AbhiRa OS: Second Chances - Page 3

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

Can you guys please kindly tell me how you guys ended up writing such long comments because i dont think i can even form a proper words abiut this os without my emotions all over the page after reading this. No im not trying to be dramatic im really asking this question. I mean WHAT WAS THATTTTTT😲

@slan @zenab78 @ekahiz @sheet_leher @angelhearts19

Wow good one thx for writing

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can i just say that i'm at a loss for words after reading whatever this was? i have no words really. as ritu was saying, i can't form a proper sentence after coming to the end of the story. i feel like someone just paralyzed me from thinking anything but abhira. i am still in abhira dreamland i don't even know where to start with this comment and where to stop. so i am very sorry if my comment doesn't make sense to you.

but i believe in commenting right after so that the effect of it stays in as i write it.

where should i start mushfika? the first scene where she ran in the khula maydaan as if she was trying to run away from the pain she was feeling after hurting abhi like that was so real like this is how anyone would feel if you hurt the person with all your heart. and then the conversation with that disgusting arohi where she keeps blaming her for abhi's condition and says akshu doesn't love her and that's why abhi is like this and that she was just trying to help him move to something better. i actually felt like pulling her hair out at that moment. and how she didn't even want to help her when she couldn't breathe!!!! 😡horrible horrible person she is. but omg the way abhi just came in that speed and saved her the way🥳 i was dancing in my bed when i read it.

the way he told her to back off!!! OMG i was like IS THIS IT??!!!! DID HE HEAR IT ALLLL?!!?!?!? but no he just saw the last part where arohi wasn't helping. and then he runs behind her and locks themselves in the washroom. uff the stubborn abhi is a treat to watch and the stubborness you in the abhi in this story my goddddd i have never loved a stubborn person more than this.

when akshara said this is a ladies washroom and he wa slike "do i look like i care?"🤣

"and then interesting story. now the truth pleasE"🤣 i was gonna start on my dining table, leaving my food behind because he didn't believe her story of slipping in the washroom

the whole revelation scene was so perfectly written my heart was in my throat!!! and omg akshara didn't even confess and he just knew when she look him in the eye that it was her who saved her 😲 that bit just added so much depth to this story!!! i mean, people can be good with scenes but THIS GOOD?!

the hippieness, the relief and joy abhi felt when he finally realized. it wasn't abhi who felt it. it was me who was feeling those emotions. the smile on my face was something else mushfika. but then the next scene comes and my heart drops to my feet again when he starts questioning why he stayed quiet. i really thought this would be it, like abhi gets to know the truth and then akshara would confess and then thats it - happily ever after but nope! until then i didn't even realize how long this story was.

For a moment i thought this is a sad OS where abhi feels betrayed and blames her and questions his love for her and just gives up. it really felt like that when akshara said arohi is perfect for him and he said "you were right it was a mistake" and then he says "we r really done akshara". trust me i had never felt such a profound ache inside me reading that dialogue

I am sorry mushfika but this comment is getting way too long. so i will post my thoughts about part 2 in the next comment

Originally posted by: ishqdinoorhai9

Bro main khud 2 ghante baad dimaag wapas paayi hu... Varna tujhe lagta hai maine ab tk msg nhi kiya hota ?

This is Mush with her magic wand 😘

https://giphy.com/gifs/Monchhichi-monchhichi-abracadabra-magic-wand-iBjylURwS9N9FCl8Dl

Originally posted by: Zenab78

I was in a dreamland for 2 hrs after reading this OS

This is Mush with her magic wand 😘

https://giphy.com/gifs/Monchhichi-monchhichi-abracadabra-magic-wand-iBjylURwS9N9FCl8Dl

Sacchiiiiii

unres my previous comment above. comment for part 2 is coming up

Originally posted by: ishqdinoorhai9

And where should I start with? Your writing have me holding my breath all throughout. The rejection scene was so so real. I could totally imagine it like a movie is playing in my mind.

How do I explain what I felt in span of 30 minutes ( I read it twice 🙈)

I am seriously seriously speechless 😶

But will try to convey my feelings.

When he heard how it's a mistake, all I could think of how crushed, destroyed, small, lost he would have felt? The one person in whose hand he gave his heart, trusted with all he has, decided to break it, not once, not twice but freaking 5 times. And to be proven as a person who was nothing but delusional to come to think of it as love? When I was reading it, you know, I felt, how many times he would have questioned himself? Did he thought he forced a girl to accept his love? Did he think he is a lot like all those guys who says everything is fair in love and war and then the news that comes? How much and how many thoughts ran wild in his mind? Just how many deaths he died while still breathing?

And then I get Akshara.... Girl, my heart goes out to you as well. Even though I was mad at you but the writer made sure it does not last long. Nd my heart melted for you. How many wars you fought with yourself as you uttered those words you so so abhorred? That kills your very self? You crushed your heart with your own hands and you can't even complain nor cry... All you can do is let the pieces Peirce your heart and let the blood flow.

How selfish of you Aarohi? I wish you have given me a slap scene too. I know violence is wrong but Akshara maarti toh majja aata

Nd Abhimanyu Birla, you have my heart. There is nothing that can defy the love I carry for you and here, in Mush writing, I love you more and more.

Will it be wrong if I say I found it sexy? Nd damn the chills that ran down my spine... I can totally imagine Harshad nailing these scene. Mush, I am once again requesting you, send your CV to Rajan Shahi. Plesse please 🥺 you gives us depth.

And damn, the beauty of confession... Pehle maine socha iss security guard ne Akshu ko entry kaise de di but then Birla house ke kaand ke baad sabko yaad hi hogi apni Akshu.

Thank you for giving us one beautiful and realistic confession. I can't thank you enough for that. I must say, thank you for being a writer Mush and even a bigger thank you for sharing your write ups with us.

The washroom scene need a separate post ;)

Ok noor this comment needs a seperate appreciation and i will do it after i come out of abhiras dreamland. Idk how mush will be feeling reading this comment and all the comments in this thread but i myself am feeling overwhelemed and so much joy seeing these words. Noor the way you just deacribed mush’s story woth your poetic style . I am not even joking i read it twice. Especially the part where you said i wonder how many times he questioned his love or feel like he forced the girl. I FELT that.

I agree with you yaar that thr abhi in mush’s story is just something else altogether. The angst, the security, the protecitiveness and the love and the passion she shows in abhis character is her os is what attracts me to her wroting all the more.

Noor im with you. Lets just secretly send her cv to RS. Our life would be made.

Originally posted by: ishqdinoorhai9

Can you please tell me how am I suppose to write stories now? I feel so small.... Itne high level likh kar bolti hai "I don't want to disappoint you guys", mujh jaise log toh kood jaane chahiye kuein mein phir

Excuse me? Did you even see how besutiful your comment was? If you can write a simple comment in succh a poetic way and analyse the OS with such perfection, you have no right to doubt your writing whatsoever!! And i read your story ok i know how good you are so shut up

Originally posted by: Zenab78

I was in a dreamland for 2 hrs after reading this OS

This is Mush with her magic wand 😘

https://giphy.com/gifs/Monchhichi-monchhichi-abracadabra-magic-wand-iBjylURwS9N9FCl8Dl

Oh god this is such an accurate description of mush zenab. Just perfectttttoooo💯👌👌👌

One big jhappi to you🤗for writing this amazing OS.it was beautiful could actually feel their emotions.🥰I hope they show something like this on the show 😊