Paalkhi - Second Gerernation FF

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Miketa Patel

@Patel...Rocks

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Posted: 17 years ago

Past few days... I have read many fan-fic based on Jai-Bani but non of them are about second generation so I decided to write one for the second generation even though it might not be that great.

Also, its about Pushkar's friend's daughter Radhika Jagirdar (Pooja Bose) who is raised by Pushkar and Pia after her mother and father's death.

Basically this fan-fic, is about Radhika finding her true paalkhi after facing many problems in her life.

Will Radhika find her true paalkhi?

Stay tune for Paalkhi through out these days Saturday and Tuesday.

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Character Analysis

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Should I continue with this fan-fic? Please let me know!

Mickey

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Edited by Patel...Rocks - 17 years ago

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Miketa Patel

@Patel...Rocks

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Posted: 17 years ago

I understand that many people are use to reading Jai-Bani fan-fic but please give this fan-fic a chance.... 😃

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Part One... Intro of Pushkar and Pia's kids along with Pushkar's friend's kids

Bani gained concussion and asked for Mr.Walia

Adtiya jokes with Bani than tells her that Jai is praying for her well-being

Ganga, and Krishna, smile at their mother who was blushing afterwards they all complete their kavra chauth vrat.

Jai feeds Bani with his own hands... Bani also does the same when Pushkar comes and tells Pia that he is going back in two days because his work is done over here. Also the kids can't live without me, but you take your time in returning back because I know you want to spend some time with your sisters.

Pia nods her head and agrees with Pushkar, but warns him not to give in with the kids by their blackmailing ex-specially Radhika and Siya.

Pushkar: Oh please! Pia, my girls don't blackmail me like your sons does. Meri betiyaans are so innocent and your sons are completely spoiled like you.

Pia: Excuse me... my sons aren't spoiled like your daughters

Pushkar: My girls aren't your sons are

Pia: No, my sons aren't your girls are

Bani breaks them apart and says "grow up! u guys are parents of four kids if I'm correct"

Pia & Pushkar burst out laughing their heads of saying "two are my friends kids and we are parents of three kids - in total five kids"

Rano & Bani - Five kids

Pushkar: Yep! Five kids but my girls are my life ex-specially Radhika - My friend's daughte, but she is my life

(Radhika's intro)

"and her brother Dharam is my life and Veer's life" Pia announced

(Dharam's intro)

"And Siya is our life - our daughter" Pia announced in excitement

(Siya's intro)

Pia: Pushkar, I forgot today is Siya's birthday. She will be upset if we aren't there

Pushkar takes Pia's hand and says "Don't worry about Siya being upset cause I told Dharam to take her out for her birthday on our behalf and my Siya is so understandable than your daughter Riya. Part 2 of you"

Pia hits Pushkar in a playing way than says "leave her alone... she's in Canada studying and I hardly get to see my angel because of you"

Pushkar: Come' on Pia
If I let her stay home with you than she would have been completely spoiled like you and her brother Veer.

Pia: Don't say a-word against my son Veer

(Veer's half intro)

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If you guys like this part than I will continue....

Signing off

Mickey

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Edited by Patel...Rocks - 17 years ago

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Zaara91

@Zaara91

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Posted: 17 years ago

hey great start...i liked it...continue....

i like how you have put the pics/siggis for each one...will i have stopped watching KS for long time now....so i dont have any clue about who is who...but great do continue...

sonam

Edited by SonamKHAN - 17 years ago

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Miketa Patel

@Patel...Rocks

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: SonamKHAN
hey great start...i liked it...continue....
i like how you have put the pics/siggis for each one...will i have stopped watching KS for long time now....so i dont have any clue about who is who...but great do continue...

sonam

At least someone liked it... anyways thank you, but i'm not sure if I'll continue this one because not many people are interested in this fan-fic 😭

Mickey

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Miketa Patel

@Patel...Rocks

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Posted: 17 years ago

I know many people don't like this fan-fic because its not about J-B, but please give this a chance slowly it will be between three people - Radhika, Veer and Vicky.

Please give it chance cause I have worked on this for months and I don't want to stop it in between.... 😭

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Part two... Veer doesn't want to move out of London but because of Radhika's apprenticeship they have to move India within few weeks...

Jai got a-little emotional hearing Veer's name because he is Veer's biological father

"What's wrong, Mr. Walia?" Bani asked him

Jai: Nothing

"Pia, tell us more about Veer? Please Pia" Rano asked

Pia nods her head

(Veer's reminding intro)

"Pia Massi, tell us more about Veer's childhood?" Krishna asked

"Yes Pia Massi, tell us more about Veer because he seems to be a nice guy" Ganga said

Pushkar continues the story...

"Veer's childhood... After Dharam and his sister Radhika came to our house to live with us after their parent's death. Veer never had that many friends but after Dharam came - they came good friends

(Dharam and Veer's true friendship)

afterwards, Veer got more spoiled because Dharam became his support in life. Slowly time moved on... Dharam Veer went America for their advance education in business management while Siya and Radhika were in their second year of college in different fields. Radhika wants to become a doctor and Siya wants to become a part of "air forces".

And now Dharam Veer have completed their education, but both girls are in their final year of college.

"Pia, your so lucky to have kids like Dharam Veer, Radhika, Siya and Riya" Rano told her even Bani agreed

Bani: Pushkar, why don't you and Pia move back to India with the kids?

Pushkar: Bani, it depends on the kids, if they want to move or not.

Pushkar's cell rings

Pia answers the phone

"Hi Auntie"

Pia: Hi Radhika
How's everything in London? And where is Veer?

Radhika: Auntie, everything over here is alright and Veer is sleeping in his room because he isn't feeling good, but don't worry everything is under control. Also Dharam Bhaiyya and Siya are gone out for her birthday on Uncle's behalf.

Pia: Pushkar, just told me few minutes ago about Dharam and Siya going out for her birthday, but is Veer alright

Radhika: Auntie, don't worry Veer is fine but can I talk with Uncle

Pia: Sure (Pia passes the phone to Pushkar)

"Hi Beta"

Radhika: Pushkar Uncle, I need your advise because today is the last day to submit my forums in regarding where I am going to complete my apprenticeship and I only have two option left.

Pushkar: What are the option left for your apprenticeship?

Radhika: One is in small town of Zimbabwe and the other option is Sanjivini hospital in India. Uncle, I'm so confused.... I don't know witch to pick

Pushkar closed his eyes and says "what does your heart say?"

Radhika: My heart says that I don't want to go Zimbabwe, I rather go to India than Zimbabwe.

Pushkar: Than its settled that you will complete your apprenticeship in India at Sanjivini Hospital

Radhika: But Veer doesn't want to move out of London and I am not going their alone without Veer or Dharam Bhaiyya

Pushkar: Is Veer around you?

Radhika: Yes

Pushkar: Give him the phone

Radhika: Fine

Radhika walks into Veer's room and tells him that Uncle wants to talk with him. Before Veer takes the phone he whispers something in Radhika's ear.

"What's sup Dad"

Pushkar: What's sup ki bachach (child)? Why are you stopping Radhika from completing her education? It doesn't mean that you completed your and Radhika can't. Understood!

Veer: Dad, what do you mean? When did I say that Radhika can't complete her education?

Veer looked at Radhika with confused look

Pushkar: I mean to say that you guys are coming to India and that's final.

Veer again looked at Radhika with a devil smile and says "as you wish and when do you want us in India"

Pushkar: By next week... understood

Veer: Yes Dad! Can I talk with Mom? Please

Pushkar: Yes

Pushkar gives the phone saying "Tumhari pyara sa beta what's to talk with you"

Pia grabs the phone and says "Beta, how are you feeling?"

Veer: Fine, and how are you

Pia: Good

Veer: Please tell Dad, that we will come after three weeks not next week

Pia: Son, I can't do nothing in this matter and my eyes are dying to see you and the rest so come soon

Veer: Yes Mom

Veer puts down the phone and looks at Radhika who was standing there with a nervous look....

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To be continued... only if I get many replies more than three if possible...

Signing off

Mickey

Edited by Patel...Rocks - 17 years ago

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Panchi Sharma

@Panchi106

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Posted: 17 years ago

Nice... even though I stop watching the show but I think I should start watching the show again...

Please continue soon

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bhanu

@bhanu

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Posted: 17 years ago

first ff with the new gen, very good

I wish balaji's new gen kids were more like your ff.

cont soon........

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Zaara91

@Zaara91

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Posted: 17 years ago

hey it me😆 are dont worry yaar people will comment...you just need to update...some people are busy in life...so give them some time....

Inshaallah you will have more readers...

back to comment...i liked this part too...but i couldnt see veer's face properly...i thought veer also diad when the first krishna and athurva died...but who cares...continue....

sonam