FF-Unspoken words-part8

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi All, 😊
I started watching LTL after Dutta's Entry. I loved LTL very much. I started visiting forum regularly and was enjoying every post. I my self have made 160 posts(I still wonder abt me 😛). I have never written any FF till now. This is my first FF. This one is continuing on from the show. Story line starts after yestersdays episode. I am not a good writer. Still accumulating all the courage and writing this FF. I need your encouragement. Please forgive if the FF is not good or not well written. I hope you guys will read it. All the characters remains same. In My FF Roops is Positive, She is acting infront of her sisters. (I donot know in LTL it Turning Roops is +ve or not .. i would keep her +ve character in my FF) I am just trying to elaborate few charcters in my FF.
Part 1:
Starting from yesterday's episode,
After Dutta-Nakku left the Dinning hall, Roops goes to her room. Closes the door hard She goes and stands infront of her Father Sriram Patil's Photo and starts crying 😭.
She says "BABA, aaj kala tayine vahinike charitra par ungli uttayi aur mai kuch nahi karsaki. Dekiye baba, Patil kandhan ki Bhauko kya kya sahena padraha hai. Jis ghar me unhe raksha aur Maan milna chahiye, ussi ghar me unke izzat par kichad uchala jaraha hai."
" Kyun?? kyun?? kala tayi ithni nafarat karthi hai Bhause ??. Appke mauthke karan tho Damodhar patil hai. Woh tho iss duniyame nahi rahe. Phir kyun Tayi Bhauke kushiya chinna chahthi hai?? Kya millega kala tayiko Bhauki zindagise khelke?? Mere kuch samajmai nahi aarahi hai baba" She cries loudly..
She goes and stands near the window, cold wind blows, she starts remembering the olden days which brings slight smile on her lips. Dutta, roops and Aayi saheb staying in Basti, It's Dinner time, aayi saheb and roop are waiting for him. Dutta cmes to home. He looks tired. Aayi saheb says "Dutta tu kyun ithni kaam kartha hai"?? Apne sheath kayal nahi raktha.
Dutta says "Aayi saheb main teek hoon" Roops says "Bhau maine aaj apka favorite food banaya hai" bholiye kya bhanaya hai maine??
Dutta acts asif he doesnot know.. Roops insists bholiye Bhau please .. Dutta smiles and says "KARANJI" Roops says "How cutena". Roops remembers Rakshabhandan scenes. She hears some sound outside. She comes out of her room and sees "Nakku talking to Madhu".
Nakku is asking Madhu "Can i stay in your room.. Please donot ask me any reasons" Roops is about to go towards Nakku, she sees Kala, who had victory smile on her face. Roops goes back to her room.
I donot know it is good or bad. Please provide your feedback. I will continue writing if u people like it. Thanks in Advance.
Edited by shashikalasm - 14 years ago

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Very nice beginning yar keep writing
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sounds interesting ..... please continue .....

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Congrats on ur first FF............I was really waiting fr sumbdy to start an FF after watching yesterdays epi............good start............keep going .........looking frwrd fr ur updt...............updt soooooooooon.......'Plz do PM me.............all th best.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Thanks a lot for encouragement.
Part -2 :
Kala is happy to see Nakku out of Dutta's room. She gives evil smile. Goes to her room. Kishore has gone to temple for jagaratha or jagaran. She takes a wine bottle and drinks. Looking at mirror, She talks to her self "Congrazs Kala...Aaj tum phir kamiyab hogayi, Dutta ke dileme Shakke beej daldi". Woh ithni jaldi Nakusha par Shak nahi karega.. par iss baremai sochega jharoor. Mai iss shakke beej ko pani dalke usse bada karrongi.. iss shak ko yakeen mai badaldungi. Bechari Nakusha, taras atha hai tuj par. Tumare pathiko koyi farak nahi padtha tu iss ghar me rahe yaa na rahe. She gives a evil smile and falls asleep.
Anay will be sleeping in another room, he wakes up in the midnight and searches for his maa (kala). He comes near kala's room calling maa.. maa.. but kala hoshme nahi hai. ANAY had got fever and he faints. Kishore is back from jagratha and sees Anay falling on floor, he takes anay to his room(anay's room) and gives some medicine and takes care of him whole night.
Next Day Morning, Kala wakes up late, she is egar to see what is Nakku doing, She gets ready and about to leave room, Kishore comes and asks her "Does she really knows how is her Son Anay?? does she really care for Anay" Kala ignores Kishore and and walks towards kitchen. Kishore looks at Anay " You are only reason still why iam in PN and have not broken relationship with Kala anay tum Maa ke hothe huvebi Bin maake bachhe ho "
Leela's Room : Leela is happy tht Bajji is out of Dandha now.. Suds is getting importance. Sudharshan has got some gifts to her and Leela is very happy. Sudharsan says "Maanna padega tere tayi ka dus dimag hai.. kya chaal chalthi hai. Leela says, "Tayi kuch bhi kare hame kya.. main kush hoon ki tumne Bajjiki jagah leli" Suds says "Mere bass chale tho Bajjiko phirse dandheme gusne nahi donga, abb sirf Munafa hi munafa hoga hum raj karenge... " suds looks tensd and he says "Duttako Bajji ka 100 khoon or mistakes bhi maaf hai.. Mushkil hai Dutta-bajji dostiko todna" Leela says "Donot worry tayi will take care of it".
Edited by shashikalasm - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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HEY Congrats
sounds interesting
keep writing
want to read more :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey congrats with ur ff...
finding it hard 2 imagine roops as positive tho cos i always imagined her as being evil...evn wen she was pretending 2 b gd n evry1 thrt she had changed i had a feeling she didnt.... anyway nice updates..dnt forget 2 edit ur ff link in the media center...all other ffs r posted there..makes it easier for members 2 find n read ffs
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey Congrats for your first FF... great start...
Wow Roops +ve... hard to imagine but ok...
continue soon its interesting..
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hey congratz on ur ff!! it soundz gr8..continue soon n plz cn u add me 2 ur pm list if u cn =) xx
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Posted: 14 years ago
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COngrats on ur new FF, this story looks interesting roops a positive character.. mhhh lets see................
great start.. don't make us wait too long for the update..

take care dear

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