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Posted: 14 years ago
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😃Hi every one , i was just thinking over about how Avi would feel when he came to know about the truth of Arpi n then last day faced a bad experience similar to Avi . well mine one end up on a happy note n i find back my lost pet😃

but the whole day was like hell for me n i write something in that hell,

send it to Vistaa di n m grateful for her kindness to bear my writing šŸ˜†

here it is-

Loss

Now I m searching those eyes,

That trusted me blindly,

That shone for me.

Whose shine gave me the solace.

The reason for my breath.

Those eyes which were full of love for me;

That recognized nothing but me.

That has trust n faith, all just for me.

But now I can not find them ever around me

It's all because of me

Just because of my one mistake she is not here

Just because of my carelessness,

She is not here, not in this world,

Just because of my one moment mistake,

That innocent soul cannot breathe ever again.

Its hard to breath now When I realize.

I' m the reason behind the loss of the soul,

Who trusted me for her life,

Its hard to breath now when I realize.

I 'm the guilty for the loss of those innocent eyes,

I m the one who can't be worthy of trust of anyone.

It is hard to breathe...maybe not breathe?

editing by Vistaa di ,😃

thanx for reading 😊

plz drop ur comment even if u don't like it😳

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PrashT thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
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JO

Its beautiful darling...

Loads of hugs to you..

Thanks Vista Di...


I simple loved ittt
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Posted: 14 years ago
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this is really touching and it does depict avdesh's pain

vistaa has really been gem to this forum to do all editing


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wonderful Neha,
how
touching, I think even Avdesh could not translate his feelings better than that, you did a great job, keep it up 😊

Magnifique Neha,
c'est touchant ,je pense que mme Avdesh n'aurait pu traduire ses sentiments mieux que a, tu as fais du trs bon travail, continue comme a 😊

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks Viistaa 😊

Merci Vistaa 😊

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks for the lovely post.
Edited by Sidda8 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Oh Neha, you writing and ideas and thoughts are so very powerfulā­ļø...it is just such a pleasure to read anything you write. You deserve all this praise and more😊
Keep writing and posting😃
In this verse, you have conveyed Avi's frame of mind so poignantly and simplyšŸ‘šŸ‘
Way to go!!!
Vista
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Neha, this is absolutely beautiful. I really love how your wrote about Avi's deepest emotion, regret and guilt for not trusting Arpi and making her leave this world.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: prash_t

JO


Its beautiful darling...

Loads of hugs to you..

Thanks Vista Di...


I simple loved ittt

hey Prashu dear thanx for liking it😳

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: chatterbox

this is really touching and it does depict avdesh's pain

vistaa has really been gem to this forum to do all editing


thanx for liking it di

n yap Vistaa di is great with thoughts n words n i m grateful that she edited it😃

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