Originally posted by: pyaar2012
I am finding severe lack in the consistency of the story.
Finally, someone said this! I have been only reading updates for the past 2 days' episodes. Haven't even bothered to watch the episodes, even on YouTube. They are not even connecting the dots properly.
1. How did Tara realize that Old Deva has returned? He was grumpy till morning... He is not a gear of a car who will change this soon.. Makers atleast should apply some brain...! This kind of lousy script is not expected from Swastik.
I watched DevRa bit on Twitter and it felt off to me. People were satisfied with the way they connected the dots, associated Deva's bond with his mother to his younger version returning but this felt really forced and out of the blue to me.
Okay, he got his mom back and also a new identity but how is that related to that trauma he got as a kid in the jail? And how does it make better the life he spent after getting out of the juvenile? This was so abrupt and illogical.
2.Why makers are rushing? There is no monolougue or heart to heart convo between Badshah and Deva or Basantkaka or Deva regarding his mother. He overnight accepted her! The editing section is doing terribly bad job and the screenplay writer is under pressure and writing a flawed script.
There are no conversations at all and this leads to lack of a flow in the story. For example, didn't Deva read the messages Farwari had sent on his phone the previous night? And didn't Farwari confess whatever happened the previous night to Deva? There is not a single conversation shown between them, especially when both are going through a hard time..
I know Farwari escaped safely but for any girl, this would have been a harrowing experience. She knows Tara for some time now but I don't think she can openly confide her fears and pain in Tara as much as she can in Deva. He's her brother, closer to her than anyone else..
(Remember when she confessed how hurt she felt due to Raunak betraying her to Deva and in the later part of the episode, for a small fraction of time, the makers showed how they were sitting in the stable holding each other and crying over the pain of being betrayed - this scene wasn't appreciated on any platform but I loved it personally. It was so subtle and heartwarming.)
3.They have not shown Farwari's reaction on Deva getting his mother back... A track of her acceptance is equally important. She just hug Deva and expressed her joy that he got a family. Why she is not insecured? Raunak easily can take advantage of it. which I feel is very natural and could have been shown.
This! I had the same thought when I saw that scene. These two have spent their entire life together, having nobody else to rely on. And that have faced some trauma in their childhood which has fuelled their attachment with each other. She was fine with Tara because she sees a good match between them and also that fact that she mentioned Deva taking Tara's name multiple times before her. Most probably, he would have many times since their childhood.
But now that a big circus has entered, and that Deva isn't able to give her the time as he did before (going by the episode where these two haven't seen each other for quite sometime), won't she feel distanced? And she isn't very practical, so she can also hope to find her family like he did. Let alone taking to Deva about this insecurity, she hasn't even felt it yet which is far from reality.
THIS IS A GOOD POINT, PYAAR2012.
Also, I didn't get something. Deva has always been screaming our loud that he does not want his family back (at least in the initial episodes of this track). Tara could have asked Farwari if there was something in particular that's stopping Deva from getting close to them. Even if the answer is not believing people due to the betrayals he got, the makers could have included some details in childhood about Deva's struggles. Farwari, having been with Deva throughout would have had some good points to make. And this would led to more connect from our side too.
Because honestly, I connected with neither the separation nor the reunion of Deva and his mother.
It is just the first few episodes after Farwari's entry that showed their bond well and after that, the girl is just missing half of the time and Deva does not seem to care either..
4.I thought Prakash was a stronger villain but Raunak has more potential to affect Deva than him.
5.They have stopped showing the Sehgals completely atleast they could have been mentioned them in a monolouge or a dialogue between Tara and Raunak
6.Only Nani is a consistent villain and is being used properly... Soni, Ananya Raunak and Prakash are just brought but are not used... The writer is currently messing up a lot.
Let alone the villains, even Deva and Tara aren't used to their best potential. Kavi are slaying their individual performances but the script lacks something which even they can't compensate.
7. Why did Deva didn’t get up and stop Tara from going... And then why he is running behind her to search her. (BTS)
Someone said that he wasn't supposed to get up while performing that part of the puja. Doesn't make sense. I don't why but I feel they may have had a conversation already beforehand. And he could have left the room in anger saying her to do what ever she wants. This could be after that. Him running after her, I've no idea..
8. If Makers had brought the maid track it should be used properly...
9.I really appreciate Preeti that how she motivated Tara. But Is'nt that wiered that A woman who is so timid and weak is giving such valuable marriage advice to Tara who is more educated, bold and intelligent than her Or is it just because She had been a married woman thats why she could do it?
I feel Preeti is strong headed but fails to stand up against Nani and Mama. Staying in that marriage and with them for a long time could have rendered her weak.
I didn't watch the episode, so have no idea what she said but read somewhere that she advised Tara to discuss the same with Deva. She's married, so maybe she knew things.
I am quite optimistic about the maid track Hope makers give a compact storyline... Vishal alone cannot pull the entire show... He is not getting proper rest Even the story-writer is also not writing the plot properly. They are jumping from one to another without finishing the previous one..
I don't have any issues with the maid track IF they execute it well. Currently, they are messing it up with no connect and flow in the story which I believe is to commence that track soon. They gave the promo a week before and are hopeful that this will bring them the TRP they want.
What is ur opinion?
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