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Posted: 3 years ago
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Back with a new part. But with very little of Amritam. Next part will be them and them only. Till then have a look at this one.

Part 4
Few hours later, Pritam got up with a terrible pain in his arms.
Pritam (to himself ) - bahut shauk tha na hero ban ne ka. Janaab! Ab bhugtiye.
He started doing some stretching exercises in order to release the tension in the muscles.
A knock on the door interrupted his activity and he opens the door to find Kamli standing there with a glass of turmeric milk.
Kamli- Beeji ne aapke liye ye haldi doodh bhijwaya hai. Aap bhabhi ko itni dur se uthakar laaye the toh aapke haathon me dard ho rha hoga na, she raises her brows questioningly.
Pritam, pointing towards the table, udhar rakh do.
She kept the milk on the table and was about to leave when he stopped her, Arey Kamli ji, suniye.
Pritam (in his mind) - Amrita ji k baare me poochu ki nahi, mera poochna thik rahega ya nahin. Kya karu?
Kamli- ji kahiye, kuch kaam tha aapko.
Pritam - (hesitantly) Vo.... aaaa... Amrita ji kaisi hai ab? Doctor ko bulaya aap logo ne?
Kamli-Bhabhi abhi uthi nahi hain. Doctor aaye the unhone aaram krne k liye kaha hai.
He just nodded his head and she left the room.
He took out his phone and realized he hasn't charged it yet, kept it on charging and went to get freshen up.
He called Nitin and ask him to bring his bike n meet him outside Sakhuja house.
After some time,
Nitin-Ye le teri bike ki chaabi, kaha gayab ho gya tha achanak? Tera phone bhi nhi lag rha tha.
Pritam- vo...aa..phone switch off tha. He narrated the whole incident to him.
Nitin- Bhai tu thik toh hai...
Pritam - vo sab chod mujhe ab ye ek laakh rupaye us fighter k boss ko dene hai. Vrna vo police complaint kar dega or phir gadbad ho jyegi.Baaki saara majhra main tujhe raaste me samjha doonga. Chal abhi jldi kar.
Nitin- Haan bhai vo sab toh thik hai lekin jaana kahan hai I mean office kaha hai uska?
On realising he doesn't know the address, "mujhe toh pta hi nhi ye hero kaam kaha karta hai, dhatt teri ki..."
He thought for sometime n asked Nitin to follow him.
Few minutes later, he found himself standing in front of Sunny - Ronny, Kabir's friends.
Pritam (to both) - mujhe Kabir k office ka address chahiye.
Sunny-aap kya karoge ji office k address ka, job shob krne ka irada hai kya?
Pritam - seedhe seedhe btate ho ya poore patel nagar ko bta du ki Kabir ko fake joining letter tum dono ne hi banwakar diya tha.
Ronny(getting scared ) - hum abhi btatey hai aapko, lekin promise kijiye aap kisi ko humara ye secret nahi btayenge.
Sunny-bahut chappal padenge agar mohalle me ye baat saamne aa gyi toh.
Pritam - nhi bolunga address do jldi se.
After some time,Kabir's office reception,
Pritam - ji mujhe Mr. Sethi se milna hai, mera naam Pritam Choudhary hai.
Receptionist after confirming from her boss show him the way to his office.
Pritam (knocking the door) - kya main ander aa skta hu?
Mr. Sethi from his chair, looking at some files and then at him,please come inside.
Mr Sethi-sorry maine aapko pehchana nahi..
Pritam took out money from his pocket, Ye lijiye aapke 1 lakh rupaye jo Kabir ne aapse jhooth bolkar liye the.
Sethi (taking the money) - ohh toh aap Kabir k ghar se aaye hai. He said with anger on his face.
Pritam - dekhiye jo hua usey bhool jaiye.
Vo fighter, I mean Kabir se glti se ye ho gya ye sab. Usne jaan boojhkar nhi kiya. Family me problems thi, job krne ka pressure tha us par. Isi pressure me glti kar baitha.
Sethi - (angrily) glti nhi gunah kiya hai usne, blackmail kiya usne mujhe jhooth bolkar.
Pritam- dekhiye aap shaant ho jaiye. Jo bhi hua usme uska irada galat nahi tha. Naa hi usne aapko koi nuksaan pahuchaya. Abhi bachpana hai usme kar baitha glti.
Sethi- aapki baat poori ho gyi ho toh aap jaa sakte hai.
Pritam-main bas aapse ye kehne aaya tha ki aap usey job vapas de dijiye. Main vaada krta hu aagey se aisa kuch nhi hoga.
Sethi-main us dhokhebaaz ko vapas is office me kadam nhi rkhne doonga.please leave now.
Pritam-Dekhiye vo ek bahut hi acha ladka hai. Aapki company ko uchaiyon tak le jyega.
Haan thodi naadani ho gyi ussey, haalat hi kuch aise the. Bada bhai covid warrior tha, logo ko bachate hue jaan chali gyi uski. Bhabhi maa banne waali hai, doosre bhai ki job chali gyi. Isliye parivaar ko sahara dene k liye usne ye kadam uthaya. Neeyat saaf thi uski, tarika main bhi maanta hu galat tha.
Sethi(softening a bit) - Thik hai, main is baare me sochunga.
Pritam turned to leave when Sethi asked him, aap Kabir k kaun lgte hai
Pritam - Ji main unka Kirayedaar hu, he said and left the cabin.
Meera was about to enter into Sethi's office when she collided with Pritam,and dropped her files. Pritam helped her in picking them up. Meanwhile Sethi come out of his office n asked the accountant to deposit the money recovered from Kabir.
Meera - sir Kabir ne aapke paise deposit kar diye. Kab aaya tha vo?
Sethi-nahi Meera, vo nahi aaya tha. Inhone diye hai paise,pointing towards Pritam. Acha mujhe kuch kaam hai files mere table par rakh dena main kal check kar loonga. He said and left.
Meera to Pritam questioningly, aapne kyu diye paise?
Aap Sakhuja parivaar ko kaise jaante hai?
Pritam-main unke yahan barsaati mei rehta hu, Kirayedaar hu unka. Aap Sakhuja 's ko jaanti hai?
Meera(bitterly) - ji bahut ache se.
Pritam was observing her expressions and recalls sethi calling her name Meera few moments back. He also recalled Amrita' s terrace conversation about Angad's fiance,"Meera ek achi ladki hai" and thought to himself, Kahin ye Angad ki fiance to nahi? Kya vajah ho skti hai inka rishta tootney ki. Pta karna hoga. Dono ko ek chance toh milna chahiye cheezey sudhaarne ka.

Precap:-Amrita-Issey aaj k din hi yhi banana tha.Kahin isne humari baatein toh nahin suni thi.
Pritam-Madam Jasoos ko ye pasand ayega bhi ki nhi. Aaega kaise nahi, itne pyaar se jo........ Itne mann se jo banaya hai maine.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Pritam (to himself ) - bahut shauk tha na hero ban ne ka. Janaab! Ab bhugtiye. 🀣


Bechara Pritam πŸ˜†

Having to deal with pain because he carried Amrita. But I am sure he doesn't mind 😳


He is so concerned for Amrita, though hesitantly he asked Kamli how Amrita is doing. That was really sweet and of course the hesitation will be there to ask as he doesn't have that right to ask freely right now πŸ˜’

But I hope jaldi that hesitation goes away and he can haqse ask anybody how his Amrita is when they become AmriTam ☺️❀️


Awww, Pritam is such a sweetheart. He paid the money. That's really sweet of him. But what I am worried about is if the Sakhuja family comes to know of this, hope they don't pounce on him πŸ’”

They understand that what Pritam did, he did because he cares for them.


Now that Pritam found Meera maybe he will try to patch Angad and Meera up.


The precap ❀️

Is Pritam making something for Amrita? Like food or something or has he bought something for her. Can't wait to read


Avi please update the next part as soon as possible. Ek toh you have said that the next chapter will be fully focused on AmriTam and on top of that the precap. Pretty please update soon 😳

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Anindita91

Pritam (to himself ) - bahut shauk tha na hero ban ne ka. Janaab! Ab bhugtiye. 🀣


Bechara Pritam πŸ˜†

Having to deal with pain because he carried Amrita. But I am sure he doesn't mind 😳


He is so concerned for Amrita, though hesitantly he asked Kamli how Amrita is doing. That was really sweet and of course the hesitation will be there to ask as he doesn't have that right to ask freely right now πŸ˜’

But I hope jaldi that hesitation goes away and he can haqse ask anybody how his Amrita is when they become AmriTam ☺️❀️


Awww, Pritam is such a sweetheart. He paid the money. That's really sweet of him. But what I am worried about is if the Sakhuja family comes to know of this, hope they don't pounce on him πŸ’”

They understand that what Pritam did, he did because he cares for them.


Now that Pritam found Meera maybe he will try to patch Angad and Meera up.


The precap ❀️

Is Pritam making something for Amrita? Like food or something or has he bought something for her. Can't wait to read


Avi please update the next part as soon as possible. Ek toh you have said that the next chapter will be fully focused on AmriTam and on top of that the precap. Pretty please update soon 😳

Thanks you so much for your comments on the story. I love the way you analyse even small details in the story. I will try to update the next part in a day or two.
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Posted: 3 years ago
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Got delayed but back with a next part, here it goes.

Part 5
Sakhuja house
Amrita got up and find herself in her room and recalled whatever happened earlier in the morning.
Amrita-Main yhan kaise... Mujhe toh chakkar...
She got up from her bed and began to walk towards the door but stopped midway when she saw a pair of eyes filled with anger, staring at her.She lowered her eyes to avoid the angry gaze but was surprised the next moment when she find herself in a warm hug of her mother in law.
Nimmo(crying ) - Aise bina bataye kahan chali gyi thi. Tujhe kuch ho jaata toh.
Amrita - Sorry mummy ji mujhse galti ho gyi, par main kya krti agar btati toh aap log mujhe jaane nhi dete.
Nimmo-Aisa kya krne gyi thi jiske liye hum mana kar dete tujhe?
Amrita - mummy ji Karan ne kuch bonds kharide the, bus unhe hi bank k locker se lene gyi thi. Kabir k boss ko paise bhi to vapas dene hai. Vhan jakar pta chala ki aaj strike thi. Or phir meri tbiyat bhi.....
Nimmo - Kyaaa!Tu bonds bechne gyi thi vo b us Kabir k liye jise is ghar ki, hum sabki zara bhi parwah nhi. Tujhe agar kuch ho jaata toh. Vo toh bhala ho us kirayedaar ka jo tujhe hifazat se ghar vapas le aaya. Acha ab jldi se ye doodh pe le or fresh hokar bahar aaja sab teri rah dekh rhe hai kabse.
Amrita - Ji mummy ji, she replied.
Mujhe us kirayedaar ko thanks bolna chahiye. Aaj agar vo sahi waqt par vhan nhi pahuchte toh... she thought to herself.
Amrita - par vo hai kaha abhi?


Pritam, Nitin and Monty are sitting at their hideout, making plans how to deal with that drug mafia Rathi.


Sakhuja House 12a.m.
Amrita was restless and was tossing and turning in her bed. Unable to sleep, she got up and feeling the need to have some fresh air, came out of her room and sat on the swing.
Amrita(to herself ) - Abhi tak vapas nahi aaya ye kirayedaar toh. Kahan reh gya ye?
Khair mujhe kya, main kyun uska intzaar kar rhi hu. Thank you toh kal bhi bol sakti hu.
She was enjoying the cool breeze when Karan(her imagination) came and began to swing her.
Amrita-aa gye aap bade dino baad yaad aayi humari doctor sahab!Jaieye humey aapse baat nahi krni.
Karan-Tu toh har pal mere dil wich basdi hai meri Heeriye. Tujhe bhool kar bhi bhoolne ki galati nahi kar sakda main.
Amrita(getting emotional) - toh phir aise chod k kyu chale gye mujhe. Jaante ho kitna mushkil ho rha hai sbke liye tumhare bina or main chahkar bhi unki madad nahi kar paa rhi hu.
Kabir ne parivaar k liye jo musibat khadi ki hai ussey kaise bahar nikalu unhe. Aaj locker se bonds lene gyi thi par vo kaam bhi adhura reh gya. Ab kal gharwaale mujhe vapas jaane nahi denge. Samajh nahi aa rha kya karu. Kaise sab kuch thik karu?
Karan-Tu fikar na kar oye, vo jo rab hai na, vo sab jaanta hai kab, kya, kaise krna hai! vo sab thik kar dega.Tu toh bas ye bta meri choti Amrita kaisi hai(touching her belly).
Amrita-(annoyingly) Choti Amrita nahi chota Karan pehle ayega ye baat hui thi humari.
Saying so and realising what she just said, her eyes welled up.


Meanwhile
Pritam reached home and realising its too late decided to enter from the back entry. Slowly and careful not to make any noise he climb upstairs and began to walk towards his room, when he hears someone talking. Init ially he ignored but when he recognize Amrita's voice, he got curious to know whom she was talking to and began to descend the stairs , only to find her alone on the swing talking to someone by her side.
Pritam to himself - kisse baat kar rhi hain ye madam jasoos, yhan toh koi nahi dikh rha. Slowly he moved forward to get closer to hear what she is saying.
Amrita-kitne khwaab dekhe the na humne Karan, humare bache k liye. Ki hum barsaati me uske liye playroom banaenge! Akhir vo jagah bahut khaas jo thi tumhare liye.
Karan-humare liye khaas thi (gently pulling her nose).
Amrita(getting sad) - par ab aisa kuch nahi hoga, humare khwaab adhure reh jaenge. Vo barsaati ab kisi aur ka ashiyana ban chuki hai.
Hearing this, Pritam felt bad for her.
She began to cry and in between her sobs, she continued.
Amrita-Karan jis khushi ka humne itna intzaar kiya vo hum saath rehkar kyu nahi samet paye?
Kyu tum achanak aise chale gye, mujhe ek mauka bhi nahi diya tumhe ye batane ka ki, Tum Papa banne waale ho and began to cry inconsolably.
Pritam was shocked to hear this, he becomes emotional and was finding it hard to control his tears, but few of them manage to make their way out of his eyes. He was feeling her pain to the depth of his heart, the pain of losing a part of you.
He raised his hand towards her to console her but then moved backwards upon realising he has no right to do so. He couldn't see her in this state anymore and turned to leave but got hit by a bucket lying there, and was about to fall but somehow managed not to.
Amrita on the other hand, got shocked with the sound and turned to find Pritam in front of her. She got up immediately and wiping her tears, carefully not to be seen by him, asked him.
Amrita-aap is waqt yhan kya kar rhe hai? Or aap aaye kab?
Pritam(controlling his emotions) - aaa.... ba... Main vo.... Main toh kbka aa gya tha. Dinner k baad bahar thoda walk k liye nikla tha...or is...is..balti se takra gya. Ye Kamli bhi na kahin b kuch b rakh deti hai,ye aa aane jaane ka raasta hai ya balti rkhne ka,He replied, trying to hide the emotions he was loaded with ,few minutes back.
Amrita-dinner is waqt? Or maine toh aapko aate hue dekha nhi? She asked suspiciously.
Pritam- Kaise dekha hoga main toh piche ki entry se aaya tha.
Amrita-piche ki entry se kyu aaye? Sharifon ki tarah aagey k darwaze se nahi aa skte the?
Pritam(murmuring to himself) -Je Baat…ye madam jasoos ko toh CBI mein hona chahiye tha. Pta nhi yhan kya kar rhi hai!
Amrita - kya kaha aapne?
Pritam-kuch nahi or ye itni raat ko aap yhan kya kar rhi hain, abhi tak soi kyu nhi?
His question alarmed her n she turned around and saw that Karan was not there and become sad but composed herself and replied,
Amrita (sternly) -aap bhool rhe hain ye mera ghar hai, main yhan kbhi bhi kisi b waqt aa jaa skti hu. Aapko koi problem hai mere is waqt yhan honey se?(she asked raising her brows in her typical style).
Pritam-nai...aaa... Mujhe kyu problem hogi, aapka ghar hai, aa..... Aaapki marzi hai. Main toh bas isliye keh rha tha kyuki raat bahut ho chuki hai, aapko aaram karna chahiye, itni der tak jaagna aapki health k liye acha nahi hai. Saying this, he turned to go back to his room.
His concern calmed her and she called him when he started climbing the stairs.
Amrita - suniye! Thank you so much.
Pritam stopped midway and turned around giving surprised look.
Amrita-aaj aapne sahi waqt par pahuch kar meri itni madad ki uske liye thank you. Agar aap vhan nahi hotey toh pta nahi kya hota.
Pritam - aapko thank you kehne ki zaroorat nahi hai. Par aapko aise akele nahi jaana chahiye tha. Ainda se aisa kuch b mat kijiyega kyuki ab aap akeli nahi hai. They stare at each other for sometime when he broke the moment and said Good night to her and quickly ran upstairs.
Amrita turned to look at the swing, "aaj phir humari baat adhuri reh gyi Raanjhe".


Morning
Sakhuja house
Pritam was getting ready when he got a call from Mansoor uncle
Pritam - Kahiye Mansoor uncle, kaise yaad kiya?
Mansoor uncle - Pritam ek khush khabri hai tumhare liye. Case ki hearing do din baad hai or mujhe poora yakeen hai ki is baar faisla tumhare haq me hi hoga.
Pritam - aap sach keh rahe hai? Aisa ho sakta hai?
Mansoor uncle-haan, bilkul vhi hoga jo hum chahte hai. Pichle teen saal se jis pal ka tum intzaar kar rhe ho vo pal jald hi aane waala hai.
Pritam-uncle main bta nahi skta ki main kitna khush ho, ye khabar sunakar aapne mujhe ye poora jahan de diya hai.
Mansoor uncke-toh phir taiyaariyaan shuru kar do us nayi zindagi k swagat ki jo jld hi apne nanhe kadam tumhare aashiyaaney me rkhne waali hai. β€Œ
Pritam-ji zaroor.
He was overjoyed with what Mansoor uncle told him. He started planning what all he will do for the most special person in his life.
After sometime, he was standing outside the vegetable market with a bag full of red carrots,when someone called him
Nitin-Pritam tune hume yhan kyu bulaya hai, koi khaas vajah?Or ye tune itni saari gajar kyu li hai?
Pritam - Vo vapas aa rha hai mere paas. Mansoor uncle ne kaha hai case ki date do din baad hai or faisla humare haq me hi hoga. Isliye mujhe teri madad ki zaroorat hai. Uske liye itni taiyaariyaan jo krni hai. Ussey gajar ka halwa bahut pasand hai, isliye ye, showing his bag.
Nitin-Pritam tu jo bolega vo hum karenge. Par ek zaroori baat btani hai tujhe, vo rathi hum par nazar rkhe hue hai, isliye sambhaal k rahiyo. Humari koi bhi kamzoori uske haath nahi lagni chahiye.
Pritam - Tu chinta mat kar, main sab sambhaal loonga. Or hum par nazaar hai na uski, toh hum usey vhi dikhaenge jo vo dekhna chahta hai.Acha sun aaj gajar ka halwa bana rha hu tu or Monty bhi aa jaana. Khushi ka mauka hai, party toh banti hai. Or haan piche k raaste se aaiyo.


He came back home and unknown to him, his eyes were searching for someone but he didn't find her. He even stole a glance at her window before climbing up. Upstairs, he started looking for the keys but couldn't find them. He came down and began to search and found them lying near the main gate. While going up, he heard Amrita's voice. He remembered she was very upset last night, so wanted to see if she is fine now. Slowly he inched closer to her room's window n find her talking to Karan's portrait.
Amrita-(touching her belly) Pta hai aajkal ye chota Karan na bahut zyada kick maarne lga hai, lgta hai bada hokar footballer banega.
A small smile crept on Pritam's face realising she is fine and when he turned around to leave, he further heard,
Amrita - Karan, mujhe na aaj mera favourite gajar ka halwa khane ka bahut mann kar rha hai par mummy ji ne mujhe kitchen me aane se sakht mana kiya hai. Subah unka bp bhi high ho gya tha,isliye unhe bhi nahi keh sakti. Karan ,tumhare haath ka bana gajar ka halwa aaj bhi bhooli nahi hu main. Tumhare jaane k baad ab bahut kuch badal gya hai yhan.

Pritam was arranging things in his room and was thinking, "ohh toh madam jasoos ko bhi gajar ka halwa pasand hai".
Pritam to himself-pasand hai toh hai,mujhe issey kya.
After some time Pritam, (to himself) Pritam Pyaare aisa sochna bhi mat.Madam jasoos k liye tu gazar ka halwa banaega?And without giving a second thought, he began to cook.


Amrita was sitting in her room reading a book when she began to smell something nice and realised how badly she wanted to have it.
Amrita-Issey aaj k din hi yhi banana tha.Kahin isne humari baatein toh nahin suni thi?looking at Karan 's portrait.
Soni( entering her room) - kaun si baat bhabhi kisne sun li. Or kaun kya bana rha hai. Vese khushboo toh bahut achi aa rhi hai na bhabhi! Kahin kuch bahut acha ban rha hai.
Amrita-Haa.. Kahin gajar ka halwa ban rha hai shyd.
Soni - Haan bhabhi or shyd humare ghar me hi..... Kahin kirayedaar hi toh nahi bana rha? giving questioning looks to Amrita.


Pritam-Je Baat,Pritam' s special gajar ka halwa taiyaar hai. Par Madam Jasoos ko ye pasand ayega bhi ki nhi. Aaega kaise nahi, itne pyaar se jo........aa baaa........I mean, Itne mann se jo banaya hai maine,zaroor pasand ayega. Par unhe toh apne doctor sahab k haath se bana halwa hi pasand hai. Koi baat nahi, Pritam Choudhary bhi haar maan ne waalon me se nahi hai. Ye gajar ka halwa toh hum Madam Jasoos ko khilakar hi rhenge.


How will Pritam manage to make Amrita eat his gajar ka halwa. How will she react? They are going to witness some new changes in their lives, that will serve as a Foundation of their new relationship.

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Thanks you so much for your comments on the story. I love the way you analyse even small details in the story. I will try to update the next part in a day or two.


Thank you so much dear πŸ€—

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Ahh, such a sweet and emotional update ❀️


The conversation between Karan and Amrita was really sweet and emotional. You portrait their emotions really well πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸΌ


But I loved Pritam's emotions when he heard Amrita talking with Karan. That was really beautiful. Her words somehow touched his heartstrings 😳


But everything aside what I loved the most is our Madam Jasoos πŸ˜†

First of all, awww she couldn't sleep without thanking Pritam

And second of all, she never let's him go easy. Poor Pritam 🀣


Pritam(murmuring to himself) -Je Baat…ye madam jasoos ko toh CBI mein hona chahiye tha. Pta nhi yhan kya kar rhi hai! 🀣


She is always ready to do jasoosi on him 🀣

And the way she haqse scolds him ❀️


So someone special is coming back in Pritam's life. I am assuming it's Rahul ⭐️

And that person loves gajar ka halwa. Amrita too loves gajar ka halwa and she is craving it


Pritam to himself-pasand hai toh hai,mujhe issey kya.

After some time Pritam, (to himself) Pritam Pyaare aisa sochna bhi mat.Madam jasoos k liye tu gazar ka halwa banaega?And without giving a second thought, he began to cook. πŸ˜†


He is still trying to deny his feelings for her

Mr. Pritam Pyaare ji you have already fallen for your Madam Jasoos, now there is no going back. So stop trying to deny your feelings for her


Oye hoye, so the halwa is so tasty and yummy that it's fragrance is in the air and Madam Jasoos got a whiff of it. Hayeee


Pritam-Je Baat,Pritam' s special gajar ka halwa taiyaar hai. Par Madam Jasoos ko ye pasand ayega bhi ki nhi. Aaega kaise nahi, itne pyaar se jo........aa baaa........I mean, Itne mann se jo banaya hai maine,zaroor pasand ayega. Par unhe toh apne doctor sahab k haath se bana halwa hi pasand hai. Koi baat nahi, Pritam Choudhary bhi haar maan ne waalon me se nahi hai. Ye gajar ka halwa toh hum Madam Jasoos ko khilakar hi rhenge.


I am also sure Pritam ji that your Madam Jasoos will love your haath ka bana huya halwa as you have made it with your love na ❀️😳

Though you know it that you have made it with your pyaar but still you won't accept it


But I am sure very soon you will accept your feelings for her. I an waiting for that day


I am super excited to read the next part Avi. I am extremely curious to know how he will make Amrita eat his halwa and also eager to know Amrita's reaction after having it 😎⭐️


P.S. extremely sorry for reading and commenting so late. I was out of station that's why wasn't visiting the forum. Will reply quickly from next time. Please update soon. I am super excited for the next part and want to know what will happen that will change AmriTam's equation.

Edited by Anindita91 - 2 years ago
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Posted: 2 years ago
#17

Thank you so much once again for your beautiful analysis. Your words encourages me a lot. M a very reserved person, writing for the very first time on this platform, so bit nervous. But your comments inspire me to put up my thoughts and imagination in a best possible way. Thanks a ton for that. Between what's your good name?

N yes the next part is right here.

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Posted: 2 years ago
#18

I have divided part 6 into two as it turns out to be a bit lengthy one. Hoping this one will be loved.

Part 6a

Pritam was ready with his gajar ka halwa that he made specially for Amrita. But now he was getting nervous thinking how he is gonna make her eat it. He came up with number of ideas but he was sure none is gonna work in front of Mrs Amrita Sakhuja. Finally, with a firm determination, he took out few bowls from the kitchen shelf, filled the halwa and started getting down the stairs. He was looking all around while descending down the steps, all of a sudden Amrita came out of her room and asked him, Kisi ko dhoondh rahe hain aap?
Kuch kaam tha, looking at something he was holding in his hands.
Pritam-Ji haan, mujhe aaa.... Dadaji se kuch kaam tha. Unhe bula dengi please!
Amrita-Dadaji or Beeji toh Gurudware gaye hai. Aaj Kirtan me jaane ka mann tha Beeji ka. Covid ki vajah se kaafi samay se jaa nahi paye the.
Pritam- koi baat nahi aap Guneet ji, I mean aapke Papa ji ko hi bula dijiye.
Amrita-Vo aa.. Papaji or Mummyji bhi ghar par nahi hain, Pammi bua k yhan function attend karne gye hain.
Pritam- toh phir.. aaa...
Angad or Kabir bhi yhan nahi hai, she replied even before he could ask about them.
Pritam-thik hai toh phir...aaa,aap hi ye le lijiye, he said, forwarding his hands to her.
Amrita-Looking at his hands, kya hai ye or aap kyu laaye hai ye sab?
Pritam-Gajar ka halwa hai isme, aaj bahut dino baad banaya tha toh socha aap sab k saath bhi share karu. Vese bhi meri daadiji kahaa krti thein ke meetha hamesha sabke saath mil baatkar khana chahiye; isse rishton mein mithaas badhti hai.
Amrita (looking bit confused) - aaa.. Haan...
Kamli,zara yhan aana toh.
Kamli-ji bhabhi
Amrita-ye zara inse lekar dining table par rakh de.
Kamli-ji bhabhi, laiye dijiye and hurriedly tried to take the tray but was stopped by Pritam.
Pritam-arey arey sambhaal k Kamli ji, sab gir jyega.
Kamli, realising the tray was warm asked him, Ye itni garam kyu hai?
Pritam-vo.. aa.. Isme gajar ka halwa hai.
Amrita, who was listening to them, thought to herself ye kirayedaar ko achanak ho kya gya hai. Itna sweetly kyu behave kar rha hai aajkal?
Meanwhile Kamli gets suspicious and asked him, kya milaya hai isme aapne, choohe maarne ki dawa ya cockroach maarne ki dawa.
Amrita laughed at her statement.
Pritam-Kya matlab hai aapka?Or aapko itni hasi kyu aa rhi hai? He asked turning towards Amrita.
Kamli-matlab ye hai ki aaj hi maine akhbaar(newspaper) me padha ki ek kirayedaar ne apne makaan maalik ko khane me nashili dawa milakar behosh kar diya or unka saara ghar lootkar rafuchakkar ho gya.
Pritam-(angrily) main tumhe kya aisa aadmi lgta hu?
Amrita was unable to control her laughter now.
Kamli-haan lagte toh ho, thode thode. (giving strange looks to him).
They started quarreling when Amrita intervened, Kamli bas kar or jaa isey dining table par rak de.
She took away the tray from him and kept it on the dining table.
Amrita to Pritam - dekhiye aap uski baat ka bura mat maaniye, kuch bhi kehti rehti hai. Or haan Thank you, aapne sabke liye itni mehnat jo ki hai, sabko zaroor pasand aayega. After all khushboo jo itni achi aa rahi thi, swaad bhi utna hi acha hoga.
Pritam-Aa .... aaa aap nahi khayengi, he asked her directly without any hesitation.Khaas aapke liye hi toh banaya hai,he murmured to himself.
Amtita-(getting alert ) jii... Kya kaha aapne?
Pritam-kuch nahi main toh bas yehi keh raha tha ki aapko shyd khaas pasand nahi hai gajar ka halwa tbhi toh aap taste bhi nahi kar rahi hain.
Amrita-aisi baat nahi hai or maine kab kaha ki mujhe pasand nahi. Mujhe pasand hai bahut. Par abhi mera mann nahi hai khane ka.
Pritam (murmuring) - subah toh bahut mann tha khane ka, banakar laya hu toh nakhre dekho madam ke.
She overheard him and said, aapko lag raha hai main nakhre kar rahi hu. Rukiye main abhi khakar batati hu aapko.
She moved forward a little but then turned around.
Ek baat bataiye aap kyu chahte hain ki main gharwaalo se pehle ye halwa khaun.
Apne experiment ka pehla shikaar mujhe banana chahte hain.
Pritam (confused ) - kis experiment ki baat kar rhi hain aap?
Amrita - ye gajar k halwe ki, jo aapne bahut dino baad banaya hai. Or..
He cut her in the middle and said, Dekhiye main khana bahut hi acha banata hu or gajar ka halwa toh us se bhi zyada acha banata hu. Aap khakar dekhengi toh aapko bhi pata chal jyega.
Amrita- Thik hai toh abhi dekh lete hain. Doodh ka doodh, paani ka paani ho jyega.She went inside, removed one bowl from the tray and began to eat, after having a first bite, she felt very strange, she liked it a lot but her heart was refusing to accept this.On the other hand he was happy that finally she was eating it.
Pritam to himself - Shabaash Pritam Chaudhary, akhir tune kar dikhaya.
Suddenly there was a power failure that plunged the whole house into darkness.
He panicked and asked Amrita to stay there only, till he lights up the candles. He was worried for her as she might slip in that pitch dark. Just then Soni called her out from her room,
Soni-bhabhi ye light ko kya hua, please Kamli ko kehkar mere room me candles bhijwa dijiye. Meri online class chal rahi hai.
Amrita- haan soni bhijwaati hu, Kamli jldi se candles lekar aa.
Kamli-bhabhi main yhan chatt par hu, kapde lene aayi hu, niche bahut andhera hai.Kaise aaun bhabhi,mujhe darr lag rha hai.
Pritam-Dekhiye aap mujhe bataiye candles kahan hai, main lekar aata hu.Aap yhi khadi rahiye..
Amrita-Kitchen mein hain uper waale shelves me. Main jaakar le aati hu aapko nahi milengi..
Pritam-Maine kaha na vhi khadi rahiye, main le aata hu. Meri ek baat maan lengi toh choti nahi ho jyengi aap. Aapke bhale k liye hi keh raha hu.
Amrita (ignoring ) - main apna bhala bura ache se samajhti hu. Aap apni chinta kijiye. She began to move towards the kitchen.
Pritam - dekhiye... suniye... Statue.
She paused the moment he said this.
Soni came out of her room and saw Amrita standing still.
Pritam - main candles lekr aatu hu aap log yhi rukiye.
He light up the candles,
aap log aaram se baithiye, main check karke aata hu kya problem hai, looking at Amrita who was still standing like a statue.
He went out to check what has happened and found dadaji n beeji.
Beeji-kya hua puttar itna andhera kyu hai ghar me. Bahar to sabke yhan light jal rhi hai.
Pritam- main bhi yhi check krne aaya tha. Shayad fuse udd gya hai. He checked the main switch and fixes the fuse and power was back.
Dadaji - thank u puttar.. aa.. Ye le gurdware ka prashad hai kha le.
He took it and ate it.
Dadaji - aaja puttar chai shai peetey hai.
He was about to refuse when Amrita came out.
Amrita - dadaji aaj chai toh nahi ban pyegi kyuki aapke favourite kirayedaar ne sabke liye gajar ka halwa jo banaya hai.
Pritam - dadaji main chalta hu, mujhe kuch kaam hai.
Dadaji-arey Pritam tu bhi aaja humare sath. Pritam interrupted him, nahi mujhe kuch zaroori kaam hai aap log enjoy kijiye.
Meanwhile kamli served them and they began to eat.
Pritam (outside trying to find his keys) - ye bike ki chabi kahan gyi. Kahin ghar me toh nhi gir gyi. He came back and saw Amrita eating. He tried to figure out her expressions to know if she likes it or not but failed in his observation.
Pritam to himself - koi baat nahi, kam se kam madam jasoos ne khaya toh. Yhi kaafi hai mere liye
At night, Nitin and Monty came from back entry. The trio had light hearted chat,when Nitin noticed that Pritam was lost somewhere
Nitin-Kya baat hai Pritam, kal ki hearing ko lekar pareshaan ho?
Pritam - nahi yaar vo madam jasoos k liye halwa banaya tha, pta nhi unko pasand aaya ya nahi?
Monty and Nitin together teasingly - Toh jaakar unhi se pooch le. Both began to laugh.
Pritam-Tum logon ko mazak soojh rha hai. Vo aaj unka mann tha gajar ka halwa khane ka toh isliye banaya.
Both together - oh hooo mann tha madam jasoos ka.So inhone bana diya. Bhai ho kya raha hai tujhe aajkal, exclaimed Nitin.
Pritam-Niklo, abhi k abhi dono niklo yhan se,pointing towards the door.
Nitin-haan bhai jaa rhe hai par tu apna dhyaan rkhna. Or kal time pe court aa jaana.Mera dil kehta hai kal ka din tere liye bahut khushiyaan laane waala hai.
Pritam hugged them and told them, "Main bahut lucky hu ki tum dono mere dost ho."
They left from the back entry and Pritam was going back to his room when he saw Amrita staring at him.
Amrita-Ye aapke dost hamesha piche k raastey se hi kyu aate hain?
Pritam - Gharwaale disturb na ho isliye piche k raastey se aane ko kehta hu. Ab isme bhi aapko problem hai. Aap ek detective agency kyu nahi khol leti! Kaun kab aata hai, kaha se aata hai, kaise aata hai, kab jaata hai, sabki khabar rakhni hoti hai aapko, he replied getting annoyed.
Amrita-Aap itna bura kyu maan rhe hai maine toh bas yun hi poocha tha. Vese main aapka hi intzaar kar rhi thi aapko thanks kehne k liye.
Pritam-Ab ye Thanks kisliye?
Amrita-aapne itna tasty halwa jo banaya tha. Tab kuch keh nahi paayi isliye socha ab keh du.
Pritam - aapko thanks kehne ki koi zaroorat nahi hai.
Amrita-gajar ka halwa hi kyun? Kuch aur bhi bana sakte the.
He was speechless.
Amrita-sach sach bataiye aapne mujhe Karan ji se baatein krte hue sun liya tha na. Kisi ki personal baatein chup chup k sun na achi baat nahi hoti.
Pritam-main aapki baatein sun ne nahi aaya tha, bas dekhne aaya tha ki aap thik hai ya nahi, tbhi aapko Karan se baat krte hue suna. Vese maine khaas aapke liye nahi banaya tha, he further added, trying to cover up.
Toh kiske liye banaya tha, asked Amrita raising her brows.
Pritam-apne aa... Doston k liye, unhe bhi bahut pasand hai. Aapne dekha na vo abhi abhi gye,signalling back entry.
Amrita-Aapko jhooth bhi thik se bolna nahi aata. Vese halwa bahut tasty tha. Lagta hai aapne bahut pyaar se banaya tha... She paused a little... Apne doston k liye.
Pritam-Aapke Karan jaisa banatey the, utna acha toh nahi bana hoga phir bhi koshish ki maine.
Amrita laughed at this statement.
Amrita-actually Karan ka toh cooking se dur dur tak koi naata nahi tha. Phir bhi meri khushi k liye humesha koshish kiya karte the. Par kbhi itna acha bana nahi paaye. Main humesha unki jhooti tareef krti thi or toh or poora main hi kha jaati thi taaki koi aur khakar unhe sach bta na de. Par haan unke pyaar ki mithaas ka swaad kuch khaas hi tha.
Pritam-Bahut pyaar tha naa aap dono k beech?
Amrita-Haan beinteehaan... Kya aapko kbhi kisi se pyaar nahi hua?
They stare at each other but before he could reply she continued
Amrita-Kaun hai aap? Ek paheli si bann gye hai jbse meri.. I mean humari zindagi me aaye hain. Sochti hu kbhi ye paheli suljhegi bhi ki nahi? She looked at him as if asking him to answer.
"Main ek paheli hu ya nahi ye baad ki baat hai, sawaal toh ye hai ki aap kyu is paheli ko suljhaana chahti hain?he replied with a small smile on his face.
For her, Its seems that even words have refused to answer his question.
Precap-when past meets present. Happiness is on the way for both of them.

Will try to post part 6b by this weekend.

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Posted: 2 years ago
#19

Originally posted by: Avijay

Thank you so much once again for your beautiful analysis. Your words encourages me a lot. M a very reserved person, writing for the very first time on this platform, so bit nervous. But your comments inspire me to put up my thoughts and imagination in a best possible way. Thanks a ton for that. Between what's your good name?

N yes the next part is right here.


Thanks a lot for your kind words ❀️❀️

It means a lot dear, thank you πŸ€—


My name is Anindita. And your's is Avantika right?

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#20

What a sweetilious update πŸ‘β­οΈπŸ¬πŸ«


What all he does for her and still this man denies his feelings for her πŸ˜†

Just loved the way he was somehow trying to give his halwa to her ❀️


Amrita, who was listening to them, thought to herself ye kirayedaar ko achanak ho kya gya hai. Itna sweetly kyu behave kar rha hai aajkal?


Madam Jasoos ji apke kirayedaar ko aapse pyaar ho gaya hai. Kab aap samjhengi iss baat ko?


And, ufff, the banter between Pritam and Kamli that follows next is superb 🀣

Meanwhile Kamli gets suspicious and asked him, kya milaya hai isme aapne, choohe maarne ki dawa ya cockroach maarne ki dawa. πŸ˜†πŸ€£

I miss their banter in the show, thanks for including these two in your story πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸΌπŸ€—


The way Pritam was trying to make Amrita taste his halwa was shooo sweet. 😳

Pritam (murmuring) - subah toh bahut mann tha khane ka, banakar laya hu toh nakhre dekho madam ke.

Awwww ❀️

Just look at this man and he says he doesn't feel anything for her. When will you accept your feelings for her Pritam ji?

She is not tasting your halwa and it's bothering you so much and you say you don't feel anything. Hey Bhagwan


Finally, woohoo, he finally could make her convince to eat his halwa.

But Amrita ji being Amrita ji, she suspects him πŸ˜†

But, but, but she finally eats the halwa πŸ₯³

Lekin attitude toh dekho Madam Jasoos ke, halwa pasand aa raha hai par show nahi karna hai πŸ˜†

Pritam to himself - Shabaash Pritam Chaudhary, akhir tune kar dikhaya.

And inke maan mein toh laddu phut rahe hai πŸ˜†β€οΈ

Finally his Madam Jasoos ate his hath ka bana huya halwa 😳


Wow, just wow, during the darkness wala situation you included AmriTam's signature statue scene ❀️❀️❀️

Just loved it. I loved it in the show and I loved it here too ❀️❀️❀️

That part was lovely πŸ˜³πŸ‘


Pritam-Nitin-Monty, haye these three 🀣

Both together - oh hooo mann tha madam jasoos ka.So inhone bana diya. Bhai ho kya raha hai tujhe aajkal, exclaimed Nitin. 🀣

Pyaar, I hope he accepts it jaldi hi.

Their part was such a fun filled one. Loved Nitin-Monty teasing him.


But the highlight of this chapter for me is the last portion of it ❀️

Our Pritam Pyaare got caught. πŸ˜†

Amrita-Aapko jhooth bhi thik se bolna nahi aata. Vese halwa bahut tasty tha. Lagta hai aapne bahut pyaar se banaya tha... She paused a little... Apne doston k liye.

In this one sentence Amrita gave him so many thinks. From the time he saw her eat his halwa he was craving to know how was it for her. All the other family members ate it but still he ONLY wanted to know how she found it and he did got his answer πŸ₯³

She loved it and not just that, she understood that he made it with his love ❀️

She gave so much to him in that moment. Loved the way you wrote it. Beautifully done β€οΈπŸ‘


But the best part of this chapter, the last few lines.. ❀️❀️❀️


Amrita-Kaun hai aap? Ek paheli si bann gye hai jbse meri.. I mean humari zindagi me aaye hain. Sochti hu kbhi ye paheli suljhegi bhi ki nahi? She looked at him as if asking him to answer.

"Main ek paheli hu ya nahi ye baad ki baat hai, sawaal toh ye hai ki aap kyu is paheli ko suljhaana chahti hain?he replied with a small smile on his face.

For her, Its seems that even words have refused to answer his question.


She doesn't even know that she has started feeling something for him. And the best part he got to get a lil hint about it. These last few lines were just the best part of the whole chapter. Finally it's happening. ❀️


If Pritam gets a hint that she is feeling something for him too he will accept his own feelings too 😳⭐️

Yippee πŸ₯³


Update the next part as soon as possible. Eagerly waiting for it.

Edited by Anindita91 - 2 years ago
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