Akshara Goenka: She borne thorns but she is the rose - Page 4

Originally posted by: ishqdinoorhai9

Edit is what you have to do 😆

Edited at the original reply. Anything else I need to edit?

Originally posted by: Eternized_Blues

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Can I Love You ke do chapters

Noor poem are amazing

But last two poems have my heart it explains AbhiRa's story from Akshu's POV beautifully ...loved it❤❤❤

You have expressed Akshu's emotions and pain really well through this poems

Her love for sister, family and need for some support everything is there.

I must say you pick words carefully to make it more relatable and in rhyme.

Chane ke jhad par chadte rehna

Originally posted by: ishqdinoorhai9

Can I Love You ke do chapters

Oh yes! Tomorrow

Originally posted by: Eternized_Blues

What an excellent way to sum up the story of Abhira till date.

Let me edit this

EDITED

KAISE DHUNDHON AAPKO...CHODE NAHI KOI NISHAAN

You captured Akshara's sentiments so well here. She has everyone yet no one. They love her, adore her and protect her yet its never enough as no one wants to be blamed for having differential behavior so they spoil Aarohi and give into her wrong demands as well. Since Akshara takes that injustice will a smile as she is conditioned to put Aarohi first no one tries to see her pain. I wish someone taught Akshara that when you share- pain always decreases and happiness always increases.

Also no one puts her first as Akshara does not put herself first. Also Goenka's should have been able to see her pain. They should have been protected her enough that she should have felt safe to come to them with her pain without feeling guilty. I love this line:

Do pal aur thehar jaate

Mujhe bhi gale se laga kar chup kara dete

Kuch pal ke liye hi laut aao

Apni Akshu ke liye laut aao

These lines have my heart Noor. Akshu's plea, her pain and her cry for help is so evident in these lines. Why can't these people see! How do you manage to put such wonderful words together.

I came back to your comments today and I am still trying to find a way to reply to it.

Akshara is close to me. A character written well. A character who still has to learn a lot. And something that will top the list for me is expressing more. She needs to let people know what she is feeling.

I understand her why she does not do that with her families or even Abhi. She is conditioned like that. All she want from people around her is to notice her pain especially her Aaru, and ask why. She did not want them to know the reason and she wants it because she do it. But when all her family members ignore her, she felt she will be ignored by Abhi too because she is suffering at the hands of her family when all she did is follow them but here, she broke Abhimanyu heart too many times.

Her heart is scarred and scared..

RISHTON KE KUCH ALAG NAAM

Omg Noor that is what her relationship is with Goenka's. She has no security. You can not deny that they don't love her they do, they just don't know her. And you captured the fundamental difference between Aarohi and Akshara so well here. Aarohi feels entitled whereas Akshara feels indebted and that is where all of their actions originate from. She grew up before her time because she understood the blessing that was given to her and she wanted to share the burden with her grandparents.

Toh ek baar phir, dehleez laangi maine

Apne har dukh ko chupaya maine

Kyunki seekha hai ki parivar se badhkar kuch nahi

Aur apne vaade se mukarna seekha hi nahi kabhi

Aakhiri saas mein vaada kiya tha maine apni Sirat Maa se

Ki dungi Aarohi ka saath apne aakhiri saans Tak

Nahi chodungi uss ka haath main aakhiri dum Tak

Isliye uski galati mein bhi haan mein haan milaya maine

Kyunki kisi ne ye galti hai meri, mujhe batlaya hi nahi

She also feels indebted to Sirat and that freaking promise did not mean she should sacrifice her happiness for Aarohi. Someone should have told Akshara to not take a grieving child's accusations so seriously as she was both their mother. And after a while the family should have sorted Aarohi out rather than sending Akshara away!

No one was there for her when she cried herself to sleep or weeped in her dreams and woke up drenched in her tears. No one noticed the lost eyes and broken smiles. So she felt like an outsider in her family who have given her a roof, clothes and a good education. She felt indebted and I blame Gonekas for that majorly.

When I think of both Akshu and Abhi, all I think of the pain and jolt they must have felt just before they felt they have to grow up and take responsibilities, of themselves and their loved ones.

Just how no one corrected Aarohi that what she was doing is wrong, no one did that to Akshu who gave in every demand of Aarohi. This is a possibility that Akshu did asked them to keep quiet but even then as elders they should not have listened and helped the siblings through the trauma and talked it out.

DARMIYAAN

Noor you described their meeting so well and what they mean to each other. I am at a loss for words. You have woven magic with your words and I relived their story one more time. Their chemistry, attraction and the pull these two have towards each other is this poem. You showed how pure and unconditional their love is for each other. I can not pick a favorite part in this poem as this entire poem has my heart. ❤️🤗Abhimanyu is completely, irrevecobly Akshara's and you captured that beautifully. He is there to protect her no matter what. How well you captured Akshu's emotions for Abhimanyu- Bas Dil le le mera!

Their love is something that can't be put in words but to know that I did justice to their love story is something I am proud of.

Abhimanyu Birla is immune to love somebody else. He just can't. It's like his body has prepared anti- bodies for it.

They are just two extremely broken, devoid, lonely, flawed human being and we know we love them

AB TODA DIL HUMNE TOH BAWAL KYA KARE

And them came the heartbreak, for both of them. I like your Akshara better. I want your Akshara in the show.! Noor take a bow cos you are a magician. You know that even though I understand Akshara I am also upset with her but your poem takes that away too. Main ab usse gussa kaise karun. Sometimes silence makes the loundest sound and that is the sound Abhimanyu hears. That is sound that keeps bringing him back to her

Chubhti hai meri khud ki khamoshi mujhe

Par kya karun

Apne vaade se kaise hatun?

Jiski har galti par parda daala hai

Uska hi kaise main pardafaash karun?

And here in lies the whole problem. Its no one's fault yet its everyone's fault.

I am upset with her too Amnu but I can't help but understand her, analyse her and maybe I am indebted to do it for the Akshara I know ❤️

I wish they showed her growth here beautifully too. I am here for that journey.

Noor this is so precious to me that I can not even tell you, So thank you for writing this! I will be forever grateful!

Love,

BLUE BLUE!

Amnu, I came back to this because it cheered me up. Even though, things get too much messed up... I wanted to put things past me and smile and this comment did ❤️

Thank you for writing this 🤗

They are beautiful human and one heck of a couple. Their growth is going to be the best and all I hope makers give them more content driven and nicely executed show ❤️

Originally posted by: Zenab78

Noor poem are amazing

But last two poems have my heart it explains AbhiRa's story from Akshu's POV beautifully ...loved it❤❤❤

You have expressed Akshu's emotions and pain really well through this poems

Her love for sister, family and need for some support everything is there.

I must say you pick words carefully to make it more relatable and in rhyme.

Chane ke jhad par chadte rehna

Zenuuuuu 🤗🤗

Thank you so much ❤️

Syncing it up and rhyming it seems harder than I thought it would be.

She is just in pain... I just wish someone says to her she deserves love ❤️ and she have to open the door and accept it it knocks her door and does not shut it again and again after giving how pained she is.

It will take time but it will happen and we will be here to see ❤️

Tum log aise tareef karte rahoge toh chadhti rahungi 🤗

Originally posted by: ishqdinoorhai9

Zenuuuuu 🤗🤗

Thank you so much ❤️

Syncing it up and rhyming it seems harder than I thought it would be.

She is just in pain... I just wish someone says to her she deserves love ❤️ and she have to open the door and accept it it knocks her door and does not shut it again and again after giving how pained she is.

It will take time but it will happen and we will be here to see ❤️

Tum log aise tareef karte rahoge toh chadhti rahungi 🤗

You know I am so good at giving compliments😆