Missing prem heer scene - One Shot

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hello everyone
I have always felt that we were cheated out of a premeer scene, the night prem went to delhi, there should have been something more between prem and heer. Finally this is my version of what happened but they forgot to show it to us. I am not really a writer but i enjoy reading all the FFs on IF and i couldnt get this out of my head till i put it down. So i wanted to share it with all you prem heer fans.


Prem left his father enjoying the weather outside and came into his room. He needed to put some things together to take with him to delhi. He felt a light tap on his door, surprised to see who would need permission to come in, he glanced back to see Heer. She seemed a little lost, trying to settle something in her mind.

'Heer, kya hua?' said Prem.

'Hmm, kuch nahin' said Heer, she seemed to have resolved her problem because she came into the room with a determined look.

She closed the door and turned the lock.

'What happened? Why did you lock the door?' asked Prem.

'Is dafa na Tannu aayay ge na chaachi', answered Heer not looking at Prem directly.

Prem tried to hide his smile and catch her eye but she seemed unable to look at him, looking everywhere in the room except him.

'Tum packing ker rahay thay, let me help' saying that Heer sat down on his bed and started putting his clothes away.

Prem went to her and held out his hand. Willingly she placed her hand in his; he pulled her up and close to him.

'What's wrong?' he asked again.

She sighed and slightly leaned against him.

'I don't know, I just want to spend time with you. I had really looked forward to my birthday this year. This was to be the start of our new life, mujhe lagata tha meray janam ka maqsad poora ho raha hai. I know it is necessary for you to go and so I want to spend as much time before that with you. Next time when we meet it will be different' Heer tried to explain herself to Prem.

Prem was already lost in her words, they were swaying slightly as if dancing to music only they could hear. Finally Prem pulled back slightly, Heer looked up at him. She trusted him completely, he could see it in her eyes, her eyes held his with her love, he could not look away. Then his eyes drifted to her lips, this time he knew there was no turning back. There would be no interruptions and he could taste the heaven promised to him every time and denied at the last minute. He glanced at her eyes again to make sure she was still with him; she had not shied away this time. He touched her lips gently, savoring her taste.

Heer felt his restraint, kissing her tenderly. He waited for her to respond giving her all the time to back away. She had made up her mind that night; she had waited for him for too long. He felt her kissing him back and he drowned in the passion he felt in her. He trailed small kisses down her neck to her collarbone; she dropped her neck back to give him more access. He knew he could lose all control if he continued; he turned her around trailing kisses to the back of her neck. He moved away from her, giving her the space and trying to get his passions under control.

She didn't know what had happened, she felt cold as if her source of warmth had moved away. She didn't want this to end. She caught his hand and bought it to her face, giving it a kiss.

Prem didn't want to her to feel pressured. He knew she was feeling emotional about the wedding, her birthday, his trip. He kissed the top of her head and said 'Heer, there will be no going back after this. Are you sure? We can wait a couple of days.'

Heer nodded and whispered 'Prem there is nothing I have been surer of. You complete me, you are my other half. I am completely yours. Tum mera adhoora pan poora kartay ho'.

Prem tugged her into his arms and kissed her again, this time not holding back, letting her feel all his love for her. He carried her in his arms and took her to his bed.

'Hum dono ek dosray ko poora kartay hain, aur har janam mein karein gay.'

That night he made her his forever. He knew he had to go to delhi soon, he didn't want to wake her but didn't want to leave without saying goodbye either. He tried to wake her with a small kiss.

Heer didn't want to wake up knowing it would mean that it was time for him to leave. He picked her up and took her to her room. She kissed him goodbye and went back to sleep dreaming of their life to come. Prem left for delhi with the image of Heer smiling in her sleep.


Dreams that may come true, we stil have hope of prem returning, right. Hope you enjoy this 😊

Fatima
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey fatima( i hope i got your name correct) that was a beautifully written premeer scene........ exactly the way we wre expecting to see on screen ............... but i guess we were not lucky enough...... but your version fulfills all our wishes and i can visualise the scene in my mind😍 why don't you start writing ffs so that you can pen down all your premeer scenes which we have been cheated of😉 btw great effort . keep it up!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey fj...that was awsome...u write so well....why dont u write an ff...it was so beautiful....only if this had happenned in the serial..loved it totally.....thanx a ton 4 sharing this with u dear..yeah we will go on hoping that he will come bak...and HE WILL!!!!

P.s: ur name is Fatima? nice to know it :)

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Fatima Di, so nice to see that you wrote down the one-shot you said had been bugging you.. I absolutely adored it! Seriously amazing.. Loved the idea, the way it was written, everything.. Prem and Heer were characterised so well.. Wow.. Hope you will write more.. And you say you are not a writer! Nonsense! This was an absolute delight to read!
Love,
Radz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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it is awesome and sweet😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
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its beautiful...i also felt tat we wer cheated with the last time prem and heer wer together....i felt ther shood hav been more...this was beautifully written....i felt sad after reading it...knowing that prem dies....it still makes me sad.....u shood consider turning this into a fanfiction...ur a good writer...and its a perfect start.....maybe u can continue this with prem's so called death.....and how heer deals with it...and still knows in her heart tat prem cant be dead because he promised to be with her forever....so you can have prem come back....i dont know...lol...i jus kno tat this story has me asking for more....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey, it was too good .Keep it up...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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ahem ahem caugh caugh lol!too good i was eating cookie n u made me caughed uff!hehe loved it!

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey!
Awesome one shot!
I really loved it!
xXx
Sunayna
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Posted: 16 years ago
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It was awesome...so passionate. We were deprived of this in the show. Heer in your story is a bit bold😉 and she was the one who invited him....Cool !

Like everyone said, you have great writing skills and should consider writing an FF and that too a romantic one on PH with lots of passionate scenes thrown in 😳 I'm sure it'll be a hit !

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