Aish,
What I'm going to do today is usually forbidden in the books of my life, but still, it's worth a try. I've known her for some time now, and it is the day, I presume, that I am going to proclaim my love for her. I'm sitting at the edge of my chair, waiting for her to come online. She said she'd be here at 8, didn't she? My fingers are numb from hovering over the letters 'I love you' and I'm thinking I've rehearsed enough. It. Is. Time. This first paragraph makes an enchanting entrance so that I am endeared to the protagonist by the third, (sixth) sentence. That is no small feat. @bold, I loved this image of
books like sacred texts signaling the severity of the situation. Excellent choice of word,
proclaim signifying intensity and that official documentation connotation adding to the motif. The rehearsal again conjures thoughts of importance, like wedding rehearsal AND by no means a play rehearsal.
@black, I love how you bring to light modern idiosyncrasies of life. Before fingers were numb from penning love letters now it is that wait for the perfect moment, caught between a blink and a breathe in our broadband pace of life. Modern conveniences seem to have only changed the manner of our plight NOT removed it.
@grey, Inventive and delightful. ⭐️⭐️⭐️
You are a good friend of hers, and you know that. Do I? Excellent creeping up of self doubt from the zealot we have just been introduced to. I love how if we just reverse the last question, it becomes a universal statement, proclamation of love, I do. 😃
Maybe it is because she doesn't know yet? 😆 cute.
Phase I, complete. Really cute. 😆
That was it, the cat out of the bag. Strangely, I didn't feel much, no butterflies in my stomach, no signs of nervousness, and surprisingly, no idiotic inner voices trying to have their say. This was very well done. You maintain this very fast pace and then BANG, brick wall, even I did not see that coming. Luckily I was wearing my safety belt unlike the driver. True, very insightful, capturing that lull in our storm of whirling emotions that still manages to throws us, off the ground.⭐️⭐️⭐️
I love your very natural humourous style, bringing comedy from the characterization rather than the action. Wonderful.
For once, I'd actually agreed to my inner head. And that turned out to be a bigger shock than the fact that I'd been rejected. Excellent culmination that leaves both the protagonist and the reader surprised at an
instant insight without too much heartache.
I'd have to fall in love first to understand what 'kind of person' I was. AND the development keeps on growing.😃 As Bruce Lee said, "To know oneself is to study oneself in action with another person."
Funny, insightful piece of prose with an well rounded characterization that does not compel disbelief. I like him. A lot. 😃
Love Sabah
Edited by a little faith - 14 years ago
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