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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: riatagore

hey! who ever is this y dont u join in GHSP serail script writer yaar.

u r fantastic



firstly sry for the late reply

thanx for appreciating my work buddy😊

and sry that i am not a professional writer, whatever i am writing is just to entertain u guyz and keep my random thoughts and opinions about life in a beautiful manner - that's it buddy😳

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: bhanu_rekhag

awesome part dear

geets dad in this story reminds me of prakashraj (telugu's famous possessive dad who never allows his daughter to love any one)

n now its confirm tht maan is CEO of the company though (may b) his grand mom or mom r currently filling his position but he is the one

now i am really curious to know how will b the confrontation between maan n geets dad...

hope geets dad is not in the list of maan's rival co's...

cont soon



prakashraj - yes dear u r right if this FF can be turned into a movie he would be the best option for Mohindar's role😆
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: serenelove

Hey Deeps,

Finally caught up with this ff. Sorry for very...late😳 reply but when u started the ff, I was out of town & after coming back, it took me some time to sort many issues that rose in my absence.

O.K then I will stop my chatter & come to ff. 😊

Lovely idea for the ff dear with apt mixture of various important aspects of life.

It has touch of reality in it. A life where u have to work hard to achieve something.

Characters are different but I liked them.

Geet's personality is somewhat different & her being head strong is her one of best points.

As far as Maan is concerned, I don't think he is a mere employee. From the third update, I believed there's something fishy in his behavior. Then the call in which he was instructing" Mr.Chopra that there's no place for error & last but not least, CEO is lady & Maan did not let Geet open the diary that might have some family information; names or even photographs.

Looks like Geet's father is not feeling good because his precious daughter is giving importance to someone other than him. Seems that his reasoning against Maan being a mere employee is just for frontier point. But if my assumptions are right then he he has to find some other excuses.

Maaneet's teasing is quite entertaining. 😆

Pari knows & understand much then she let on others know about. Hope she is right & there's no problem.

Will be waiting for more.




welcome to my FF buddy

u gave the jist of the story covered so far, nice analysis that has been put together in a perfect way.

thanx for loving my story ⭐️

Edited by sldeeps - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Madam Online ... Update ...

MANDAMUS...


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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sldeeps



precap is sure gonna be Maan's dream... - no dear it's not a dream😆😉

i was afraid if it was a dream..omg..it is not...then i am so happy...hey waiting for your updates ..kindly give us na...😍.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sldeeps



welcome to my FF buddy

u gave the jist of the story covered so far, nice analysis that has been put together in a perfect way.
Thnx😳

thanx for loving my story ⭐️
Thnx 4 writing lovely story

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Posted: 14 years ago
lovely awesome 5 updates yaar😊sorry for late reply main out of city hoon too ajj time miltay hi aik sath 5 parts read kiye😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
PART - XXII


Maan is sleeping peacefully on his bed suddenly he heard a knock on his bed room door. He opened the door to find out who is knocking his door at this time of night. He is shocked to see Geet infront of him, before he could ask her anything she placed her hand on Maan's lips and pushed him backwards into the room. She came inside the room and closed his bed room door.


Geet : Maan turn on the lights


Maan turned on the lights with Geet's hand still on his lips. He wondered what Geet is doing in his bedroom at 10:30 PM.


Geet : Maan i need ur help

Maan signalled her to remove her hand from his mouth and she has done the same.


Maan : Geet what r u doing here? Which help r u talking about?

Geet : first u tell me that u would help me


Maan: first u tell me about what kind of help u r expecting from me

Geet(with fake anger): ok then if u r not ready to help me i am leaving... bye gud night


She turned away from Maan and was about to leave. Maan stopped her from leaving.

Maan: ok i will help u, now tell what do u want me to do


Geet: i want a chocolate cake

Maan: what???... u want a chocolate cake, but y?


Geet: will u come with me or not?

Maan: Geet there won't be any shops at 10:30 PM, then how would i get a cake for u now


Geet: i don't know that's ur problem...i want a chocolate cake that's it

Maan: Geet u r suddenly behaving like a pregnant woman having mood swings and food cravings


Geet: whatever...will u come with me or not?

Maan: Geet how will i get a cake for u at this time of night


Geet: i think i can help u...if we can't bring a cake, u can prepare for me at the home itself right

Maan: Geet...i don't know how to bake a cake


Geet: no problem i have the recipe with me...common we will prepare

Maan: Geet tell me what r u exactly planning to do


Geet: i am planning a surprise for Pari's birthday...now don't ask me questions, we have very limited time...let's get into work


Maan: hmm that's the plan, can't u tell me directly that u planning a surprise for Pari's birthday... instead of scaring me at this time


Geet bought all the ingredients necessary to prepare the cake and kept everything ready so that Maan will proceed with preparation process. Geet helped him from beside, they somehow managed to prepare the cake with the help of the online videos on 'How to prepare a chocolate cake?' They stood before Pari's bed room and knocked on the door at 11:55 PM. Pari took 2 minutes to wake up and open the door as she is in deep sleep. She half opened her eyes and seen both Geet and Maan standing before her and again she closed her eyes.


Pari : Geet what do u want?


Geet is carrying a gift in her hand and Maan is carrying cake with him .Maan is about to wish Pari then Geet closed his mouth and waited for 3 more minutes. Pari is sleeping leaning on the door. Exactly after 3 minutes Geet shouted "HAPPY BIRTHDAY PARI" and removed her hand from Maan's mouth. Pari got scared when she heard Geet shouting beside her ear. Geet almost screamed in Pari's ear, Pari came out of her drowsiness and closed her ears. Maan startled at her reaction. Geet hugged Pari and Maan also wished her after few seconds.


Geet(with a big smile) : i am the first one to wish u


Pari felt happy that Geet remembered her birthday. All of them went inside Pari's room and cake cutting ceremony took place well. Yash called Pari and wished her. Pari felt a bit emotional at Geet's surprise. Geet fed cake to Pari. Pari's eyes became moist and she started speaking out her heart.


Pari: Geet i thought u forgot my birthday...no one ever thought of me so much like u, i got to know the meaning of family, value of relationships and importance of human relations in life after meeting u. I didn't receive mother's love, father's care and company of siblings. I am the only child for my mother and father. Both of them are working, they love each other very much they have constructed their life on their own. I have grown up in hostels from my childhood itself. I don't have emotional bond with my parents, they just know where i am and what i am doing nothing more than that. They used to visit me monthly once when i am in school but later they used to visit yearly once, but when i got employed they thought that i can take care of myself and now they didn't even bother to visit me once in a year also. It has been 5 years since i have met them for the last time. I do have friends at my school and college but no one made me realise the importance of a family in life...Geet u have given me mother's love and father's care...i feel that u r my sister gifted by god.


Geet kissed on Pari's forehead , wiped off her tears and hugged Pari.


Geet: Pari it's ur birthday but i got the gift, i do have a brother but i don't have a sister but today i have a sister also


Geet is also crying hugging Pari, Maan wiped off Geet's tears and consoled her with his eyes not to cry.


Maan : Pari ...Geet became ur sister and ur friend post is vacant now ...can i take ur friend's post...will u girls join me in ur hug?


Both of them smiled and joined Maan also in their hug. They broke off the hug and Geet tried to lighten the moment.


Geet : Pari i didn't knew before that u know how to cry


Pari: it's all because of ur effect on me, i have also started thinking emotionally...u CRY BABY


Geet: Pari i am not a CRY BABY

Pari : U can confirm this with Maan also...what do u say Maan?


Maan wanted to divert the topic because it seems they are trying to involve him in their petty fight.


Maan: Geet y don't u give the gift to Pari which u bought specially for her

Geet: oh yes...wait a minute...pari this is for u


Pari opened the gift and found out that it is a make- up kit. She laughed at her present.


Pari : Geet what's this

Geet: rakhlo yar, tumhara kaam ayegi


Geet leaned towards Pari and whispered in her ear "YASH ki HOSH udane me kaam ayegi". They have giggled together at Geet's joke.


Geet: vaise Pari i gave my gift to u...what about ur friend MR.MK...didn't he bring anything for u?

Pari : ya u r right...Maan where is my gift?


Maan's self thought: Geet what r u doing? I don't know about Pari's birthday before, then how would i present her anything suddenly now? I know Geet is intentionally doing this mischief.


Geet : Maan itna kyu soch reahe ho...Pari he has prepared this cake for u, that's the gift from his side

Pari : oh really Maan, u guyz prepared this cake for me at home...thanq so much.


Maan's self thought: ufff great escape


They have spent time together for some time, later Maan and Geet left Pari's room. Geet closed Pari's room, leaned on the door closed her eyes and started crying. Maan truned back and has seen Geet crying. He went near Geet kissed on her forehead and wiped off her tears. Geet opened her eyes and looked straight into Maan's eyes.

Maan: i have learnt this way of consoling from u only...don't cry Geet , i can't see tears in ur eyes...plz don't cry. Now Pari is not alone she has YASH, u and me in her life. She is not alone, don't cry.


Geet smiled and said "u r so sweet honey" pulling his cheeks. Maan smiled at Geet. She moved away from him and headed towards her room. Maan stopped her by holding her hand.


Maan: Geet u r forgetting something.

Geet turned back with questioning eyes


Maan pulled her towards him and placed his hands on her waist. Geet kept her hands on his chest. Maan whispered in Geet's ear.


Maan: u didn't me wish me gud night...i want my gud night kiss

Geet: gud night kiss?... Stop it Maan


She tried to free herself from Maan's grip


Maan: i am not going to leave u, until u give me my gud night kiss...try if u can free urself

Geet: ok then close ur eyes

Maan: no cheating this time

Geet: ok...now close ur eyes


Maan closed his eyes and Geet raised her feet and stood on her toes to reach Maan's forehead but still she couldn't reach his forehead. She bent his head down holding his chin and gave a bite on his nose.


Maan opened his eyes and yelled "GEEET". Geet is laughing looking at Maan's anger. Maan became angry.


Maan: Geet be a good girl and do what i say otherwise...

Geet: otherwise... what will u do?


Maan came close to Geet's face and said "u will get ur SECOND KISS!!!!"

Geet frowned and became angry "SECOND KISS????...Maan i hate u"


Maan: then do what i say

Geet : ok...bend down


She kissed on his forehead. Maan smiled as her soft lips touched his skin. Geet blushed for what she has done.She pushed away Maan and ran towards her bedroom. She shouted "gud night HONEY" before closing the door. Maan shouted back "gud night SEXY"...Geet is shouting from inside her room "mai tumhe kiss angle se SEXY dikhti hu"...Maan replied back from other side of the door "check for urself". He went to his room smiling as he didn't get any response from GEET.

Geet rushed towards Cutie to share one more secret with her. She placed cutie on her lap and took Cutie's hands into her hands.


Geet : Cutie i am going to tell u one secret today...and mind u don't share this with anyone...Maan kissed me again and i kissed him back...i gave a bite on his sharp nose which made him angry...and he again called me SEXY...CUTIE sach batao kya mai tumhe SEXY dikhti hu...come with me we will check once

Geet took Cutie along with her and placed it on the dressing table so that cutie could face her. She is looking at herself in the mirror "Maan mai tumhe kiss angle se SEXY dikhti hu yaar", she is checking out herself in the mirror looking at her face, front and back. Then she remembered Maan calling him SEXY BAR DANCER. She is looking straight into her own eyes in the mirror.


She removed her hair band and encircled the hair band to her hand. She took off her sweat shirt and removed her shirt as well. She is wearing a brown colour night pant and cream colour thin strapped slip which is similar to the one she wore on that night when Maan has seen her dancing. The cream coloured inner wear is almost similar to her skin colour. She is looking at her face but didn't find anything odd. Then she lowered her gaze from her eyes , she is checking her lips they appeared pink and very much delicate then she checked her throat , collar bone, exposed shoulders now she is feeling a little bit awkward at the way she is looking at herself. She is blushing and hesitating to lower her gaze further more but still managed to lower her gaze she has seen the deep neck of her slip revealing her cleavage then opened her mouth wide open. She looked at herself from top to bottom then she understood that her slip is revealing each and every curve of her body and slip is though covering her waist as she is moving her stomach is also exposed.


Then she imagined the way Maan might have felt looking at her in this attire. She unknowingly covered her shoulders and chest with both of her hands. She lowered her gaze unable to meet her own eyes, her cheeks turned pink because of shyness.


Geet : to mai tumhe iss angle se SEXY dikhti hu


She couldn't look at herself in the mirror she took cutie and laid down on the bed. She is hugging cutie and thinking deeply ' Geet u r such a dumbo, Maan has seen u like this and he is teasing u SEXY every day. Do u even know the meaning of SEXY? Do u know what he refers to by calling u SEXY?... instead of blushing or trying to understand what he means by calling u SEXY, u r fighting with him without any shame. Does Maan recall this image of mine whenever he calls me SEXY?...aur kya kar rahi thi mai uss din...i am singing touch me touch me, kiss me kiss me...oh god!! I didn't realise what he has seen and what he might have felt after looking at my sexy dance...Cutie y didn't u tell me that i am an IDIOT!!!...oh No!!! how am i going to face him here after????? SEXY BAR DANCER...Geet u r really a stupid!!!


PRECAP: Maan : will u go along with him on a date?

Geet : Yes



PART - XXIII

Edited by sldeeps - 13 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

you R great going
waiting for geet to realize her feelings


Edited by Arsheela - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Its tooo awesome n lovely

loving the developing bond of maaneet

waiting 4 more
Edited by bhanu_rekhag - 14 years ago

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