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Posted: 13 years ago

#101

Originally posted by: DakshnaFan

Dakshna nite before marriage...

Daksh is planning how to give the gift he has bought for Naina in his room..

D : kya karu... kaise Naina ko ye gift doon?...

ek kaam karta hoon sms karta hoon aur terrace pe milne kehta hoon...

He sends an sms & goes to the terrace...

Naina is in her room thinking of all the sweet moments with Daksh 😊... her mom (Mrs Anjali) is sleeping next to her...

Naina is thanking God for all the happiness she is getting...

She gets up an takes her papa's photo in her hand is about to say something when she receives an sms...

She wonders why Daksh has asked her to come on terrace to meet at this point of time...😕

Naina is about to leave the room when Anjali wakes up...

A: Naina kahan jarahi ho beta?

N: (thinks & ans) nahi mom pani khatam hogaya hai wohi lekar aati hoon kitchen se.. aap soo jav main aati hoon...

Anjali believes her & goes to sleep...

Naina finds Daksh standing in deep thoughts...

N: Daksh kya hua itne raat ko sms kiya.. sab thik to hai na...

D: Kuch nahi... aaise hi milna tha, nahi mil sakta kya?

N: Nahi mil sakte... tumhe pata hai na shaadi ke phele dulha dulhan ka milna accha nahi hota...

D: accha aaisa hai kya... thik hai woh sab jaane do... mujhe tumhe kuch dena hai

N: Aab Kya?...

D: aankhen baand Karo..

N: Kya?... q

D: Aankhen baand Karo na..

She closes her eyes... Daksh Naina ka haat apne haat mein lekar gift rakhata hai...

D: aab aankhen kholo

N: ye kya hai

D: Khud hi dekh lo

N opens the gift box & finds a pair of beautiful earnings...(remember the ones her papa had made for her wedding which she gave away for PH)

meanwhile Daksh is admiring her as she is opening the gift..

N: daksh ye to woh woh... & tears start from her eyes...

D: Haan pata hai Naina.. & wipes her tears ...

N: par tumhe kase pata...

D: Naina tumhare liye kuch bhi.. tumhe pata hai na... tumhari ye hi muskurahat dekhne ke kiye kuch bhi... aur kal tum yehi earings pehna... tumhare papa ki bhi yehi wish thi na?...

N: Daksh daksh tum ne to... & Hugs Daksh tightly & Daksh also hugs her tightly...

They come in their sense after some time...

Daksh holds naina's face in his hands

D : Khush to ho na...

N: Bahut Bahut (holds daksh hand) thnks Daksh😊

D: thanks kyu

N: bas aaise hi...😉

D: chalo abhi so jao bahut raat ho gayi hai...

N: I Love u Daksh

D: Main bhi tumse bahut pyaar karta hoon Naina... & Kisses on her forehead...

& again hug each other & then they go to sleep happily...

Great idea Dakshnafan, I had forgotten about the earrings, so thoughtful of Daksh, hope it happens for real in SSBN.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#102

Originally posted by: DakshnaFan
Dakshna nite before marriage...

Daksh is planning how to give the gift he has bought for Naina in his room..
D : kya karu... kaise Naina ko ye gift doon?...
ek kaam karta hoon sms karta hoon aur terrace pe milne kehta hoon...
He sends an sms & goes to the terrace...

Naina is in her room thinking of all the sweet moments with Daksh 😊... her mom (Mrs Anjali) is sleeping next to her...
Naina is thanking God for all the happiness she is getting...
She gets up an takes her papa's photo in her hand is about to say something when she receives an sms...
She wonders why Daksh has asked her to come on terrace to meet at this point of time...😕
Naina is about to leave the room when Anjali wakes up...
A: Naina kahan jarahi ho beta?
N: (thinks & ans) nahi mom pani khatam hogaya hai wohi lekar aati hoon kitchen se.. aap soo jav main aati hoon...
Anjali believes her & goes to sleep...
Naina finds Daksh standing in deep thoughts...
N: Daksh kya hua itne raat ko sms kiya.. sab thik to hai na...
D: Kuch nahi... aaise hi milna tha, nahi mil sakta kya?
N: Nahi mil sakte... tumhe pata hai na shaadi ke phele dulha dulhan ka milna accha nahi hota...
D: accha aaisa hai kya... thik hai woh sab jaane do... mujhe tumhe kuch dena hai
N: Aab Kya?...
D: aankhen baand Karo..
N: Kya?... q
D: Aankhen baand Karo na..
She closes her eyes... Daksh Naina ka haat apne haat mein lekar gift rakhata hai...
D: aab aankhen kholo
N: ye kya hai
D: Khud hi dekh lo
N opens the gift box & finds a pair of beautiful earnings...(remember the ones her papa had made for her wedding which she gave away for PH)
meanwhile Daksh is admiring her as she is opening the gift..
N: daksh ye to woh woh... & tears start from her eyes...
D: Haan pata hai Naina.. & wipes her tears ...
N: par tumhe kase pata...
D: Naina tumhare liye kuch bhi.. tumhe pata hai na... tumhari ye hi muskurahat dekhne ke kiye kuch bhi... aur kal tum yehi earings pehna... tumhare papa ki bhi yehi wish thi na?...
N: Daksh daksh tum ne to... & Hugs Daksh tightly & Daksh also hugs her tightly...
They come in their sense after some time...

Daksh holds naina's face in his hands
D : Khush to ho na...
N: Bahut Bahut (holds daksh hand) thnks Daksh😊
D: thanks kyu
N: bas aaise hi...😉
D: chalo abhi so jao bahut raat ho gayi hai...
N: I Love u Daksh
D: Main bhi tumse bahut pyaar karta hoon Naina... & Kisses on her forehead...
& again hug each other & then they go to sleep happily...

Super these days iam much happy with this forum than the serial U guys are super in writing Ear rings concept...Damm good

Ok this comment is 100th this is celebration time...👏

After clicking i understood mine is 101 story teller your's is 100th Congrats and this is celebration time 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Edited by sousousou - 13 years ago

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Asma Begum Ullah / Shahida (Shay)

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Posted: 13 years ago

#103

Naina gifts Daksh, the coffee mugs

(since I know some of u liked this gift and it was my personal favourite and I think I've got a cute story to go with this, will c wat u guys thinks)

@lucky, haven't thought of a good storyline around the picture, if you have, do write it.

Naina goes to Daksh's room with two cups of coffee and seems him working. She goes into his room.

N: Daksh, aaj tumhe bohot kaam hai na, mujhe milne ke bhi time nahi hai tumhare pas

D: Aisa nahi hai, mein apna kaam jaldi kar raha hoon, kyunki mujhe tumse milna ta. Par main kya karu, tumhari khayal mujhe kam hi nahi karna dete hai.

N: Oho, toh saari galti meri hai, khud kam tortoise ke speed pe karte ho aur galti mujhe de te ho. mujhe kam karte waqt bhi tumhare yaad baar baar aate hain, par main apni kam toh jaldi khatam kar de ti hoon na.

D: Oh, so tumhe kaam karte waqt meri yaad baar baar aati hain.

Daksh smiles and Naina looks embarassed

N:shaadi ki baad main aisa bilkul bhi nahi hone doonghi. Kaam office main hi khatam karke aana,meri tara.

D: Acha, shaadi ki baad aisa hi hoga

N: Yehi teek hoga tumhare liye, coffee peeyon, tand ho raha hai.

D: Tumhe kaise pata ki mujhe coffe peene ka mann kar raha ta

N: Tumse dil ka connection jo hain

I forgot to mention that Naina placed the mugs so Daksh does not see the writing initially and also so mrs KP is the nearest to Daksh

Daksh takes the Mrs KP coffee mug.

N: Tum meri mug le rahe ho

D: Tumhara mug, is mein tumhara naam likha hai kya

N: Kuch aisa hi hai.

D: looks at the coffee mug and sees nothing on one side, then looks at the other side and sees Mrs KP

D: Yaha toh Mrs KP likha hain, tumhe toh bohot yakeen hain ki tum hi Mrs KP banogi. Agar main tumhe Mrs KP nahi banaya, toh.

N: mujhe pura yakeen hai ke sirf main hi Mrs KP banungi. tum chaho ya na chaho. Phir se aisa bola toh, main tumpe yeh garam garam coffee daldungi

D: Tum toh pehle se hi, Mrs KP ki tarah baat kar rahi ho, toh main koi aur ko kaise Mrs KP bana sakta hoon.

They both giggle

Naina gives the (Mr) KP mug to Daksh with the writing facing him and Daksh gives her cup to her.

and she sits down on the bed next to Daksh.

N: Socho, Daksh. Hum burappe mein yehi mugs se coffee piyenge, saath saath, tab tak tumhari baal poore tara saafet honge, aur tumhare aankhein aur bhi kamzor hojayenge aur aaj ki tarah meri mug loge

D: Haa, aur tum abhi tak javaan dikhrahi hogi na

N: Nahi, par phir bhi tumse yehi kehte ho, main sharmati hoon aur kehti hoon, tum bhi

(N:kash main yeh tumse keh pati, par main jhoot nahi bol sakti

aur phir tum kehte ho, kyun jab hab pehle mile te toh tumne jhoot hi bola ta na

phir main kahungi, 'par woh jhoot toh sach nikla na, isi liye yeh count nahi karta', phir tum gusse mein kehte ki tum ne bhi jhoot bhola ta ki main ab bhi tak jawan lagti ho, tumhe glasses nahi pehne te isliye main jawan lagi ti, asal mein main chudail ki tara dikh ti hoon, mujhe shukar manana chahiye ki tumhari aankein kamzor hai, varna tum daar kar baag jaate. phir main kehti hoon, 'kash main chudail hoti, to meh tumhe frog bana deti'

aise hi hum dono hamesha ki tarah jagar rehe.

Young Daksh and Naina laugh

D: Pir tum mujhe manati ho kaise

N: main tumhe manawu kyu, tum mujhe manate ho

tum natak karke kasi de to ho par tumhare nakli daat bahar aate hain, main gusse mein tumhe pani aur dava kila ti hoon, phir tum natak karke apni haat table pe bang karte ho, kuch zyada hi zor se, yeh bhool kar ki tum bure hogaye ho, tumhe sach me dard hota hai, aur zor se chillate ho, yeh dekhar pehle main hasti hoon par phir tumhari buri halat dekh kar main tumhare haddiyon ko maalish karti hoon, pyar se aur bilkul bhool jaati hoon ki mein tumse gussa hoon.

D: Kash, aisa hi khoobsurat ho hamari shadi shuda zindagi. aise palo ke liye main tumhe har ek baar manane ke liye tayar hoon

N: Tum dekhna, aisa hi khohoga, aisa bohot sare pal hoge

I'l have to finish later

Edited by storytellerSSBN - 13 years ago

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lucky.m

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Posted: 13 years ago

#104

Contd..

Daksh and naina at beach

Daksh takes naina out for a surprise and he takes her to beach( I thought a lot, but felt this would be better)

Daksh and naina get down and naina is excited to be at beach and she feels happy that daksh brought her there

Naina;(excited tone) daksh, toh yeh hain mera surprise

Daksh; kyu, acha laga?😲

Naina; acha laga? bahut acha laga.Pata hain daksh agar tum mujhe kisi restaurant aur kahi aur le jaate, mujhe itni khushi nahi hote,Mujhe beach pe khelna bahut acha lagta hain bahut mazaa aata hain.I love u😛

Daksh is very happy that naina liked his surprise.He keeps looking at her happiness and feels happy😃

Naina; Daksh, yaha khade kyu hain hum? chalo na paani mein khelte hain, chalo

Daksh; naina,, kapde geele ho jayenge

Naina; koi baat nahi, baad mein sochenge uss ke baare.Pls chalona, mere liye

Daksh' acha baba chalo,

He rolls up his pants

Daksh and naina get into water and naina starts throwing water at daksh.

Daksh; naina, kya kar rahi ho?

Naina; kyu pata nahi chal raha hain( she laughs)

Now daksh starts throwing water against her.They keep playing in water.Naina is lost in excitement .She is about to slip, daksh holds her from falling and then...

Aankhon ki gustakiyaan maaf ho😆.AS USUAL intense eye lock.😳After few moments they come into real world.Naina becomes lil reserved and shy,daksh katho haal already boora hain pyar mein😆.

Contd...

Edited by lucky.m - 13 years ago

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lucky.m

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Posted: 13 years ago

#105

contd...

Daksh- naina aur butaa

Daksh tries to ease up the situation and says

Daksh; Mam, agar aapki khelna khatam ho gaya tho, kuch khaane chale,

Naina; haan chalo

Daksh; kya khayenge

Naina;butta..mujhe butaa khana hai(corn)

Daksh; jo aap ki marji

Daksh goes and gets butta for naina and naina asks y he didn't get one for him

Daksh; Tum kahvo, mujhe nahi khana hai

Naina ;acha..agar mein apna butta share karoo tab bhi nahi.she takes a bite and gives it to daksh and daksh have his share

Daksh; butta itna meetha kyu hain?😲

Naina; kya meetha? paagal hogaye ho kya? she takes another bite ans says, meetha nahi hain

Daksh; tumhare liye nahi mere liye, tum no jo taste karke de diya

Naina looks at daksh and gives asmile combined with shy😳

Naina; daksh, kya tum bhi

Daksh;ab to mujhe theeke khane ko meetha banane ka technique pata chal gaya, tum jo mere saath ho aur hamesha rahoge

Naina; daksh ab bas bhi karona☺️

Daksh; Haan, teek keh rahi ho, kafi jyada tarif karliya.ab bas aur jhoot nahi bhol sakta😆

Naina gives a surprised look combined with angry and says

Naina; acha toh sab jhoot tha.. tumhe tho...😡

She starts hitting daksh slowly and daksh slowly runs from there, chased by naina

contd...

Edited by lucky.m - 13 years ago

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lucky.m

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Posted: 13 years ago

#106

Contd...

Daksh proposes naina officially

Naina gets hold of daksh and they both get tired running

Daksh; agar bhagna uar tumhara gussa khatam hogaya ho tho thodi dher walk par chale

Naina nods her head with smile

They both start walking in beach, both hands locked , with naina's head on daksh's shoulders

Naina; daksh

Daksh; low voice'' hmmm

Naina; aaj mein bahut khush hoon.. bahut.Aaj ki shaam mujhe hamesha yaad rahegi..itne ache surprise ke liye thanks

They both stop and look at each other, facing each other.Daksh takes naina;'s face into his hands and says

Daksh; Naina..yahi khusihi dekhnite mujhe tumhari chehre par, sirf aaj nahi, hamesha hamesha,😛

Naina looks at him with love❤️ and admiration just then daksh says

Daksh; Naina, aaj ke shaam ko aur khaas banana chahta hoon.aur is ke liye aapko aankhe bandh karni padege.

Naina closes her eyes and daksh says, ab kholo.she opens her eyes and then she sees daksh kneeling infront of her with a ring in his hand and says

(With idea from neetu addition of apic

love-bishal.blogspot.com/2011/04/how-to-porpose-girl-for-1st-time.html)

Daksh; Naina, I promise ki tumhari zindagi ki har ek lamha khusiyon se bardunga...aur har ek pal tumse itna pyar karunga ki duniya ka pyar kampadjayega. kya tum mere jeeavn saathi banoge? mujhse shaddi karoge?😊😲

Naina is speechless with tears of joy rolling in her eyes and she says

Naina; Yes..yes😳😃

Daksh usko ring pehnatha hain, uske hand ko kiss karta hain and then they share a tight hug of happiness and joy both saying luv u to each other👏

Not yet sure abt continution to this part.hope u will enjoy all the parts😃

Edited by lucky.m - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#107

@SSBN STORY TELLER

Coffee mug scene is as good as nice coffee,and that budape mein lines were damn hillarious😆, good job yaar👏

Right now I don't have any storylines for framed photograph, but will try😊

Edited by lucky.m - 13 years ago

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Neethu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#108

Story teller, Lucky..

wow!!! superb yaar.. !!! I liked it...

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DakshnaFan

@DakshnaFan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#109

@ storyteller superb yaar... damn good dialogues 👏 really fun reading them...

@Lucky liked the surprised @ beach & Daksh proposing 😉

personally even i like beaches alot😊

even the earlier pani puri scene was good u could have kept that also...

Neetu, Storyteller, Sou, Lucky thanks all...

@storyteller i too wish something like that actually happens in SSBN those earrings were special to naina...

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lucky.m

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Posted: 13 years ago

#110

@dakshna fan

Thanks yaar

I changed pani puri to butta because neetu had already given super pani puri scene😃, so i thought of bringing out something else, so that we will get different feel

But I felt this was much better .what say?

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