Have my heart (OS mostly18+, pg5 21/01/22) - Page 11

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

Ok. Sooooo. First things first. I've read it, I'm replying, and I Love You.

30 minutes? Legit? I felt high the first time I read that, actually..

I'm glad you loved this so much though, because although you sounded very light hearted about it when you actually gave me the prompt, I knew that this was the track that had hooked you to the show. And although I had reservations about writing it because I hadn't done anything as non-fluffy as this before, it's still somehow worked out to be great, hasn't it?

The first time I saw this sequence? I remember thinking, that's a man possessed. That's a man obsessed with his woman, a la Gray, but BETTER. And that's where the idea of the Beast came from. I rewatched to create the plot for this, and I had to pause at the "Shiva, Tu theek hain?", line. Because until then, Raavi is the girl longing for Shiva to accept her, it's only after that that she let go of the whole thing. Until then, it was like all she needed was a yes from him, and she was ready to work on everything else. Exactly like that line you used.

Going on to the smut... I think that whole Mine chant, the possessive undertones to everything, the absolute adoration that somehow peeks through all of it, everything comes because I relate to Shivi with all of this. I don't believe in that fluffy, roaming around the town, gifting spree wala love. At all. And Shiva doesn't either. Yes, the whole New Year thing contradicts it, but that was after a very raw confession, you know? Love means Mine. And not just romantic. My mum is my mum, my BFF is my BFF. That kind of thing. Shiva is CAPABLE of the kind of love that sees, both the good and the bad, acknowledges, and still loves. Raavi has been doing it her whole life, with Mami, with Kaki, she's even mentioned a few of Dhara's flaws, the way she did when Dhara refused Rishita that kada.

The pill scene after the deed, and the FB, was because of two things. One, I wanted that scene to be from her point of view. To give the set up to address her insecurities and pain and her willingness to be with him beyond it all if only he would acknowledge her. Two, because I always try to have a surprise factor to my stories, and this was it for this story.

Sathya will happily write more, but probably very, very slowly.... Especially because exams are coming fast and strong towards me! And also because I just write a little slowly.... 😆

I know I sounded very light hearted but it was the LAST thing on my mind when I was telling everyone the prompt. Bilkul hi last. I wanted it every bit intense because the scene was intense, anything light wouldn't have gone with it. It worked out brilliant.

KD has enacted the whole sequence SO WELL and the way Alice has complimented him on the side. Chef's kiss. I know most of them (all literally) feel the sequence was a two way ting but for me it has always been Shiva written ALL OVER that fight. His insecurities, his anger, his jealousy, his intensity- all him. I came much later yk? The divorce scene got me hooked but then I watched this on IG and I was blown, completely. Opened HS and watched the two episodes in reverse order- divorce then this and then went ahead with watching everything in hap hazard manner...I don't remember how I've watched it but I do remember Marriage sequence was the last I came to. Watched Haveli and uske baad ka pehle. Then watched the whole series from marriage to Bhabhi Ka first disappearance. Jabai Ulta pulta. lol. 🤪

Yes Honey! I hear you, I feel you and I obviously second you for the mush and fluff. I am absolutely opposite of it, through and through.

Again the sequencing was BRILLIANT. Artistically brilliant. I'd have to congratulate on it. It was perfect. And something NO ONE would have imagined to put in right there, because I haven't read something like this in all my months here.

I wasn't wrong when I said this was the most emotionally overwhelming smut pieces on the forum.

Congratulations on this Sathya!

I am DEFINETLY gonna make you write more such pieces. This was wayyyy brilliant for me to not go ahead and pester you over it. ❤️

Mera apna alg second-hand validation ka sukh aarha hai bhaaiiii iss OS ke through lol 🤣🤣

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Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

I know I sounded very light hearted but it was the LAST thing on my mind when I was telling everyone the prompt. Bilkul hi last. I wanted it every bit intense because the scene was intense, anything light wouldn't have gone with it. It worked out brilliant.

KD has enacted the whole sequence SO WELL and the way Alice has complimented him on the side. Chef's kiss. I know most of them (all literally) feel the sequence was a two way ting but for me it has always been Shiva written ALL OVER that fight. His insecurities, his anger, his jealousy, his intensity- all him. I came much later yk? The divorce scene got me hooked but then I watched this on IG and I was blown, completely. Opened HS and watched the two episodes in reverse order- divorce then this and then went ahead with watching everything in hap hazard manner...I don't remember how I've watched it but I do remember Marriage sequence was the last I came to. Watched Haveli and uske baad ka pehle. Then watched the whole series from marriage to Bhabhi Ka first disappearance. Jabai Ulta pulta. lol. 🤪

Yes Honey! I hear you, I feel you and I obviously second you for the mush and fluff. I am absolutely opposite of it, through and through.

Again the sequencing was BRILLIANT. Artistically brilliant. I'd have to congratulate on it. It was perfect. And something NO ONE would have imagined to put in right there, because I haven't read something like this in all my months here.

I wasn't wrong when I said this was the most emotionally overwhelming smut pieces on the forum.

Congratulations on this Sathya!

I am DEFINETLY gonna make you write more such pieces. This was wayyyy brilliant for me to not go ahead and pester you over it. ❤️

Well, if it's this kind of sequencing you want, then that's absolutely not an issue, Ritu. Because I spent all of 10 minutes on that. It was getting all the right emotions, at the right intensity, right up until three main plot was over and i could give it a light hearted end that was the struggle. That took the time. Most of it was written once, then edited, adding, changing, removing certain words to maintain the flow of the emotion. That's what ended up taking me so much time, actually. 😆

Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

Mera apna alg second-hand validation ka sukh aarha hai bhaaiiii iss OS ke through lol 🤣🤣

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You probably deserve it with the amount of time you spent on trying to convince people to write this. LOL. 🤣🤣🤣

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

You probably deserve it with the amount of time you spent on trying to convince people to write this. LOL. 🤣🤣🤣

IF par PS Land mein SAARA second hand validation legit main deserve krti hun...for simply pestering all in our little bubble to write anything and everything so I can survive the day! 🤣

Originally posted by: ClumsyMe

Okay, this shot is one of the most justifying end to the track. It is so unerring, giving the perfect tinge to their story.

Shiva holds a storming beast within him, I loved how he tackled his inner turmoil towards her. The anger, the temper and the slow uncoiling of his rigorous disposition mixed with the softness of concern was so blissful to read.

His raw yearning for Raavi and the absolut fact about how he cannot stop once he begins being verbalised and accepted has my heart. ❤️

The revolving temper dissolving into their consummation was so smooth and spellbinding. I'm so happy to watch her asking for her rights and solving the pill matter right away. The small things make big difference. It's so so so worth reading! And Raavi giving into Shiva out of her own will is so poignant. She is one big angel! Shiva is so damn lucky!

And the Smut! It was 🥵

And the way Shiva stood head high in front of Dhara with Raavi in his arms! This is the Shiva we are all looking for! The Shiva that takes no shit and claims his rights. This Shiva is beyond words.

Suman shooing Dhara away is all that we need! I'm happy you showcased it. I enjoyed every bit of it!

Shivi sneaking into the bathroom after making love, having banters, cleaning eachother up, Shiva carrying her in his arms. Uff! All of it is heat melting.

Thank you for this beast triggered Shiva whose passion filled love is uncontrollable but held under the very taming sect of his being.I love how all of this is limited only to Raavi, it can only be her!

Thank you for this alluring, justifying, hot, sexy and meaningful piece of work!

This shot is love!

Dyuti🤗!!! Would I be wrong in assuming you rarely comment on other people's work? I feel honoured! Especially because I love all off your work so, so, much❤️!

I'm glad you've loved it so much. Raavi does not understand things slowly. It's a pattern on the show, at this point. The realisation of his insecurities, wanting to be with him, liking him, then love, all have been epiphanies. So why not? Why can't she tell him that? Alice's delivery of that verbalisation that you mentioned was so spot on, despite being out of context that I couldn't help but want to give it the kind of context it deserved.

And yes, it's definitely the small things that matter! It's what spoilt their relationship in the first place, along with a lack of communication.

I still hope there might be a day on the show where we get to see him stand up for Raavi. Not just against outsiders and kidnappers and not just when it's between life or death. For the little things, even against family.

And Shivi are just the kind of people who wouldn't shy away from things like cleaning each other up afterwards, in my head. Unlike Gaura or Devta who would be all roses and chocolates and probably awkwardness after the deed, I see Shivi needing only themselves, and privacy.

And it's definitely only Raavi for him! 😆

It was soo hot and it was soo beautiful 💖💖

Last dialogue of suman ye bagodi ki beti Teri tarah das saal nahi hua hai shhadi ko nayi nayi shaadi hui hai 😂😂😂

Was soo funny 😂

Loved it ❤️❤️❤️

Originally posted by: YummyXteddy

It was soo hot and it was soo beautiful 💖💖

Last dialogue of suman ye bagodi ki beti Teri tarah das saal nahi hua hai shhadi ko nayi nayi shaadi hui hai 😂😂😂

Was soo funny 😂

Loved it ❤️❤️❤️

Well, Suman Pandya has potential! It would be a shame to not utilise it, wouldn't it? 😆

Okay How did I miss that Sathya HATED Shiva's Yatra wala kurta in my first read?? LMAO. 🤣🤣

Re-read ke baad thoughts aarhe hain🤣

Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

Okay How did I miss that Sathya HATED Shiva's Yatra wala kurta in my first read?? LMAO. 🤣🤣

Re-read ke baad thoughts aarhe hain🤣

Well, I'm pretty sure you're still the first person to figure it out, okay? 😆

Also, that kurta? Horrible!!!!! It was a murder of fashion all on its own! First of all, the color made Shiva look sick. Practically jaundiced. Ewwww!!!! Second, the cut of it was not flattering AT ALL. No streamlining towards the waist, which is a basic requirement if you ask me. And that collar? My Mum's been in Tailoring for years, and she would've fired whoever stitched that collar. 100% sure. Plus, the sleeves were definitely too long. That kurta was a sack cut wrong. Not a kurta. 😳

PS It feels sooooooo good to finally let it all out, you know? 🤣🤣🤣