitu is on the bed and wondering. Yuvraj comes there and see Kitu wondering and smiles and he comes to her and puts a hand on the shoulder and asks what are you thinking of ? I am think of Mishti. I really miss her. I just don't understand why doesn't she loves you. Yuvraj it ok. She is a child forgive her she will realise. Three years back,when I went to pick Mishti from school, I saw Rohan talking to her. Kitu says Rohan how dare he talk to Mishti?. Yuvraj says I don't know how he landed there. Rohan told Mishti that I am not her father and rohan is her biological father. Mishti never knew and was confused. When she met me, she asked me whether I was or rohan was her father. I did not know what to do and what to say? Yuvraj tells Kitu that I even told her that I love you as my child. But she wanted to know who is her father? In the end, I told her that that Rohan is your father.

Kitu is shocked and tells why didn't you tell me that she knew about Rohan? I wanted to speak to her when she become a big girl and enough to understand her mother. You know from last three years, I was wondering why she wanted to go to the boarding school? Why was she has been avoided my calls and when I went to see her, she did not want to see me. Today I called to speak to me and she did not want to speak to me? No I know it is all bcoz of rohan. He never wants to see me happy. Yuvraj reassures her and tells her I wanted to tell you but how to tell you you were in an immportant meeting with I & F minister and you had to go abroad for 9months for foreign collobration .

that day, I was really angry with rohan whatever did to Mishti by telling I am not her father. I came to know that he is in that same restaurant and I went to meet rohan and rohan started telling me that kitu was not rohan bcoz of me. He had nicely planned for me to go in jail. He was angry with me that why did yuvraj send him inside the school when no one was there except the terrorists.? I told him that time someone called me that Kitu is still in the school. I was shocked hearing this and I was about to go when you came to me and asked me what happened and why are you shocked? I told you that Kitu is still in the school. And you told me to take of the other children who were hurt and you voluntered yourself to go inside and bring Kitu but after five minuetes, I was shocked to see kitu in front of me and I asked her where was she? She told me I was with prabhakar and I was caught by the terrorist but anyhow I and Prabhakar managed to escape. Yuvraj gives a sigh of relie and Kitu sees here and there and tells where is Rohan and I get astonised that I had sent you inside. I told Kitu that he was searching you inside. As we came to search for you, but the terroist had already kidnapped you. We searched high and low for you but we could not find you. He further tells Kitu that I even told Rohan that I could not betray a person who was a friend to me. Rohan realised his folly and told me that he forgived me and he thanked me for the clearing all the misunderstanding between them.

Yuvraj then asked kitu you mentioned to me that there was a watchman who told you this but don't you know all the security guards died on the first day the terrorist entered the school. Kitu realsies yeah I was a fool to accept that watchman words. I even told him whether he would come to give his staement and he said yes. But when I called up the school. I found out that he has left the job that day itself.

Kitu asks how come he escaped from Afghanistan when it impossible to do so? Yuvraj it is also not possible to go afghansitan coz Rohan is a celebrity and he they had their hideout in Kashmir and was very well hidden there. Kitu tells how did you come to know. Yuvraj told her that Rohan told him regardingt eh details. Yuvraj tells that why cant we bring and stay with us. In hat way Mishti will also be ready to stay then. But Kitu says for the deed that he has done. He ahs to sent to Jail. Do you know where he is right now? Yuvraj tells yeah. I heard that he is in Shimla. Kitu why not we look for him? Yuvraj tells her to think about Mishti and what will she think?

Anways go to sleep and lot of work is there tommorow. Suddenly they hear a child crying and Yuvraj tells you go to sleep and I will go and see. He see Karthik crying and he takes Kathik in his arms and makes him sleep. Karthik by the way is the son of Kitu and Yuvraj.Kitu comes and see the duo fahter and son and smiles and goes back to sleep.

A 25 YEARS LEAP----
Life has changed for Kittu a lot in these 25 years. She lost every thing. Misti left her as according to her, she lost her father for her mother's fault. Her Mother, Bhai, Bhabs is no more. Yuvraj committed suicide bcoz of financial loan taken by him and Kitu.. Due to economic problem she sold NNN. As she didn't had a single penny so Antara transferred those 5 lacs rupees which Rohan gave her to Kittu's account, but she also don't have any relation with kittu as she too feels that Kittu played with 2 lives.
Krutika is a film journalist in the US and she is become very famous and Karthik become famous actor in Bollywood.
She donated that money to a organization in Shimla where mentally challenged people are kept & trained & now she is a teacher of that school.
Rohan is also alive. He is somewhere in Assam where there is habitation of some tribal people. Once upon a time he too was in Shimla & in the same organization where Kittu is working. They met there, but he couldn't recognize her. In doctors advice he is shifted to the larger branch of that organization in Assam.

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