Jaan hazir, par vo...... (Updated part lV page 17) completed

Hey guys, after watching today's precap one idea stuck in my head.........

It is typical ITV but i just wanted to pen it down hope ao you will like it........

_____________________

-----------------------------------

So here is the teaser for it......

"Yaar, Ashok tu paise dene se mana kio karr raha hai hamari baat huyi thi na....... "

Shiva said to his friend ashok, and Ashok replies,

"Toh maine kab mana kiya hai........Tujhe 15 lakh chahiye na mil jayenge...... "

Shiva's face lit up and Ashok continues,

"Par mujhe badle main kya milega....... "

Shiva says,

"Main aur dev teri factory mein bina kisi salary ke kaam karenge jab tak amount pura nahi ho jata hai................ Aur beech beech main in cash bhu de diya karenge...... Tu uaki tenaion mat le...... "

Ashok says,

"Aree nahi ree....... Tujhe kya lagta hain main tujhse itna kaam krwauga..... Nahi nahi yaar hai tu apna.......tu meri factory main kaam nahi krenga........main tujhe 15 lakh bhi dunga........loan khatam karne main help karunga aur ho sake toh IVF treatment mein bhi help karunga............mujhe badle main bass ikk cheez chahiye......."

Shiva asks,

"Tu bol.... Kya chahiye...... "

Ashok looks at him and grins,

"Teri biwi.......Raavi..... "

______________________

---------------------------------------

Guys this was the trailer for the story..........

Suggestions are welcome do tell me that should i go woth the idea or not.........

If yes can share ideas with me regarding this as i have not figured out anything to write after this and do suggest story name........

Yours

ODETTE_DELUSION

________________________

-------------------------------+-------

PART-I

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/159838566

PART-ll

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/160133888

PART-lll

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/160274213

PART-lV

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/160348221

I love this. Ashok too gayaa🤣

Please continue ❤️

Loved the concepttt!!!😍

Please continue soon❤❤

I hope Ashok ends up dead meat.🤪 And I'm NOT Sorry🐷

Waiting for the update. If you don't mind, please do tag me.😳

Continue!!! Protective Shiva is always da best!!! Ashok ki pitayi dekhni hain hume!!!

Really nice

Continue soon

aaj uss uble ande ko maara us zyada marega shiva

lol excitedddddd

ye banda toh gya kaam se🤣🤣🤣🤣

Ashok gya for god sake bohot hit galat insan k sath panga liya or woh bhi bohot hi galat insan ko leke 🙂 pls continue writing it looking forward to it 💖

Only suggestion i can give is i want ki raavi shiva ki help kare to comeout of financial crisis shyad apne kuch jewelleries bech kar bina kisi ko bole jaise usne shiva ko room banate waqt diye the quki usse pata hai agr woh batayegi toh koi usse ye karne nahi dega specially shiva 🌚 and yes woh apne jewelleries pandyastore ko bachane k liye deti hai ivf k liye nahi becoz mujje yaha bhakt raavi nahi chhaiye (that wholly my pov) and do tag me

Please go with it I really want to explore possessive side of shiva I can't give any suggestion but its just that I don't want bhabhi bhakti here . Plz tag me when you update