Raghvi FF: On the Edge (7/?) - Updated Pg 12 - Page 3

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Posted: 3 years ago
#21

I really like this new take of their First Meeting


It's a slightly different tangent since they knew each other & remember each other.

So Pallavi has to deal with the mention of Raghav's name every single day cos Amruta's obsessed with him. That would be some other level of feeling knowing that here's the guy you actually felt something for yet you can't do anything'bt it, I don't even wanna think about it.


I would love to see how their next meet at the DSE goes here😎



Thanks for the Tag❤️ & Great Going

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Posted: 3 years ago
#22

loving it, very different they met before... ❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Hi hi hi!


Meant to comment after the first part but things have been hectic!


I'm LOVING this story so far! Raghav and Pallavi are slightly different from the show, they seem more... edgy. (I promise I'm not trying to be cheesy, your title is just so apt in so many ways!)


Chapter 1:

Raghav's ease at the bar, his dialogues, the way he wasn't riled up by Shalini's antic but rather by Pallavi's accusation - I fell in love with him from the start! He's SO suave and SO charismatic. You didn't go into details about his personality nor gave a character sketch, but rather let his words and actions speak for themselves. 👏


RaghVi's conversation in his room, their slight push and pull, and the way he joked with her - it all flowed SO well! I could visualize that scene playing out perfectly, from Raghav's smirks to his casual hand holding (kudos for not resorting to the cliched "arm around her shoulder" move), from Pallavi's mild hesitation about his advances to her uncertainty about Mr. Nice Guy. They didn't exchange many words, and yet spoke SO much. I'm probably inviting a lot of trouble by admitting this, but I LOVED how Raghav didn't ask to kiss her, but asked her afterwards if it was okay. It added such a boyish charm to the Raghav Rao. He gave in to his curiosity, flirted within boundaries, and didn't take advantage of Pallavi's situation. He could've easily crossed multiple lines with her that night, I think she would've allowed for it too, but he backed off in the nick of time to put them both out of their dilemma. He took charge of the situation and that's the Raghav Rao I like to see!


The way he arrived at "Saree Ka Dukaan" was brilliant! I wouldn't have thought of that in a million years! 👏❤️


Chapter 2:

I find it very interesting that you stuck to basic plotline of how Pallavi landed in the DSE mess and how Raghav's men are creating havoc in her shop. It ties in perfectly with what you panned out in the previous chapter and I'm curious to see how you'll take it from here. Very well etched out! 👏


Amruta's comment about nothing happening in DSE seems significant - the Deshmukhs must be miserable and stuck in one hell of a rut!


Raghav recognizing his Saree Ka Dukaan and offering to help her was a given. No matter how wasted he is, his eyes and ears are always glued where they need to be. He noticed that she doesn't look as "wedded" as she should and I wonder what he's going to do with that information.


I have a hunch this will shape up into a sweet and very relatable story. The way they're interacting seems so familiar and nostalgic to me in a personal way (weird, I know!).


Can't wait to read more! ❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Absolutely loved it

She’s amazing and loved their meeting

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Posted: 3 years ago
#25

I loved this--I would further love to know how each person felt by that encounter and I am quite sure neither Farhad nor Harish must have seen Raghav helping a person he was just furious at few seconds ago

loved the fierce Pallavi

excited for your next update

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Posted: 3 years ago
#26

Cant wait to read more. Oh my gosh u gave alternative to fire. The burnt sarees are now wet sarees. Wow wow loved the subtle message it gave out n how it will be in the future will be treat to read.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Waiting for the update…. Love the story so far

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Posted: 3 years ago
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A/N: Not much happens - but it will! Thank you for reading. Your comments keep me going ❤️


Part 3

The routine kept him focused.


Raghav moved the strip of cotton around his knuckles, between each finger, looped it around his thumb. He flexed his hands, satisfied, and slipped them into his gloves.


He approached the bag warily, shifting his weight on the balls of his feet.


The first punch connected with a satisfying thwack.


There was his father, begging for money. Pop.


His younger brother, still and lifeless on the ground. Pop-pop.


His mother, forbidding even his shadow from darkening her doorstep. Whump.


Pallavi, eyeing him as if he were two-bit gangster scum.


The punching bag rattled on its chain from the force of his blow.


The images cycled through his mind. They taunted him, unmoved by his repeated strikes. He exhaled forcefully, his lungs burning. Sweat dripped down his face.


What did the opinion of some average middle-class girl really matter?


What did she know about his sacrifices? Every day, coming home to an empty one room flat, an even emptier mansion – how could she know what it really meant to be alone?


This wasn’t the first time he had thought about her since that night. Memories of her had surfaced unbidden over the years – scattered across his consciousness like broken shells peeking through the sand, only revealed when the ocean waves rolled into the shoreline.


Sometimes it was the smell of jasmine that brought him back to her luxuriously soft hair.


Sometimes it was a piece of chocolate cake, which despite its sweet decadence paled in comparison to the one he had tasted on her lips.


And sometimes he would watch a newly married couple walk hand-in-hand into one of his stores, and he would wonder – was she that happy?

Harmless fantasies, of someone he would never actually see again.


Raghav ripped off his gloves. If that was really what Pallavi Deshmukh thought of him, who was he to disappoint?

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Pallavi sighed and rubbed her eyes as she ran through the numbers again. Even with the sale of the premium stock she was able to salvage, the shop was well short of meeting its operating expenses for the quarter. She could no longer rely on the wedding season to drive sales, and the next two months were sparse on major holidays that might inspire a shopping spree.


She needed funds – but going to the bank meant going through her father-in-law for his approval. Dread formed in the pit of her stomach. What could she do?


She was so engrossed in her ledger that she failed to notice the customer until she heard a low whistle.


“Sorry, we’re closed,” she said automatically, trailing off as she looked up and found none other than Raghav Rao taking the seat across from her. He shrugged off his suit jacket and tossed it on her desk, making himself comfortable.


“Now is that any way to speak to a customer?” He grinned, lacing his fingers behind his head.


Pallavi nearly jumped out of her chair. “You! Get. Out.” She punctuated each word with a jab of her finger towards the door and took a moment to glance towards the deserted street. There was not a soul in sight. It struck her that this was the first time they were alone since…well, since…


His smile disappeared. “I’ll rephrase,” he said slowly. “Is that any way to speak to your landlord?”


“What are you talking about? My landlord is – ”


“An interesting guy,” finished Raghav. “Idiotic, to accept such a low offer, but interesting nonetheless.” He glanced around for eavesdroppers, continuing his absurd farce. “Gambling debts,” he added in a mock whisper.


Pallavi felt her anger start to simmer. If his Mafioso tactics, his drunken shenanigans hadn’t yet sealed the deal, then this was definite proof – what a fool she had been.


How naïve – to lay awake at night thinking of him. To remember the rumble of his voice in her ear, the feel of his calloused fingers on her skin.


And when she faltered in the face of her unrelenting loneliness, to evoke the thrill he had awakened with his touch. To wonder, what if…


She marched to the front of the desk and scowled. “What do you want?”


“Once again, Saree Ka Dukaan, you assume the worst. I’m here to help you,” he said almost lazily, leering at her figure.


She could almost hear the sound of her palm connecting with his face, but instead ignored his bait. “Get to the point.”


And just as a lion eventually tires of toying with its prey, his body language shifted as he rose to his full height and moved towards her, not stopping until she had to crane her neck to meet his angry eyes.


“Here’s the deal – stay out of my business and I’ll stay out of yours. Or I guarantee you…you won't like the consequences.”


Pallavi glared and opened her mouth to reply. She watched his eyes drop to her lips— and for one crazy moment she thought she recognized that look, the same one he had given her just before –


“Ardhamainda?” he growled.


She could only watch him walk away while she stood frozen where he left her, her heart pounding.

______________


It hadn’t been his imagination. She had stood in front of him – in her husband’s saree shop, with her husband’s name – with no mangalsutra hanging around her neck, no sindoor in her parted hair.


And when she looked at him, just for that moment – her eyes doing the talking instead of her smart mouth –


Raghav shifted his car into gear and took off, glancing at his rearview mirror as Deshmukh Saree Emporium retreated into the distance.


There – that would be the end of it. He would go his way, and Pallavi Deshmukh would go hers.


Or his name wasn't Raghav Rao.


TBC

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: unicornwriter

Ooooh our fierce Pallavi is no less and for sure she's already made a marl on the Don's heart.


Yes our poor Raghav, he didn't know what hit him 😆

Thank you so much for your kinds words and encouragement ❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: padmini92

Cant wait to read more. Oh my gosh u gave alternative to fire. The burnt sarees are now wet sarees. Wow wow loved the subtle message it gave out n how it will be in the future will be treat to read.


Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked it ❤️

Yes thanks for catching that - still ruined but at least not directly by Raghav's hand. I always hated that scene

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